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|Intellectual vitality Essay for Stanford -- sisters v. pilgrimage (250 words)
5 - - Not only did this experience reveal, within me, resilient curiosity within me but also courage. - Being that...
Undergraduatehgawlik8 - Oct 5, 2015 / justivy03 - Oct 6, 2015
|Growing up in Poland and then after 17 years applying to the US colleges - Tufts Supplement Essay #2
4 - - ...most influential factor onin the person I am today. - ...was at my grandparents'( an apostrophe is not...
Undergraduatekarol16688 - Oct 4, 2015 / justivy03 - Oct 6, 2015
|Villanova Supplement Writing - My Grandmother and Genuineness
5 - Hi @Csar, I hope my suggestions is not too late. Kindly find them below. - ...Sweet and generous...
UndergraduateCsarbeng - Oct 4, 2015 / justivy03 - Oct 6, 2015
|Dropping grades and then recovery - to overcome my procrastination and the lazy lifestyle
4 - Well Michael, initially running through your essay, I kind of grasping for air, as your sentences lacks a few...
Undergraduatetheninjacrab - Oct 4, 2015 / justivy03 - Oct 6, 2015
|Mom motivates to succeed in life
4 - @rmaxena, at first I was not sure what you're aim in writing this quiet short essay and I believe...
Undergraduatermaxena - Oct 4, 2015 / justivy03 - Oct 6, 2015
|Right now, what is uniquely you?--Absence and knowledge--my story
UndergraduateMcClungE - Oct 3, 2015 / justivy03 - Oct 6, 2015
|SOCIAL MEDIA - Blessing & Curse; Undergraduate Essay-Challenging a Belief or Idea
Undergraduatemdr18 - Oct 29, 2013 / justivy03 - Oct 5, 2015
|Key Club - UC Prompt 2 - Talk about your achievement and talent
Undergraduatekhoifish1297 - Oct 4, 2015 / khoifish1297 - Oct 4, 2015
|Learning Systems - Critique my Why Caltech essay? Intellectual curiosity in a scientific exploration
UndergraduatedeezNuts4Prez - Oct 4, 2015 / deezNuts4Prez - Oct 4, 2015
|Unforgettable quotes from the literature - Amherst essay
3 - Well, @schang, I believe you delivered what is asked of the prompt. The points are met to be able...
Undergraduateschang2016 - Oct 1, 2015 / justivy03 - Oct 4, 2015
|Important life lessons from Panera Bread
3 - - ...to very many othera lot of people... - aside fromother than my family and friends, - ...of my...
Undergraduateogessays - Sep 29, 2015 / justivy03 - Oct 4, 2015
|Why U Chicago - polymath education for an aspiring critic
6 - Hi, I would like to further the help you receive from other EF contributors, I hope this helps. ...
Undergraduatewhipsnade97 - Sep 29, 2015 / justivy03 - Oct 4, 2015
|International Relations - statement of purpose (undergraduate program)
3 - Actually, I had a much more intriguing experience as how I got introduced to International Relations. I was doubtful...
UndergraduateJustineMahone12 - Oct 3, 2015 / JustineMahone12 - Oct 3, 2015
|More than what they expected - Describe a circumstance, obstacle or conflict in your life, etc.
2 - Italy, you have a very informative essay. It really depicts your circumstances in life and how you overcame them....
UndergraduateItalyCerda - Oct 3, 2015 / vangiespen - Oct 3, 2015
|'hectic and busy life' - Challenges/Hardships That Affected You (Personal Statement!)
4 - - At the beginning - theof summer before tenth grade, - StartingIt started with a slight - I knew...
Undergraduatehollykey97 - Sep 27, 2015 / justivy03 - Oct 3, 2015
|Essay on my religion - my story.
Undergraduateasadasad - Sep 22, 2015 / justivy03 - Oct 3, 2015
|Knowledge is useless if it is not shared with the world...
4 - - ...something as beautifulacademically important as Physics,.. - ...professor along the way ofwhile finishing... - ...that because of my...
UndergraduateLeobosco - Sep 27, 2015 / justivy03 - Oct 3, 2015
|Will admissions sneer at my essay? You decide! Applying UCF.
5 - Hi there, i'll be working on your revised essay. I hope it helps. -...campus that UCF provides comes,......
Undergraduateabottzz - Sep 25, 2015 / justivy03 - Oct 3, 2015
|Students from countryside - Scholarship essay help check my grammar
4 - Jackie, running through your essay, it does need a lot of grammar fixes, so let me help you out....
Undergraduatejackie148 - Sep 25, 2015 / justivy03 - Oct 3, 2015
|Makeup is my weak spot- Common App Essay
8 - Farukh, let me help you out with this revised essay; - ...I'm usually the most overdone/*in search of...
