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|I'm proud of my accomplishments because I know that I have made a difference in people's lives.
Undergraduatemissheart - Oct 10, 2015 / missheart - Oct 11, 2015
|Fixing the US Education System (Entrance essay)
4 - Sam, the first thing I wanted to know when I started reading your essay was, what is your position...
Undergraduatesdenby - Oct 10, 2015 / vangiespen - Oct 11, 2015
|Why GIT short response max 150 words - Georgia Tech is the perfect school for me.
5 - Lucy, I think that you can have a more focused response to essay prompt. I believe you are going...
UndergraduateCC98 - Oct 9, 2015 / vangiespen - Oct 11, 2015
|More than what they expected - Describe a circumstance, obstacle or conflict in your life, etc.
4 - 4th paragraph - ...undermine my efforts to seek success;, he - I couldwill not give in, - failure...
UndergraduateItalyCerda - Oct 3, 2015 / justivy03 - Oct 10, 2015
|'tough road filled with temptations' - UW-Madison Statement one
Undergraduatejm7685 - Oct 10, 2015 / justivy03 - Oct 10, 2015
|My performance in the Talent Show and further competitions - meaningful talent essay
11 - @davidy, the word "suddenly" is fine, it's an addition to your essay and it makes it feel urgent and...
Undergraduatedavidy - Oct 8, 2015 / justivy03 - Oct 10, 2015
|If you had one do-over in life, what would it be? UNC ESSAY.
Undergraduateharrisong - Oct 10, 2015 / justivy03 - Oct 10, 2015
|My junior year - "This is it. Chemistry is going to be my major." But then I changed my mind...
2 - @user23, junior year is one of the crucial years, this is where you have to be very decisive and...
Undergraduateuser23 - Oct 10, 2015 / justivy03 - Oct 10, 2015
|I wasn't entirely sure about what type of engineer I want to be - Statment two for UW-Madison
4 - Thanks for all helpful comments i really appreciate it. I will be posting my revised version on here...
Undergraduatejm7685 - Oct 8, 2015 / jm7685 - Oct 9, 2015
|While seemingly simple, questions of ethics, honesty and integrity are sometimes puzzling. Caltech 2
3 - - ButHowever, he was adamant - and warned that if not complied toI don't comply , - Initially...
Undergraduatesmartyp - Oct 8, 2015 / justivy03 - Oct 9, 2015
|How glasses have shaped my world - UC Prompt 1
UndergraduateJacmob - Oct 8, 2015 / justivy03 - Oct 9, 2015
|There are a million and one different things to consider when choosing what college to attend.
3 - - Growing upTaking care of animals has.. - ...always been my passion; - ever since I wasas a little...
Undergraduatexo_mayaa - Oct 7, 2015 / justivy03 - Oct 8, 2015
|A new perspective: Priveleged vs. Unprivileged...PENN STATE Personal Statement
4 - - ...the United States all of my life. - ...my parents never let me forget thefail to remind me...
Undergraduatejvc1632 - Oct 7, 2015 / justivy03 - Oct 8, 2015
|Why GIT (beyond rankings, location, and athletics) & Your Future after GIT - Georgia Tech
3 - Thank you so much! Do you think that after the grammar correction, the two short essays are ready to...
Undergraduateanfernee - Oct 8, 2015 / anfernee - Oct 8, 2015
|I have always had difficulty expressing myself. I had to be sure that every my word was perfect.
5 - Thanks so much for the feedback everyone, I'm really glad I got some new perspectives on my essay...
Undergraduatefireball - Oct 7, 2015 / fireball - Oct 8, 2015
|These are the few experiences that have motivated me to develop a career in STEM - 1st Caltech essay
Undergraduatesmartyp - Oct 8, 2015 / smartyp - Oct 8, 2015
|Why I can't eat my waffles like pizza anymore
6 - I enjoyed reading this essay. There are a few grammar and spelling errors that have been touched upon by...
Undergraduatehrgawlik - Sep 23, 2015 / Jacmob - Oct 8, 2015
|It all started with a workbook my mom ordered for me - My interest in Japanese language and culture
5 - Thanks for your suggestions! I'd love to meet the fellow Japanese student interested in attending UVA, hopefully we'll both...
Undergraduateamyo_98 - Oct 4, 2015 / amyo_98 - Oct 7, 2015
|"Shall we Dance" - a Japanese movie. UVA College of Arts and Sciences Essay
6 - I actually have a word limit to this essay (no more than 250 words), but I would definitely add...
Undergraduateamyo_98 - Oct 4, 2015 / amyo_98 - Oct 7, 2015
|What would you fight for? & Describe yourself, Honors Program Application
Undergraduateanfernee - Oct 5, 2015 / anfernee - Oct 7, 2015
|Intellectual vitality Essay for Stanford -- sisters v. pilgrimage (250 words)
5 - - Not only did this experience reveal, within me, resilient curiosity within me but also courage. - Being that...
