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|Small school community - How were you made aware of Barnard College?
3 - Thanks! That was my fear...I tried to rewrite it although I'm still having a hard time steering away from...
Undergraduatemedelman2010 - Dec 25, 2009 / medelman2010 - Dec 25, 2009
|UC Prompt #2 - Playing the Cretan lira
7 - The end of the first paragraph always seems to be a problem for my writing; I'll update soon with...
Undergraduatelyra88 - Nov 25, 2009 / lyra88 - Dec 25, 2009
|My world, my Greek family, my dreams - UC Prompt #1; Weightlifting and Psychology
Undergraduatelyra88 - Nov 17, 2009 / lyra88 - Dec 25, 2009
|Senior Project - The Various Types of Weighlifting
Undergraduatelyra88 - Dec 18, 2009 / lyra88 - Dec 25, 2009
|"to join clubs and befriend a new community" - Why Northwestern
Undergraduategoldeneye98 - Dec 24, 2009 / goldeneye98 - Dec 25, 2009
|Supplement for Trinity--''free the mind from parochialism and prejudice"
2 - Your essay is nice. "moment I witnessed the glistening tears in the eyes of children from both city...
Undergraduatejelly - Dec 25, 2009 / Wanderer_x - Dec 25, 2009
|Stanford's students are widely known to possess a sense of intellectual vitality
2 - it seems much to general. im guessing your essay is about the experiment and how its related to curiosity...
Undergraduatedaisyx3 - Dec 24, 2009 / anhammond - Dec 25, 2009
|"my best friend told me to eat my frog" - Brown Advice Essay?
Undergraduateeskape - Dec 25, 2009 / pprajoth - Dec 25, 2009
|Unlimited learning - stanford supplement essay (why stanford?)
5 - be more specific when you say "improve my weaknesses and expand my strengths". you want to stay away from...
Undergraduatedaisyx3 - Dec 22, 2009 / anhammond - Dec 25, 2009
|'Fresh start revelation' - Stanford's intellect engaging prompt.
5 - The essay itself is good. You have a great sense of style. But writing about college essays the...
Undergraduateviettran92 - Dec 19, 2009 / goldeneye98 - Dec 25, 2009
|The Discoveries of Technology - Supplement Essay for CMU
4 - No, the title is not good enough. I think you already know that, though, because the title is so...
Undergraduateneow_neow - Dec 21, 2009 / EF_Kevin - Dec 25, 2009
|"Not quite an enigma" -Stanford Prompt
5 - At the beginning, you introduce the idea of an enigma, disqualify yourself from being one, and then change the...
UndergraduateBluePurgatory - Dec 21, 2009 / EF_Kevin - Dec 25, 2009
|Personal Essay for the Columbia College--the circumstance of my upbringing
5 - "Once, for a long time I considered myself lived the fist eighteen years in my life paradoxically----wonderfully and painfully"...
UndergraduateJosephine0411 - Dec 22, 2009 / Mellzzer - Dec 25, 2009
|Common App Short Answer - extracurricular activiry-sustainable
4 - I participated in founding and flourishing the sustainability group this year for... I like your use of "founding and...
Undergraduatetimetime - Dec 23, 2009 / EF_Kevin - Dec 25, 2009
|"vocal lessons at The Westminster Choir Conservatory" - NYU supplement
Undergraduatedizzydaydreams - Dec 22, 2009 / dizzydaydreams - Dec 25, 2009
|From the stage to my life - Commonapp Essay,do you think it's boring or trite?
6 - Well, the writing is obviously very eloquent, so the reader will know that you are intelligent and articulate. Your...
UndergraduateEddy92 - Dec 17, 2009 / EF_Kevin - Dec 25, 2009
|"Aitizaz Ahsan inspired me" - significant person, Common application essay
3 - Well, its long!! By the time I finished reading it, I completely forgot what you had written in the...
UndergraduateAbdullah92 - Dec 25, 2009 / Wanderer_x - Dec 25, 2009
|Why Brown: comparison with heaven; I need inspirations
5 - My physical experience with intellectually vibrant communities like Brown is limited, and phrases like "unique student body" or "exploration...
Undergraduatehahajiyun125 - Dec 22, 2009 / EF_Kevin - Dec 25, 2009
|UPenn Supplementary Essay: Benjamin and the Community
4 - Each community has the potential to create its own smaller community within it, and in these sub-communities people can...
UndergraduateTorii0 - Dec 22, 2009 / EF_Kevin - Dec 25, 2009
|"weaknesses have turned out my strong points" - The world I come from MIT Essay
5 - thank you all of you....i think whatever i have mentioned about my family is quite appropriate to the essay....
