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|The Fashion of Business - 'some atypical decisions could spark a change for the better'
3 - Thanks so much for the advice! The actual essay is going to be explaining how my journey in fashion...
UndergraduateRP27 - Jan 1, 2015 / RP27 - Jan 1, 2015
|"I don't feel you're well suited for the role of the King"; essay about a time I experienced failure
3 - I like this, but you need to focus more on your transformation rather than setting the scene on your...
Undergraduatebathunter3 - Jan 1, 2015 / nkp28 - Jan 1, 2015
|'resource limitation has always been a problem for me' - New York City - Why Columbia
8 - New York City. I had to self-train my debate team by finding private sponsors to conduct activities because...
Undergraduatemelramadhani - Dec 27, 2014 / Dslash - Jan 1, 2015
|Princeton Supplement: Liberation from the Social Machine
Undergraduatebasicb - Jan 1, 2015 / grcpark7 - Jan 1, 2015
|'Just as an artist' - my vision is to bring a new style of business to NYU and then the world
UndergraduatePinoyPride97 - Jan 1, 2015 / PinoyPride97 - Jan 1, 2015
|A Film - How I lead a film project and what I have learnt
UndergraduateName - Jan 1, 2015 / ben_may440 - Jan 1, 2015
|Few years passed with no significant improvement in the language of Mongolian.
2 - This sentence is repetitive. You say you spent days and night reading, and then add 'without end' I...
Undergraduatemaximu5 - Jan 1, 2015 / Name - Jan 1, 2015
|Acronym for me - R.E.D has been a wild roller coaster of indescribable experiences.
Undergraduateben_may440 - Dec 31, 2014 / leiya0920 - Jan 1, 2015
|I was different because I had a sister - Identity essay.
UndergraduateBoa503 - Dec 30, 2014 / leiya0920 - Jan 1, 2015
|Books for pleasure / Eragon's impact - CMU
UndergraduateGuessit - Dec 31, 2014 / Guessit - Jan 1, 2015
|SmartCase of any color or any print, the back made out of durable gorilla glass-like material
3 - thank you! I was considering doing something like that for the second essay, but I wasn't sure where to...
Undergraduatetech_girl - Jan 1, 2015 / tech_girl - Jan 1, 2015
|Why research seemingly obscure things? For science! -- Engineering at Yale
10 - Thanks for your feedback! I've updated my essay accordingly. PROMPT: Tell us about an engineering idea you have,...
Undergraduateryao15 - Dec 30, 2014 / ryao15 - Dec 31, 2014
|When you meet someone for the first time, what you want them to know about you? Dartmouth Supplement
6 - Actually now that i read it again i can see the three sections. But yes make it more clearer,...
Undergraduateedajtm - Dec 31, 2014 / ciennalongwood - Dec 31, 2014
|"The study of mathematics, like the Nile, begins in minuteness but ends in magnificence"
3 - Great and clear writing! In the second paragraph, I think you could change all the "I would.." into...
UndergraduateBoa503 - Dec 31, 2014 / edajtm - Dec 31, 2014
|Heavy use of photoshopped images can cause serious emotional, mental and physical health issues
6 - Thanks! That's a relief. And in regards to the "99%", I read that stat online but I couldn't find...
Undergraduatecvega - Dec 31, 2014 / cvega - Dec 31, 2014
|A CREATIVE RESPONSE TO POMONA SUPP. - A MOCK SYLLABUS
Undergraduatekeavdarapper - Dec 31, 2014 / HopefulHoya2015 - Dec 31, 2014
|My inspiration board - "English at Vassar" was displayed under a picture of Anne Hathaway
2 - I like your essay! It's just unclear what your realization concerning Meryl Streep is. Did she also go to...
Undergraduatemelissae - Dec 31, 2014 / clamalva33 - Dec 31, 2014
|I had started taking Acting for Film class at the Walnut street theatre - Vassar application
Undergraduatemelissae - Dec 31, 2014 / keavdarapper - Dec 31, 2014
|I've always found the term Alien offensive not because it's malicious
5 - Thanks it did have a big impact on me. I attempted to make my Brown supplement different, but could...
Undergraduateben_may440 - Dec 31, 2014 / ben_may440 - Dec 31, 2014
|Eradicating Misogyny One School at a Time
3 - wowo this is a really good essay! i love how you connected everything in a fluid manner. You kept...
Undergraduateclamalva33 - Dec 31, 2014 / ciennalongwood - Dec 31, 2014
|When my father was arrested by immigration I saw an opportunity to help him by learning about law
3 - This essay is really good! I just noticed grammatical error: "arrested by immigration" does not completely make sense. Maybe...
