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|The day that I would become the New York City champion in the 1000-meter race. Common app essay
10 - i agree with jael...i think that u should change your sentence structures. u say so many things in one...
Undergraduatepapulin23 - Dec 3, 2009 / gemma2345 - Dec 20, 2009
|A Night of Revelations,GWU:what infleuced you to apply to george washington uni.
Undergraduategemma2345 - Dec 19, 2009 / gemma2345 - Dec 20, 2009
|Of all the activities, in our outside of school, soccer holds the most meaning to me
9 - first of all ,I think that this essay wont be accepted since it is more than 150 words.Even I...
Undergraduatedannyfwk - Dec 8, 2009 / bhan_msm - Dec 20, 2009
|Notre Dame Supplement Essay--Make a difference
Undergraduatepeterhanprc - Dec 19, 2009 / peterhanprc - Dec 20, 2009
|Hamilton College Book review(pls help me to revise it thanx)
UndergraduatePrettyBoyu - Dec 16, 2009 / PrettyBoyu - Dec 20, 2009
|A short paragraph from my Why Northwestern essay.
4 - With approximately 35 percent of all students in some Greek house, Northwestern certainly provide students with a wide non-academic...
Undergraduatefearless9 - Dec 19, 2009 / icysakura - Dec 19, 2009
|a change which occurred last summer - General Topic Question
Undergraduateveshman - Dec 15, 2009 / veshman - Dec 19, 2009
|NYU Supplemental Application - Multiple Prompts
UndergraduateZab - Dec 18, 2009 / alejxa - Dec 19, 2009
|'Accepted Student weekend' - Why Stanford a good place for you?
4 - I read somewhere that it's generally not a good idea to name-drop in your essays unless it's absolutely necessary,...
Undergraduateviettran92 - Dec 18, 2009 / citadel01 - Dec 19, 2009
|"my family belongs to a catholic religion"
7 - *i never really understood how christian life... *..As I grew ... *because baptist and catholic have different believes ......
Undergraduateitsjustme - Dec 12, 2009 / jsdginger - Dec 19, 2009
|Which communities of UPenn interest you, and how will you contribute to them
6 - "this salubrious and interactive Olympic sport..." Also, I'm pretty sure chess isn't an Olympic sport. Other than that,...
UndergraduateHelpPls - Nov 23, 2009 / Ivy_Equestrian - Dec 19, 2009
|"Characteristics of a doctor" Brooklyn B.A.-M.D. Program Essay
5 - thank you all. But i've decided nott o aply for the BAMD program because my teachers couldn't get the...
UndergraduateJd87rh - Nov 29, 2009 / Jd87rh - Dec 19, 2009
|UC prompt 2 a round of golf
Undergraduatedoug - Nov 23, 2009 / adanne1990 - Dec 19, 2009
|I am about the farthest thing from the stereotypical New Yorker - Breaking Stereotypes
7 - Okay now i think your essay has potential. However, i definitely would recommend you to elaborate more with how...
Undergraduatechelseareana - Nov 23, 2009 / adanne1990 - Dec 19, 2009
|something about you that will help your future roommate, Stanford Prompt 2
4 - Don't worry, after one year with me, you will have mastered the art of listening to random music. as...
Undergraduateviettran92 - Dec 17, 2009 / EF_Kevin - Dec 19, 2009
|Why Middlebury-why do you choose environmental study and Middlebury
2 - A chemical factory was set up nearby and slowly, the pristine river became feculent; beautiful I really hoped...
Undergraduateyf8651 - Dec 19, 2009 / EF_Susan - Dec 19, 2009
|last summer, Jerome Najee Rasheed, year 2050 - NYu short answers
3 - Akua was the girl with one whose personality type was clear to all who knew her: smart, conscientious, and...
UndergraduateLuvdance16 - Dec 16, 2009 / EF_Kevin - Dec 19, 2009
|"If you can dream, you can do it." - Art Institute of San Francisco Application Essay
Undergraduatebohemianmoon - Dec 12, 2009 / EF_Kevin - Dec 19, 2009
|Describe the world you come from (India to America) -MIT essay
Undergraduateparswar - Dec 16, 2009 / EF_Kevin - Dec 19, 2009
|My favorite word and why? How has a work of science surprised me?
4 - You did not say anything to support this statement. It is not necessary, not really relevant to the...
UndergraduateRana2010 - Dec 16, 2009 / EF_Kevin - Dec 19, 2009
|"I hope for nothing. I fear nothing. I am free." Princeton Supplement- Quotation
3 - Liberty is one of a sociological term which is used to describe one's acting capacity and its interval.----> I...
