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|"Attention to Detail" - the little things make up the picture - UW Madison
2 - Gabriela, you have written an essay response that would have worked if the prompt asked you to "Write an...
Undergraduategaby720946 - Dec 20, 2014 / vangiespen - Dec 20, 2014
|"For every force there is a reaction force that is equal in size but opposite in direction"
2 - Udensi, you have not answered the prompt in the correct manner. You are supposed to specifically mention the subjects...
UndergraduateUdensi - Dec 20, 2014 / vangiespen - Dec 20, 2014
|"Allowing you to travel on your own is the last sliver of the cake of childhood"; Failed trip to NYC
3 - No. Absolutely not. Please do not use this essay as your coming of age story. A coming of age...
Undergraduatesage28 - Dec 16, 2014 / vangiespen - Dec 19, 2014
|Humility leads people to fulfillment in the most authentic way possible - Transition into Adulthood
7 - Philipe, I happen to know someone who had a Bar mitzvah and I believe that aside from this actual...
UndergraduateCharphil - Dec 16, 2014 / vangiespen - Dec 19, 2014
|The sincerest of gestures can bring about the simplest of pleasures: a smile
Undergraduateasdfghjklyeah - Dec 15, 2014 / vangiespen - Dec 19, 2014
|Whenever someone asks me why I want to pursue medicine, I always reply that it's part of who I am
5 - This is a definite improvement Danah. You have managed to show us the contrasting worlds that you come from...
UndergraduateDanah96 - Dec 16, 2014 / vangiespen - Dec 19, 2014
|During my junior year in high school, I volunteered at an orphanage to teach English to the children
3 - Adonay, it is unfortunate that the final act that you chose to take in this particularly compelling and quite...
Undergraduateatothez1000 - Dec 17, 2014 / vangiespen - Dec 19, 2014
|IELTS writing task 1 - Main energy sources for Burnland, 2006
Undergraduatemkthanh - Dec 13, 2014 / ruwchii - Dec 19, 2014
|An idea that has been important to my intellectual development - multidisciplinary nature of subject
6 - This is certainly a tremendously well developed answer when your word count is taken into consideration. Please, feel free...
Undergraduatevoocatcher - Dec 15, 2014 / vangiespen - Dec 19, 2014
|Vietnam seemed to be an atypical summer vacation destination - Common App Essay
10 - No problem! I actually think I may just scrap this essay all together. would you mind looking at my...
Undergraduatesage28 - Dec 9, 2014 / sage28 - Dec 19, 2014
|10 years reunion essay - Finding passion and happiness in a different country
1 - Prompt. Imagine you have graduated from Temple University. You are preparing to attend your 10-year reunion, and the alumni...
Undergraduatewbasbc - Dec 18, 2014 / — -
|From the Window Seat; the train was a capsule that served an emotional and physical role in my life
Undergraduatemelissae - Dec 18, 2014 / melissae - Dec 18, 2014
|When I was a young boy, my grandfather used to say.....MIT supplement essay
UndergraduateMagmar00000 - Dec 17, 2014 / Magmar00000 - Dec 18, 2014
|What are you supposed to focus on in "10 years after graduation" essays?
2 - Hello, You should just talk about the various aspects of your life that you consider successful and how...
Undergraduatewbasbc - Dec 18, 2014 / admission2012 - Dec 18, 2014
|"The Wakeup Call"; I grew up in a house that values education and hard work. Common App essay
Undergraduateatothez1000 - Dec 14, 2014 / atothez1000 - Dec 17, 2014
|One glance out of the window, I saw the cornfields and palm trees speeding by - Women rights issue
2 - A very intriguing and strong story I feel that the link between your background and aspirations is very clear...
UndergraduateGhfdw17 - Dec 16, 2014 / sampunk9494 - Dec 17, 2014
|Give me a lever long enough, and a fulcrum on which to place it, and I shall move the world; Why NWU
3 - Thanks a lot for your suggestion! I am thinking of mainly talking about the idea of whole-brain engineer. Cuz...
Undergraduateilovesam - Dec 16, 2014 / ilovesam - Dec 17, 2014
|One thing I can offer NYU is motivation for future students - NYU application essay
Undergraduateandrianna - Dec 16, 2014 / Anfalia - Dec 16, 2014
|'Struggling is what paves the golden path to success'; bring beliefs in the Sikh religion; NYU essay
2 - I really liked the first sentencie, but you only reconnected to it in the last paragraph when you simply...
Undergraduatetrod58 - Dec 16, 2014 / Charphil - Dec 16, 2014
|I have always been eager to go out and meet the world - To inspire and be inspired - FIT essay
33 - It is pretty much ready at this point. In my opinion, you can already submit this essay for consideration....
