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|My mother has shown me the right path to take in life among others how to giving back to community
4 - - Someone who has had significant Influence on me would be my mother Stacy Shimko because,, she ... -has...
Undergraduateshimkor12 - Sep 8, 2015 / justivy03 - Sep 15, 2015
|The Hills of Haverford - Common App Essay attempt numero uno
4 - - As I try to remember my experiences with failurethat failed , - ...siblings and a friend. - ...went...
UndergraduateKandy - Sep 8, 2015 / justivy03 - Sep 15, 2015
|'I want to be brave instead of to be happy' - Admissions Essay (Transfer)
Undergraduatetoribio6789 - Sep 8, 2015 / toribio6789 - Sep 9, 2015
|'to be a part of the scientific revolutions' - SOP - fascination with biology
3 - Thankyou so much for the corrections. I will make sure to edit the original document. Do I need to...
UndergraduatePraptee - Sep 9, 2015 / Praptee - Sep 9, 2015
|It's a humanitarian duty. Extracurricular activity essay College
2 - As civil war tore Libya (Apart), I took care of refugees (from/of) different... Not much but I hope...
Undergraduateprofes - Sep 9, 2015 / L33n4 - Sep 9, 2015
|Rising above the occasion - my leadership qualities, inside and outside out sports - UC Statement
4 - I have a few suggestions that might help. - ..than partookpartake in conversations... - InM y first...
Undergraduatejabbathehut99 - Sep 7, 2015 / justivy03 - Sep 9, 2015
|A woman in Computer Sciences. University of Washington Transfer Statement: "Aim for Diversity."
4 - @StephD, running through your essay, I believe you're good to go. For future reference, I'd like you to take...
UndergraduateStephD - Aug 13, 2015 / justivy03 - Sep 9, 2015
|"I am designing an "Operating System"." University Admission Essay - Commonapp Prompt
Undergraduateviethoang - Sep 6, 2015 / justivy03 - Sep 9, 2015
|The heart beating inside me isn't the traditional Valentine's Day heart I always knew it to be.
Undergraduatefafarrukh - Sep 5, 2015 / fafarrukh - Sep 8, 2015
|'severe case of asthma' - UC personal statment about my world in which I grew up
4 - Hi i made the revisions as well as added some of the suggested information. I'm not very sure if...
Undergraduateap759 - Aug 24, 2015 / ap759 - Sep 8, 2015
|"Let your life speak" - Tufts Supplement Essay about family, home, neighborhood, or community
Undergraduatewakkerdale9 - Sep 5, 2015 / Junisha111p - Sep 8, 2015
|Visited A Lab - Columbia University Supplement Essay - Tell us what you find most appealing
Undergraduatebliu2016 - Sep 8, 2015 / — -
|Empty state UCF personal statement, obstacle in personal or academic life
3 - - It atecreepsaton me as... - ...feeling pathetic for pitying myselfand having self pity when others... - I had...
Undergraduateitstyler116 - Sep 7, 2015 / justivy03 - Sep 8, 2015
|Personal Statement for Houston Methodist Administrative Fellowship Program!
Undergraduatezizozeid - Sep 5, 2015 / zizozeid - Sep 7, 2015
|"I've always wanted to keep a diary. " UVA Quirk Essay
3 - Thank you so much for your input! Many say that for college essays write as you'd talk, so that's...
Undergraduatefafarrukh - Sep 6, 2015 / fafarrukh - Sep 7, 2015
|Leadership and no titles - What is my identity?
4 - - Individuals that do notwho doesn't have this... - Some of the most popular leadership positions in high...
Undergraduatepriyajdesai - Sep 4, 2015 / justivy03 - Sep 7, 2015
|"My family loves food." I've gathered people to collect viable food. QUESTBRIDGE achievements essay
2 - - However, since I grew up with seven other siblings,... -...every time my parents'(punctuation mark is not necessary on...
Undergraduatesilverlitee - Sep 5, 2015 / justivy03 - Sep 7, 2015
|College life, campus food, research institution, technical school, reputation; Why Virginia - Top 5
3 - - ButHowever, the food in the town cannot.. - ...topcompete with the great campus food,... - Tech isThe institution...
UndergraduateDrpnsmbd - Sep 4, 2015 / justivy03 - Sep 7, 2015
|For outsiders, learning local norms and rules of polite behavior is a process filled with pitfalls
2 - - Studying abroad forces one... - ..my overseas study abroad experience in France gave... - ...a store without havingfirstgreetedgreeting...
Undergraduatecollegebound28 - Sep 2, 2015 / justivy03 - Sep 4, 2015
|Obstacles... College application essay - critique before I send in. All amounts of critisim welcome
3 - - ...that one must be overcome in order to further one's self. - ...dilemma with an intimacyin depth meaning...
Undergraduateashleight9214 - Sep 3, 2015 / justivy03 - Sep 4, 2015
|Improving social skills in a large city - why i chose to apply to UCF
3 - - ..has many majors too choose from,.. -it is located in the big city of Orlando,... - and has...
