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|"Jane has autism," Common Application Essay! Topic: significant experience.
4 - that was a great advice, keilinger. i feel like i did put more of my negative side than positive...
Undergraduatekda013 - Dec 17, 2009 / kda013 - Dec 19, 2009
|An essay about something I've outrown- Chicago extended essay
NEW - Hi! Please I'm badly in need of your honest opinion and suggestions on improving my Chicago essay. Do you...
Undergraduateadeleye - Dec 19, 2009 / — -
|I have taken many journeys devoid ; Carnegie Mellon- Why?/ Major
Undergraduatethe onw - Nov 29, 2009 / yang - Dec 19, 2009
|"Arabs are the new blacks"; CUNY Mac Honors / Local, National, International problem
2 - I'm going to be totally honest. This is an extremely interesting essay. However, you could do a better job...
Undergraduaterafeeki92 - Dec 18, 2009 / cdrappi - Dec 18, 2009
|"to rejuvenate my African culture" Essay question help, transferring
2 - Thanks you sir..for being harsh. I really want to get into UVA and I need a solid essay. Here...
UndergraduateNasir2009 - Dec 17, 2009 / Nasir2009 - Dec 18, 2009
|FGCU Essay Rough Draft (Characteristics/qualities you posses..)
6 - You make alot of realistic references, great job! I was born in the 3rd world country, Haiti. Later,...
UndergraduateJfils - Nov 21, 2009 / NightRaven - Dec 18, 2009
|Columbia essay (conveys to the reader a sense of who you are)
7 - The idiom of embark is wrong, you usually use embark on.. Other than that.. great writing.. descriptive, yet...
Undergraduatekattylad - Dec 13, 2009 / batmankiller - Dec 18, 2009
|'The Tramp - Charlie Chaplin' - Common App Essay #4 Character in fiction
Undergraduatejnguyen787 - Dec 17, 2009 / jnguyen787 - Dec 18, 2009
|BU Supplement Base; Leadership, Service, and Congeniality
Undergraduateyankeebud95 - Dec 17, 2009 / yankeebud95 - Dec 18, 2009
|"Whistler"- Common app main essay(Topic of your choice)
Undergraduatefsy - Dec 16, 2009 / EF_Kevin - Dec 18, 2009
|Common app LONG essay - person who had significant influence on you (aunt, bro)
5 - You can do both! Please give people some significant feedback about their essays. Offer ideas instead of just...
Undergraduatefromagebus - Dec 13, 2009 / EF_Kevin - Dec 18, 2009
|Duke Sup-why you want to study engineering and why you want to study at Duke
2 - In that first paragraph, I thin it takes too long to make your point. From the reader's perspective, it...
Undergraduateyf8651 - Dec 16, 2009 / EF_Kevin - Dec 18, 2009
|Living in a diverse community, Colgate supp essay - comment
Undergraduatebhan_msm - Dec 16, 2009 / EF_Kevin - Dec 18, 2009
|NYU Supplement - famous New Yorker, poem, and going green
8 - I really like your documentary idea! I'm considering going crazy in mine. kinda like slyvia plath/Emily Dickinson-ish. Your poems...
UndergraduateTBONESTEAK33 - Dec 12, 2009 / gladwise13 - Dec 18, 2009
|Autobiogaphy Essay - University of Pennsylvania
6 - Hi,rmsurprenant..since you are done with your essay...will you look at my essays and give me feedback regarding the ideas...
Undergraduatermsurprenant - Dec 13, 2009 / politik - Dec 18, 2009
|Dickinson College Supplement-We Don't Belong to Ourselves
NEW - Dickinson College founder, statesman and physician Benjamin Rush wrote several essays on education for this new nation. Listed below...
UndergraduateNatMeng - Dec 18, 2009 / — -
|Emmanuel "a person who has had a significant influence on you"-CommonApp
Undergraduateloveyelledno - Dec 17, 2009 / Jeannie - Dec 18, 2009
|I've got my game face on, and I'm ready for the pitch--Mt. Holyoke Essay
Undergraduatecaisson22 - Dec 13, 2009 / meisj0n - Dec 17, 2009
|Question about Umich's Diversity.. Modern Art
10 - I always grunted disdainfully at modern art. It was not objective, like fields I was accustomed to, such as...
Undergraduatebatmankiller - Nov 3, 2009 / batmankiller - Dec 17, 2009
|Why biomedical engineer? Why Johns Hopkins?
8 - I'm sorry I don't have to time to give more detailed comments, but I would suggest that you vary...
