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|'sure-to-be-discovered director' - Person Who Impacted You -- UT Essay A
3 - Ahhh, thank you SO MUCH Gloria. I will add those sentences back in (I pulled them out to hammer...
UndergraduateDarthrosenberg0 - Nov 8, 2008 / Darthrosenberg0 - Nov 9, 2008
|'more than just a five-letter word' - Davidson honor code essay
NEW - I would appreciate any suggestions as to how to condense my response to the prompt. Prompt: The Davidson...
Undergraduatebhangra369 - Nov 8, 2008 / — -
|'The truth about catholic schools' - why i chose this college (St. Olaf College)
2 - I think you could make this essay stronger by discussing more in-depth what it is that makes this school...
Undergraduatenanayaws - Nov 8, 2008 / EF_Team5 - Nov 8, 2008
|short answers - 1. community activity and 2. personal goal
Undergraduateluv4evr - Nov 8, 2008 / EF_Team5 - Nov 8, 2008
|short answer - "Identify type of intelligence and discuss experiences"
2 - Good evening :) Mechanically, only one suggestion: -"I am logical-mathematical, with a penchant for naturalist." Try "I...
Undergraduateluv4evr - Nov 8, 2008 / EF_Team5 - Nov 8, 2008
|'Getting everyone involved' Why would I apply to Lehigh and my contributions
Undergraduatevkwang - Nov 8, 2008 / — -
|a person who have influenced you and whats that influence
NEW - please check if there is any grammatical error and if it is catchy thank you Confidence, intelligence, determination,...
Undergraduatenanayaws - Nov 8, 2008 / — -
|To participate in CARE - program essay
NEW - Throughout my life, I have always been in the absence of knowledge. I have to fight for answers and...
Undergraduategeri2009 - Nov 8, 2008 / — -
|diversity experience short answer question umich
2 - Good evening. Mechanically, are my suggestions: "The folded chairs set crowded around the table were nearly full....
Undergraduatetln1sg19 - Nov 7, 2008 / EF_Team5 - Nov 7, 2008
|Maths Personal Statement for London universities - general checking
UndergraduateMez - Nov 6, 2008 / EF_Team5 - Nov 7, 2008
|Describe a significant experience or achievement (the Corps) - essay
2 - My main concern here is that your piece doesn't quite answer the prompt. You were asked to explain a...
Undergraduatelist00 - Nov 6, 2008 / EF_Team5 - Nov 7, 2008
|I volunteer at an orphanage here in Senegal - Short Answer for Common App
4 - I agree; the rest of the essay flows so well that the beginning does seem problematic. I think the...
Undergraduatemspivey2 - Nov 6, 2008 / EF_Team5 - Nov 6, 2008
|'I was the leading dancer' - Pratt application assignment
2 - Good afternoon. Was there a word count limitation for this essay? Since they actually use the noun...
Undergraduatedvashika - Nov 6, 2008 / EF_Team5 - Nov 6, 2008
|Can you decipher this College App. question?
Undergraduatejenchow1992 - Nov 6, 2008 / EF_Team5 - Nov 6, 2008
|Personal experiences with prejudice?
2 - Good afternoon. I think if you place the emphasis on how these experiences have helped you become a...
Undergraduatemmc314 - Nov 5, 2008 / EF_Team5 - Nov 6, 2008
|Qualities of a great teacher - UNC short essay
NEW - Tell us about your best teacher ever-or your toughest, or your worst. What distinguished this teacher from the others...
Undergraduatex3racha3l - Nov 5, 2008 / — -
|Family history & culture + why applying to UCF - UCF ESSAYS
2 - Good morning. I'm not sure what kind of assistance you were looking for, so I've just made some...
Undergraduategeri2009 - Nov 4, 2008 / EF_Team5 - Nov 5, 2008
|My Mom is the Most Influential Person - college application to UCONN
NEW - Hi all, This essay is for my college application to UCONN. It is not quite finished yet but I...
Undergraduatekelseyyes - Nov 5, 2008 / — -
|My Grandmother's Influence
UndergraduateZ0LIN - Nov 4, 2008 / — -
|Lehigh Essay - Undergraduate Education is the Foundation
3 - Good afternoon. This is a beautiful essay. If you don't count spaces, this takes you down to 995:...
Undergraduatebubbles - Nov 4, 2008 / EF_Team5 - Nov 4, 2008
|Change. It has been part of my life since I was young - College Essay
3 - Good afternoon. If you are concerned about too many details, how about combining or condensing some of the...
