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|'My popularity' - college experience, your contribution UF admission essay
5 - As I stated before, your focus should be on your thoughts and feelings after the scare. Remove as much...
Undergraduatedman0227 - Aug 6, 2008 / EF_Team5 - Aug 18, 2008
|'medicine and future hard work' - essay (with star wars), applying to pre-med
Undergraduatetorchamp - Aug 9, 2008 / EF_Team5 - Aug 18, 2008
|'her husband, my father, has died' - UF - meaningful event
UndergraduateBrianOchuko - Aug 16, 2008 / — -
|"Jennifer Lim" - College Application Essay
NEW - I was just starting fourth grade when I met Jennifer Lim. Then, I had just moved to the Philippines...
Undergraduateop2607 - Aug 16, 2008 / — -
|'A dream come true' - Vires, Artes, Mores - FSU admissions essay
2 - I believe that it is. You explain how these values have impacted your life, and how you interpret them....
Undergraduatezaz - Aug 13, 2008 / EF_Team5 - Aug 14, 2008
|'the barracades blocking' - FSU Admissions Virfes, Artes, Mores
2 - You've got a good start here, and some opportunities where you can expand upon how these values have impacted...
Undergraduateoliviasimon - Aug 13, 2008 / EF_Team5 - Aug 14, 2008
|'How could I have Epilepsy' - FSU admissions essay:
6 - I agree with you; the second one is more focused and thus more appropriate. I was fortunate enough...
Undergraduatecollege_girl - Aug 12, 2008 / EF_Team5 - Aug 13, 2008
|'The Youngest' - Question about main common app essay.
Undergraduatewwr - Aug 12, 2008 / wwr - Aug 12, 2008
|"Yes, Your Honor" - College Essay for Common Application
8 - OK, so you've been writing in a passive voice. For instance: "Until I joined the Long Island City...
Undergraduateiyagabre91 - Aug 4, 2008 / EF_Team5 - Aug 12, 2008
|Do you think that you are going to be successful business in the future?
2 - You meaning was not clear at many points in this essay, so if my corrections are not what you...
Undergraduatezoh - Aug 10, 2008 / EF_Team5 - Aug 11, 2008
|Essay about what I want to apply for (University of Central Florida)
2 - It would be good to mention what program you are interested in enrolling in, what career path you would...
Undergraduatenikkixoo - Aug 8, 2008 / EF_Team5 - Aug 9, 2008
|HELPING OTHERS; Past and future goals and decisions
Undergraduatecarolina24 - Aug 6, 2008 / carolina24 - Aug 8, 2008
|Qualities and Characteristics: Independence, drive, and leadership
NEW - Independence, drive, and leadership; three important qualities that can help any person when living a life away from home....
Undergraduatenikkixoo - Aug 7, 2008 / — -
|Coach David glanced at me; Person who had a significant influence on me
3 - This is much better. There are more details and it flows more fluidly. "At the beginning of the...
Undergraduatejasonwiesenthal - Aug 1, 2008 / EF_Team5 - Aug 6, 2008
|'helping Grandpa Bernie' - event, experience, accomplishment in life - UF
2 - Good morning. Your essay is very moving. You are very descriptive, but not overwhelmingly so. It is relevant...
Undergraduatejasonwiesenthal - Aug 1, 2008 / EF_Team5 - Aug 1, 2008
|'Hope for jobs, mentoring and learning opportunities' - Why did I choose to aply to UCF?
NEW - Why did you choose to apply to UCF? I choose to apply to University of Central Florida because...
Undergraduatejasonwiesenthal - Aug 1, 2008 / — -
|"EXPERIENCES THAT HELPED YOU DEFINE AS A PERSON" COLLEGE ADMISSION ESSAY.
NEW - I'D REALLY APPRECIATE IF YOU'D HELP ME WITH MY ESSAY. THANKS! :D Being the youngest in the family,...
Undergraduatemynameisjoy - Aug 1, 2008 / — -
|Valuable knowledge/ Socializing - UC Prompt # 2 Essay.
NEW - I gained valuable knowledge of the ways how human societies relate to each other and to the planet that...
UndergraduateAries - Jul 31, 2008 / — -
|'Revolutionary Association of the Women of Afghanistan' - UC Prompt
NEW - Five years ago I could not even think of having my dreams come true in pursuing my personal, professional...
UndergraduateAries - Jul 31, 2008 / — -
|At sixteen I became interest in Computers; UC - PS-Figo
2 - You need to be more specific in many of your statements. Explain more of why you want this degree...
