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|DIETETICS Field; UBC COMMON APP - Achieve life and/or career goals?
6 - Greetings! I think you're off to a good start! Here are some editing suggestions: By taking the...
Undergraduatexxalixx - Nov 4, 2007 / EF_Team2 - Nov 8, 2007
|SCARY MOVIES; What is your most frightened experience? - college essay
Undergraduatewistfulizzie - Oct 23, 2007 / wistfulizzie - Nov 6, 2007
|Setback essay - Applying to Tech College
Undergraduatebizkitgirlzc - Oct 29, 2007 / wannabe - Nov 6, 2007
|'Studying in a very competitive school and traveling' - My Personal Statement
4 - Greetings! Yes, I think it is a very strong personal statement and speaks very well of you! If...
Undergraduatevedantsureka - Nov 4, 2007 / EF_Team2 - Nov 6, 2007
|USC personal statement - EXTERNAL INFLUENCE
Undergraduateohhkevin - Nov 5, 2007 / ohhkevin - Nov 5, 2007
|"So you're Peruvianese" ;My unique background- Clever and funny
Undergraduatehunter13 - Nov 3, 2007 / hunter13 - Nov 4, 2007
|Math, Physics and Calculus; Governor's School Program
Undergraduatetkelly - Oct 31, 2007 / EF_Team2 - Oct 31, 2007
|"A Hero in Disguise"; My best friend had Acute Lymphoblastic Leukemia
2 - Greetings! This is a well-written and moving essay! I like tone, which is simple, yet poignant. I have...
Undergraduatesonia - Oct 31, 2007 / EF_Team2 - Oct 31, 2007
|"Birthday party this weekend" UF ESSAY
Undergraduatepbitesize - Oct 29, 2007 / pbitesize - Oct 30, 2007
|Mathew & my family; University of Miami - Most significant person
Undergraduatemalvarez - Oct 22, 2007 / EF_Team2 - Oct 30, 2007
|'Science Fair victory' - Diversity Essay for University of Michigan
2 - Greetings! You've written a very good essay! I have just a couple of suggestions: simply being a...
Undergraduatebizkitgirlzc - Oct 29, 2007 / EF_Team2 - Oct 30, 2007
|CYCLING; UFlorida- Meaningful Experience
3 - A final review and help on my concluding paragraph--UF I was wondering fi you could give my essay...
Undergraduatemalvarez - Oct 23, 2007 / malvarez - Oct 29, 2007
|'playing my character' - Howard University - My Admission
Undergraduatedee301568 - Oct 28, 2007 / dee301568 - Oct 28, 2007
|'Physical limits' - My UF aplication essay
2 - Greetings! I'm happy to help with some editing for your excellent essay! Limits are meant to be...
Undergraduatelostsy10 - Oct 28, 2007 / EF_Team2 - Oct 28, 2007
|Math Essay for college- feedback/comments?
3 - Greetings! Thanks for giving me some suggestions! I feel those spots were confusing too. Your correction works! ...
Undergraduatelopsicicle - Oct 14, 2007 / lopsicicle - Oct 27, 2007
|Purpose of App; Why I chose Penn State University
Undergraduateblue_palace - Oct 24, 2007 / blue_palace - Oct 25, 2007
|"My family", the greatest influence on me
Undergraduatewolffangel21 - Oct 24, 2007 / EF_Team2 - Oct 25, 2007
|My extremely successful business - Imagine you just completed your BIOGRAPHY
2 - Greetings! I think you're doing a great job! It's interesting and makes me want to know more about...
Undergraduateammarrauf - Oct 23, 2007 / EF_Team2 - Oct 23, 2007
|Polarization causes violence & remedy is compromise; FREE CHOICE
3 - okay, thanks....
UndergraduatePeachy - Oct 21, 2007 / Peachy - Oct 22, 2007
|My Summer 2007 internship with Senator Schumer - admission essay
4 - Greetings! I don't think your quotation is awkward; I would have said "attention-grabbing"! As far as the last...
UndergraduateKostasg - Oct 18, 2007 / EF_Team2 - Oct 22, 2007
|Teaching mathematics; - PERSONAL STATEMENT
12 - Greetings! I think you've done a very good job of answering most of the questions, with one exception,...
Undergraduateammarrauf - Sep 29, 2007 / EF_Team2 - Oct 13, 2007
|Economic activity of developing country, Pakistan - personal essay
2 - Greetings! I think your essay is well-written, cohesive and informative! I would give it a 9 out of...