Undergraduateivnk - Dec 4, 2014 / vangiespen - Dec 16, 2014
|"Peter Pan" - Piece of literature that has inspired you - UVA Supplemental Essay
4 - Thank you both for your lovely suggestions! I incorporated them both and now here is the new draft ...
Undergraduatesage28 - Dec 15, 2014 / sage28 - Dec 16, 2014
|The Power of Powerlessness application essay
4 - Alina, I am not a medical professional so I cannot advice you on those medical terms. If you used...
UndergraduateAlinaSkripets - Dec 15, 2014 / vangiespen - Dec 16, 2014
|Tell us about something you do for the pleasure of it - MIT ESSAY; BUSY LIFE AND ACTIVITY
7 - The essay you edited it good for the limited word count, but I have rearranged a few sentences to...
Undergraduatejagdeep5171 - Dec 14, 2014 / sage28 - Dec 16, 2014
|Carleton is powered my wind turbines. What empowers you? supplement essay
Undergraduategia - Dec 15, 2014 / gia - Dec 16, 2014
|I was waiting to fall in love, and my visit to Duke flipped me head-over-heels; supplement essay
5 - I think you need to be more specific. If you can replace the word duke with another colleges name,that...
Undergraduatetaura - Dec 15, 2014 / Ghfdw17 - Dec 16, 2014
|Collaborative Residential Community - how it inspires and draws me to Bates
5 - Thank you for helping me proofread! I appreciate your feedback and it really has been valuable to me!...
Undergraduatesampunk9494 - Dec 14, 2014 / sampunk9494 - Dec 15, 2014
|Why Swarthmore - commitment for diversity of opinions
Undergraduatesampunk9494 - Dec 15, 2014 / sampunk9494 - Dec 15, 2014
|Briefly describe a non-academic pursuit that best illustrates who you are, and why it is important
6 - Vanika. you actually have an interesting non-academic pursuit. The problem, is that most of the essay dealt with the...
UndergraduateVee15 - Dec 14, 2014 / vangiespen - Dec 15, 2014
|Yale - reflect on something you would like us to know about you
4 - Hi, your grammar is fine throughout the essay. When you explained the deliberate steps you've taken after you...
Undergraduatefrodosb - Dec 14, 2014 / sampunk9494 - Dec 15, 2014
|I was never interested in college because I had no aim in life. Common App Transfer Essay
5 - Another way of writing this essay, in order to place a positive spin on your community college experience would...
UndergraduatePanda29 - Dec 13, 2014 / vangiespen - Dec 14, 2014
|"Duality". The 'Why Columbia?' Supplement Essay Tips?
13 - Wow, thank you so much. Really, I couldn't have done it without your guidance. Don't apologize for coming...
UndergraduateFullofSeoul - Dec 1, 2014 / FullofSeoul - Dec 14, 2014
|Education has always been a bit of a delicate matter in the Aziz household; Common App prompt 1.
2 - Proper feedback and scoring may only be provided one you supply the essay prompt. Right now we can't offer...
Undergraduateezraclay - Dec 14, 2014 / vangiespen - Dec 14, 2014
|MIT Cultural Background Essay || INDIA || SIKH
5 - As an Indian, I am always proud of its Rich and Diversified Culture.Ours Our culture is an amalgamation of...
Undergraduatejagdeep5171 - Dec 11, 2014 / Panda29 - Dec 14, 2014
|I learned the sport all by myself - Skating - Extracurricular Activities essay
Undergraduategia - Dec 6, 2014 / gia - Dec 13, 2014
|I wondered how humans could prove their existence after reading the "brain-in-a-vat" - 'Why' Essay
4 - Coco, you have a very well developed essay that addressed the prompt in a highly detailed and articulate manner....
Undergraduatezkc19 - Dec 6, 2014 / vangiespen - Dec 13, 2014
|In pain and tired, but happy - the gym has become one of the most meaningful places for me
2 - There are quite a number of grammatical errors in the essay that I am currently refraining from correcting as...
UndergraduatePereirar23 - Dec 12, 2014 / vangiespen - Dec 13, 2014
|I strive to balance my identity between iPads and Cow Pies
4 - tehreem, your article is good written and draws a comparision between city and village life . but the way...
Undergraduatetehreem - Dec 12, 2014 / anees - Dec 13, 2014
|My educational goal is PhD of engineer - Waterloo's Computer Engineer Admission Information Form
6 - Pereira is right. You need to dig deeper and try to reflect the development of your interest in computer...
UndergraduateMasonvo - Dec 9, 2014 / vangiespen - Dec 13, 2014
|Science, Mathematics is the backbone of any country, it can't be exchanged by History and Literature
Undergraduategautam007 - Dec 12, 2014 / gautam007 - Dec 12, 2014
|Apart from studies, University of Pennsylvania has abundance of sources and activities to explore
19 - thank you so so much for all the help..I'm confident about this version and will submit it. Thanks again...