Undergraduateabbymaddox04 - Sep 3, 2015 / justivy03 - Sep 4, 2015
|Teaching English in Chile Essay #2
2 - Hi, your essay is well written, but there are some issues with the overall flow and grammar mistakes. ...
Undergraduatecollegebound28 - Sep 2, 2015 / ap759 - Sep 2, 2015
|'Keep running' - A common application essay 100 words critique
3 - - I would like further my lifetime ambition... - ...toand just keep running. - ...their support ensuringensures that I...
UndergraduateGrimoireOfAlice - Aug 4, 2015 / justivy03 - Sep 2, 2015
|I've been invited to a charity TV show where I saw the embarrassments and tears in children's eyes
4 - @underga801, the prompt below; - Reflect on a time when you challenged a belief or idea. What prompted...
Undergraduateundergra801 - Aug 29, 2015 / justivy03 - Sep 2, 2015
|Fashion Institute of Technology Essay - Fashion Business Management
Undergraduateasmith16pom - Sep 1, 2015 / lcturn87 - Sep 1, 2015
|Freshman prompt on how my world has formed me - UC application essay.
2 - - ...it is one that boundsbinds me into... - My community castshas ( you've used "casts" in the beginning...
Undergraduatechiefbitch - Aug 30, 2015 / justivy03 - Sep 1, 2015
|What Luther King suggested in his quote? Critical thinking is a central goal of Jesuit education.
Undergraduatea7lamajro7 - Aug 31, 2015 / justivy03 - Sep 1, 2015
|Describe a conflict in your life and the skills and resources you used to resolve it.
5 - Well, @abby, please don't call yourself an idiot because there's no such thing. We all make mistakes and everyday...
Undergraduateabbyjonesss - Aug 5, 2015 / justivy03 - Aug 30, 2015
|'Who do you want to be' - My answers would vary daily, from baker to ballerina
6 - - ...every child is asked a countless amount of times. - ...have to make when college camecome around. -...
Undergraduatepowwow - Aug 5, 2015 / justivy03 - Aug 30, 2015
|New classes, new school. I was finally a "big kid" in my eyes. ApplyTexas collegiate essay prompt A.
4 - @Castro, well done dear!!! You've got one good essay here and it's entertaining as well as classy. I'd like...
UndergraduateCastro98 - Aug 10, 2015 / justivy03 - Aug 30, 2015
|Growing up in Africa can be both a challenge and a blessing. College Admission Essay
4 - - ...being told we were able to go tovisit the computer... - You go to a certain classes once...
Undergraduatelili_eritrean - Aug 13, 2015 / justivy03 - Aug 30, 2015
|Self- Reflection Personal Statement For UC admissions
4 - Thanks for the responses you guys. I really appreciate how much effort you two put into reading other people's...
UndergraduateHenr247 - Aug 25, 2015 / Henr247 - Aug 29, 2015
|Educational and Career Goals: Why I want to be a mechanical engineer
UndergraduateAubreythefruit - Aug 27, 2015 / Brookyrailfan - Aug 28, 2015
|My Life Along The Railroad
3 - - ...became an integral part of my life oncewhen I received... - As for myself me,... - ..and...
UndergraduateBrookyrailfan - Aug 27, 2015 / justivy03 - Aug 28, 2015
|Does the course at school prepare you for work in the future?
4 - I would like to help you with choosing more descriptive words in your essay. I really like the...
UndergraduateTwinklegreen - Aug 27, 2015 / lcturn87 - Aug 27, 2015
|Challenges of a turban / Tomato Head - background, talent essay
4 - - ...discrimination because of my different looks . - Being different forces me to confront who I really am......
Undergraduatejasrajsingh1 - Aug 13, 2015 / justivy03 - Aug 27, 2015
|Harvard Supplement: Role of Medicine in my Life
4 - - Honestly, I retained a little. - ButmyMy ( this sentence should start good and "but" is not the...
Undergraduatesoniap55 - Aug 14, 2015 / justivy03 - Aug 27, 2015
|Peace Corps essay - Reasons for joining - I dream of making a small change
3 - - Peace Corps corresponded to all my idealsaspirations . - BeingLiving in a foreign country, helping people... - The...
Undergraduatemadme87 - Aug 14, 2015 / justivy03 - Aug 27, 2015
|Bike or not? 'I just learned to ride' common app essay - may it bring a wrong impression of me?
4 - @Mvp, I have a few remarks below; 3rd paragraph - Janete brought her bike and insisted for me...
UndergraduateMvppjr17 - Aug 26, 2015 / justivy03 - Aug 26, 2015
|Sociology and human aspects - University of Oregon essay
2 - - The human personbeing is a complex and individualistic beingprofile . - ...and his bond betweenamongst fellow individuals... -...
UndergraduateBossbitch - Aug 25, 2015 / justivy03 - Aug 26, 2015
|I want to change the world! SOP Transfer Essay
2 - - ...I hope to promote the attainment of the skills necessary to... - ...education and history was ignited during...