Undergraduatehgawlik8 - Oct 5, 2015 / justivy03 - Oct 6, 2015
|Growing up in Poland and then after 17 years applying to the US colleges - Tufts Supplement Essay #2
4 - - ...most influential factor onin the person I am today. - ...was at my grandparents'( an apostrophe is not...
Undergraduatekarol16688 - Oct 4, 2015 / justivy03 - Oct 6, 2015
|Villanova Supplement Writing - My Grandmother and Genuineness
5 - Hi @Csar, I hope my suggestions is not too late. Kindly find them below. - ...Sweet and generous...
UndergraduateCsarbeng - Oct 4, 2015 / justivy03 - Oct 6, 2015
|Dropping grades and then recovery - to overcome my procrastination and the lazy lifestyle
4 - Well Michael, initially running through your essay, I kind of grasping for air, as your sentences lacks a few...
Undergraduatetheninjacrab - Oct 4, 2015 / justivy03 - Oct 6, 2015
|Mom motivates to succeed in life
4 - @rmaxena, at first I was not sure what you're aim in writing this quiet short essay and I believe...
Undergraduatermaxena - Oct 4, 2015 / justivy03 - Oct 6, 2015
|Right now, what is uniquely you?--Absence and knowledge--my story
UndergraduateMcClungE - Oct 3, 2015 / justivy03 - Oct 6, 2015
|International Relations - statement of purpose (undergraduate program)
5 - -...rapidly changing/modernized (which one is better??) ( In this sentence "rapidly" is more appropriate ) - ...important figures'( in...
UndergraduateJustineMahone12 - Oct 3, 2015 / justivy03 - Oct 5, 2015
|SOCIAL MEDIA - Blessing & Curse; Undergraduate Essay-Challenging a Belief or Idea
Undergraduatemdr18 - Oct 29, 2013 / justivy03 - Oct 5, 2015
|Key Club - UC Prompt 2 - Talk about your achievement and talent
Undergraduatekhoifish1297 - Oct 4, 2015 / khoifish1297 - Oct 4, 2015
|Learning Systems - Critique my Why Caltech essay? Intellectual curiosity in a scientific exploration
UndergraduatedeezNuts4Prez - Oct 4, 2015 / deezNuts4Prez - Oct 4, 2015
|Unforgettable quotes from the literature - Amherst essay
3 - Well, @schang, I believe you delivered what is asked of the prompt. The points are met to be able...
Undergraduateschang2016 - Oct 1, 2015 / justivy03 - Oct 4, 2015
|Important life lessons from Panera Bread
3 - - ...to very many othera lot of people... - aside fromother than my family and friends, - ...of my...
Undergraduateogessays - Sep 29, 2015 / justivy03 - Oct 4, 2015
|Why U Chicago - polymath education for an aspiring critic
6 - Hi, I would like to further the help you receive from other EF contributors, I hope this helps. ...
Undergraduatewhipsnade97 - Sep 29, 2015 / justivy03 - Oct 4, 2015
|'hectic and busy life' - Challenges/Hardships That Affected You (Personal Statement!)
4 - - At the beginning - theof summer before tenth grade, - StartingIt started with a slight - I knew...
Undergraduatehollykey97 - Sep 27, 2015 / justivy03 - Oct 3, 2015
|Essay on my religion - my story.
Undergraduateasadasad - Sep 22, 2015 / justivy03 - Oct 3, 2015
|Knowledge is useless if it is not shared with the world...
4 - - ...something as beautifulacademically important as Physics,.. - ...professor along the way ofwhile finishing... - ...that because of my...
UndergraduateLeobosco - Sep 27, 2015 / justivy03 - Oct 3, 2015
|Will admissions sneer at my essay? You decide! Applying UCF.
5 - Hi there, i'll be working on your revised essay. I hope it helps. -...campus that UCF provides comes,......
Undergraduateabottzz - Sep 25, 2015 / justivy03 - Oct 3, 2015
|Students from countryside - Scholarship essay help check my grammar
4 - Jackie, running through your essay, it does need a lot of grammar fixes, so let me help you out....
Undergraduatejackie148 - Sep 25, 2015 / justivy03 - Oct 3, 2015
|Makeup is my weak spot- Common App Essay
8 - Farukh, let me help you out with this revised essay; - ...I'm usually the most overdone/*in search of...
Undergraduatefafarrukh - Sep 20, 2015 / justivy03 - Oct 3, 2015
|"Funny Girl" - I just am who I am, for better or worse. Emerson College - Life Title Essay
3 - I liked that. In my opinion, It would be better if you added more about your internal feelings....