Undergraduategia - Dec 4, 2014 / gia - Dec 12, 2014
|Participation in the Smart Scholars program - challenge that brought out the best and worst from me
2 - Try to convey to the reader that you yourself implemented this change instead of attributing it all to the...
Undergraduateduedateguy - Dec 12, 2014 / tehreem - Dec 12, 2014
|Thermal Flying - When I fly I have feeling that that is the place I am meant to be
2 - Hardinel, this is one of the best essays pertaining to this prompt that I have read. It is excellent...
UndergraduateScalllion - Dec 12, 2014 / vangiespen - Dec 12, 2014
|It does not matter what people define me as anymore. I know who I am now, I will always be myself.
2 - Chae, I suggest a revision of your essay based on the current format. You actually have an interesting hook...
Undergraduatekiki0823 - Dec 12, 2014 / vangiespen - Dec 12, 2014
|When I walk off the stage, the character I performed never leaves me. Common App essay
UndergraduateRickyp1 - Dec 11, 2014 / vangiespen - Dec 11, 2014
|My moment of becoming mature came far before the day when I became 18 year-old: When I lost my giant
2 - This will work Katetan. The strength of this essay lies in your involvement with your family and the fact...
Undergraduatekatetan - Dec 11, 2014 / vangiespen - Dec 11, 2014
|"A Lesson from a prison visit"
2 - Harley, is this a common essay prompt response? What is the essay question you are trying to address in...
UndergraduateHarlee - Dec 11, 2014 / vangiespen - Dec 11, 2014
|My fourth grade teacher always struck me as a perfect role model; influencing person
Undergraduatenovember31 - Dec 10, 2014 / november31 - Dec 11, 2014
|I was a really loquacious kid. Common application essay 1st topic
2 - I think your essay is more like a "WHY"essay. You talk about why you are interested in physics and...
Undergraduatetugstugs - Dec 11, 2014 / katetan - Dec 11, 2014
|In the Tomb-Sweeping Day several years ago, I went back to Kaiping; common application
Undergraduatekatetan - Dec 9, 2014 / katetan - Dec 11, 2014
|They say that you are who you surround yourself with. At Notre Dame, my peers would be excellent.
2 - Kelly, this is already a very good statement response in a common sense of responding to it. I had...
Undergraduatekellymacsnu - Dec 9, 2014 / vangiespen - Dec 10, 2014
|Until recently I have never discussed my reasons or motivations for my attendance at my local gym
2 - This is more than just being about contentment for you and truly, you have flown off tangent. This story...
UndergraduatePereirar23 - Dec 10, 2014 / vangiespen - Dec 10, 2014
|A one-way Road; I try to recall every second of my past journey and its eccentricities
2 - De Angelis, you really have a serious problem in understanding your common essay prompts. You are always deviating from...
Undergraduateorian2014 - Dec 10, 2014 / vangiespen - Dec 10, 2014
|My hand was tremendously shaking; my mind was filled with excessive thoughts - MIT supplement essay
2 - Okay, I strongly advice that you change the topic of your essay. Never ever use an essay story that...
Undergraduatetugstugs - Dec 10, 2014 / vangiespen - Dec 10, 2014
|Puberty is one of the experiences that helped me as a person
2 - Hi Charlie, is this supposed to be a common app essay or something? You did not really offer us...
Undergraduatecharlies - Dec 9, 2014 / vangiespen - Dec 10, 2014
|I want to be a person without limits. I want to be able to say "Oh yeah! I know how to do that!"
2 - Really good! I especially like the concluding sentence. A couple things though - "But, along with this I...
Undergraduatenick17 - Dec 9, 2014 / Jesussaves - Dec 10, 2014
|Discovery of my potential. Luckily my practice hits perfection, after the third term I was promoted.
12 - Vangiespen, thanks very much. The modification really saved me today, I appreciate your helping hands. May God bless you,...
UndergraduateModewap - Dec 1, 2014 / Modewap - Dec 9, 2014
|The life of an immigrant that came to the US, but was terrified
9 - Mahmoud, the presence of your mother has nothing to do with the adjustments that you had to make when...
UndergraduateMoodykhedr - Dec 1, 2014 / vangiespen - Dec 9, 2014
|My effectiveness of time management
UndergraduateModewap - Dec 6, 2014 / Modewap - Dec 8, 2014
|'disconnected world dominated by technology' - freshman application personal statements 1 of 2
UndergraduateSethCK4 - Dec 8, 2014 / SethCK4 - Dec 8, 2014
|JMU - personal statement to highlight special interests, talents, goals or unique experiences
2 - Excellently written Nassima. A word of caution though, you should not start any sentence with "And", that is a...
Undergraduatenassimnina - Dec 8, 2014 / vangiespen - Dec 8, 2014
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