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|An experience that changed my life--saved a stranger's life--comapp
Undergraduatemcdy143 - Dec 11, 2009 / mcdy143 - Dec 14, 2009
|"I had a crush on Jennifer" - Essay Prompt
8 - I think you should elaborate/show more on how dating her changed how superficially you viewed your relationship. Also...
Undergraduater3kyum - Dec 12, 2009 / l3goals12 - Dec 14, 2009
|Syracuse questions "influence, work experience, real world experiences"
3 - Let's eliminate unnecessary words. Like Yoda or a Zen master, you can make your point with few words: I...
UndergraduateDanielGibson1 - Dec 12, 2009 / EF_Kevin - Dec 14, 2009
3 - In the spirit of spontaneity, it seems right that you wrote this in a sort of formless way, but...
UndergraduateIntlIndian - Dec 12, 2009 / EF_Kevin - Dec 14, 2009
|Why Colby, an earth-friendly college
6 - Thank you very much for your comments,im already working on rewriting the essay. Will greatly appreciate you checking out...
Undergraduatetrosky2000 - Dec 11, 2009 / trosky2000 - Dec 14, 2009
|UC Prompt 1 - Architecture tells the stories of people's lives, beliefs, and cultures.
7 - updated last paragrpah, maybe this will answer the prompt more? My experiences in San Francisco and Asia show...
Undergraduatelilgangwolf - Nov 28, 2009 / lilgangwolf - Dec 14, 2009
|'Diversity Weekend program' - reasons for applying to Hamilton
10 - You should get another opinion on this, but I really think you should leave out "College is mainly to...
Undergraduatejbrown09 - Dec 9, 2009 / keilinger - Dec 13, 2009
|Common App short answer about marching band
9 - To answer those wanting to know, my major is going to be special education. I'm writing about the campaign...
Undergraduatemynameisjohn - Dec 9, 2009 / mynameisjohn - Dec 13, 2009
|Common Application Essay - Topic of your Choice - Importance work ethic
5 - Thank you very much for all of your feedback. I have revised the first half of the second paragraph...
Undergraduatemynameisjohn - Dec 12, 2009 / mynameisjohn - Dec 13, 2009
|Life is meaningful and unimaginable; Why Carnegie Mellon Business?
3 - A few suggestions: "Life is but a dream." It is meaningful and unimaginable. Seventeen years and I have...
Undergraduatejhtang - Dec 12, 2009 / PetitPicpus - Dec 13, 2009
|Princeton Supplement Essay- Choice 4- Stubbornness
NEW - Princeton Supplement Essay Using a favorite quotation from an essay or book you have read in the last...
Undergraduatepapamao - Dec 13, 2009 / — -
|Intellectual Freedom, Columbia Short Essay
3 - Intellectual Freedom to transcend my dreams, Columbia University's defining Core Curriculum will permit me to have a perspective on...
Undergraduatejhtang - Dec 11, 2009 / EF_Kevin - Dec 13, 2009
|"I now understand the value family" - Michigan Setback
5 - very inspirational essay, raezzat it seems like you put a lot of time into this, and once you...
Undergraduateraezzat - Dec 7, 2009 / rmsurprenant - Dec 13, 2009
|Common App Short Essay: A counselor's experience
Undergraduatejbrown09 - Dec 5, 2009 / jbrown09 - Dec 13, 2009
|Commonapp: Jack Sparrow vs Personal Experience
4 - I took much more time writing the first essay, but I was not really inspired. Alright then I'll...
Undergraduatel3goals12 - Dec 12, 2009 / l3goals12 - Dec 13, 2009
|Reflect on a challenge you overcame through persistence-usc essay
4 - Well... if you are creative, you can give it an introduction that makes it sound like a page from...
Undergraduatel3goals12 - Nov 27, 2009 / EF_Kevin - Dec 13, 2009
|Hopkins essay, a shopping addiction
6 - Very nice, I think it definitely brings us into your mind and thought process! You do have some grammatical...
Undergraduateldh8504 - Dec 11, 2009 / Katsch - Dec 13, 2009
|'Life in India / International Studies' - College Franklin and Marshall
UndergraduateIntlIndian - Dec 11, 2009 / EF_Kevin - Dec 13, 2009
|"an exotic wildlife veterinarian" - Macaulay Honors College Essay feedback?
4 - keilinger; Thank you very much! I actually did try to stick to the prompt because when I get into...
