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|Rigorous Reasoning VS Insight/ Rats, Generators and Epiphanies/ Amherst
NEW - "Rigorous reasoning is crucial in mathematics, and insight plays an important secondary role these days. In the natural sciences,...
Undergraduateleiya0920 - Dec 31, 2014 / — -
|Unbalanced - I always take a closer consideration to things now. Common app prompt 1
Undergraduatejuicy - Nov 22, 2014 / juicy - Dec 31, 2014
|USC1: Cross Country was painful.
4 - This is really, really good. Few grammatical mistakes: "I remind myself of all my running; that fear cannot...
UndergraduateEmelyMorales - Dec 30, 2014 / grcpark7 - Dec 31, 2014
|Sport field, hall, swimming pool - most schools nowadays already have their own sport facilities
UndergraduateShahrul - Dec 31, 2014 / noemiq - Dec 31, 2014
|Difficulty need not foreshadow despair or defeat. Rather achievement can be all the more satisfying.
Undergraduateleiya0920 - Dec 3, 2014 / leiya0920 - Dec 31, 2014
|I've never actually stepped onto the Notre Dame campus and experienced the aura personally
13 - LOL you understand me exactly. Yep, it's going to be hard...but some words have just got to go. ...
Undergraduategrcpark7 - Dec 31, 2014 / grcpark7 - Dec 31, 2014
|soccer = (me + ball+ friendship) - stress - comfort zone
Undergraduatenoemiq - Dec 30, 2014 / noemiq - Dec 31, 2014
|If you were to visit my Facebook page, you would find an odd number of photos, posted by others
2 - I LOVE the tone of your essay! It is funny and it attracts the reader. Your first sentence is...
Undergraduatesodugbesan - Dec 30, 2014 / noemiq - Dec 31, 2014
|Severus Snape! I was a ruthless disciplinarian who hid his soft side from everybody
2 - Interesting essay, haha. I think you have something going with this essay but I have a few suggestions. ...
Undergraduatepbjc7991 - Dec 31, 2014 / EmelyMorales - Dec 31, 2014
|Open the gate of my paternal grandmother's rather uncommon alpine-style cottage
3 - Thanks for the feedback! Is there any grammatical mistake? I have proofread the essay various times, but it's better...
UndergraduatePablodelaTorre - Dec 30, 2014 / PablodelaTorre - Dec 31, 2014
|The Beatles song "Money Can't Buy Me Love" inundated my ears upon my birth.
2 - I was brought into this world with the sound of music, since one of the nurses forgot to turn...
Undergraduatenada1998 - Dec 31, 2014 / pbjc7991 - Dec 31, 2014
|How can my problem solving nature contribute to Rice? Rice University Personal Perspective Prompt
UndergraduateTheKid9999 - Dec 31, 2014 / TheKid9999 - Dec 31, 2014
|It was a rainy day and I was coming back home after an exhausting day - writing supplement
UndergraduateTheBestK - Dec 26, 2014 / TheBestK - Dec 31, 2014
|We've all been there. We've all been trapped in the endless chain of Wikipedia articles
3 - "Wikipedia is neither a place nor an environment and is therefore not the correct response to this prompt. The...
Undergraduateaquaelmo - Dec 29, 2014 / jonathachou711 - Dec 31, 2014
|Duke strives for big- Why Duke
3 - Even then, you have listed some of the more generic things Duke has to offer. Think of the 30,000...
Undergraduatesurfbort - Dec 30, 2014 / jonathachou711 - Dec 31, 2014
|Spongebob band-aids - the one memorable constant of my childhood. Psychology and Biology / Why CMU?
UndergraduateKrithikaK - Dec 31, 2014 / KrithikaK - Dec 31, 2014
|I am proudest of the service I contributed through my school's Computer Club
2 - I really like your essays! I think the first sentence of your first essay "I am proudest of the...
UndergraduateSineFine - Dec 31, 2014 / KrithikaK - Dec 31, 2014
|How will opportunities at Purdue support your interests, both in and out of the classroom?
2 - Your response is somewhat generic. You could literally take out every time you mention Purdue and type in the...
Undergraduatedigvijay - Dec 30, 2014 / SineFine - Dec 31, 2014
|I stand in firm affirmation of CMU - Prompt Why CMU
Undergraduategrcpark7 - Dec 29, 2014 / grcpark7 - Dec 30, 2014
|FUTURE CEO (U-M supplement)
2 - I think your essay is pretty good. Some grammar issues, like "However, the title's power and ability to make...
Undergraduatepatelv97 - Dec 30, 2014 / Boa503 - Dec 30, 2014
|Anticipated major: Applied Economics and Management (entrepreneurship concentration) - LEGOS essay
7 - You should take out the parts about the school of business in your last paragraph (if you want to...