Undergraduatefearless9 - Dec 13, 2009 / Katsch - Dec 17, 2009
|Art Institute of Charleston
Undergraduateartist737 - Dec 16, 2009 / EF_Susan - Dec 17, 2009
|Extra-curricular essays for UVA
UndergraduatePrincess Daisy - Dec 14, 2009 / Princess Daisy - Dec 17, 2009
|Princeton Supplemental Essay: Transforming Stones into Diamonds
8 - This essay has a great start... way to hypnotize the reader! In your final draft, you should probably use...
Undergraduatehiddenoasis - Dec 15, 2009 / EF_Kevin - Dec 17, 2009
|Personal Essay- Carmen, a person of significant influence
Undergraduatethecirclegame - Dec 15, 2009 / EF_Kevin - Dec 17, 2009
|"My parent's divorce" - UCF prompt
5 - ...been living with my mother in a single-parent household ever since . There was no alimony or child support,...
Undergraduatelilminkzmayb - Dec 13, 2009 / EF_Kevin - Dec 17, 2009
|Essay about myself for Georgetown-feedback
7 - Awesome, this is good stuff. Here is my challenge for you: Can you take that excellent first paragraph and...
Undergraduateniblickz - Dec 12, 2009 / EF_Kevin - Dec 17, 2009
|Rice University, Supplement, cradle of its field
Undergraduategsnwp - Nov 27, 2009 / EF_Kevin - Dec 17, 2009
|My grandfather --a person or event that has had a profound effect upon your life
2 - So, be careful of those unnecessary capital letters: After Spending spending a lot of time with such an...
Undergraduaterowen_4 - Dec 15, 2009 / EF_Kevin - Dec 17, 2009
|"I am clean, but not tidy" - Stanford roomate essay
6 - Hello, First of all, I like your essay. It surely is concise and deliver clear thoughts. I agree...
Undergraduatethephoebster - Dec 13, 2009 / Hadiqa - Dec 17, 2009
|How did you get caught long version
2 - it seems that I failed to adress the topic appropriately, because I did not clearly understand meaning of the...
Undergraduatebirzhanfm - Dec 15, 2009 / birzhanfm - Dec 16, 2009
|'Education and student ratio' - Lehigh supplement question-why Lehigh
2 - i don't think it delivers your strong desire to go to Leigh. maybe some more specific programs in Leigh...
Undergraduatebhan_msm - Dec 16, 2009 / Christie - Dec 16, 2009
|Challenge in my life- short paragraphs
4 - i think it would be more personal...i think...not sure about anything right now, especially concerning a MIT prompt :(...
Undergraduatecollegebound1 - Dec 16, 2009 / yang - Dec 16, 2009
|Cornell's College of Arts and Sciences Supplement-- What Should I Fix?
3 - Good job! I really liked this essay...it's both concise and interesting. "The power of words"- nothing wrong with...
Undergraduatekskclub01 - Dec 16, 2009 / shannon92 - Dec 16, 2009
|UT@Austin Topic A: my sister, Helen
UndergraduateHerb_107 - Dec 15, 2009 / EF_Kevin - Dec 16, 2009
|JHU supplement.. needs some fine tuning
3 - It sounds like you want to pursue international studies because you enjoyed traveling. I wonder if there is...
Undergraduatesneha17 - Dec 15, 2009 / EF_Kevin - Dec 16, 2009
|Columbia University & Yale University (Admissions essays)
4 - I like this essay the best, and prticularly this insight. It is a unique perspective, and I think...
Undergraduategladwise13 - Dec 15, 2009 / EF_Kevin - Dec 16, 2009
|Writing an essay on a diverse experience?
7 - I think you're right. Actually, one of my teachers said the very same thing. Thanks again! :)...
Undergraduatealejbatista - Dec 9, 2009 / alejbatista - Dec 16, 2009
|Common Application essay + short answer: [ a spelling bee and artistry.]
UndergraduateKatsch - Dec 12, 2009 / Katsch - Dec 16, 2009
|MIT spare time essay and appealing major
5 - My father inspired me to read newspaper daily, and today I have switched to the use of online news...
Undergraduatemrgzg1 - Dec 14, 2009 / EF_Kevin - Dec 16, 2009
|'It seems pretty simple' - Vires, artes, mores - Florida State Admissions
3 - i think it's a little too simple. you should have more eye catching characteristics and more details good...
