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|My Life Along The Railroad
3 - - ...became an integral part of my life oncewhen I received... - As for myself me,... - ..and...
UndergraduateBrookyrailfan - Aug 27, 2015 / justivy03 - Aug 28, 2015
|Does the course at school prepare you for work in the future?
4 - I would like to help you with choosing more descriptive words in your essay. I really like the...
UndergraduateTwinklegreen - Aug 27, 2015 / lcturn87 - Aug 27, 2015
|Challenges of a turban / Tomato Head - background, talent essay
4 - - ...discrimination because of my different looks . - Being different forces me to confront who I really am......
Undergraduatejasrajsingh1 - Aug 13, 2015 / justivy03 - Aug 27, 2015
|Harvard Supplement: Role of Medicine in my Life
4 - - Honestly, I retained a little. - ButmyMy ( this sentence should start good and "but" is not the...
Undergraduatesoniap55 - Aug 14, 2015 / justivy03 - Aug 27, 2015
|Peace Corps essay - Reasons for joining - I dream of making a small change
3 - - Peace Corps corresponded to all my idealsaspirations . - BeingLiving in a foreign country, helping people... - The...
Undergraduatemadme87 - Aug 14, 2015 / justivy03 - Aug 27, 2015
|Bike or not? 'I just learned to ride' common app essay - may it bring a wrong impression of me?
4 - @Mvp, I have a few remarks below; 3rd paragraph - Janete brought her bike and insisted for me...
UndergraduateMvppjr17 - Aug 26, 2015 / justivy03 - Aug 26, 2015
|Sociology and human aspects - University of Oregon essay
2 - - The human personbeing is a complex and individualistic beingprofile . - ...and his bond betweenamongst fellow individuals... -...
UndergraduateBossbitch - Aug 25, 2015 / justivy03 - Aug 26, 2015
|I want to change the world! SOP Transfer Essay
2 - - ...I hope to promote the attainment of the skills necessary to... - ...education and history was ignited during...
Undergraduatecctxkid - Aug 25, 2015 / justivy03 - Aug 26, 2015
|UofWa Transfer Statement on how life and study in college has shaped me.
2 - Meenu, I will tackle the first 3 paragraphs on your application essay; - My college career has only...
UndergraduateMeeenu - Aug 25, 2015 / justivy03 - Aug 26, 2015
|Different view from a teacher or employer during a performance evaluation process
3 - - ....sketchbooks were due onceevery a week. - This meant anything of your choosingyou choose . - ...of a...
Undergraduateraleigh - Aug 24, 2015 / justivy03 - Aug 25, 2015
|The lessons we take from failure can be fundamental to later succes. Common application, Apply Texas
4 - Thanks a lot for the suggestions!! Just got back from my grandparents' place in India and since there was...
UndergraduateRithamB - Aug 15, 2015 / RithamB - Aug 25, 2015
|Blank is the new blank. What's in, what's out, and why is it being replaced? UChicago essay help
Undergraduatepatgaws797 - Aug 21, 2015 / gayu - Aug 24, 2015
|Health fair in the San Ysidro community - the story of becoming an adult person
3 - - I found myself on July 19, 2015;I think I have an obsession with punctuation marks and on this...
UndergraduateJacmob - Aug 14, 2015 / justivy03 - Aug 23, 2015
|Asian Family / Self-Esteem - 'Bump in the road' UCF ESSAY HELP
5 - So far, my life has had many "bumps" in the road. I battle with self-esteem issues and mostly distrust...
Undergraduateyuunnie - Aug 22, 2015 / yuunnie - Aug 23, 2015
|Apply Texas Essay C, How my Achievements have prepared me for mechanical engineering
3 - I can help you with your essay. I think you are doing an excellent job with your writing! Discussing...
UndergraduateAubreythefruit - Aug 23, 2015 / lcturn87 - Aug 23, 2015
|GOAL IS TO ENHANCE THE LIVES OF STUDENTS. MUSIC EDUCATION. APPLY TEXAS PROMPT C.
3 - - It was a gift that was bestowed untoupon me - that I have been obligedgrateful for and ever...
UndergraduateKathleenluvvy - Aug 21, 2015 / justivy03 - Aug 23, 2015
|My goals will change more than I will be able to keep up with.
3 - - No, life isn't perfect;, it is a crazy and heck-it messy life. - Sean is my husband's name;,...
Undergraduatebeckybob2009 - Aug 21, 2015 / justivy03 - Aug 23, 2015
|Apply Texas Essay B-- How my feelings were changed by Personal Interactions
UndergraduateAubreythefruit - Aug 21, 2015 / justivy03 - Aug 23, 2015
|All of my goals derive from my passion for problem solving and helping others. College Application
4 - - Because of this,( starting your sentence with "because" is not the best way to start it I aspire...
Undergraduatesalfernandez555 - Aug 10, 2015 / justivy03 - Aug 23, 2015
|My interests and passions do not always come to me naturally; Colorado Boulder's Flagship 2030 essay
2 - I can help you with your essay. First, I would like to suggest a correction to this sentence. Notice...