UndergraduateFigo - Jul 30, 2008 / EF_Team5 - Jul 30, 2008
|PESO DEVALUATION & PARENTS' DIVORCE; Masters in Adm. emphasis in leadership
NEW - As the oldest daughter of two professional educators, I can honestly say that my education has been a diverse...
Undergraduatevaldezs - Jul 28, 2008 / — -
|UCF quality to better the campus - admission essay
2 - Don't be so hard on yourself. Nobody's perfect at anything :) Good job! You show a good example of...
Undergraduatelidlmissblonde - Jul 25, 2008 / EF_Team5 - Jul 26, 2008
|"Before he cheats essay - obstacle essay
2 - OK, let's see what we've got here: "People say after hard times you learn and you mature from...
Undergraduatelidlmissblonde - Jul 25, 2008 / EF_Team5 - Jul 26, 2008
|Describe the proposed field to study in Australia - Help me, revise it
2 - You've got good content here. You tell why you want into the program and your previous experience in the...
Undergraduatekitty20111983 - Jul 24, 2008 / EF_Team5 - Jul 25, 2008
|"Your intended major" - UC Admissions Essay Prompt #1
2 - You have not answered their first question: what is your intended major? Once you state what major you are...
Undergraduatemisz_kellie - Jul 24, 2008 / EF_Team5 - Jul 25, 2008
|Descriptive essay on my backyard
Undergraduatecooper92i - Mar 21, 2007 / EF_Team5 - Jul 24, 2008
|How far should I describe my experience for MFA Broadcast design?
Undergraduateangel_link - Jul 8, 2008 / EF_Team5 - Jul 24, 2008
|"How these values are reflected in your life" - college application essay
NEW - My English homework assignment is to write a College Application Essay to a college that you're planning to apply...
UndergraduateAndagi - Jul 21, 2008 / — -
|I'm working on an admissions Essay to University of Florida
2 - Good evening. I think your idea of using the quote as an introduction is a good one. Introductions...
UndergraduateLade - Jul 12, 2008 / EF_Team5 - Jul 13, 2008
|Your contribution to the UF campus community, admission essay
6 - Greetings, You have already made sure your essay will not be plagiarized by others because you have included...
UndergraduateGiannaJam - Jul 11, 2008 / EF_Team - Jul 12, 2008
|Your family history, culture, or environment influenced - how it influenced
3 - Ironically i proof checked it b4 i posted it, and i still missed such easy mistakes Thanks for...
UndergraduateJcell - Jun 23, 2008 / Jcell - Jun 24, 2008
|Apple Inc. has maintained an image synonymous with stunning modern design, appealing usability
4 - Good afternoon. 17% of this essay is plagiarized from various websites. Ensure that you are properly citing your...
UndergraduateChristopher - Jun 15, 2008 / EF_Team5 - Jun 17, 2008
|'Nature has great plans for everywone' - MIT admission essay, up to MIT's standard?
NEW - Hello there. I am writing an essay for my MIT application and decided to post it up for some...
UndergraduateDblak99 - Jun 17, 2008 / — -
|Karim, an American girlfriend and more - help with my admission essay
4 - Good morning. If this is not an academic assignment for a class, unfortunately I cannot assist you. This...
Undergraduatemahmoud - Jun 11, 2008 / EF_Team5 - Jun 12, 2008
|"You cannot open a book without learning something" ; Memorable Reading Experience
NEW - This essay is about a significant event that changes your life. Could I get help from that. Thanks in...
Undergraduateajoke - Jun 7, 2008 / — -
|My smart choice ; " Whay are you applying for AUC?"
2 - Try using the full title of the university as much as possible, and the abbreviation only minimally; this increases...
Undergraduatehashod - Jun 5, 2008 / EF_Team5 - Jun 5, 2008
|'Preparing each game'; Determination, Teamwork Confidence, and a never say die attitude
NEW - For the last four years playing football for the Cerritos High school, has been one of the highlights in...
Undergraduatenicholas - Jun 1, 2008 / — -
|Moving from state to state; the world you come from - COMMON APP
NEW - I kind of rushed this, so hopefully it's decent. I'll thank anyone ahead of time for reading this and...
UndergraduateReprieve - May 28, 2008 / — -
|Your ability to adapt crossculturally; Peace Corps Admission Essay 2
NEW - Yesterday I posted my other admissions essay and I got fantastic feedback, so I thought I'd post this essay...
Undergraduatesstacy2 - May 26, 2008 / — -
|"If time travel were possible..." - help with this essay
Undergraduatekr2426 - May 21, 2008 / EF_Team5 - May 26, 2008
|"my family's enterprise" - influenced by family history, culture, or environment.
