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|Where did Highschool go? I feel as if my high school years passed me by in a blink of an eye
3 - I am already aware of what my major goals are that i plan to accomplish during my college experience....
Undergraduatemiraheta - Jan 12, 2015 / dozazgirl - Jan 12, 2015
|From running a company to a yearbook committee - my leadership abilities outshine the rest
2 - ... could not have done it alone. From operating graphic design workshops to giving constructive criticism to proofreading...
Undergraduateacupofcoffee - Jan 12, 2015 / Camilabido - Jan 12, 2015
|Having pink hair for the past two years has changed my outlook on life
4 - You have good ideas but I think they need to be more elaborated on. For instance, how was the...
Undergraduatemelaetu - Jan 12, 2015 / southernbelle - Jan 12, 2015
|Progress in one's life gives a person the caliber to do something for the others.
3 - The prompt is Georgia Tech motto is "Progress and Service". What does that means to you? I want...
Undergraduatehighschoolin - Jan 11, 2015 / highschoolin - Jan 12, 2015
|Someone influential in America - I chose John A. Lejeune. Experience and Initial Interest essay
2 - Your essay is very good so far. perhaps you could explain what it is about John A, Lejeune that...
UndergraduateCSchrout - Jan 12, 2015 / miraheta - Jan 12, 2015
|I was in a cheering sea of red - my first football game - essay about challenging situation
Undergraduatebriannaasalways - Jan 11, 2015 / briannaasalways - Jan 12, 2015
|"People never grow up, they just learn how to act in public."
2 - The smell of the new dyed walls thatfreshly painted walls conquered my nose, and the massive green garden which...
Undergraduatefs21 - Jan 11, 2015 / miraheta - Jan 12, 2015
|"No In Between", "I want to be different" I prayed - College Essay
3 - thanks for your input! i'm very aware that my essay sounds condescending and pretentious. Any suggestions as to how...
Undergraduatekennedymlhs - Jan 12, 2015 / kennedymlhs - Jan 12, 2015
|5 reasons why VT; study in a foreign country while working in research projects with professionals
Undergraduatestart47 - Jan 10, 2015 / admission2012 - Jan 12, 2015
|While studying at Queen's University, I hope to learn, live, and grow as a student.
2 - Whenever you are asked to discuss your time at a particular program and beyond, you should always try to...
Undergraduatemarissa - Jan 12, 2015 / admission2012 - Jan 12, 2015
|"worst mistakes" - at november 6, 1996 two twins were born
3 - Hi! This is a very moving story. It took an emotional turn in the middle part, which I didn't...
Undergraduatejatochi12 - Jan 9, 2015 / stretchthelimit - Jan 12, 2015
|Borderless World. Globalization is playing an increasingly important role in our lives these days.
Undergraduatekrokus - Jan 8, 2015 / krokus - Jan 12, 2015
|My involvement with MUN. Describe the highlights of your most important achievements, contributions.
2 - To condense this, take out unhelpful words. Writing is always improved when the same ideas are expressed in fewer...
Undergraduateanmay_dhanuka - Jan 8, 2015 / EF_Kevin - Jan 11, 2015
|I seek to be ready and primed for the next big chapter of my life - Common App Essay - VCU
Undergraduateaveiz100 - Jan 10, 2015 / briannaasalways - Jan 11, 2015
|"One never stops learning until one dies" USC academic interests essay by "Undeclared" major student
7 - "I believe USC offers me the potential to fulfill my goals and achieve success." You need to rephrase...
Undergraduatejinlin18 - Jan 6, 2015 / aveiz100 - Jan 10, 2015
|Learning is what advances me throughout my life. Each day I learn more and more.
Undergraduatespencerkane - Jan 8, 2015 / huzefaa - Jan 10, 2015
|Wrote about Trip to Italy, made me want to be independent.. Common app essay - Background story
Undergraduatehuzefaa - Jan 8, 2015 / huzefaa - Jan 10, 2015
|My best friend, whom I love dearly, felt ashamed of being himself. He admitted to me that he is gay.
2 - The essay contains a number of punctuation issues that you must address. I would like you to review the...
UndergraduateRaissaLima - Jan 9, 2015 / vangiespen - Jan 9, 2015
|I wake up everyday in the morning hoping to fulfill my desire to progress as a human being
Undergraduatedigvijaymore - Jan 9, 2015 / Trinity - Jan 9, 2015
|Family in Atlanta? Then upon research I discovered what an amazing institute Georgia tech is.
12 - The highly praised program of aerospace engineering is probably what inclined me towards Georgia tech the most. I had...