Undergraduateammarrauf - Oct 10, 2007 / EF_Team2 - Oct 11, 2007
|'Clubs and school activities' - Why did you choose to apply to UCF?
Undergraduateucf4me - Oct 8, 2007 / EF_Team2 - Oct 9, 2007
|"Children of the trash" - Concise narrative - UF campus community
3 - Thanks again!...
Undergraduatenicamsgb - Oct 6, 2007 / nicamsgb - Oct 8, 2007
|COMPUTERS, the most intriguing and complicated things in the world
2 - Greetings! I think you've done a great job with your essay! I have just a few editing suggestions:...
Undergraduatehabtdemis - Oct 1, 2007 / EF_Team2 - Oct 1, 2007
|FSU App. essay: the best advice given; 'be the head and not the tail'
NEW - The topic is to basically explain the best advice given and why? Please read this and give me any...
UndergraduateJessicaTiffany - Sep 29, 2007 / — -
|FSU ESSAY - "Pick your favourite and meaningful quote"
2 - Greetings! Your essay is excellent, and nearly perfect. I have only a couple of small suggestions: I...
Undergraduatecarsons2k - Sep 24, 2007 / EF_Team2 - Sep 24, 2007
|15 minutes of fame; NYU COMMON APP
2 - Greetings! You've written an excellent essay! I have just a few editing suggestions. It was then I...
Undergraduatevishal720 - Sep 19, 2007 / EF_Team2 - Sep 20, 2007
|ME & My BROTHER / Human behavior psychology -Common App
2 - Greetings! I think you've written a great essay that reveals a lot about what kind of person you...
Undergraduatemodi - Sep 18, 2007 / EF_Team2 - Sep 18, 2007
|Hole - narrative essay(incident that happened and changed my mind)
7 - Greetings! Yes, I think that sounds good. I did like the headline idea, however. Perhaps something like "Pile...
Undergraduatesamuraitom - Sep 16, 2007 / EF_Team2 - Sep 17, 2007
|'Breeze to find a job after graduation' - FSU admission
NEW - Hello the topic for the essay is (what is the best advice you have ever received, and why?) and...
Undergraduatedarca17 - Sep 10, 2007 / — -
|World of writings; NYU - creative work that has influenced me
Undergraduatelunasea - Aug 29, 2007 / EF_Team2 - Sep 5, 2007
|'FFA and FLA Leadership Adventures' - U of Florida admissions
2 - Greetings! I'd be happy to give you some editing suggestions for your excellent essay! :-) I discovered...
Undergraduatelinz24708 - Sep 2, 2007 / EF_Team2 - Sep 3, 2007
|UofI Champaign-Urbana admissions essay
2 - Greetings! I think you have written a couple of great essays! The only suggestion I would make content-wise...
UndergraduateAlexJ444 - Aug 28, 2007 / EF_Team2 - Aug 29, 2007
|Sun-Sentinels journalism programs; UF campus- Significant Event
3 - Greetings! Yes, I think you've definitely improved it! I do have a few editing suggestions: Your first...
Undergraduatekylester61 - Aug 11, 2007 / EF_Team2 - Aug 22, 2007
|BALLET ; What is one thing you do really well?
Undergraduatedreamingdigital - Jul 22, 2007 / dreamingdigital - Jul 23, 2007
|'Genetic answers' - Concise narrative, meaningful event
NEW - I was wondering if you guys would help me edit my essay...Here were the instructions: "In the space...
Undergraduateilive4music89 - Jul 10, 2007 / — -
|'Faith in God and Purpose' - Admit Essay
Undergraduateblackcatdomain - Jul 7, 2007 / EF_Team2 - Jul 8, 2007
|'Hurrying up for a plane' - University of Florida - College
6 - Greetings! Sometimes improving your essay and making things clearer is just a matter of providing a little more...
Undergraduatealvarez16 - Jun 28, 2007 / EF_Team2 - Jun 29, 2007
|'Trying to adapt to this foreign country' - significant learning experience
NEW - My essay question is "Describe a significant learning experience in your life." What was it about the experience, more...
Undergraduatekikay - May 31, 2007 / — -
|My Biographical Essay; I was born in Peru
2 - Greetings! I think you have done an excellent job for a non-native speaker of English! I went through...