Undergraduategsnwp - Dec 16, 2009 / EF_Kevin - Dec 19, 2009
|2 MIT short essays about hobby and department preference
5 - The second essay has plenty of examples in my opinion. The first essay is kind of hard to add...
Undergraduatebirzhanfm - Dec 17, 2009 / ukarmy04 - Dec 19, 2009
|'The best advice is experience' - Cornell university --why cornell engineering?
12 - latest edit was much better. I like how you took out the useless things that I mentioned and altered...
Undergraduateruzhang143 - Dec 6, 2009 / batmankiller - Dec 19, 2009
|Challenge in my life- short paragraphs
5 - Sitting in my desk, I cringe at the thought of being called on to read the mere six-sentence paragraph....
Undergraduatecollegebound1 - Dec 16, 2009 / EF_Kevin - Dec 19, 2009
|"we need to learn how to think" -comm
Undergraduatenemesis01 - Dec 13, 2009 / EF_Kevin - Dec 19, 2009
|"Go to Play Basketball" - how will u contribute to our school
4 - Well... I really like your use of the word trifling, and I like some other adjectives, like "foggy." ...
UndergraduatePrettyBoyu - Dec 16, 2009 / EF_Kevin - Dec 19, 2009
|The importance of diversity as a prospective Rutgers student.
Undergraduatenkhattri - Nov 29, 2009 / lillyforlunch - Dec 19, 2009
|'Hardware issues' - MIT Creativity Essay (a time you used your creativity)
5 - it sounds awkward, although there's nothing wrong syntax-wise with this sentence. It's just that juxtaposing support with computer...seems...
UndergraduateAbhijeetS - Dec 18, 2009 / yang - Dec 19, 2009
|"Jane has autism," Common Application Essay! Topic: significant experience.
4 - that was a great advice, keilinger. i feel like i did put more of my negative side than positive...
Undergraduatekda013 - Dec 17, 2009 / kda013 - Dec 19, 2009
|An essay about something I've outrown- Chicago extended essay
NEW - Hi! Please I'm badly in need of your honest opinion and suggestions on improving my Chicago essay. Do you...
Undergraduateadeleye - Dec 19, 2009 / — -
|I have taken many journeys devoid ; Carnegie Mellon- Why?/ Major
Undergraduatethe onw - Nov 29, 2009 / yang - Dec 19, 2009
|"Arabs are the new blacks"; CUNY Mac Honors / Local, National, International problem
2 - I'm going to be totally honest. This is an extremely interesting essay. However, you could do a better job...
Undergraduaterafeeki92 - Dec 18, 2009 / cdrappi - Dec 18, 2009
|"to rejuvenate my African culture" Essay question help, transferring
2 - Thanks you sir..for being harsh. I really want to get into UVA and I need a solid essay. Here...
UndergraduateNasir2009 - Dec 17, 2009 / Nasir2009 - Dec 18, 2009
|FGCU Essay Rough Draft (Characteristics/qualities you posses..)
6 - You make alot of realistic references, great job! I was born in the 3rd world country, Haiti. Later,...
UndergraduateJfils - Nov 21, 2009 / NightRaven - Dec 18, 2009
|Columbia essay (conveys to the reader a sense of who you are)
7 - The idiom of embark is wrong, you usually use embark on.. Other than that.. great writing.. descriptive, yet...
Undergraduatekattylad - Dec 13, 2009 / batmankiller - Dec 18, 2009
|'The Tramp - Charlie Chaplin' - Common App Essay #4 Character in fiction
Undergraduatejnguyen787 - Dec 17, 2009 / jnguyen787 - Dec 18, 2009
|BU Supplement Base; Leadership, Service, and Congeniality
Undergraduateyankeebud95 - Dec 17, 2009 / yankeebud95 - Dec 18, 2009
|"Whistler"- Common app main essay(Topic of your choice)
Undergraduatefsy - Dec 16, 2009 / EF_Kevin - Dec 18, 2009
|Common app LONG essay - person who had significant influence on you (aunt, bro)
5 - You can do both! Please give people some significant feedback about their essays. Offer ideas instead of just...
Undergraduatefromagebus - Dec 13, 2009 / EF_Kevin - Dec 18, 2009
|Duke Sup-why you want to study engineering and why you want to study at Duke
2 - In that first paragraph, I thin it takes too long to make your point. From the reader's perspective, it...