UndergraduateShenise_T - Dec 9, 2009 / Shenise_T - Dec 13, 2009
|'Screaming often shakes the foundation of my house'; Vires, Artes, Mores
3 - catharsis is the releasing of emotion through art... how could I transition my essay from artes to mores...
Undergraduateprotesturhero - Dec 13, 2009 / protesturhero - Dec 13, 2009
|Why do you want to attend NYU Abu Dhabi? essay
6 - New York University brings to mind is appealing because of its highly desirable characteristics, in an academic institution, including...
Undergraduatehodari - Dec 11, 2009 / EF_Kevin - Dec 13, 2009
|Essay for UT: "neighbor" named Nora; who has made an impact on your life
2 - Hello Lindsey, This is heart touching story that shows how mature, strong, and brave you are. I believe...
UndergraduateLChase - Dec 13, 2009 / SouthernBella - Dec 13, 2009
|someone who made an impact on your life (my unlce)
2 - Sometimes we come across a person who changes our whole perspective of life for the better. Last summer I...
Undergraduateceoman - Dec 13, 2009 / itsjustme - Dec 13, 2009
|"My father" - essay topic #3-an important person and the impact on you
Undergraduateyf8651 - Dec 9, 2009 / ceoman - Dec 13, 2009
|Drawing and painting have been my only passion ; SAIC SOP - Interior Design
Undergraduateccleeah - Dec 11, 2009 / ccleeah - Dec 13, 2009
|Common App Essay: More Than a Game (baseball)
8 - "thanks for the suggestion...what do you think i should cut out to talk more about this?" ^ In my...
Undergraduatejbrown09 - Dec 12, 2009 / Vulpix - Dec 12, 2009
|About natural disasters and their influences on me.
UndergraduateHelpPls - Nov 16, 2009 / HelpPls - Dec 12, 2009
|Florida State University Admission Essay- How Vires Defines My Life
Undergraduategrocks6 - Dec 8, 2009 / grocks6 - Dec 12, 2009
|Essay for Agriculture and Life Science College in Cornell University
5 - Rebecca, thanks for all the great work you have been doing. I'm so impressed by this essay... I don't...
Undergraduatejzh110jzh110 - Dec 11, 2009 / EF_Kevin - Dec 12, 2009
|'speaking broken English' - UIUC essay academic interests--engineering
4 - Don't use a period if you are doing dialogue this way: "You are Chinese. Eat rice," said grandpa in...
UndergraduateSaraSara - Dec 10, 2009 / EF_Kevin - Dec 12, 2009
|How did you hlear about njit and why are you aplying for admision?
3 - I think this sentence above is unnecessary... instead of describing the game, describe your transformation and the seed...
Undergraduatetpopono - Dec 10, 2009 / EF_Kevin - Dec 12, 2009
|UCF has a well-established Nursing program and is very well-known. Why I chose to apply to UCF?
Undergraduatemcfaddenm - Nov 15, 2009 / EF_Kevin - Dec 12, 2009
|Admissions Essay: How can Appalachian State help to reach your career goals...
3 - Thanks Mustafa! I'll pick up where you left off... Biology and Pre -Medical are the courses of study...
UndergraduateAppBound22 - Dec 10, 2009 / EF_Kevin - Dec 12, 2009
|"I loved the water" - UM Short Answer, Issue of Local Concern
6 - I think a comma is necessary here: Growing up, I loved... Somewhere near the start of that first...
Undergraduateaguafria22 - Dec 9, 2009 / EF_Kevin - Dec 12, 2009
|under the Costa Rican sky - UofM Diversity Short Answer
8 - Diversity often divides people, especially if they focus on differences instead of detail, but having to trust each other...
Undergraduateaguafria22 - Nov 29, 2009 / EF_Kevin - Dec 12, 2009
|"an extremely complex ecosystem" - UPENN admission essay
UndergraduateBhanu4sat - Dec 11, 2009 / allathlete5 - Dec 12, 2009
|"Albert Einstein got it wrong countless times", George Washington Univ Essay
Undergraduatessuraj - Nov 29, 2009 / EF_Kevin - Dec 12, 2009
|AN Influential Person-My Math Tutor-Princeton Prompt
5 - Instead of repel, write rebel. This is such good description; you are doing very well! I think you...
