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|'It was love at first strum' - Common App Short Answer: the ukulele
Undergraduategarfunkel129 - Dec 31, 2009 / vincentcanlas - Dec 31, 2009
|STREET GUITARIST; NYU - my movie, Beautiful Song
5 - Better version! Very brief and informative of what's gonna happen. If you got time, check out another version...
Undergraduatecollegecrazy - Dec 31, 2009 / vincentcanlas - Dec 31, 2009
|Short poem + year 2050 move of my life - NYU SUPPLEMENT
5 - I would revise these two sections just because everything else actually decribes things about you/your activities, but other...
Undergraduatemilano3215 - Dec 31, 2009 / stars11 - Dec 31, 2009
|the Gunn Robotics Team, Another Common App Essay: Significant Experience
2 - Too much quickly in this sentence, but more importantly... The essay is great!! You did a fine...
Undergraduatemuravei2 - Dec 29, 2009 / EF_Kevin - Dec 31, 2009
|UPenn Supplement essay: American Philosophical Society-Bioethis Society
2 - While there is nothing significantly wrong with this beginning, I am writing the same essay and I've read several...
UndergraduateKiaraSwinton - Dec 31, 2009 / stars11 - Dec 31, 2009
|Stanford Essays: Roommate and What Makes Stanford a Good Place
4 - Hey, I think I will submit a little later today. Could you give me some feedback for my essay?...
UndergraduatePineappleCrush - Dec 31, 2009 / dbsqudtlr - Dec 31, 2009
|Common App Essay: "Beyond the Wake"
4 - Yea...I would like to edit some, I definitely don't write as well as you do. I like this part:...
Undergraduategarfunkel129 - Dec 31, 2009 / dbsqudtlr - Dec 31, 2009
|Brown Supplement Essay---Intellectual Experience. Failure is the new Success.
9 - heres the problem i found, this is very good although unfortunately essays dont mean nearly as much as people...
Undergraduatedramacratic - Oct 25, 2009 / srandhawa - Dec 31, 2009
|Grinnell supplement-- how you learned about grinnell
UndergraduateHemin12 - Dec 30, 2009 / Hemin12 - Dec 31, 2009
|Princeton Supplement Essay- Carpe Diem
Undergraduatesonrisa247 - Dec 31, 2009 / Dbarrows1 - Dec 31, 2009
|SYRACUSE ESSAY 1,why syracuse 2,work experience and your gain 3,future plan
5 - You should definitely change up the name of the university in question 1! Don't make a mistake on that!...
Undergraduateuhello - Dec 19, 2009 / ong - Dec 31, 2009
|Brown University Best Advice I've Ever Gotten Supplement
Undergraduatekkrulez3001 - Dec 31, 2009 / — -
|Williams Supplement "Looking into the bookshop window"
5 - there's definitely no need for a transition, you're set to go please check my essay, I'm really desperate...
Undergraduatepmurray62 - Dec 31, 2009 / rapoch - Dec 31, 2009
|Charlie Kaufman, New Yorker or not? NYU supplement
UndergraduatediodotusX - Dec 31, 2009 / Peimon - Dec 31, 2009
|Notre Dame Supplement Essay: "Martian Log 20A1, Come In Star Command"
4 - Its somewhat confusing... I had to go over it a few times to really understand it... ur spiritual side...
Undergraduatetommyj - Dec 31, 2009 / pablito3 - Dec 31, 2009
|my career aspirations, BROWN " What don't you know"
5 - Thanks again, does anyone else have any suggestions? I was also wondering whether or not I answered the prompt....
UndergraduateMSetYo - Dec 29, 2009 / MSetYo - Dec 31, 2009
|U Chicago supplement: tell us about a few of your favorite books.
Undergraduatekiwi90 - Dec 30, 2009 / kiwi90 - Dec 31, 2009
|Boy Scouts Extracurricular Short Ans - Common App
3 - Thanks guys I really appreciate since I have to submit it tonight (a day early). I'll make sure to...
Undergraduatenogasa - Dec 31, 2009 / nogasa - Dec 31, 2009
|"I am a very messy person" - Would you want me as your roommate?
5 - Thanks you guys. This is a great website. I wish I discovered it sooner than yesterday 12am in the...
Undergraduatemilano3215 - Dec 31, 2009 / milano3215 - Dec 31, 2009
|Calculus or Bust, adding depth to my essay, and relating it back to the prompt.
UndergraduateKatlynedwards - Dec 28, 2009 / shreeek - Dec 31, 2009
|unique qualities, Stanford Supplement-- Why is Stanford a good place for me.
