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|What challenged you - supplement - fit for the prompt?
4 - So, you accepted your imperfections the way he accepted the fact that his wife was unfaithful. That is a...
Undergraduatesophistikate - Dec 28, 2009 / EF_Kevin - Jan 4, 2010
|Cornell CAS Essay- Finding Nemo
5 - I greatly enjoyed reading this essay! I think it is a great analogy to use Finding Nemo. Your transitions...
Undergraduatetiliu - Dec 27, 2009 / CobraRose - Jan 4, 2010
|BU 3 words prompt- "PIN: Polemical, Inquisitive, Nocturnal".
Undergraduateautogunny - Dec 30, 2009 / CobraRose - Jan 4, 2010
|MIT essay about a challenge faced in life..... Grammer correction needed!
Undergraduatemrgzg1 - Dec 28, 2009 / bilodeau54 - Jan 4, 2010
|Common App Activity and Essay Prompt: Key Club/ Autobiography of Jun/Sr yr of HS
6 - Yes, when you write that a particular school is part of your life plan, and when you tell them...
Undergraduatemstickel - Dec 28, 2009 / EF_Kevin - Jan 4, 2010
|Common App: 17 Year Old Second Grader
4 - Wow best essay I have read on here (only joined this week, but still) the one sentence with the...
Undergraduatengrl08 - Dec 28, 2009 / bilodeau54 - Jan 4, 2010
|University of Rochester supplement: good fit + diff. point of views.
4 - found several qualities of Rochester to be a good fit for me ... provides a vibrant research programs... ...
Undergraduatekda013 - Dec 28, 2009 / EF_Kevin - Jan 4, 2010
|UPenn Supplement: The Dreaded Page 217/300
6 - Ha ha, yeah, because if admissions is at all competitive, you can't set yourself in a category with...
UndergraduateIndoodPossible - Dec 28, 2009 / EF_Kevin - Jan 4, 2010
|biology department, Why Tufts? 50 words
Undergraduatejinglebells - Jan 4, 2010 / kldini - Jan 4, 2010
|"how society has affected me" - Why do you want to study sociology?
UndergraduateLeaUWC - Jan 3, 2010 / LeaUWC - Jan 4, 2010
|"Being really good at something" - Emory Common App: topic of your choice essay.
Undergraduateabesha92 - Dec 29, 2009 / abesha92 - Jan 4, 2010
|BU supp: Why are you interested in BU and 3 words to describe you best
10 - Not nice at all. Your language is simplistic by US standards. Also, though sufficiently fluent, it is cumbersome. It...
Undergraduateethelion - Dec 13, 2009 / EchoLight - Jan 4, 2010
|Coming to the USA was a cultural shock to me. Everything were totally different
Undergraduateatlanta33 - Jan 3, 2010 / mpoper - Jan 4, 2010
|Cornell U. College of Arts and Sciences suppl. essay.
4 - This looks very honest.I'm impressed.You sound like a normally dishonest boy. Cornell Univ. College is said to give a...
UndergraduateNeedHelpQuick - Jan 2, 2010 / Trix Zeta - Jan 4, 2010
|Contributing to Global Health Affairs society by working as an active member - Upenn supplemental
Undergraduatessewa32 - Dec 30, 2009 / ssewa32 - Jan 4, 2010
|Boston University Supplement - Three words;
15 - Wow i loved your essay, since i am a fellow dragon boater, your essay really conveyed your characteristics through...
Undergraduatejen50192 - Dec 29, 2009 / davidgoes - Jan 4, 2010
|Boston University- 3 words (Observant, Realistic, Logical) Last Day
7 - Your beginning is quite dull, you just list your characteristics, remembering try to show instead of tell, it comes...
Undergraduatekathyz2010 - Dec 31, 2009 / davidgoes - Jan 4, 2010
|Boston University 3 words (curious, straightforward, indomitable)
6 - I feel as though your first three paragraphs don't portray the best side of you, and remember that the...
Undergraduaterockonfreak22 - Jan 3, 2010 / davidgoes - Jan 4, 2010
|Columbia - Who am I? birds and beauty (is it focused? do I repeat myself?)
5 - I love your essay! It's so gripping, especially your description of the dead bird... Not only does this essay...