UndergraduateWoodseyOwl - Aug 22, 2015 / lcturn87 - Aug 22, 2015
|"A cat. Several spitballs. A game." Seeking help for Carleton supplyment essay; Why Carleton
4 - Hello, I would like to give you a few suggestions. The opening of your essay seems to have incomplete...
Undergraduateglk1225 - Aug 21, 2015 / lcturn87 - Aug 21, 2015
|"Traveling outgrows its motives..." Dreams of wondering / Semester at Sea
4 - - Since I wasAs a child, I had been introduced - to an immersion of cultures through dancing, -...
UndergraduateRubyzamb - Aug 13, 2015 / justivy03 - Aug 21, 2015
|Valuing things that requred hard word - Write an essay on the following prompt.
2 - - Valuing things that requredrequires hard wordwork ( be careful of your spelling) - Earlier I used to wonder...
Undergraduategayu - Aug 20, 2015 / justivy03 - Aug 21, 2015
|Troubles in a middle school and how to deal with them - USAFA Writing Sample
2 - - ..I begunbegan to associate with the troublemakers.. - My counselor sat me down and(this is unnecessary) was very...
UndergraduateUSAFAapplicant7 - Aug 19, 2015 / justivy03 - Aug 20, 2015
|'To thine own self be untrue' - Common App Prompt #2
Undergraduatekingdraco89 - Aug 18, 2015 / justivy03 - Aug 20, 2015
|Riverbend Retreat Camp - Apply Texas B, "Describe a conflict, how you resolved it?"
2 - - This has made getting.. - The most frustrating situation at the camp for me was when - ...one...
UndergraduateAubreythefruit - Aug 18, 2015 / justivy03 - Aug 20, 2015
|Thoughts per day - my personal essay describes me and shows my uniqueness
3 - 1st paragraph - ...was a cycle of never ending thoughts;, (be mindful of your punctuation marks) thoughts - In...
UndergraduateaaliyahS - Aug 18, 2015 / justivy03 - Aug 20, 2015
|What makes us survive is not because the life never getting easier, yet we are getting stronger.
5 - There are still some errors but the meaning is becoming clearer. I will focus on the 4th paragraph but...
Undergraduatemasktaz - Aug 17, 2015 / lcturn87 - Aug 20, 2015
|Why Georgia Tech? - scientific skills further development, legion of extracurricular activities
3 - - ...problems easily and thus, enhance my -ThoughBesides the fact that I am member of a science community... -...
Undergraduatenathansp98 - Aug 17, 2015 / justivy03 - Aug 19, 2015
|Indonesian student in SANTA CLARA UNIVERSITY: CommonApp Questions
3 - Proof reading; 1. Briefly describe how you learned about Santa Clara University. (150 words maximum) - I want...
Undergraduatejlskinner2 - Aug 17, 2015 / justivy03 - Aug 19, 2015
|I look back at my 'misfortune' and smile. One of the prompts in Texas application.
2 - - Among the other topics that would come up atto the table - was my dad's talk oflitany about...
Undergraduatejustbelieve - Aug 14, 2015 / justivy03 - Aug 19, 2015
|Movie role choice question - University of Florida 2016 Undergraduate Essay
3 - - ...and be an advocate for those who are lacking advocatesself esteem . - Thus, beganThis is the beginning...
Undergraduatemadymonzon - Aug 15, 2015 / justivy03 - Aug 18, 2015
|What are the most important qualities in becoming a successful USMA cadet? 250-500 words
2 - - An USMA cadet is... - ...live bywith the basic concept... - ...commitment that a cadet has to the...
UndergraduateCandidate - Aug 11, 2015 / justivy03 - Aug 18, 2015
|Visas to America - obstacle or "bump in the road," in your academic or personal life
3 - - Arriving to American , -...words carefully;, ( be careful of your punctuation marks, this is minor remarks but...
Undergraduatevanngoc3598 - Aug 12, 2015 / justivy03 - Aug 18, 2015
|My whole life I've beaten the odds; Fsu essay
UndergraduateAlterdn - Oct 15, 2013 / justivy03 - Aug 18, 2015
|'to be a leader in the colossal shark tank of the corporate world' - Texas A&M 2016 application
2 - Hello, I would like to help you with the first paragraph of your essay. When I read the first...
Undergraduateabbyjonesss - Aug 16, 2015 / lcturn87 - Aug 16, 2015
|Challenging transition - College essay/personal statement
Undergraduatep13p3ng - Aug 6, 2015 / justivy03 - Aug 15, 2015
|Low self esteem and insecurity - 'obstacles in your life' essay
3 - - ...one often only considers the external conflicts faced. - Low self esteem and insecurity are common to many...
Undergraduatecocowing - Aug 5, 2015 / justivy03 - Aug 15, 2015
|How you see your future - your goals and ambitions? Predicting can be difficult due to many factors.
3 - - Predicting one's future can be difficult considering the many factors that can affect.. - ...typical answer:, to get...
