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|"my mother couldn't support all of us financially" - Obstacles in my life
NEW - Please describe in detail you have faced in your life. If your adversity is strictly financial need, please describe...
Undergraduate4ever2bleed - Oct 3, 2008 / — -
|Common App Writing - local baseball field crew membership
2 - I think this is a very honest and honorable essay. You describe what you have done and how you...
Undergraduatebully - Oct 2, 2008 / EF_Team5 - Oct 2, 2008
|The World I Come From - College required essay
3 - It is where discovery and logic are tools waged to create understanding. I reside at the nexus of these...
UndergraduateJustJoshinbyJ - Oct 2, 2008 / EF_Team5 - Oct 2, 2008
|FU essay - people could just let their lives fall to piece
UndergraduateInvidious - Oct 2, 2008 / — -
|"I have never had a musical bone in my body" - common app essay
6 - You are right, and while "I" did not write the paper, "I" do not know what the prompt/requirements were,...
Undergraduateupa - Sep 29, 2008 / EF_Team5 - Oct 2, 2008
|Helping people is my passion ; NEOUCOM - what would you contribute?
UndergraduateSchoubey - Sep 30, 2008 / Schoubey - Oct 1, 2008
|"the horrible quasi-suicide incident"; /Common App
2 - Excellent essay. Grammatically and mechanically pretty clean, and your point is very poignantly made. It flows well, is organized,...
UndergraduateWankmaster - Oct 1, 2008 / EF_Team5 - Oct 1, 2008
|"I am unique" - UCF admission; UCF community
3 - erotondo09 has a good point; you could leave the sentence as "I will do everything in my pwoer to...
UndergraduateYellowRoses - Sep 22, 2008 / EF_Team5 - Oct 1, 2008
|"I have been in that very arena many times" - FSU admissions essay
3 - It is absolutely a good thing. The more secure and confident you are in your writing, the more confident...
Undergraduatepnkpolkadottz - Sep 30, 2008 / EF_Team5 - Oct 1, 2008
|Stanford - not believing in evolution
NEW - I also wanted some advice on the supplement essays for stanford for the first question: Stanford students are...
Undergraduateupa - Oct 1, 2008 / — -
|'Neal bhai' - your activities (150 words or less) common app
4 - It's a great essay, but the question says 'elaborate'. It tells a nice story but doesn't actually tell what...
Undergraduatekotak07 - Sep 27, 2008 / j4ckieee - Sep 30, 2008
|Will take great pride in wearing the garnet and gold - FSU admissions essay
NEW - For almost one hundred years, the Latin words, "Vires, Artes, Mores" have been the guiding philosophy behind Florida State...
Undergraduatecaneslax - Sep 30, 2008 / — -
|Narrative Essay about a personal experience in which impacted your life
5 - Good afternoon. The essay is currently successfully written in present tense. The times when you are thinking back...
UndergraduateFissionMailed - Sep 29, 2008 / EF_Team5 - Sep 30, 2008
|"The Melting Pot" - Common app Main essay
Undergraduatealeinad - Sep 28, 2008 / aleinad - Sep 30, 2008
|I love the campus, student life, and school - UCF essays
NEW - No longer than 500 words or a total of 7000 characters for both statements. How has your family...
Undergraduateashcakes - Sep 30, 2008 / — -
|"Project Big Dipper changed my mindset" - Common apps short question
Undergraduatewongxy - Sep 29, 2008 / wongxy - Sep 30, 2008
|"There is a trace of each of these old values" - FSU Essay Evaluation
4 - Just that; relaxed "can't", "won't", etc. These are things we use because we are linguistically lazy. Formal academic writing,...
Undergraduateking723 - Sep 28, 2008 / EF_Team5 - Sep 30, 2008
|"Can we make a difference in the world?" Notre Dame
Undergraduatepandolfi91 - Sep 28, 2008 / pandolfi91 - Sep 29, 2008
|My high school career is drawing to an end - UF Admissions Essay
3 - I believe your essay answers the prompt effectively. You use good examples and have a good intro as well...
UndergraduateBZellars09 - Sep 28, 2008 / EF_Team5 - Sep 29, 2008
|Adolescence is the precursor to adulthood. - UF Admission Essay
NEW - Prompt: Describe a meaningful event, experience or accomplishment in your life. Adolescence - My essay: Adolescence is...