Undergraduateswimchick2266 - Dec 29, 2009 / nikisfalling - Dec 31, 2009
|Common App Essay- Saturday Afternoon
Undergraduatemedelman2010 - Dec 29, 2009 / autogunny - Dec 31, 2009
|Grinnell Supplement: How did I come to know G & a new Mascot/Nickname for G
Undergraduateyoungkim - Dec 31, 2009 / poisonivy - Dec 31, 2009
|Additional Essay for Harvard, Topic Love. Too weird??
UndergraduateForeigner - Dec 31, 2009 / sixfoottall - Dec 31, 2009
|Bates supplement essay question: "How will you, with your life experiences, cont
2 - All my life, I have always worked hard and tried to withstand any challenge thrown at me. perseverance...
UndergraduateAchely - Dec 31, 2009 / sixfoottall - Dec 31, 2009
|All NYU Personal Statement Prompts - "Movie, NYer, Poem, Summer and Major"
5 - Hey Emily, while I would love to make those modifications, it exceeds the stupid character limit. I had to...
Undergraduatesnorlaxative - Dec 31, 2009 / snorlaxative - Dec 31, 2009
|Common app Activity essay - international event
9 - I agree with past comments that this seems like awkward wording.Perhaps try "Waking up at 6 AM and...
Undergraduatepoisonivy - Dec 27, 2009 / stars11 - Dec 31, 2009
|CommonApp - is it OK to use an essay from another college application?
Undergraduatelyra88 - Dec 17, 2009 / lyra88 - Dec 31, 2009
|CORNELL! environmental science
6 - Someone carelessly throws theirhis or her crumpled sack lunch in the general direction of the garbage can. It falls...
Undergraduatemarycornell - Dec 31, 2009 / Peimon - Dec 31, 2009
|'Many things to do' - Stanford Intellectual Vitality: Research
3 - Yeah, I didn't think it answered the prompt either. It was an old recycled essay. Anyways, please tell...
Undergraduatejennyness - Dec 30, 2009 / jennyness - Dec 31, 2009
|"A scar in my heart" my CommonApp essay. Pease, help me with my grammar.
Undergraduateomgthais - Dec 31, 2009 / omgthais - Dec 31, 2009
|Short, funny Yale responses
4 - Umm, that part just seems like awkward wording. Perhaps try "I wish I could function off of few...
Undergraduatepoisonivy - Dec 31, 2009 / stars11 - Dec 31, 2009
|1. Would you tell us about a few of your favorite books - University of Chicago
6 - Captivating essay! It really tells a lot, and even though it talks about Jordan, I can see there you...
Undergraduateericpark - Dec 30, 2009 / poisonivy - Dec 31, 2009
|"The Forbidden Apple", 2050 Movie of my life. NYU
5 - A boy from an underdeveloped island in China emigrated to America, lived by himself, and attended college, where another...
Undergraduateqomoco - Dec 31, 2009 / qomoco - Dec 31, 2009
|"Setting Werther Free"--Common App Essay
Undergraduatepmurray62 - Dec 27, 2009 / marycornell - Dec 31, 2009
|Do you surf or tinker? Are you a vegetarian poet who loves Ayn Rand? Personal Expression
5 - Here is my new draft: Whether we're talking about my personality, my art, my interests or my wardrobe,...
UndergraduatePeimon - Dec 30, 2009 / Peimon - Dec 31, 2009
|Brown PLME other interests supplement - music, piano
Undergraduatearcticbunny - Dec 31, 2009 / ddragonx34 - Dec 31, 2009
|Yale Supplement - the Pitbull's grin
22 - I was just about to read this before you said that:) Anyway, this is solid, conclusion is solid, actually...
UndergraduateIvy_Equestrian - Dec 31, 2009 / srandhawa - Dec 31, 2009
|MIT: what I do for pleasure: human iPod - (91 words, v short!)
4 - So not to cheeky? haha thanks so much, I followed through with all the edits you guys suggested!...
Undergraduateekfoong - Dec 31, 2009 / ekfoong - Dec 31, 2009
|"Preparing to join my fellow polar bears" - Bowdoin supplement
9 - yeah if you limit the polar bear references and work on the ending the you will have a slamming...
Undergraduatepmurray62 - Dec 31, 2009 / jkminor2010 - Dec 31, 2009
|common app: the world is small - OPINIONS?
2 - Hey articbunny, thanks for the help on my essay. It made a huge difference. [clouds are no longer...
Undergraduatearcticbunny - Dec 31, 2009 / oreo - Dec 31, 2009
|Page 217 of a 300 page autobiography- Scrapbook
3 - wax poetic about the "good old days". <- i'm always OCD about having the punctuation within the quotation marks....