Undergraduatecctxkid - Aug 25, 2015 / justivy03 - Aug 26, 2015
|UofWa Transfer Statement on how life and study in college has shaped me.
2 - Meenu, I will tackle the first 3 paragraphs on your application essay; - My college career has only...
UndergraduateMeeenu - Aug 25, 2015 / justivy03 - Aug 26, 2015
|Different view from a teacher or employer during a performance evaluation process
3 - - ....sketchbooks were due onceevery a week. - This meant anything of your choosingyou choose . - ...of a...
Undergraduateraleigh - Aug 24, 2015 / justivy03 - Aug 25, 2015
|The lessons we take from failure can be fundamental to later succes. Common application, Apply Texas
4 - Thanks a lot for the suggestions!! Just got back from my grandparents' place in India and since there was...
UndergraduateRithamB - Aug 15, 2015 / RithamB - Aug 25, 2015
|Blank is the new blank. What's in, what's out, and why is it being replaced? UChicago essay help
Undergraduatepatgaws797 - Aug 21, 2015 / gayu - Aug 24, 2015
|Health fair in the San Ysidro community - the story of becoming an adult person
3 - - I found myself on July 19, 2015;I think I have an obsession with punctuation marks and on this...
UndergraduateJacmob - Aug 14, 2015 / justivy03 - Aug 23, 2015
|Asian Family / Self-Esteem - 'Bump in the road' UCF ESSAY HELP
5 - So far, my life has had many "bumps" in the road. I battle with self-esteem issues and mostly distrust...
Undergraduateyuunnie - Aug 22, 2015 / yuunnie - Aug 23, 2015
|Apply Texas Essay C, How my Achievements have prepared me for mechanical engineering
3 - I can help you with your essay. I think you are doing an excellent job with your writing! Discussing...
UndergraduateAubreythefruit - Aug 23, 2015 / lcturn87 - Aug 23, 2015
|GOAL IS TO ENHANCE THE LIVES OF STUDENTS. MUSIC EDUCATION. APPLY TEXAS PROMPT C.
3 - - It was a gift that was bestowed untoupon me - that I have been obligedgrateful for and ever...
UndergraduateKathleenluvvy - Aug 21, 2015 / justivy03 - Aug 23, 2015
|My goals will change more than I will be able to keep up with.
3 - - No, life isn't perfect;, it is a crazy and heck-it messy life. - Sean is my husband's name;,...
Undergraduatebeckybob2009 - Aug 21, 2015 / justivy03 - Aug 23, 2015
|Apply Texas Essay B-- How my feelings were changed by Personal Interactions
UndergraduateAubreythefruit - Aug 21, 2015 / justivy03 - Aug 23, 2015
|All of my goals derive from my passion for problem solving and helping others. College Application
4 - - Because of this,( starting your sentence with "because" is not the best way to start it I aspire...
Undergraduatesalfernandez555 - Aug 10, 2015 / justivy03 - Aug 23, 2015
|My interests and passions do not always come to me naturally; Colorado Boulder's Flagship 2030 essay
2 - I can help you with your essay. First, I would like to suggest a correction to this sentence. Notice...
UndergraduateWoodseyOwl - Aug 22, 2015 / lcturn87 - Aug 22, 2015
|"A cat. Several spitballs. A game." Seeking help for Carleton supplyment essay; Why Carleton
4 - Hello, I would like to give you a few suggestions. The opening of your essay seems to have incomplete...
Undergraduateglk1225 - Aug 21, 2015 / lcturn87 - Aug 21, 2015
|"Traveling outgrows its motives..." Dreams of wondering / Semester at Sea
4 - - Since I wasAs a child, I had been introduced - to an immersion of cultures through dancing, -...
UndergraduateRubyzamb - Aug 13, 2015 / justivy03 - Aug 21, 2015
|Valuing things that requred hard word - Write an essay on the following prompt.
2 - - Valuing things that requredrequires hard wordwork ( be careful of your spelling) - Earlier I used to wonder...
Undergraduategayu - Aug 20, 2015 / justivy03 - Aug 21, 2015
|Troubles in a middle school and how to deal with them - USAFA Writing Sample
2 - - ..I begunbegan to associate with the troublemakers.. - My counselor sat me down and(this is unnecessary) was very...
UndergraduateUSAFAapplicant7 - Aug 19, 2015 / justivy03 - Aug 20, 2015
|'To thine own self be untrue' - Common App Prompt #2
Undergraduatekingdraco89 - Aug 18, 2015 / justivy03 - Aug 20, 2015
|Riverbend Retreat Camp - Apply Texas B, "Describe a conflict, how you resolved it?"
2 - - This has made getting.. - The most frustrating situation at the camp for me was when - ...one...
UndergraduateAubreythefruit - Aug 18, 2015 / justivy03 - Aug 20, 2015
|Thoughts per day - my personal essay describes me and shows my uniqueness
3 - 1st paragraph - ...was a cycle of never ending thoughts;, (be mindful of your punctuation marks) thoughts - In...
UndergraduateaaliyahS - Aug 18, 2015 / justivy03 - Aug 20, 2015
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