Undergraduatejohnny5 - Sep 29, 2008 / — -
|"I am not able to isolate one of three Latin words" - FSU admission essay
NEW - Looking back on my life, I realized that I am not able to isolate one of three Latin words....
Undergraduatemdfmas499 - Sep 29, 2008 / — -
|FSU Essay: Family is more than one word to me.
NEW - "Vires, Artes, Mores" are words that are both a guiding philosophy for Florida State University and for my life....
Undergraduatea1ex682 - Sep 29, 2008 / — -
|'more than trained physician, dentist or veterinarian' - essay about being a doctor
Undergraduatemihirmj - Sep 19, 2008 / EF_Team5 - Sep 28, 2008
|I have a close relation to the Latin word "Mores" - FSU Admission Essay
NEW - In comparison to the motto of Florida State, "Vires, Artes, Mores", I believe I have a close relation to...
Undergraduatejordanelizabeth - Sep 28, 2008 / — -
|Addictive tendencies - family history, culture, or environment
NEW - For UCF. I think it sounds really awkward and I have already had to rewrite it a few times....
UndergraduateKillings - Sep 28, 2008 / — -
|Miami Rowing Club; MY activities
NEW - 154 words, help!! also,***please edit**** A thousand and one doubts floated through my head as I anxiously sat...
Undergraduatealeinad - Sep 28, 2008 / — -
|Cultural diversity is important to our American culture; UofM diversity
NEW - ok, i have most of it written...this stupid liberal diversity essay (sorry if i offend anyone in that). I...
UndergraduateLedPorcupineToo - Sep 28, 2008 / — -
|Intern for Barack Obama's campaign ; EXTRACURRICULAR
UndergraduateDamselfly - Sep 27, 2008 / EF_Team5 - Sep 27, 2008
|Personal Statement- meaningful experience ("Antonio stung my heart")
2 - You've got a unique premis here, but it could use some more personal details from you to really make...
Undergraduate4ever2bleed - Sep 27, 2008 / EF_Team5 - Sep 27, 2008
|"strong morals are necessary in today's society" - FSU Admission Essay
2 - I think you have a great essay here. You explain how this characteristic affects your life and give great...
Undergraduatejkrusemark1 - Sep 27, 2008 / EF_Team5 - Sep 27, 2008
|'multifaceted culture' - Rutgers Undergraduate Admission; a vibrant community
7 - By "showing" you use adjectives, metaphors, and similies frequently but not too frequently in your writing. By being concise,...
Undergraduatekotak07 - Sep 14, 2008 / EF_Team5 - Sep 27, 2008
|Palm beach County's Zero Tolerance policy - UF essay
Undergraduateredfishh2 - Sep 27, 2008 / — -
|Orlando's beauty/internship and employment opportunities; WHY CHOOSE UCF?
Undergraduateekinkler90 - Sep 27, 2008 / — -
|"Next up, from New Jersey" - do you think I've answered the question?
2 - Good evening. Grammatically and mechanically the essay is clean. If the word count allows, I suggest adding a...
Undergraduateekinkler90 - Sep 26, 2008 / EF_Team5 - Sep 26, 2008
|'pelagic domain' / 'white uniform' / 'Russian math' - 3 UC Essays - Comment
2 - Good evening. In regards to the first essay, I believe your text answers the prompt effectively. You use...
Undergraduatesgrockergirl - Sep 26, 2008 / EF_Team5 - Sep 26, 2008
|the gregarious young man to be - admission essay
UndergraduateJaguarKing100 - Sep 25, 2008 / JaguarKing100 - Sep 26, 2008
|Accomplishment essay (skiing Tiger the most difficult slope @ Boston Mills)
Undergraduatemihirmj - Sep 25, 2008 / — -
|FSU essay---desire to major in pre-law. suggestions for improvement?
3 - thank you thank you thank you!!! i really appreciate your help :) but i do have one more question......
Undergraduateccw_20 - Sep 25, 2008 / ccw_20 - Sep 25, 2008
|Education and my parents - Ucf admissions essay
2 - My parents' influences in my academics is personified through me everyday; however, my loving sisters are responsible for my...