Undergraduatekraz4laxsoc - Nov 4, 2008 / EF_Team5 - Nov 4, 2008
|phone calls for a political campaign - common app short answer
NEW - In the space provided below, please elaborate on one of your activities (extracurricular, personal activities, or work experience)(150 words...
Undergraduatekkp12345 - Nov 4, 2008 / — -
|To share the abundance of knowledge that I had learned - Essay Check
Undergraduateto91 - Nov 3, 2008 / EF_Team5 - Nov 4, 2008
|FIT- Fashion Design Essay - your honest opinion is welcomed
Undergraduatedvashika - Nov 3, 2008 / — -
|Help~ Essay for music school
NEW - Hello. I would greatly appreciate your help on my essay. lots of critisisms please@!!! Please help me to make...
Undergraduatepianogirl_5 - Nov 3, 2008 / — -
|UC ESSAY- I aim hard to become a pediatrician
3 - Describe the world you come from - for example, your family, community or school - and tell us how...
Undergraduatezzz12 - Nov 3, 2008 / zzz12 - Nov 3, 2008
|'Shining Star of the Catechu People' - Common App...topic of choice--who am I?
Undergraduatemaddskillz180 - Nov 3, 2008 / — -
|how do i make my narrative essay into a descriptive essay?
2 - Good afternoon. The main difference between a descriptive essay and a narrative essay is to make sure you...
Undergraduatejojo19888 - Nov 3, 2008 / EF_Team5 - Nov 3, 2008
|The elite annual inter colleges soccer competion -extracurriculum. 150 word
2 - Good afternoon. Mechanically, many things do need corrected in this piece. First, whenever you use the pronoun...
Undergraduatenanayaws - Nov 3, 2008 / EF_Team5 - Nov 3, 2008
|Many of my talents - personal statement for uc applications, prompt 2
UndergraduateSOADer - Oct 31, 2008 / SOADer - Nov 2, 2008
|Lacrosse became my passion - Common App Short answer
3 - Thanks Alot...
Undergraduatekraz4laxsoc - Nov 1, 2008 / kraz4laxsoc - Nov 2, 2008
|Henry miller, man's destiny - my undergrad admissions essay
Undergraduatemimi101 - Nov 1, 2008 / EF_Team5 - Nov 2, 2008
|Soccer Essay. Common App 150 words or less
2 - Good evening. Your piece is mechanically clean; I could see no spelling or grammatical mistakes. You have good...
Undergraduateazianpinoy - Nov 1, 2008 / EF_Team5 - Nov 2, 2008
|The Summer of 2001 changed my life completely. UF essay
2 - "The SummerAs this is neither a proper noun nor the first word of a sentence, it should not be...
UndergraduateSui0915 - Nov 1, 2008 / EF_Team5 - Nov 1, 2008
|Further explain one of your activities - common app short answer
2 - Good evening. Your essay is mechanically clean, and as you did not indicate what kind of assistance you...
Undergraduatex3racha3l - Nov 1, 2008 / EF_Team5 - Nov 1, 2008
|my leadership skills, UCF I need feed back and grammer checking
NEW - prompt:What qualities or unique characteristics do you possess that would allow you to contribute to the UCF community? ...
Undergraduateelenighbinks - Nov 1, 2008 / — -
|Lessons gathered from an ongoing life experience+diabetes- admission essays
2 - A very nice response to the piece; your tone is confident and strong. Good job. "Within the college...
UndergraduateEikcuhc - Nov 1, 2008 / EF_Team5 - Nov 1, 2008
|How the surgery affected me - UF essay
Undergraduatecandacec - Nov 1, 2008 / — -
|'the Monkey King' - Character that influenced me - Common app essay
NEW - Thanks so much for your help! Also, do I need to include a title? Prompt: Describe a character...
Undergraduatebrokenpiano - Nov 1, 2008 / — -
|Moving to a positive direction of intellectual curiosity - FSU Essay
2 - For clarification and to further organize your essay, try using the actual words of their philosophies in your essay....
UndergraduateSkatertim10 - Oct 31, 2008 / EF_Team5 - Nov 1, 2008
|WHAT EXPERIENCES HAVE INFLUENCED YOU TO OPT FOR ENGINEERING?
Undergraduategarysept21 - Oct 30, 2008 / garysept21 - Nov 1, 2008
|sleek and stylish designs drew me in - Common App: Personal statement
3 - Your focus seems a bit scattered. The essay starts strong and conveys a clear message: your interest in technology,...