Undergraduateben_may440 - Dec 31, 2014 / clamalva33 - Dec 31, 2014
|Reign of Greed, The Passion of Christ, Manila bulletin, society chalange, events, historical moments
3 - Just double check that the school you're applying to doesn't require that your answers be presented in paragraph form,...
Undergraduatertan05 - Dec 30, 2014 / nkp28 - Dec 31, 2014
|The Judge Behind the Black Curtain; Extracurricular Essay for Vandy
2 - Your description is very vivid and well-executed. The only thing I can think of (and only if it actually...
Undergraduateccbrownlee - Dec 31, 2014 / clamalva33 - Dec 31, 2014
|Adding Some Southern Flavor to NYU; I realize just how much I yearn to attend NYU.
Undergraduateccbrownlee - Dec 31, 2014 / samkazmi - Dec 31, 2014
|Like a good book, New York University keeps getting better every time I read (well, research) it.
3 - I switched the homework section last minute, so I'll change it back. This is what I previously had:...
Undergraduateyoshimax - Dec 31, 2014 / yoshimax - Dec 31, 2014
|When writing this supplement for NYU, I shouldn't regurgitate everything provided in the pamphlets.
3 - thanks!...
Undergraduatenyusupp97 - Dec 31, 2014 / nyusupp97 - Dec 31, 2014
|"I Dreamed a Dream" scene - inspiration board Vassar
2 - Vassar is definitely an excellent school. I feel like you need to express more enthusiasm in attending this school...
Undergraduatemelissae - Dec 31, 2014 / cvega - Dec 31, 2014
|Stepping on campus for the first time I am captivated, certain that Northwestern is school for me
2 - This is a really well written essay the only thing that sounds a little awkward is and can not...
Undergraduatectam15555 - Dec 31, 2014 / melissae - Dec 31, 2014
|'elastic material's ability to absorb the energy'; Spring = Me?
2 - While the physics information enhances your essay, I think it would be better if you included more personal information...
Undergraduatenada1998 - Dec 31, 2014 / yoshimax - Dec 31, 2014
|History is alive - Areas of Study Brown essay
2 - History is alive. To some history is just a set of mundane facts to be learned, memorized, and promptly...
UndergraduateHopefulHoya2015 - Dec 31, 2014 / ctam15555 - Dec 31, 2014
|My BU Essay Question
2 - As a curious, determined Brazilian Jew, I feel the urge to "become more." Seeing the influence that people's backgrounds...
UndergraduatePhilChar - Dec 31, 2014 / ctam15555 - Dec 31, 2014
|Condoms in Uganda - note to the Most Reverend Archbishop of Uganda
2 - I definitely like that you took on a high-risk topic. High-risk equals high reward if carried out properly. I...
Undergraduatevoraprachw - Dec 31, 2014 / ccbrownlee - Dec 31, 2014
|Some thoughts on stereotypes - Amherst College Supplement feeback
Undergraduategsikka - Dec 31, 2014 / gsikka - Dec 31, 2014
|Muddy Water - getting there is part of the fun - Commonapp most content essay
6 - You mention both joy and sore you've experienced on the Muddy water, finally all the same spirit applies to...
Undergraduatejricha - Dec 27, 2014 / Jadewan - Dec 31, 2014
|For a thousand pages or so, Cervantes held me captive: book prompt
2 - You're answer is nicely constructed, but i felt like you talked more about what the book is about than...
Undergraduategrcpark7 - Dec 31, 2014 / LunarEclipse - Dec 31, 2014
|I am an anarchist. No-a rebel. Chemical Engineering... at YALE?
10 - Haha hmm, I think someone's hinting at something.. :] but of course! I'd be glad to read your Cornell...
Undergraduateryao15 - Dec 30, 2014 / grcpark7 - Dec 31, 2014
|It is said that when he was born, he watched the world burn. Epic Short Story- Notre Dame
7 - Grace, this was a great story. Very entertaining to read. I'd agree with guessit about that minor detail but...
Undergraduategrcpark7 - Dec 31, 2014 / LunarEclipse - Dec 31, 2014
|As a girl who has never lived anywhere but.....song of Columbia University
3 - Thank you! I agree! I also added this next section: Columbia students thrive on involvement. There are tons...
Undergraduatestephiedreams - Dec 31, 2014 / stephiedreams - Dec 31, 2014
|Poop: It's only four letters, yet when combined together, provoke disgusted faces and nose-wrinkling
Undergraduategrcpark7 - Dec 30, 2014 / ryao15 - Dec 31, 2014
|"How", is engineering's key word, "Why" is the medicine's - find answers for both of these questions
2 - Your answer is a little off the track. You use the entire 100 words to describe "what" you want...