Undergraduateyf8651 - Dec 16, 2009 / EF_Kevin - Dec 18, 2009
|Living in a diverse community, Colgate supp essay - comment
Undergraduatebhan_msm - Dec 16, 2009 / EF_Kevin - Dec 18, 2009
|NYU Supplement - famous New Yorker, poem, and going green
8 - I really like your documentary idea! I'm considering going crazy in mine. kinda like slyvia plath/Emily Dickinson-ish. Your poems...
UndergraduateTBONESTEAK33 - Dec 12, 2009 / gladwise13 - Dec 18, 2009
|Autobiogaphy Essay - University of Pennsylvania
6 - Hi,rmsurprenant..since you are done with your essay...will you look at my essays and give me feedback regarding the ideas...
Undergraduatermsurprenant - Dec 13, 2009 / politik - Dec 18, 2009
|Dickinson College Supplement-We Don't Belong to Ourselves
NEW - Dickinson College founder, statesman and physician Benjamin Rush wrote several essays on education for this new nation. Listed below...
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|Question about Umich's Diversity.. Modern Art
10 - I always grunted disdainfully at modern art. It was not objective, like fields I was accustomed to, such as...
Undergraduatebatmankiller - Nov 3, 2009 / batmankiller - Dec 17, 2009
|Why biomedical engineer? Why Johns Hopkins?
8 - I'm sorry I don't have to time to give more detailed comments, but I would suggest that you vary...
Undergraduatefearless9 - Dec 13, 2009 / Katsch - Dec 17, 2009
|Art Institute of Charleston
Undergraduateartist737 - Dec 16, 2009 / EF_Susan - Dec 17, 2009
|Extra-curricular essays for UVA
UndergraduatePrincess Daisy - Dec 14, 2009 / Princess Daisy - Dec 17, 2009
|Princeton Supplemental Essay: Transforming Stones into Diamonds
8 - This essay has a great start... way to hypnotize the reader! In your final draft, you should probably use...
Undergraduatehiddenoasis - Dec 15, 2009 / EF_Kevin - Dec 17, 2009
|Personal Essay- Carmen, a person of significant influence
Undergraduatethecirclegame - Dec 15, 2009 / EF_Kevin - Dec 17, 2009
|"My parent's divorce" - UCF prompt
6 - ...been living with my mother in a single-parent household ever since . There was no alimony or child support,...
Undergraduatelilminkzmayb - Dec 13, 2009 / EF_Kevin - Dec 17, 2009
|Essay about myself for Georgetown-feedback
7 - Awesome, this is good stuff. Here is my challenge for you: Can you take that excellent first paragraph and...
Undergraduateniblickz - Dec 12, 2009 / EF_Kevin - Dec 17, 2009
|Rice University, Supplement, cradle of its field
Undergraduategsnwp - Nov 27, 2009 / EF_Kevin - Dec 17, 2009
|My grandfather --a person or event that has had a profound effect upon your life
2 - So, be careful of those unnecessary capital letters: After Spending spending a lot of time with such an...
Undergraduaterowen_4 - Dec 15, 2009 / EF_Kevin - Dec 17, 2009
|"I am clean, but not tidy" - Stanford roomate essay
6 - Hello, First of all, I like your essay. It surely is concise and deliver clear thoughts. I agree...
Undergraduatethephoebster - Dec 13, 2009 / Hadiqa - Dec 17, 2009
|How did you get caught long version
2 - it seems that I failed to adress the topic appropriately, because I did not clearly understand meaning of the...
Undergraduatebirzhanfm - Dec 15, 2009 / birzhanfm - Dec 16, 2009
|'Education and student ratio' - Lehigh supplement question-why Lehigh
2 - i don't think it delivers your strong desire to go to Leigh. maybe some more specific programs in Leigh...
Undergraduatebhan_msm - Dec 16, 2009 / Christie - Dec 16, 2009
|Cornell's College of Arts and Sciences Supplement-- What Should I Fix?
Undergraduatekskclub01 - Dec 16, 2009 / kskclub01 - Dec 16, 2009
|UT@Austin Topic A: my sister, Helen
UndergraduateHerb_107 - Dec 15, 2009 / EF_Kevin - Dec 16, 2009
|JHU supplement.. needs some fine tuning
3 - It sounds like you want to pursue international studies because you enjoyed traveling. I wonder if there is...
Undergraduatesneha17 - Dec 15, 2009 / EF_Kevin - Dec 16, 2009
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