Undergraduatemcsmike - Sep 24, 2008 / EF_Team5 - Sep 25, 2008
|"traditions which I can relate to as a student" - fsu essay
2 - I'm not really sure if your essay answers the prompt. You define tradition very nicely and illustrate examples of...
Undergraduatejaw7000 - Sep 24, 2008 / EF_Team5 - Sep 25, 2008
|Obstacle, family history, uniqueness - UCF essay
NEW - UCF We ask that you respond to two of the topics below. Your personal statement should be no longer...
Undergraduateccw_20 - Sep 25, 2008 / — -
|'Unexciting homework' - Common Application Activity Essay
UndergraduateAndrea09 - Sep 11, 2008 / EF_Team5 - Sep 25, 2008
|FOGANA, Indian cultural dance competition - common app activities essay
Undergraduatemihirmj - Sep 24, 2008 / — -
|Essay about the cause of me choosing my career path
2 - Good afternoon. The prompt asks for the causes of your choice. Is it just the thought of making...
Undergraduateconchonho - Sep 24, 2008 / EF_Team5 - Sep 24, 2008
|Libraries, the gym, the student union on-campus communities ; WHY UCF?
Undergraduatemegan1407 - Sep 23, 2008 / megan1407 - Sep 24, 2008
|UCF Admissions Essay- how my environment has influenced who i am today.
Undergraduatexomisskirstinox - Sep 23, 2008 / EF_Team5 - Sep 24, 2008
|UCF Admissions essay - one obstacle I've overcome- NEED to cut A LOT out.
3 - Good morning. "An obstacle that I have overcome in my personal life was the loss of my mom when...
Undergraduatexomisskirstinox - Sep 23, 2008 / EF_Team5 - Sep 24, 2008
|My life devoted to the art of music - FSU Admissions Essay
Undergraduatebandgeek669 - Sep 21, 2008 / bandgeek669 - Sep 23, 2008
|"The day when I get my report cards" - UCF Admission essay
2 - Watch your tense; you switch back and forth between past and present tense, which creates very disrupted writing which...
UndergraduateShaenat - Sep 22, 2008 / EF_Team5 - Sep 22, 2008
|"mathematics affinity" - FSU essay on values Vires, Artes, Mores
2 - The Florida State University motto "Vires, Artes, Mores," challenges students to have strength, skill, and character. Nice job;...
Undergraduatekm0416 - Sep 22, 2008 / EF_Team5 - Sep 22, 2008
|My parents' divorce; U Florida - MEANINGFUL CHALLENGE
3 - Good afternoon. How will this experience influence the kind of student you will be at UF? The main...
Undergraduatekm0416 - Sep 19, 2008 / EF_Team5 - Sep 22, 2008
|"Skill or craft" ; FSU - "Vires, Artes, Mores"
3 - For several base reasons it is Artes I identify with the most. Artes, by my definition, is reaching a...
Undergraduatesrqking - Sep 21, 2008 / EF_Team5 - Sep 22, 2008
|"My most life-altering experience under my nose" - admission essay "Vires"
NEW - My most life-altering experience occurred right under my nose, as I was making my routine dominations on the soccer...
Undergraduatebhagan11 - Sep 22, 2008 / — -
|'wheelchairs and blankets' - Common application elaboration on one of your activities
Undergraduatecelestialxx - Sep 21, 2008 / EF_Team5 - Sep 22, 2008
|People controlling their lives - UCF admission essay
UndergraduateYellowRoses - Sep 21, 2008 / — -
|Individual background, experiences, identity - UF College Essay Help
UndergraduateAtom - Sep 21, 2008 / — -
|"... everyone was proud to be a Golden Knight" - UCf admissions essay
NEW - Why did you choose to apply to UCF? Every year thousands of students arrive at the same question,...
Undergraduatemcsmike - Sep 21, 2008 / — -
|Shaping our lives - Common App personal Essay
4 - You're welcome. Let's see: I especially enjoy when the children have a show to perform for their...
Undergraduatevid2sean - Sep 21, 2008 / EF_Team5 - Sep 21, 2008
|Values as components of our lives - Florida State Admissions Essay
Undergraduatesjj315 - Sep 21, 2008 / — -
|Vires is the one that stands out the most; FSU Esssay
NEW - "All of these values are easily reflected in my life, but I feel that that Vires is the one...
Undergraduatecollegeicntwait - Sep 21, 2008 / — -
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