NEW - How have you been influenced by your family history or culture, or the family environment you grew up in?...
Undergraduatekr2426 - May 26, 2008 / — -
|"an agent for public betterment" - Peace Corps Admission Essay
2 - Sorry I left out the question. Essay question: Please provide a statement (between 150-500 words)that includes: - Your...
Undergraduatesstacy2 - May 26, 2008 / sstacy2 - May 26, 2008
|'Dancing for win and lose' - osu essay help
NEW - Consider your talents and strengths, academic and otherwise. What is one thing you do really well? "Our greatest...
Undergraduatebenit4 - May 22, 2008 / — -
|WHY DO I WANT TO STUDY PUBLIC HEALTH AND HOW DOES IT FIT INTO MY CAREER?
Undergraduatebodeolagunju1 - May 3, 2008 / bodeolagunju1 - May 8, 2008
|Essay On Life Goals
Undergraduatexdarkr0se - Apr 25, 2008 / EF_Team5 - Apr 28, 2008
|Food Laboratory ; School of Public Health Institute U Minnesota
2 - Greetings! Actually, I think your English is very good! I can help with a few minor corrections. ...
Undergraduatemdsanchez82 - Apr 20, 2008 / EF_Team2 - Apr 21, 2008
|Humane Environment; Northwestern U TRANSFER/ UNIQUE QUALITIES
2 - Greetings! You've done great things with your essay! Only a few of the phrases need a little minor...
Undergraduateeminemya - Apr 15, 2008 / EF_Team2 - Apr 18, 2008
|What two options are the most difficult to choose between? - admission
NEW - Each person around the world must have been left at least one time in a situation which he does...
UndergraduatePurcell - Apr 11, 2008 / — -
|My main goal is to be a manufacturing engineer with a six sigma black belt.
3 - thanks!!! it looks great, English writing is very hard when you are a non-English speaking immigrant, i really...
Undergraduateorosco33 - Mar 26, 2008 / orosco33 - Mar 27, 2008
|Any personal accomplishments that have given satisfaction
2 - Greetings! You've written a nice little essay! I'm happy to give you some feedback. The most recent...
Undergraduatexdarkr0se - Mar 25, 2008 / EF_Team2 - Mar 26, 2008
|In 2006, I went to Vancouver; Cross-cultural experience essay
2 - Greetings! You've written a very interesting essay! Here are some editing tips for you: While staying in...
Undergraduateje2ks2 - Mar 23, 2008 / EF_Team2 - Mar 24, 2008
|Advertising is the ability to sense, interpret - my addmission essay
2 - Greetings! Your passion really comes through in your writing! Very good! Here are some editing suggestions: This...
Undergraduateadio49 - Mar 22, 2008 / EF_Team2 - Mar 23, 2008
|Physical therapy or other career - application essay
2 - Greetings! It would help if I knew the purpose of your essay. Is this for an admissions essay...
Undergraduatetisbella - Mar 18, 2008 / EF_Team2 - Mar 19, 2008
|'Hard to make' - the admission essay about good friendship
4 - Greetings! You're very welcome! I don't think you should think of yourself as having a "problem." You are...
Undergraduateheroine - Mar 9, 2008 / EF_Team2 - Mar 10, 2008
|Opinion to defend, in conflict with the majority - admission essay
Undergraduateeminemya - Mar 4, 2008 / EF_Team2 - Mar 9, 2008
|Statement of purpose (objective, reasons, goals) for MIT
2 - Greetings! You sound like an interesting person! Here are some editing suggestions for you: Sincerely I have...
Undergraduateeminemya - Mar 4, 2008 / EF_Team2 - Mar 5, 2008
|'A real connection with people' - Fine Arts admissions essay
Undergraduatemeesh - Feb 26, 2008 / meesh - Mar 1, 2008
|'PSECU credit unions' - people helping people essay
2 - Greetings! I think perhaps the focus of your essay is too much on the credit union itself and...
Undergraduaterneff - Feb 26, 2008 / EF_Team2 - Feb 27, 2008
|What issue of local, national, or international significance concerns you?
2 - Greetings! I think your writing is very good! I have some editing suggestions for you: Childhood is...
Undergraduateeminemya - Feb 26, 2008 / EF_Team2 - Feb 27, 2008
|Why leave Tsinghua University and go to UVA?
Undergraduateeminemya - Feb 23, 2008 / EF_Team2 - Feb 23, 2008
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