Undergraduatenada1998 - Dec 31, 2014 / pbjc7991 - Dec 31, 2014
|being flat-footed, easily distracted, community... SUPER SHORT short responses to Yale supplement
Undergraduateryao15 - Dec 31, 2014 / ryao15 - Dec 31, 2014
|Rigorous Reasoning VS Insight/ Rats, Generators and Epiphanies/ Amherst
NEW - "Rigorous reasoning is crucial in mathematics, and insight plays an important secondary role these days. In the natural sciences,...
Undergraduateleiya0920 - Dec 31, 2014 / — -
|Unbalanced - I always take a closer consideration to things now. Common app prompt 1
Undergraduatejuicy - Nov 22, 2014 / juicy - Dec 31, 2014
|USC1: Cross Country was painful.
4 - This is really, really good. Few grammatical mistakes: "I remind myself of all my running; that fear cannot...
UndergraduateEmelyMorales - Dec 30, 2014 / grcpark7 - Dec 31, 2014
|Sport field, hall, swimming pool - most schools nowadays already have their own sport facilities
UndergraduateShahrul - Dec 31, 2014 / noemiq - Dec 31, 2014
|Difficulty need not foreshadow despair or defeat. Rather achievement can be all the more satisfying.
Undergraduateleiya0920 - Dec 3, 2014 / leiya0920 - Dec 31, 2014
|I've never actually stepped onto the Notre Dame campus and experienced the aura personally
13 - LOL you understand me exactly. Yep, it's going to be hard...but some words have just got to go. ...
Undergraduategrcpark7 - Dec 31, 2014 / grcpark7 - Dec 31, 2014
|soccer = (me + ball+ friendship) - stress - comfort zone
Undergraduatenoemiq - Dec 30, 2014 / noemiq - Dec 31, 2014
|If you were to visit my Facebook page, you would find an odd number of photos, posted by others
2 - I LOVE the tone of your essay! It is funny and it attracts the reader. Your first sentence is...
Undergraduatesodugbesan - Dec 30, 2014 / noemiq - Dec 31, 2014
|Severus Snape! I was a ruthless disciplinarian who hid his soft side from everybody
2 - Interesting essay, haha. I think you have something going with this essay but I have a few suggestions. ...
Undergraduatepbjc7991 - Dec 31, 2014 / EmelyMorales - Dec 31, 2014
|Open the gate of my paternal grandmother's rather uncommon alpine-style cottage
3 - Thanks for the feedback! Is there any grammatical mistake? I have proofread the essay various times, but it's better...
UndergraduatePablodelaTorre - Dec 30, 2014 / PablodelaTorre - Dec 31, 2014
|The Beatles song "Money Can't Buy Me Love" inundated my ears upon my birth.
2 - I was brought into this world with the sound of music, since one of the nurses forgot to turn...
Undergraduatenada1998 - Dec 31, 2014 / pbjc7991 - Dec 31, 2014
|How can my problem solving nature contribute to Rice? Rice University Personal Perspective Prompt
UndergraduateTheKid9999 - Dec 31, 2014 / TheKid9999 - Dec 31, 2014
|It was a rainy day and I was coming back home after an exhausting day - writing supplement
UndergraduateTheBestK - Dec 26, 2014 / TheBestK - Dec 31, 2014
|We've all been there. We've all been trapped in the endless chain of Wikipedia articles
3 - "Wikipedia is neither a place nor an environment and is therefore not the correct response to this prompt. The...
Undergraduateaquaelmo - Dec 29, 2014 / jonathachou711 - Dec 31, 2014
|Duke strives for big- Why Duke
3 - Even then, you have listed some of the more generic things Duke has to offer. Think of the 30,000...
Undergraduatesurfbort - Dec 30, 2014 / jonathachou711 - Dec 31, 2014
|Spongebob band-aids - the one memorable constant of my childhood. Psychology and Biology / Why CMU?
UndergraduateKrithikaK - Dec 31, 2014 / KrithikaK - Dec 31, 2014
|I am proudest of the service I contributed through my school's Computer Club
2 - I really like your essays! I think the first sentence of your first essay "I am proudest of the...
UndergraduateSineFine - Dec 31, 2014 / KrithikaK - Dec 31, 2014
|How will opportunities at Purdue support your interests, both in and out of the classroom?
2 - Your response is somewhat generic. You could literally take out every time you mention Purdue and type in the...
Undergraduatedigvijay - Dec 30, 2014 / SineFine - Dec 31, 2014
|I stand in firm affirmation of CMU - Prompt Why CMU
Undergraduategrcpark7 - Dec 29, 2014 / grcpark7 - Dec 30, 2014
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