UndergraduateDslash - Dec 29, 2014 / grcpark7 - Dec 30, 2014
|Lost and Found. For the longest time, I've attempted to discover who I am.
Undergraduatetakinwe124 - Dec 30, 2014 / takinwe124 - Dec 30, 2014
|Don't call me what I am not (Common App)
2 - very well written and interesting. Maybe in the conclusion talk about how the categorization just made you work harder....
Undergraduatenoemiq - Dec 30, 2014 / jricha - Dec 30, 2014
|Untranslatable Word - In French, there is no difference between "conscience" and "consciousness"
Undergraduatemariyaz31 - Dec 30, 2014 / jricha - Dec 30, 2014
|Brown Supp: I am a big fan of SimCity, a game in which you can build a city with limited budget.
UndergraduateDinoRules - Dec 30, 2014 / noemiq - Dec 30, 2014
|I am a curious, determined Brazilian Jew and I still feel the urge to "be more".
UndergraduateCharphil - Dec 30, 2014 / Charphil - Dec 30, 2014
|I am an American Palestinian but - I can not identify myself with either or the other.
2 - I am an American Palestinian; most people disagree when I say this stating that my nationality is American then...
Undergraduatenada1998 - Dec 30, 2014 / leiya0920 - Dec 30, 2014
|Enriching, quality learning environment will help me to best achieve my future career goals
2 - For the first paragraph, I can literally switch your school name with any other school. And it would work....
Undergraduateadumbbird13 - Dec 30, 2014 / leiya0920 - Dec 30, 2014
|Crtl. Del? My finger came to a halt at the delete button. What if colleges read this and dislike me?
2 - I really think your essay is great!! I won't comment on grammar because I am a prospective international student...
Undergraduatekrcheng - Dec 30, 2014 / Charphil - Dec 30, 2014
|My work experience - is it too cheesy to write about my lame job at McDonalds?
4 - There are no lame topics, but lame writings. :) And I'm really drawn into your first paragraph, and I...
Undergraduatedaniellecurtis5 - Dec 30, 2014 / DinoRules - Dec 30, 2014
|I was taught to work. I strove to be the best in whatever I did and I'd kill myself to end up on top
Undergraduatekylerobertson - Dec 30, 2014 / krcheng - Dec 30, 2014
|'strong engineering department, research facilities, and small size' - an ideal university
6 - Here is a final version that I will be submitting tomorrow. THanks for all of your help! I feel...
Undergraduateryao15 - Dec 30, 2014 / ryao15 - Dec 30, 2014
|It was during my family's visit to India to aid my grandmother through her cancer treatments
Undergraduatecsc789 - Dec 29, 2014 / nada1998 - Dec 30, 2014
|Since I could hold a pencil, I have belong to the artist's community. Brown Short Essay Supplement
3 - For the "where have you lived" part, my personal suggestion is that you can try to relate the physical...
Undergraduatecwashu - Dec 27, 2014 / DinoRules - Dec 30, 2014
|New York University is a mural painted by generations of students
5 - Also agree. However, you do discuss what you can offer NYU, so you're good on that part. I think...
Undergraduatenada1998 - Dec 30, 2014 / adventoor - Dec 30, 2014
|Boston College: Finding Magis, the traits that are important
2 - I think your essay does answer the prompt because the question asks how do you find magis in your...
Undergraduatectam15555 - Dec 30, 2014 / Baloanie - Dec 30, 2014
|How One of My Greatest Prides Was Made Possible - Haverford Honor Code Essay
UndergraduateAmethyst10022 - Dec 30, 2014 / rtan05 - Dec 30, 2014
|The pocket of Little Armenia seems like a place of endless possibilities, but it is still a pocket.
4 - your hook is a little bit confusing with all that about pockets "I was never part of the horrors...
UndergraduateEmelyMorales - Dec 27, 2014 / ctam15555 - Dec 30, 2014
|I aspire to bring a sense of design and structure to as many projects worldwide as possible.
2 - And through NYU, and its many global campuses, it is my wish to utilize its study abroad programs....
Undergraduatethemojo - Dec 29, 2014 / daniellecurtis5 - Dec 30, 2014
|A place of doom, an institution of desolation, a jail of misery - going to hospital
2 - Nice work! I think that everything flows along smoothly, except the first sentence. I find this to be...
Undergraduatesassystressed - Dec 29, 2014 / ryao15 - Dec 30, 2014
|I began my college search during the summer vacation in grade 11.