Undergraduateekfoong - Jan 3, 2010 / taquitolover64 - Jan 3, 2010
|UVA Supplement-Doodling- 'the artistic girl who doesn't like to doodle'
Undergraduatetiliu - Dec 26, 2009 / tiliu - Jan 3, 2010
|a learning equilibrist, Many Interests TUFTS 50 words
Undergraduateshannon92 - Jan 3, 2010 / yikescollege - Jan 3, 2010
|BU, in five to six sentences how did u learn more about bu, 3 qualities
2 - This part seems kind of random, it doesn't seem to flow with the rest maybe a better transition...
Undergraduatedavidgoes - Jan 3, 2010 / ae828 - Jan 3, 2010
|UChicago extended essay,free topic about two sides of coin and medal)))
4 - this essay WAS creative; it simply lacked focus. The idea, however, was clever and pretty good. I'm sorry...
Undergraduatebirzhanfm - Jan 1, 2010 / yang - Jan 3, 2010
|Harvard - Travelling experiences in a foreign country
4 - ...how could I judge a man because of his fellow countrymen?----you are still generalizing about a whole group of...
Undergraduateace - Dec 28, 2009 / EF_Kevin - Jan 3, 2010
|'going to take a toll on your health' - My princeton summer essay
Undergraduatenemesis01 - Dec 28, 2009 / EF_Kevin - Jan 3, 2010
|""curiosity killed the cat" - Caltech Interest in Math,Science,Engineering Essay
Undergraduatedarkwaffle - Jan 3, 2010 / — -
|Singapore - COMMON APP ESSAY: Issue of personal concern & its importance to you
6 - I like food, you write very well! Reading this is a nice experience. Alliterations are people, too!...
Undergraduatelouislbl - Dec 28, 2009 / EF_Kevin - Jan 3, 2010
|UCF Admissions Essay - Why I chose to apply to UCF.
Undergraduateadllop - Jan 2, 2010 / cheetah777 - Jan 3, 2010
|I am good at computer science; Carnegie Mellon- Why I chose CMU
10 - Hi, I'm a Carnegie Mellon student, and here's my input - Explain AP Phoenix, or use a different...
Undergraduatedarkwaffle - Dec 29, 2009 / ndoiron - Jan 3, 2010
|What was the best advice you've ever been given and why?
8 - Try combining this as one paragraph: ...and value the progression of ideas. My primary interest lies in enriching my...
Undergraduatesmileypeace - Dec 28, 2009 / EF_Kevin - Jan 3, 2010
|Tufts Supp. Self identity and personal expression revision
6 - Thanks people I have edited it up a bunch with your suggestions and it reads much clearer. First time...
Undergraduatebilodeau54 - Jan 3, 2010 / bilodeau54 - Jan 3, 2010
|A girl interested in Computer Science?! - NYU Supplement #4
Undergraduatedorkiilove - Dec 28, 2009 / EF_Kevin - Jan 3, 2010
|Colgate Supp Essay - Diversity in our community
4 - This first paragraph tells me several different ideas without really focusing on a single theme. At the end you...
UndergraduateBlessedHands23 - Dec 28, 2009 / EF_Kevin - Jan 3, 2010
|business management, Reasons for transferring -- Common App
3 - This is a simplistic, obvious thing to say, and not anything that is really helpful. The first...
Undergraduatejggarcia3109 - Dec 28, 2009 / EF_Kevin - Jan 3, 2010
|Kosovo, MIT world you come from?
Undergraduatemjellma - Dec 27, 2009 / EF_Kevin - Jan 3, 2010
|"Sindoor": Why Mac? Supplemental Essay for Macalester College
7 - Everything that comes before this is so confusing! It is because you are a little mysterious at the...
Undergraduatevanitashaz - Dec 27, 2009 / EF_Kevin - Jan 3, 2010
|"a Team-Player", Boston describe me in 3 words.
Undergraduatemomoboy92 - Dec 27, 2009 / EF_Kevin - Jan 3, 2010
|"best advice you have been given, and why?" - Brown Supplement
5 - Just a heads up - your essay was great, but I hear that admissions offices tend to reject essays...
Undergraduateloveyelledno - Dec 27, 2009 / Katlynedwards - Jan 3, 2010
|What don't you know?
Undergraduatekeilinger - Dec 27, 2009 / EF_Kevin - Jan 3, 2010
|a robotics club in my school - Tell us about a time you used your creativity.
3 - ...and together we properly organized a club that we named Quasics (short for quantum physics). With the invaluable...
Undergraduateyatindrahp - Dec 28, 2009 / EF_Kevin - Jan 3, 2010
|MUN delegate, George Washington University- Supplement Essay
3 - An hour-and-a-half hour later, I dismiss my students for recess, and our soccer game continues... Keep that verb...