Undergraduateeljuleso - May 25, 2007 / EF_Team2 - May 27, 2007
|Turning Dreams into Realities essay - Computer future and exciting new world
Undergraduatehsmith490 - May 17, 2007 / EF_Team2 - May 18, 2007
|Effect of bad friends - causes and effect essay
11 - You're welcome! Once you have a rough draft, I'd be happy to help with editing! Thanks, Sarah,...
Undergraduatemr_student - May 13, 2007 / EF_Team2 - May 15, 2007
|Mural on Broad and Spring Garde - help with my "statement of interest"
2 - Greetings! For someone who has no experience writing a statement of interest, you have done a marvelous job!...
Undergraduatelint99 - May 10, 2007 / EF_Team2 - May 11, 2007
|'my High School Mathematics teacher' Admission essay of mine
5 - Greetings! It can be a challenge to cut out a significant portion of something you have written--after all,...
Undergraduateanhminh - May 7, 2007 / EF_Team2 - May 10, 2007
|CONTRACT; business law assignment
4 - Greetings! Those are good questions. The "no worries" remark does not affect the breach of duty/negligence as far...
Undergraduatelawstudent - May 8, 2007 / EF_Team2 - May 10, 2007
|5 paragraph essay form about my career goals
4 - Greetings! I think it's coming along very well so far! I can give you some editing suggestions. ...
Undergraduatearacid - Apr 28, 2007 / EF_Team2 - Apr 29, 2007
|Experience that has been a strong influence on your goals - Essay no.2
Undergraduatelivia - Apr 24, 2007 / EF_Team2 - Apr 25, 2007
|Stimulates me to question ; "Why ECLA?"
NEW - Hello, I would kindly ask for your help in revising some essays that I've written for applying to a...
Undergraduatelivia - Apr 24, 2007 / — -
|'BETWEEN YOU AND I: MY AUTOBIOGRAPHY' - for honors application
6 - Greetings! I like the way you start off--the image of the 60-year-old man with a blood-red mohawk sticks...
Undergraduatefsugirl89 - Feb 26, 2007 / EF_Team2 - Apr 23, 2007
|economic causes; Essay on the reasons for attending APUS
2 - Greetings! Your writing is very good, and your command of English very impressive! I think you do a...
UndergraduateFredParisFrance - Apr 13, 2007 / EF_Team2 - Apr 13, 2007
|Cause and effect - 'one day can change your whole outlook on life'
UndergraduateDownsdld - Apr 8, 2007 / Downsdld - Apr 11, 2007
|High School: My self-realization: a significant experience and its impact on you
4 - Greetings! You've written a really great essay! There is very little about it that needs work; I'll just...
UndergraduateKevin - Apr 9, 2007 / EF_Team2 - Apr 10, 2007
|Essay topic -Colonization,Conquest, Commerce,Civilization,Christianity
4 - Greetings! If you look back through European history, you see one wave of conquerors coming in, say, to...
UndergraduateNINZ - Mar 17, 2007 / EF_Team2 - Mar 19, 2007
|Undergrad Application - Waterloo, Canada
2 - Greetings! You've written a fine essay! I have just a few small suggestions for you. Your essay...
UndergraduateRitika - Mar 10, 2007 / EF_Team2 - Mar 11, 2007
|Time in Terelj - descriptive essay
4 - Greetings! I think your opening paragraph lacks cohesiveness. It's rather "all over the place." The first sentence sounds...
Undergraduateokuna - Feb 19, 2007 / EF_Team2 - Feb 21, 2007
|I know personally how enriching studying abroad can be.
4 - Thank you so much Sarah. Having a pro review my essay and give me feedback is absolutely priceless. ...
Undergraduatepash_fashion - Feb 17, 2007 / pash_fashion - Feb 18, 2007
|Summer in a Mongolian place
3 - What you need is a motivator to capture the reader attention, sure it is great you went to all...
UndergraduateSergelen - Feb 11, 2007 / aznpoo - Feb 17, 2007
|[working in series, painting] - SAIC statement of purpose
2 - Greetings! I think you've written an excellent essay here! I think you do a fabulous job of describing...
Undergraduatevegetablenazi - Feb 12, 2007 / EF_Team2 - Feb 12, 2007
|Application to The University Of Mary Washington 250-500 words
3 - thanks a ton for the quick feedback Sarah, I really appreciate it, and the changes you suggested are being...
UndergraduateAzap - Jan 29, 2007 / Azap - Jan 30, 2007
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