Undergraduatehuzefaa - Jan 7, 2015 / huzefaa - Jan 9, 2015
|Duke's campus, combined with Gothic-style and Georgian-style architecture, is unparalleled in beauty
Undergraduatecfes - Jan 8, 2015 / cfes - Jan 9, 2015
|At DubHacks my peers and I developed an application that helped drivers focus on their driving.
2 - Hello, halcyoncxd, Overall, excellent job on your essays. You utilized the terms which accompany CS and programming fields to...
Undergraduatehalcyoncxd - Jan 8, 2015 / tpannell77 - Jan 9, 2015
|Big cities are where you can see many people, cars, hospitals etc - there are many good universities
Undergraduateessaywriter123 - Jan 7, 2015 / essaywriter123 - Jan 8, 2015
|The key to a successful performance by a group depends largely on its dynamic and chemistry.
Undergraduatedeadpoolguy - Jan 8, 2015 / huzefaa - Jan 8, 2015
|Write about your personal and education background and what you expect from a university education
4 - Vangiespen Alright I understood what you meant to say, that I should write about MY idea of a college...
UndergraduateH_Abbasi97 - Jan 8, 2015 / H_Abbasi97 - Jan 8, 2015
|As a child my first favorite big word was paradox. The word offered both understanding and confusion
Undergraduatecollegevzd - Jan 8, 2015 / vangiespen - Jan 8, 2015
|I know for sure that I will be a hard worker just like all the current Hokie students.
Undergraduatekevfigueroa - Jan 7, 2015 / rex32 - Jan 8, 2015
|'plethora of times where I thought that I couldn't go any further' - UCF application, influences?
2 - You didn't talk about your successes and why you know yourself a successful person till this last...
Undergraduatekatherine97 - Jan 7, 2015 / ssaallaamm - Jan 7, 2015
|"The beautiful diversity of multicultural enviroment" APU essay #1
2 - The first part of your essay sounds a lot more like a student brochure selling you on the positive...
Undergraduateindonesiaapu - Jan 7, 2015 / vangiespen - Jan 7, 2015
|I had few matchpoints. How I met a failure in my tennis career
3 - Your essay comes across as very self-centric and shows the bruising of your ego very well. Letting the admissions...
Undergraduateind1900 - Jan 6, 2015 / vangiespen - Jan 7, 2015
|A business degree is safe, right? That was my logic for deciding to study business at Adrian College
2 - The essay is very good. You transitioned between your ideas very well. I personally don't see anything really wrong...
UndergraduateDharrisGBC - Jan 7, 2015 / AndrewB - Jan 7, 2015
|Why Colgate - academic programs and diverse community
Undergraduatesampunk9494 - Jan 5, 2015 / vangiespen - Jan 7, 2015
|Change started to take place in my life when my father had to close his lifelong business.
6 - I think you can paint a very vivid picture of the kidnapping, and that may better illustrate the effect...
Undergraduateericpons - Dec 30, 2014 / nkp28 - Jan 7, 2015
|Why UChicago? Curiosity has always been the driving force in my life.
UndergraduateYithian - Jan 4, 2015 / Yithian - Jan 7, 2015
|defying the stereotypes or conforming to new ones?
14 - I think this essay is good, but you definitely can rephrase your words so that it is more effective....
Undergraduatelynn1997h - Jan 4, 2015 / Yithian - Jan 7, 2015
|Georgia Tech's motto is: "Progress and Service." What does that mean to you?
4 - It looks better now. Just one thing: you mentioned that service people are in the mind of making the...
UndergraduateBoa503 - Jan 6, 2015 / jacko1985 - Jan 7, 2015
|Omne Trium Perfectum. Create your own group of threes, and describe why and how they fit together.
4 - Here's the full one. Which i would say is still uncomplete. But well ,thats the very reason i am...
Undergraduatemaximu5 - Jan 5, 2015 / maximu5 - Jan 6, 2015
|I have always enjoyed being faced with new challenges that put me outside of my comfort zone
2 - It seems like it's already well written. You answered the prompt with a great title and supported it. Although,...
Undergraduatejlondon - Jan 6, 2015 / SherlockLegends - Jan 6, 2015
|I come from a community where work isn't referred to as a career, but a job.
6 - Try to join a few of the sentences by just using "where" and eliminating "I come from a community"....
UndergraduateDharrisGBC - Jan 5, 2015 / esslayer - Jan 6, 2015
|Contributing to Macalester community, personally and academically
Undergraduatesampunk9494 - Dec 16, 2014 / sampunk9494 - Jan 6, 2015
|MIT short answers; I'm dominican; cultural backgroung essay
3 - What out for your capitalization errors. You have the word "Dominican" written in small letter when the letter D...