Undergraduatebalareddymv - Dec 29, 2014 / balareddymv - Dec 30, 2014
|"Where do you like it better?" I can never be able to answer this question - Moving from US to India
Undergraduatesukhjit015 - Dec 29, 2014 / sukhjit015 - Dec 29, 2014
|"I'm Jaques Pepin, and this is fast food, my way!" - Boston college supplement
3 - I actually like the topic. It is different and very sweet. I think you should talk more about how...
Undergraduatectam15555 - Dec 29, 2014 / EmelyMorales - Dec 29, 2014
|I hope to utilize what NYU's schools have to offer to find a future in advertising
4 - In comparison to the rest of your essay, I think your first paragraph is a little boring in comparison...
Undergraduateguyunemployed - Dec 27, 2014 / EmelyMorales - Dec 29, 2014
|"Sunday's donuts" - My dad's fight propelled my ambitions
5 - Really good story. Really nice and there are some great things you have done. Conceptually, it is perfect. The...
Undergraduatecsc789 - Dec 29, 2014 / EmelyMorales - Dec 29, 2014
|Adulthood - a place where I could blossom into the person I wanted to be
4 - For two people who share half of the same genetic makeup, my twin Madi and I couldn't be more...
Undergraduatedaniellecurtis5 - Dec 29, 2014 / daniellecurtis5 - Dec 29, 2014
|I discovered a greater sense of purpose and ardor. I felt at home breathing in the Haitian air.
7 - Okay, that works. Thanks for going through all these drafts with me and helping me create a response that...
Undergraduatefayyzeus - Dec 29, 2014 / fayyzeus - Dec 29, 2014
|NYU Essay! Business environment, JSA, and love of Wall Street.
6 - You are not writing a personal statement or a statement of purpose. That is how this essay sounds at...
UndergraduateChetaki - Dec 28, 2014 / vangiespen - Dec 29, 2014
|"Have fun", "Relax a bit" - Why NYU? It is because diversity has always been important to me.
12 - Thank you!!!...
Undergraduateadventoor - Dec 27, 2014 / adventoor - Dec 29, 2014
|"Come on man, one more rep, one more!" - Shooting for above average
11 - Thank you and everyone else so much for helping me produce a polished common app essay! I made...
Undergraduateduedateguy - Dec 25, 2014 / duedateguy - Dec 29, 2014
|PRE MID LIFE CRISIS - I think I have already had mine
2 - Okay, as an introduction to your video attachment, I believe that the essay works very well. It has an...
Undergraduatesodugbesan - Dec 29, 2014 / vangiespen - Dec 29, 2014
|'the element of truth' - "Welcome to hell," Mrs. Clemens chirps. Cheesy Common App Essay
3 - Thank you so much. I was really worried because no one was saying anything. It is my first time...
UndergraduateAir_97 - Dec 29, 2014 / Air_97 - Dec 29, 2014
|A good story starts with a good beginning. Get us hooked in 150 words.
3 - The original work truly reeled me into the story you are trying to tell. Unfortunately we had to cut...
Undergraduatekellymacsnu123 - Dec 29, 2014 / vangiespen - Dec 29, 2014
|One of the most critical moments in my life was when I fell off my bike
Undergraduatejt9 - Dec 29, 2014 / vangiespen - Dec 29, 2014
|Ever since I was seven years old, I always watched the Bangladesh news and observed as my TV display
NEW - Please tell us something about yourself,your experiences, or activities that you believe would reflect positively on your ability to...
UndergraduateLunarEclipse - Dec 29, 2014 / — -
|"Don't trust anyone" my parents constantly reminded me. Mexican Korean - Rice perspective supplement
3 - I agree with Lyra, are you Mexican Korean? Korean American? What? You need to clarify how you classify yourself...
Undergraduatesurfbort - Dec 29, 2014 / vangiespen - Dec 29, 2014
|I was surprised to learn that such a diverse range of people were educated at Carnegie Mellon
3 - While I agree that your essay tends to sound like you took some information directly from a brochure about...
Undergraduateaquaelmo - Dec 29, 2014 / vangiespen - Dec 29, 2014
|Carnegie Mellon University provides an abundance of opportunities for students like myself
2 - The essay should concentrate more upon the reasons why you chose to apply to CMU instead of offering only...
Undergraduatesamkazmi - Dec 29, 2014 / vangiespen - Dec 29, 2014
|"I'm not even Chinese, stupid!" - Identity Crisis; The Common "language barrier"
3 - @vangiespen Thank you very much! Truth be told, I was skeptical of the formatting myself, but I just didn't...
Undergraduategrcpark7 - Dec 29, 2014 / grcpark7 - Dec 29, 2014
|As a child, hearing the term "the good life" I often thought of being enormous rich
6 - The first part of your essay responds to the prompt in a common sense manner. The latter part does...
Undergraduateyaniah1 - Dec 29, 2014 / vangiespen - Dec 29, 2014
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