Undergraduatefafarrukh - Sep 20, 2015 / justivy03 - Oct 3, 2015
|"Funny Girl" - I just am who I am, for better or worse. Emerson College - Life Title Essay
3 - I liked that. In my opinion, It would be better if you added more about your internal feelings....
Undergraduatelaurafegely - Oct 2, 2015 / alimf95 - Oct 3, 2015
|I know it's corny, but be completely honest. If it is trash, then say so or suggest changes.
2 - Ciera, was the question you posted before your statement the prompt you are responding to? If it is, please...
Undergraduatecjones1597 - Oct 2, 2015 / vangiespen - Oct 2, 2015
|Rebel soldier. Close-mindedness - QuestBridge Additional Essay #3
6 - Ayla, I agree that you should keep this particular essay less self-centered because of the way the prompt was...
Undergraduateatang09 - Sep 23, 2015 / vangiespen - Oct 2, 2015
|I am a Mexican, and I will show what kind of people we are, we are excelling
9 - Thank you @justivy, I already fixed some of these changes on my revision posted though. I did correct some...
UndergraduateJoseIRL - Sep 26, 2015 / JoseIRL - Oct 1, 2015
|U Chicago Supplement - I have a mind that does not stick - the importance of 'useless' trivia
5 - @whips, it's absolutely not clear to me, what the purpose of your essay. It's a supplement essay on the...
Undergraduatewhipsnade97 - Sep 30, 2015 / justivy03 - Oct 1, 2015
|5 reasons to be a Hokie in the city of Blacksburg - Virginia Tech admission
UndergraduateAbsera - Sep 27, 2015 / justivy03 - Oct 1, 2015
|Is my admission counselor making my essay worse?- Autobiographical Essay for Columbia GS
4 - @Latina, I believe that your college counselor mean well when she did the remarks on your essay and I...
UndergraduateLatina93 - Sep 30, 2015 / justivy03 - Oct 1, 2015
|College Essay (what do i bring the the campus that will enrich, life eprirences, personality)
Undergraduatebrockky - Sep 8, 2015 / anggicaroot - Sep 30, 2015
|'the rice trees under the fog blanket' - your day on April 29,2015
Undergraduatelananh20299 - Sep 28, 2015 / lananh20299 - Sep 30, 2015
|The Statement explaining why I would want to attend the Oxford Summer School programme in 2016
5 - - "I have always been an optimistic - ...and an ambitious individual, - wanting to seek new opportunities and...
Undergraduatedamitrashaikh18 - Sep 24, 2015 / justivy03 - Sep 29, 2015
|Skipping the school never was in my interest, I'm focused on the success only - UCF essay
UndergraduateAlexjagk - Sep 26, 2015 / justivy03 - Sep 28, 2015
|Life is a process of learning, studying, and changing. Keep a kindness nature when becoming an adult
Undergraduatedarkforest168 - Sep 27, 2015 / darkforest168 - Sep 27, 2015
|Physics is beautiful... (statement of purpose for transferrence to UT Austin)
UndergraduateLeobosco - Sep 27, 2015 / Leobosco - Sep 27, 2015
|"Being a Twin" - talent / background / identity question for college essay
2 - That was most certainly quite an interesting background story. Your twin was obviously very central to your background and...
Undergraduatengifford97 - Sep 26, 2015 / vangiespen - Sep 26, 2015
|Why Swarthmore?----Social Responsibility, Media and Writing
5 - Thanks for vangiespen and lcturn87's invaluable suggestions! With your help, I feel that writing application essays are never boring!...
Undergraduateanfernee - Sep 25, 2015 / anfernee - Sep 26, 2015
|Brandeis being a Jewish affiliated university, I felt that I being a Muslim would make me an outcast
9 - Alhamdulillah *_* wow, you're like a blessing. Thank you so much! Seriously! Now I can finally submit my application....
Undergraduatewillflem - Sep 19, 2015 / willflem - Sep 25, 2015
|What do clowns, airplanes, and insects have in common? -- Questbridge Biographical Essay
Undergraduatemelloeman - Sep 14, 2015 / acedf - Sep 24, 2015
|Im not just a Dreamer......Ewha Womans University: Clothing and Textile department
4 - - ...that still hadn'thasn't spoken her... - Being only an infant... - ...on how on an inflatable boat...
Undergraduatechibi_miri - Sep 22, 2015 / justivy03 - Sep 23, 2015
|Performance Anxiety [Questbridge Additional Essay, Prompt #1]
Undergraduatedjmwilliams - Sep 20, 2015 / justivy03 - Sep 22, 2015
|UChicago supplement- So where is Waldo, really?
4 - - ...smothers his meal inwith ketchup and mustard. - ...the red clothing that every loyal ... - ... notice...