Undergraduatejohnnygu - Aug 5, 2015 / justivy03 - Aug 15, 2015
|Clash of different experiences. Essay for college admissions.
2 - -...was accompanied by the wondrous possibility of a job. - I don't mean every other Tuesday he would offer...
UndergraduateBreanne1398 - Aug 3, 2015 / justivy03 - Aug 15, 2015
|Don't Dwell on things out of your control. Common app prompt #2.
2 - 1. sports are VERY overdone. of course, stick with what you believe in. But i'd also consider other alternatives...
UndergraduateCVN - Aug 14, 2015 / soniap55 - Aug 14, 2015
|I qualified for the DECA International Career Development Conference in Atlanta - transition essay
Undergraduatedecakid - Aug 5, 2015 / decakid - Aug 7, 2015
|List of questions. Could anyone correct my study plan?
2 - Hello, I will help you with some of your essay. I will focus on your first question. Question...
UndergraduateAnkur_112 - Aug 6, 2015 / lcturn87 - Aug 6, 2015
|UT Austin Transfer - Statement of Purpose (Topic A) - "For a Short While, We Were Legion"
2 - Your first sentence should be a hook like : "While everyone was walking the row to get their diploma,...
UndergraduateThedarkestdawn - Aug 4, 2015 / krobledo226 - Aug 5, 2015
|Goal - to explore the great big world that lies around us; University of Oregon application essay
3 - Ever since I can remember I have been fascinated by the idea of exploring the great big world that...
UndergraduateAlphabitch - Aug 5, 2015 / krobledo226 - Aug 5, 2015
|Stanford short ECA Essay: Musical Passion
Undergraduatelazycuriosity - Aug 4, 2015 / lazycuriosity - Aug 4, 2015
|Think about the person you admire. What qualities does that person have that are admirable?
Undergraduatechibichan - Jul 28, 2015 / lcturn87 - Aug 4, 2015
|My contribution to Pomona College's comes from my own life experiences.
5 - I agree with @MSP1998 You should completely delete 1st para. Also, additionally, instead of diversifying your essay...
Undergraduatekrobledo226 - Jul 30, 2015 / Xuraj - Aug 1, 2015
|How my activities can allow me to become a great enginner - applytexas topic c
UndergraduateKilleener - Aug 1, 2015 / ChristineB - Aug 1, 2015
|Awkward relationship with my uncle - ApplyTexas Essay Topic B
4 - Thank you guys for the feedback. Based on the feedback, I revised my third paragraph in a completely different...
UndergraduateKilleener - Jul 28, 2015 / Killeener - Aug 1, 2015
|University reinstatement letter after 10+ years
UndergraduateEEBound - Jul 31, 2015 / EEBound - Jul 31, 2015
|Mexican and Arabian - two best friends. Diversity from a different perspective. College APP
4 - Hi, krobledo226 again !! Actually, I focused on grammar because I felt that it's exhausting to consider the...
Undergraduatekrobledo226 - Jul 30, 2015 / Dawn01 - Jul 30, 2015
|My reflection on My Brilliant Life; the supplement essay for Boston College
3 - I can help you with you writing. When I looked at the first word, I noticed a misspelling. The...
Undergraduatethaisontrinh - Jul 29, 2015 / lcturn87 - Jul 29, 2015
|Acceptance essay to the Illinois Art Institute of Chicago
3 - thank you justivy03! that was very helpful. how should i detail my strengths though? im not even sure what...
Undergraduatedreamerowl - Jul 29, 2015 / dreamerowl - Jul 29, 2015
|Common App Question: What problem you'd like solved and steps to get solution
5 - Thank you so much @justivy03! Do you think the introduction is a little bit too much or is it...
Undergraduatehashwindersingh - Jul 28, 2015 / hashwindersingh - Jul 28, 2015
|College expectations, before attending it
4 - My reccommendation is to not use the term "things" as often. I mean, you can't always find a substitution...
Undergraduateclarinesukamto - Jul 27, 2015 / hashwindersingh - Jul 28, 2015
|Being a Korean immigrant - ApplyTexas Essay Topic A
3 - 1st paragraph; - "I'll never get be able to fit into the American culture". -.. I feared most of...
UndergraduateKilleener - Jul 25, 2015 / justivy03 - Jul 26, 2015
|USNA Candidate essay - to achieve my dreams of serving in the navy
3 - - Growing up with Nepali parents of Nepali descent who.. - devote my life and to onebe of service....
UndergraduateCandidate - Jul 21, 2015 / justivy03 - Jul 24, 2015
|Windows on Williams - My Neighborhood and its impact
UndergraduateYvette12 - Jul 12, 2015 / masaji - Jul 23, 2015
|'The pain is temporary' - David's United States Naval Academy Personal Statement Essay
4 - Your essay is just two paragraphs, each one answering a question. What you need is proper form. You could...
Undergraduatedavidsrosario0 - Jul 17, 2015 / EF_Carol - Jul 20, 2015
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