Undergraduatejoosunggrace - Dec 28, 2009 / EF_Kevin - Jan 3, 2010
|"Football story" - U of Illinois
3 - This does not seem right. Proficisnt means skillful. Maybe you mean "adequate." y natural leadership ability really...
Undergraduatefightingillini - Dec 28, 2009 / EF_Kevin - Jan 3, 2010
|Rochester second short answer: diff. points of view.
6 - Despite my passion for Bi ology, subject I could not see the necessity of sharing the work and effort...
Undergraduatekda013 - Dec 28, 2009 / EF_Kevin - Jan 3, 2010
|USC Essay + NYU Short answers critique
12 - Are you talking about the essay about epilepsy? It will answer the prompt if you end the first or...
UndergraduateAIRanimechiic - Dec 28, 2009 / EF_Kevin - Jan 3, 2010
|Why Tufts? Distinct Mission; INTERNATIONAL RELATIONS
Undergraduatejyu104 - Jan 3, 2010 / AnnAsburY - Jan 3, 2010
|I was completely ignored by Freshman Mentor; COMMON APP
19 - I'm confused about this part. If you earned good grades, why did he need to show concern about...
Undergraduateemorris - Dec 27, 2009 / jampamz - Jan 3, 2010
|"Describe a challenge. How did the experience shape who you are?"
Undergraduatetaquitolover64 - Jan 3, 2010 / taquitolover64 - Jan 3, 2010
|Why Tufts Essay- A Mirror Reflection?
9 - Don't use world-class dining. That hurts it a lot. I know Tufts has a pretty good dining plan but...
Undergraduateddragonx34 - Dec 29, 2009 / jyu104 - Jan 3, 2010
|Alaskan's cornell engineering essay
Undergraduatechelseas42 - Jan 3, 2010 / Liebe - Jan 3, 2010
|fantastic academic programs - Stanford Essay-Why Stanford?
UndergraduateNeoGeo - Dec 27, 2009 / EF_Kevin - Jan 3, 2010
|MIT - significant challenge or something that didn't go according to plan
3 - Hmmm, yes, I think what luminous might have meant was: My friends and I share many common ideas and...
Undergraduateyatindrahp - Dec 27, 2009 / EF_Kevin - Jan 3, 2010
|Freedom of speech, alternative energy, northwestern supplement essay - why NU?
4 - How fascinating that you thought a larger class size was a good thing. That makes the essay really interesting....
Undergraduateseattlelite - Dec 27, 2009 / EF_Kevin - Jan 3, 2010
|Impact of Tennis - Common App Essay
3 - Playing and watching sports has always been my passion. Tennis was my first love as I was growing up...
Undergraduatemdtennis92 - Dec 27, 2009 / EF_Kevin - Jan 3, 2010
|"to change my mindset" - Tufts University supplement essays
3 - You spend too much time at the beginning talking about how you like all kinds of music. Everybody says...
Undergraduateepirote901 - Dec 27, 2009 / EF_Kevin - Jan 3, 2010
|why tufts - strong psychology department
6 - What do those skeptics prefer... the "hard" sciences? Some people call psych a "soft" science, because it is so...
Undergraduatemmmargarita - Dec 27, 2009 / EF_Kevin - Jan 3, 2010
|our trip to Costa Rica, Essay topic: evaluating a significant experience
Undergraduatealiyoung8143 - Dec 27, 2009 / EF_Kevin - Jan 3, 2010
|Emotional, multicultural, and optimist - My BU Essay
5 - It seems nicer if we make all three words adjectives: ...use just three words they are emotional, multicultural, and...
Undergraduatenewsdrms - Dec 27, 2009 / EF_Kevin - Jan 3, 2010
|My respect for my ideneity in Quito, Ecuador- Common App
6 - No worries, I'm not that great with grammar myself...(I have to read over my essays like A MILLION times...
UndergraduateJimmyzg213 - Jan 2, 2010 / cheetah777 - Jan 3, 2010
|NYU Supplement - Multiple Prompts + Topic Ideas
12 - Those who studied calculus Tried to be miraculous... I was thinking of that for the meter... Ha...
UndergraduateSignifica - Dec 27, 2009 / EF_Kevin - Jan 3, 2010
|U Chicago Supplements: Something you have outgrown and Why chicago?
3 - When I thought of a modern day chemist, I had often visualized a smartly-gowned scientist with the famous hair...
Undergraduatekiwi90 - Dec 27, 2009 / EF_Kevin - Jan 3, 2010
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