Undergraduatemolecule - Dec 24, 2009 / molecule - Dec 25, 2009
|my participation in football - Elaborate on one of your extracurricular activies
3 - My four years playing this brutal sport has have left memorable moments that I will continue to think...
Undergraduatejadam101 - Dec 22, 2009 / EF_Kevin - Dec 25, 2009
|my career in the medical field - Common Application Essay
Undergraduatezain12qa - Dec 24, 2009 / zain12qa - Dec 25, 2009
|An academic experience (project)--Harvard Common Supplement Essay
UndergraduateJosephine0411 - Dec 23, 2009 / EF_Kevin - Dec 25, 2009
|Why Cornell Engineering? -- a disjointed essay about joints?
8 - Outstanding essay!! A rare "why blah blah" essay that is not boring,is truly meaninful and full of genuine insight....
UndergraduateKatsch - Dec 20, 2009 / Wanderer_x - Dec 25, 2009
|'My first instrument' - Common App Essay, Topic of my Choice, Music
UndergraduateBlessedHands23 - Dec 22, 2009 / EF_Kevin - Dec 25, 2009
|University of Michigan Prompt: why engineer?
Undergraduateyanmofeixi - Dec 25, 2009 / yanmofeixi - Dec 25, 2009
|Princeton Supplement---my teacher
2 - Is Sudheer your teacher's last name? You might want to say Mr. Sudheer, or whatever his last name was....
Undergraduatepolitik - Dec 25, 2009 / Katsch - Dec 25, 2009
|the Pacific Ocean, Describe a personal event- common app
5 - I'm still bad at English therefore I couldn't help you improve vocabulary. But through the paragraph, I feel you...
Undergraduatejeovanshadow - Dec 22, 2009 / autumnwave - Dec 25, 2009
|"school of universal learning" - Why Carnegie Mellon Essay
3 - Thanks for your comment!But I have no idea about adding something emotional to my essay...because the "why essays" are...
Undergraduateangelfromhell - Dec 24, 2009 / angelfromhell - Dec 25, 2009
|"flashlight" Movie storyline-NYU supplement
3 - oh my gosh. thank you so much for telling me that. I cannot believe I misread 500 characters and...
Undergraduatetuna624 - Dec 25, 2009 / tuna624 - Dec 25, 2009
|Overcoming the Peer Pressure... [Common App Essay]
2 - you have got to be kidding...no pun intended here? or..you being funny... about an ending, im not...
Undergraduatejoonghoon5 - Dec 24, 2009 / meisj0n - Dec 25, 2009
|"Everybody thinks of changing humanity, and nobody thinks of changing himself" NYU Abu Dhabi essay
2 - hi. i think this question has a catch..you have to approach it by saying that maybe you dont want...
Undergraduatehodari - Dec 25, 2009 / meisj0n - Dec 25, 2009
|"Like a Pair of Shoes " Is this really a setback
2 - is this really a setback? If you focus more on what you had to face with your twin, maybe...if...
Undergraduateybomcl - Dec 25, 2009 / meisj0n - Dec 25, 2009
|"My Real Life Hero" - Common Application Essay Help-- Significant Influence
6 - Great job. Your narrative is brilliant and it shows how your mother inspired you. She spent endless hours...
Undergraduatedesidude2011 - Dec 21, 2009 / ChanelD1 - Dec 25, 2009
|Experience, Famous New Yorker, Limerick - NYU Supplement
9 - the limerick is definitely better. as for the summer vacation, i don't think this is what they're...
UndergraduateSweetDaniGrl13 - Dec 17, 2009 / hodari - Dec 25, 2009
|Why Northwestern? (exemplary professors and many research investigations)
UndergraduateTictac8 - Dec 23, 2009 / aikd80cn - Dec 25, 2009
|Music - MIT - what do you do for pleasure essay
2 - Instead of de-stress maybe unwind? or relax? Blaring loudly I felt the sentences were a little bogged...
Undergraduateginny434 - Dec 25, 2009 / Partyfann - Dec 25, 2009
|'San Francisco and the Golden Gate Bridge' - makes Stanford a good place for you?
Undergraduateshannon92 - Dec 16, 2009 / wanderlust - Dec 25, 2009
|"collaboration with the minitry of health": page 217 of my autobiography
2 - Very good essay and creative idea. But please take another moment to think of a autobiography, the language should...
Undergraduategemma2345 - Dec 24, 2009 / dingpx - Dec 25, 2009
|Common App Essay: "The Timeless Time Machines"
6 - I think your problem is here: "Dostoevsky's novel has inspired me in ways I cannot explain, and it has...
UndergraduatePineappleCrush - Dec 24, 2009 / Lunacy - Dec 25, 2009
|Cornell Supplement essay - College of Agriculture & Life Sciences; Animal Sci
2 - I noticed you've been helping others here with their essays, thank you! My passion for all things equine...