Undergraduatemedelman2010 - Dec 31, 2009 / arcticbunny - Dec 31, 2009
|My 3rd home, America. Williams supplement! topic: looking through the window
Undergraduatekda013 - Dec 31, 2009 / kda013 - Dec 31, 2009
|The faculty of thinking and acquiring knowledge; Stanford/ Intellectual Vitality
4 - Thanks guys, and yeah, as you can probably tell, I'm a math student not an english student! -...
Undergraduatetomjohnson373 - Dec 31, 2009 / tomjohnson373 - Dec 31, 2009
|"Story Of My Life" - I need help with the "topic of your choice" in common app
Undergraduatechirsle286 - Dec 30, 2009 / chirsle286 - Dec 31, 2009
|NYU Supplements - Famous NewYorker and poem/limerick
13 - Wow, your poem is great. For the other question, I would suggest maybe describing a bit more about lady...
Undergraduatestarkizzlers - Dec 31, 2009 / alphacat92 - Dec 31, 2009
|"I strive earnestly like my parents" - UVA- The World I Come From
Undergraduateddragonx34 - Dec 31, 2009 / arcticbunny - Dec 31, 2009
|What don't you know? The answer? Death.
2 - As unfamiliar as I am with death and what truly causes it (or what change of experience it causes),...
Undergraduatehairypodder - Dec 30, 2009 / EF_Kevin - Dec 31, 2009
|COMMON APP ESSAY-- VOLUNTEER TRIP TO INDIA
5 - I think it would make more sense to use the prompt "Evaluate a significant experience, achievement, risk you have...
Undergraduatechanj - Dec 29, 2009 / garfunkel129 - Dec 31, 2009
|"my intellectual and emotional being" - Tufts Supplement
3 - Having learned the extremes my family faced to escape a corrupted society to provide me with the opportunity to...
Undergraduatedanayx3 - Dec 30, 2009 / poisonivy - Dec 31, 2009
|Any environment that is particularly significant to you my Willliams supplement!
17 - This may have been said before, but it doesn't talk much about you until the very end. The prompt...
UndergraduateWanderer_x - Dec 19, 2009 / garfunkel129 - Dec 31, 2009
|Death by Play-Dough + Acceptance Through Dance - Common App
7 - thanks for the help and I'm trying to work on it right now. Starting with a quote sounds like...
Undergraduatemilano3215 - Dec 31, 2009 / milano3215 - Dec 31, 2009
|Johns Hopkins Supplement- Why I chose undecided major in engineering
4 - Because you were using the present tense just before, use "is" rather than "was." Or, explain that this...
UndergraduateFarhanWasim - Dec 30, 2009 / garfunkel129 - Dec 31, 2009
|"Rationality became a straitjacket" - Princeton Quote Prompt
2 - That quote and first paragraph have me feeling intrigued! Good job... I stepped through the broken fence, slid...
Undergraduatehelp1 - Dec 30, 2009 / EF_Kevin - Dec 31, 2009
|Common App Essay: Building my computer, passion in creating, not using
5 - Anybody else? My qualm is that while I do characterize myself, do colleges want an essay where an...
UndergraduateZel - Dec 31, 2009 / Zel - Dec 31, 2009
|Jumping into the public school environment, a significant challenge
2 - Hi Macy, Your essay was refreshing. Although you could possibly go into further detail about your exeriences. ...
UndergraduateMaceman - Dec 29, 2009 / y2kendoll - Dec 31, 2009
|BROWN WHAT DON"T YOU KNOW:Not Sure Whether I Should Keep Going or Scratch Idea
4 - this is interesting, but the prompt here is what dont you know, i feel like your trying to force...
Undergraduatejkminor2010 - Dec 31, 2009 / srandhawa - Dec 31, 2009
|UPenn Essay - An Extraordinary Symbiotic Relationship
3 - I initially meant to change only the introduction, but instead I ended up changing everything else. But perhaps it...
Undergraduatebongish - Dec 31, 2009 / bongish - Dec 31, 2009
|fine lines (common app) - pre-deadline stress!!
5 - Try to revise this portion of your essay Life cannot be lived in the shadow of what comes after...
Undergraduatereesesx3ramen - Dec 31, 2009 / jkminor2010 - Dec 31, 2009
|UMich Admission Essay: Interests and aspirations in engineering
2 - Don't start with a boring, general, simplistic sentence! Start with a sentence that raises questions in the reader's...
Undergraduatefeliciayin - Dec 30, 2009 / EF_Kevin - Dec 31, 2009
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