UndergraduateFadedSpirits - Oct 31, 2008 / Chink - Oct 31, 2008
|Community Service-Teaching and Chinese calligraphy -HELP ON Extra-cirrcular
2 - Good afternoon. I think the community service topic affords you more possibilities to display multiple facets of your...
Undergraduatefabxx - Oct 30, 2008 / EF_Team5 - Oct 31, 2008
|"only winning over myself, will I win over the world." - Admissions Essay
Undergraduateagus3264 - Oct 29, 2008 / EF_Team5 - Oct 31, 2008
|taking challenging courses in school - evaluate my FSU Admission Essay?
2 - Good afternoon. A few mechanical suggestions. "Who's" should be "whose." Remove the comma after "high school." Also, avoid...
Undergraduatebryambautista - Oct 30, 2008 / EF_Team5 - Oct 31, 2008
|From visiting my two brothers at UCF I determined that UCF is the perfect school for me.
2 - Good afternoon. One of my brothers worked on campus for UCF. After visiting them, I noticed many...
UndergraduateJoshrules - Oct 30, 2008 / EF_Team5 - Oct 31, 2008
|Competitions, National Honors Society, NYU school - supplemental essays
Undergraduatenyczxgemii - Oct 30, 2008 / nyczxgemii - Oct 30, 2008
|'My dad says not to give up' - Role Model Essay
6 - I made corrections, and explained more some ideas, i don't know if know it flows. As you form...
Undergraduatekatika2008 - Oct 29, 2008 / katika2008 - Oct 30, 2008
|Global society, maximization of benefits - UT Honors program essay
3 - Thanks for your input! I always have had trouble ending essays. Your help is very appreciated....
Undergraduatebully - Oct 29, 2008 / bully - Oct 30, 2008
|Calculus & Diversity - Common App Essay
3 - Thank you so much for your quick response! I will go fix that. Also, somehow this sentence seems...
UndergraduateDamselfly - Oct 30, 2008 / Damselfly - Oct 30, 2008
|Penn autobiography; Adults and children are nearly two entirely separate species
2 - Good afternoon. Mechanically, when you start something with quotation marks, make sure you finish it. For instance, what...
Undergraduatex3racha3l - Oct 30, 2008 / EF_Team5 - Oct 30, 2008
|Drawing inspiration from Depression - Common App Essay
2 - Good afternoon. Mechanically, avoid using contractions in formal academic writing; they are inappropriate and many instructors will count...
Undergraduatemattvroeg - Oct 30, 2008 / EF_Team5 - Oct 30, 2008
|to spend summer in New Zealand - Common App essay
2 - Good afternoon. Mechanically, a couple of things. First, avoid contractions in formal academic writing; they are inappropriate...
Undergraduatespinningjenny - Oct 30, 2008 / EF_Team5 - Oct 30, 2008
|In the hospitable bed, UF Essay: Meaningful Experience
2 - Good afternoon. The only thing I noticed about this piece was a contraction- "I'd." Make sure you avoid...
UndergraduateObie55 - Oct 30, 2008 / EF_Team5 - Oct 30, 2008
|I will always seek the goodness around me - UF Essay
2 - Good afternoon. While this is a very well crafted introspective piece, I'm not sure it answers the prompt....
Undergraduatebitofvanilla91 - Oct 30, 2008 / EF_Team5 - Oct 30, 2008
|My very first Youth and Government meeting - Common App Essay 250+
2 - Good afternoon. Just a few mechanical suggestions. First, when "referring" to something, make sure you are using...
Undergraduatecavemenrppl2 - Oct 30, 2008 / EF_Team5 - Oct 30, 2008
|a class taught by a historic figure-living or dead - Writing sample
2 - Good afternoon. First, remember punctuation at the end of every sentence. Second, do you mean "stooped," or...
Undergraduatemickeygirl - Oct 30, 2008 / EF_Team5 - Oct 30, 2008
|"Why Carnegie Mellon University"
2 - Good afternoon. A few things. First, make sure you are only capitalizing proper nouns and the first...
Undergraduatecloudone - Oct 30, 2008 / EF_Team5 - Oct 30, 2008
|To become a youth leader at my church - meaningful accomplishment in my life. UF Admission Essay
UndergraduateSturz15 - Oct 29, 2008 / EF_Team5 - Oct 30, 2008
|fulfilling life because of Color - UF essay
2 - Good afternoon. A couple of suggestions. First "team mate" is one word: "teammate." Also, the conclusion is a...
Undergraduatelizcamp - Oct 29, 2008 / EF_Team5 - Oct 30, 2008
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