Undergraduatexugx29 - Dec 10, 2009 / EF_Kevin - Dec 12, 2009
|applying for Vassar on ED2, "The poem recital"
UndergraduateYesha - Dec 10, 2009 / EF_Kevin - Dec 12, 2009
|"How can I contribute in the community" - Short Answer
10 - If I have the privilege of becoming part of UW community, I will share my country's cultural diversity, such...
Undergraduatestarzia - Dec 1, 2009 / EF_Kevin - Dec 12, 2009
|Short answer for common app about music
9 - After reading your essay, I could not undersand your central point. Are you trying to tell people music could...
Undergraduateeugene123 - Dec 2, 2009 / longyue - Dec 12, 2009
|'season's training' - Common Application-Taekwondo Spirits
4 - Yeah, the personal statements need these blaghs, but they would like even more to see your analysis. That's cool...
UndergraduateNatMeng - Dec 11, 2009 / Juniper_Jumper - Dec 12, 2009
|"I can accomplish any melody" - common app short answer
Undergraduateibtessam - Dec 7, 2009 / ibtessam - Dec 12, 2009
|Influential person/significant experience--a girl who made me strong in love
Undergraduatemcdy143 - Dec 8, 2009 / mcdy143 - Dec 11, 2009
|NYU-Short Answers (My First Choice and Dream School)
Undergraduatezhenghao - Dec 11, 2009 / zhenghao - Dec 11, 2009
|Experience, achievement - essay about losing weight- feedback
5 - WOW, you are a great writer! And what an inspiration! I just found a few small things; AlthIough,It...
Undergraduateukraine2 - Dec 8, 2009 / EF_Susan - Dec 11, 2009
|From Turkey, complex life - Stanford-short essay
Undergraduatedeeprocker - Dec 5, 2009 / deeprocker - Dec 11, 2009
|A South Dakota backpacking trip - Common App the experience one
Undergraduateblzflame9 - Dec 6, 2009 / EF_Kevin - Dec 11, 2009
|Include a short response explaining why you want to attend Brandeis.
4 - This is well-written! But what is the effect you will have on the larger community? I think it would...
UndergraduateHelpPls - Nov 22, 2009 / EF_Kevin - Dec 11, 2009
|My first essay! Cornell Art and Science!!
22 - yup, i wrote mine really impersonal at first, but then got really harshly criticized. so i restarted and...
Undergraduateyang - Dec 6, 2009 / yang - Dec 11, 2009
|Air Force Academy 500 word essay - ethical dilemma
3 - This is an essay with an interesting and personal concept. I however, did not quite like your narrative in...
Undergraduatedyland321 - Dec 11, 2009 / Liebe - Dec 11, 2009
|"Molecular Biology" - Carnegie - why you want to pursue your intended major
4 - That is a great introduction! I think the thing to do, though, is add one more sentence to that...
Undergraduatebluekleenexx - Dec 9, 2009 / EF_Kevin - Dec 11, 2009
|MacaulayHonorSupp; "I am picturing everyone in the audience in their underwear."
8 - Hmmm.. well, when I was in theatre in high school, I also heard that advice about imagining them in...
Undergraduateimas - Dec 6, 2009 / EF_Kevin - Dec 11, 2009
|"my first biology class" - Duke Supplement Essay
Undergraduateparadoxymoron - Dec 9, 2009 / EF_Kevin - Dec 11, 2009
|"living together is an art" - Colorado University admission essay cumpulsory
8 - Um.. I don't think it's really convincing that you said "cartoon created the good and the bad guy part."...
Undergraduatealijaffri - Dec 1, 2009 / ldh8504 - Dec 11, 2009
|"wonders of science and engineering" - Engineering, essay for the Duke University
Undergraduatealijaffri - Dec 3, 2009 / alijaffri - Dec 11, 2009
|'love for my country' - Stanford essay: intellectually engaging idea.
Undergraduatehern255 - Dec 10, 2009 / trosky2000 - Dec 11, 2009
|A moment of epiphany- Essay of my choice
Undergraduatetrosky2000 - Dec 3, 2009 / trosky2000 - Dec 11, 2009
|Common App. Essay Public Speaking
4 - Third paragraph first line: Although most of the students that joined the club didn't think or seem to have...
UndergraduateRowa - Dec 10, 2009 / Juniper_Jumper - Dec 11, 2009
|Duke Engineering Supplement Essays - why this school and activities besides studying
7 - You had better give more details on "why you would like to study at Duke." Your only mention that...
Undergraduatewishmemonstersx - Dec 10, 2009 / yf8651 - Dec 11, 2009
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