Undergraduatelindsey4114 - Sep 19, 2015 / justivy03 - Sep 22, 2015
|Art is my voice and peace - Common Application Essay Prompt #1
Undergraduateysilmi - Sep 19, 2015 / justivy03 - Sep 22, 2015
|An experience that encompasses the meaning of diversity to you? NURSING PAPER FOR DENVER UNIVERSITY
2 - Jesse, opening your essay with a quotation is an excellent touch. It brings the topic immediately into the spotlight...
Undergraduatejmw1479 - Sep 21, 2015 / vangiespen - Sep 22, 2015
|Step 1: Greet Friends, Step 2:... ignore everyone and glue eyes to phone.
Undergraduateguitardude - Sep 21, 2015 / vangiespen - Sep 21, 2015
|Born by chance - Life's Obstacles Essay
Undergraduatemeganjulia98 - Sep 21, 2015 / vangiespen - Sep 21, 2015
|Why a major in computer science is what wish to pursue - Application Essay
3 - You have to show them that choosing CSE isn't just Career choice but a passion. If you have passion...
Undergraduatemynah - Sep 8, 2015 / preota - Sep 20, 2015
|UW Madison Application. My parents' divorce. Let me know what could use improving or corrections.
Undergraduatelukewarm12 - Sep 18, 2015 / justivy03 - Sep 19, 2015
|Self-introduction essay for scholarship / research and development in Korea
Undergraduateevelynnnnn - Sep 11, 2015 / justivy03 - Sep 18, 2015
|Learning from mistakes and a future success - Applying to B.U and NYU
6 - Thanh, I think that the main problem with the essay you wrote is that you tried to provide as...
Undergraduatethanhle97 - Sep 15, 2015 / vangiespen - Sep 18, 2015
|Special Education, Campus - Essay Review for UCF Admission Essay
Undergraduatemim_zzy - Sep 17, 2015 / justivy03 - Sep 18, 2015
|Cars / transportation - Work Hard-Edit my Paper (Apply Texas)
Undergraduatesoccerdude14 - Sep 15, 2015 / soccerdude14 - Sep 17, 2015
|Playing the ball can be compared to a different aspects of life. Basketball - commonapp prompt #1
3 - - MumMom and Dad use... - ButHowever, life won't always ... -In life, ( don't forget your punctuation...
UndergraduateSKIPPERTECH - Sep 17, 2015 / justivy03 - Sep 17, 2015
|The wind turbine machine and its optimal location; Process Diagram for IELTS Task 1
3 - - Given are the diagrams that... - ...generator, and three blades;( the punctuation marks on this phrases is...
Undergraduatebroerjuang - Sep 16, 2015 / justivy03 - Sep 17, 2015
|Nature (one's genetic inheritance) affects one's character and behavior more than nurture.
2 - - Every person is born with unique qualities.The characteristics they inherit from there parents. (I'm not sure how the...
UndergraduateAnji1998 - Sep 16, 2015 / justivy03 - Sep 17, 2015
|Motivation for becoming an effective teacher in Chile
2 - - ...having a career in economicsdevelopment , - ...will giveprovide - ...me with the experience... - ...professional opportunities;, learning......
Undergraduatecollegebound28 - Sep 15, 2015 / justivy03 - Sep 16, 2015
|I am proud of my husband because he is a good, amenable person, educated and truthful man
3 - - I have got5five ( I'd rather have you write the number five than just writing the number itself)...
Undergraduatenguyenlam101 - Sep 13, 2015 / justivy03 - Sep 16, 2015
|Stanford Short Question (50 word) "What is the most significant challenge that society faces today"
3 - 1. - ...anything by oneselfon your own must require... - ...such as walking or eating necessitaterequires the... ...
Undergraduatejlee246 - Sep 12, 2015 / justivy03 - Sep 16, 2015
|Common Application Essay - We're All Just Human - Thoughts on equality in less than 650 words
3 - @newengland25, I will work on the last 3 paragraphs as the other EF contributors worked on the first ones....
Undergraduatenewengland25 - Sep 10, 2015 / justivy03 - Sep 16, 2015
|Writing became my therapy - Common App essay about challenging an idea or belief.
Undergraduatethuuyen - Sep 12, 2015 / justivy03 - Sep 16, 2015
|Ambition describes me - UCF Undergraduate Essay Revision/Advice
4 - - I'm ambitious and I set high standards for myself. - ..but the really great make you believe that...
Undergraduatenicolleperez - Sep 9, 2015 / justivy03 - Sep 16, 2015
|Mediocre purchasing power didn't prevent best possible education for me. KGSP Personal statement
4 - - I always had the best studyeducation thanks... - WithAs sixteen years old, at the beginning of high...
Undergraduatedessertfoxy - Sep 10, 2015 / justivy03 - Sep 16, 2015
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