UndergraduateIvy_Equestrian - Dec 23, 2009 / EF_Susan - Dec 25, 2009
|Cornell Arts&Sciences Supplement - cultural studies and social work
3 - Yes, thank you sadhvi010!! Your comments DEFINITELY helped a lot. Cutting down a few words here and there also...
Undergraduateswuvvy - Dec 24, 2009 / swuvvy - Dec 25, 2009
|University of Pennsylvania Academic/Social Communities Essay-Supplementary
8 - I changed my essay up a little bit. If anyone could check for grammar it would be great (commas,...
Undergraduatepbhat - Dec 20, 2009 / pbhat - Dec 24, 2009
|Misconceptions: the best way to fight them is to prevent them from being formed in the first place.
6 - Well, the essay is not really about misconceptions. Your point about misconceptions will be most impressive if you...
Undergraduatemmmargarita - Dec 20, 2009 / EF_Kevin - Dec 24, 2009
|Why Chicago? Supplement - how does UChic satisfy desire for learning =)
Undergraduatetimeturner36 - Dec 22, 2009 / EF_Kevin - Dec 24, 2009
|Pratt Personal Statement - Design
3 - This is an essay that seems like it could be improved by switching the first and last paragraphs. Try...
Undergraduatelaurel_ltt - Dec 22, 2009 / EF_Kevin - Dec 24, 2009
|'hurdles at their full race height' - Common Application - Short Answer - Hurdling
5 - I like the essay, and think it does a good job considering the subject matter. The only think I'd...
Undergraduatemrwonderr - Dec 24, 2009 / pmurray62 - Dec 24, 2009
|A Personal Dream: Yale Supplemental
2 - I thought a Tower of Babel was a bad thing. Before the tower of babel, everyone spoke the same...
Undergraduatejwrc5 - Dec 24, 2009 / whitepolarbear - Dec 24, 2009
|Pomona Essay prompt: fun extracurricular event
4 - Okay thanks for the advice I will try to change the first paragraph. Although I'm not that great...
Undergraduateleslery - Dec 24, 2009 / leslery - Dec 24, 2009
|trivial video game - Pomona supplement-What I do for fun
4 - Ohhhh hahah ok thank you! Is my essay long enough though? Should I include more about myself?...
Undergraduatewhitepolarbear - Dec 24, 2009 / whitepolarbear - Dec 24, 2009
|Cornell College of Human Ecology Supplement--
4 - Yes, it is tough to give the 2 different responses and still have one memorable "main idea" that will...
Undergraduatesbdaiquiri - Dec 22, 2009 / EF_Kevin - Dec 24, 2009
|Common App: Evaluate a significant experience -getting lost in an airport
3 - As we made our farewells to the city and walked into the San Francisco Airport, I reluctantly thought (choose...
Undergraduatemissioncontrol - Dec 22, 2009 / EF_Kevin - Dec 24, 2009
|My name and it's influences on me: COMMON APP ESSAY:
5 - Though your original is gone, this revision appears to be almost identical, so my earlier comments stand. Sorry I...
Undergraduatejuesewang - Dec 21, 2009 / Jeannie - Dec 24, 2009
|Challenging,stimulating,or provocative boook - Michigan essay help
Undergraduatecser315465327 - Dec 23, 2009 / cser315465327 - Dec 24, 2009
|UVA Engineering Prompt-
4 - I also agree, u need to write about UVA's engineering program. But I can see the effort u put...
Undergraduatetimtebow - Dec 24, 2009 / Nasir2009 - Dec 24, 2009
|Doodling Over Calculus- Emerson Essay
Undergraduatecaisson22 - Dec 21, 2009 / caisson22 - Dec 24, 2009
|"'curious and open' - Why Emory
Undergraduategeo20040334 - Dec 24, 2009 / geo20040334 - Dec 24, 2009
|Cornell Supplemeent - Intellectual Interests at College of Arts and Sciece =)
4 - I actually got rid of that in general haha...it suited better for another essay and if I included that...
Undergraduatetimeturner36 - Dec 21, 2009 / timeturner36 - Dec 24, 2009
|Lehigh Supplement Question- Why Lehigh? and Define Equity and Community?
7 - Furthermore the passion and devotion that one has for their community will in turn make said community stronger. --->...
Undergraduatechristmastree - Dec 19, 2009 / EF_Kevin - Dec 24, 2009
|"independent person"- family history, culture, or environment influenced who you are?
3 - My family's culture has given me the confidence to overcome every obstacle that has been presented to me. ---->...
Undergraduateejiro - Dec 21, 2009 / EF_Kevin - Dec 24, 2009
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