Undergraduatecamcustodio05 - Jan 5, 2015 / vangiespen - Jan 5, 2015
|Diversity was something that was not part of my vocabulary until the day I came to the U.S.
5 - Diversity was something that was not part of my vocabulary until the day I came to the U.S. Growing...
Undergraduatemeg33 - Jan 5, 2015 / DharrisGBC - Jan 5, 2015
|Unique integration of a minority female, computer science, and psychology
Undergraduatelynn1997h - Jan 4, 2015 / maximu5 - Jan 5, 2015
|Some people opt for starvation rather than solitary dining
3 - @vangiespen thank you for your comments! i'll fix up the missing words and post up the new draft soon!...
Undergraduatejacko1985 - Jan 5, 2015 / jacko1985 - Jan 5, 2015
|A nurse who fights for the wellbeing of their patient is worthy of the honor she possess
2 - Lindsay, the essay is asking you to discuss the reasons that you decided upon the University of Michigan as...
Undergraduatelinsterb - Jan 5, 2015 / vangiespen - Jan 5, 2015
|The welcome atmosphere that I feel the first time I walked in the campus. Why Virginia Tech?
2 - I was counting the reasons that you have in the essay for becoming a Hokie and realized that you...
Undergraduatenikki7 - Jan 5, 2015 / vangiespen - Jan 5, 2015
|Only two kinds of people in this world: those who accept change and those who don't
4 - @lynn1997h and @vangiespen Thank you so much! I guess I will have to revise and redo the prompt. ....
Undergraduategreengrass - Jan 5, 2015 / greengrass - Jan 5, 2015
|Music help me to be who i am
2 - This is a good response to the prompt. It does have a number of grammatical errors though. I have...
Undergraduatemjhito - Jan 5, 2015 / vangiespen - Jan 5, 2015
|'odd combination of dreamer, brutal realist and pragmatist' - How do you define yourself?
UndergraduateEvangelineLu - Jan 4, 2015 / sampunk9494 - Jan 5, 2015
|I had been presented with the opportunity to go on a church camping trip. UGA essay
Undergraduatesouthernbelle - Jan 4, 2015 / sampunk9494 - Jan 5, 2015
|uPenn essay: just the other day...
10 - Feedback: Very interesting narrative regarding your interests in the first part, although you may have to shorten it...
Undergraduatelynn1997h - Jan 4, 2015 / sampunk9494 - Jan 5, 2015
|A time when I had to tutor a teenager of different background
7 - Thanks for the suggestions vangiespen :) I added the element of the continued friendship with my student in my...
Undergraduatesampunk9494 - Dec 17, 2014 / sampunk9494 - Jan 5, 2015
|Discovery shuttle with crew STS 105 - I have loved aerospace since I was a child.
5 - I suggest that since your career goals are more important to you than PhD in this essay , you...
UndergraduateAndrewB - Jan 3, 2015 / vincenm - Jan 5, 2015
|Bookshelf. I'm more than one person! I am composed of passions, faces, and reflections.
1 - 1. Johns Hopkins University was founded in 1876 on a spirit of exploration and discovery. As a result, students...
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|it chose me, I hated the fact that there are many new diseases, and I'm here sitting doing nothing
6 - Shaima, we need to know what prompt you are trying to answer with this essay. I am not entirely...
UndergraduateSHAIMA_A7MD - Jan 4, 2015 / vangiespen - Jan 4, 2015
|My First Promotion Test - breaking three boards; Taekwondo
UndergraduateAngieTheTurtle - Jan 3, 2015 / vangiespen - Jan 4, 2015
|The track. 'I slowly arch my hips above my shoulders and make a quick mental checklist'
4 - The essay is off to a definitely good start. However, it loses it way towards the middle where you...
Undergraduateiweli - Jan 4, 2015 / vangiespen - Jan 4, 2015
|Last winter, I participated in North American Invitational Model United Nation.
UndergraduateJichengwen - Jan 4, 2015 / vangiespen - Jan 4, 2015
|I zigzag my way back to the pharmacy as I see everyone works in an orderly, fast paced environment
3 - the first sentence of the second paragraph sounds like a concluding statement for the entire essay consider placing elsewhere...
Undergraduatewai019 - Jan 3, 2015 / lynn1997h - Jan 4, 2015
|Mathematically speaking, it means having one left over as a remainder when divided by two.
2 - unique title talk about how being average is boring, by definition typical, etc. the advantages to your situation ...
UndergraduateJesusLM2 - Jan 4, 2015 / lynn1997h - Jan 4, 2015
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