Undergraduatepackersrule522 - Dec 15, 2009 / collegebound1 - Dec 16, 2009
|UCF "How has your family history, culture or environment influenced who you are"
UndergraduatePatelJ - Dec 14, 2009 / collegebound1 - Dec 16, 2009
|Common Application Long Answer : Changes - Operation Smile Vietnam
Undergraduatenagaking - Dec 14, 2009 / EF_Kevin - Dec 16, 2009
|Global energy crisis affecting my generation- UT Austin Prompt B
3 - No, it was thrust upon us by a previous epoch, as industrialization took stride, efficiency and innovation becoming top...
Undergraduatedavid2010 - Dec 15, 2009 / EF_Susan - Dec 16, 2009
|Symphony - Williams Admission Essay
3 - ...same fondness that I afford a well-executed performance-with pride and knowledge that I have done that best that I...
Undergraduatekoldingi - Dec 14, 2009 / EF_Kevin - Dec 16, 2009
|Temple essay - about me in 10 years from now; career in pharmacy
5 - As I reflect upon my personal and professional life, I can proudly tell you that my resume is filled...
UndergraduateEGLC - Dec 15, 2009 / EF_Susan - Dec 16, 2009
|BROWN- my dream university; 'My interest in the international community'
7 - In the summer after grade 11, I interned During an internship at Aditya Sondhi Law Chambers, Bangalore, through which...
UndergraduateIntlIndian - Dec 10, 2009 / EF_Kevin - Dec 16, 2009
|My Personal Statement for University entry to study Accounting.
3 - Add a comma: I have always had this passion for business and calculation, and that... Life is always...
Undergraduateobistaiwo - Dec 14, 2009 / EF_Kevin - Dec 16, 2009
|George Washington U. professional, communicative politician
Undergraduatephhusm2000 - Dec 14, 2009 / EF_Kevin - Dec 16, 2009
|An Accident - Yale supplement, is effective to convey a sense of adventure?
4 - Okay, you are leading my attention all over the place. You begin talking about an injury, and then...
UndergraduateEddy92 - Dec 14, 2009 / EF_Kevin - Dec 16, 2009
|Bowdoin College Supplement Essay-How have you prepared for Bowdoin?
Undergraduatexugx29 - Dec 8, 2009 / EF_Kevin - Dec 16, 2009
|Common application (my IT skills)
5 - During summer 2008 I have developed a hotels administration system. Later that year I had already sold ten copies...
Undergraduategkuizinas - Dec 14, 2009 / EF_Kevin - Dec 16, 2009
|Tutoring Spanish students - Why Northwestern University Transfer Essay?
2 - All this material, starting with the moment of your birth, is a very roundabout way of getting to...
UndergraduateJholton247 - Dec 14, 2009 / EF_Kevin - Dec 16, 2009
|Why Northwestern (opportunities and Nobel prize-winning professors)
2 - The whole first paragraph is so general that it could be said of almost any school. I recommend starting...
UndergraduateNatalie391 - Nov 19, 2009 / EF_Kevin - Dec 16, 2009
|[Princeton] My conquered walls
4 - "Trial and error" is an expression to refer to a haphazard way of figuring something out. It does...
Undergraduateseongwoomama3 - Dec 13, 2009 / EF_Kevin - Dec 16, 2009
|dance programs in private studios, Macaulay Essay
Undergraduatemr_turtle - Dec 13, 2009 / EF_Kevin - Dec 16, 2009
|UC Prompt #2: My Future as a Comedian
Undergraduatenikhurs - Nov 29, 2009 / EF_Kevin - Dec 16, 2009
|Acting and being onstage, Williams Prompt... any suggestions?
3 - You mentioned the butterflies twice, and it is probably better to only mention them once. Also, tis prompt...
Undergraduateburntaquaflame - Dec 13, 2009 / EF_Kevin - Dec 16, 2009
|How has a piece of art changed your life/evaluate a significant risk
2 - Years went by before I encountered my first taste of art education in elementary school, where the assignments... ...
Undergraduateconquistadori - Dec 15, 2009 / EF_Susan - Dec 16, 2009
|"A book that changed the way you see the world" - Les Misérables Macaulay Honors
UndergraduatePetitPicpus - Dec 13, 2009 / EF_Kevin - Dec 16, 2009
|'Math, constructing and designing models' - Lafayette Supplement Essay Help
7 - Though this essay clearly convey your interest and your strength, I think you need to reorganize your essay since...
Undergraduatelycjack - Nov 7, 2009 / yf8651 - Dec 16, 2009
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