Undergraduatelaurafegely - Oct 2, 2015 / alimf95 - Oct 3, 2015
|I know it's corny, but be completely honest. If it is trash, then say so or suggest changes.
2 - Ciera, was the question you posted before your statement the prompt you are responding to? If it is, please...
Undergraduatecjones1597 - Oct 2, 2015 / vangiespen - Oct 2, 2015
|Rebel soldier. Close-mindedness - QuestBridge Additional Essay #3
6 - Ayla, I agree that you should keep this particular essay less self-centered because of the way the prompt was...
Undergraduateatang09 - Sep 23, 2015 / vangiespen - Oct 2, 2015
|I am a Mexican, and I will show what kind of people we are, we are excelling
9 - Thank you @justivy, I already fixed some of these changes on my revision posted though. I did correct some...
UndergraduateJoseIRL - Sep 26, 2015 / JoseIRL - Oct 1, 2015
|U Chicago Supplement - I have a mind that does not stick - the importance of 'useless' trivia
5 - @whips, it's absolutely not clear to me, what the purpose of your essay. It's a supplement essay on the...
Undergraduatewhipsnade97 - Sep 30, 2015 / justivy03 - Oct 1, 2015
|5 reasons to be a Hokie in the city of Blacksburg - Virginia Tech admission
UndergraduateAbsera - Sep 27, 2015 / justivy03 - Oct 1, 2015
|Is my admission counselor making my essay worse?- Autobiographical Essay for Columbia GS
4 - @Latina, I believe that your college counselor mean well when she did the remarks on your essay and I...
UndergraduateLatina93 - Sep 30, 2015 / justivy03 - Oct 1, 2015
|College Essay (what do i bring the the campus that will enrich, life eprirences, personality)
Undergraduatebrockky - Sep 8, 2015 / anggicaroot - Sep 30, 2015
|'the rice trees under the fog blanket' - your day on April 29,2015
Undergraduatelananh20299 - Sep 28, 2015 / lananh20299 - Sep 30, 2015
|The Statement explaining why I would want to attend the Oxford Summer School programme in 2016
5 - - "I have always been an optimistic - ...and an ambitious individual, - wanting to seek new opportunities and...
Undergraduatedamitrashaikh18 - Sep 24, 2015 / justivy03 - Sep 29, 2015
|Skipping the school never was in my interest, I'm focused on the success only - UCF essay
UndergraduateAlexjagk - Sep 26, 2015 / justivy03 - Sep 28, 2015
|Life is a process of learning, studying, and changing. Keep a kindness nature when becoming an adult
Undergraduatedarkforest168 - Sep 27, 2015 / darkforest168 - Sep 27, 2015
|Physics is beautiful... (statement of purpose for transferrence to UT Austin)
UndergraduateLeobosco - Sep 27, 2015 / Leobosco - Sep 27, 2015
|"Being a Twin" - talent / background / identity question for college essay
4 - Thanks a ton! I appreciate your time to read and edit my essay! I will make some corrections....
Undergraduatengifford97 - Sep 26, 2015 / ngifford97 - Sep 27, 2015
|Why Swarthmore?----Social Responsibility, Media and Writing
5 - Thanks for vangiespen and lcturn87's invaluable suggestions! With your help, I feel that writing application essays are never boring!...
Undergraduateanfernee - Sep 25, 2015 / anfernee - Sep 26, 2015
|Brandeis being a Jewish affiliated university, I felt that I being a Muslim would make me an outcast
9 - Alhamdulillah *_* wow, you're like a blessing. Thank you so much! Seriously! Now I can finally submit my application....
Undergraduatewillflem - Sep 19, 2015 / willflem - Sep 25, 2015
|What do clowns, airplanes, and insects have in common? -- Questbridge Biographical Essay
Undergraduatemelloeman - Sep 14, 2015 / acedf - Sep 24, 2015
|Im not just a Dreamer......Ewha Womans University: Clothing and Textile department
4 - - ...that still hadn'thasn't spoken her... - Being only an infant... - ...on how on an inflatable boat...
Undergraduatechibi_miri - Sep 22, 2015 / justivy03 - Sep 23, 2015
|Performance Anxiety [Questbridge Additional Essay, Prompt #1]
Undergraduatedjmwilliams - Sep 20, 2015 / justivy03 - Sep 22, 2015
|UChicago supplement- So where is Waldo, really?
4 - - ...smothers his meal inwith ketchup and mustard. - ...the red clothing that every loyal ... - ... notice...
Undergraduatelindsey4114 - Sep 19, 2015 / justivy03 - Sep 22, 2015
|Art is my voice and peace - Common Application Essay Prompt #1
Undergraduateysilmi - Sep 19, 2015 / justivy03 - Sep 22, 2015
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