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|Condoms in Uganda - note to the Most Reverend Archbishop of Uganda
2 - I definitely like that you took on a high-risk topic. High-risk equals high reward if carried out properly. I...
Undergraduatevoraprachw - Dec 31, 2014 / ccbrownlee - Dec 31, 2014
|Some thoughts on stereotypes - Amherst College Supplement feeback
Undergraduategsikka - Dec 31, 2014 / gsikka - Dec 31, 2014
|Muddy Water - getting there is part of the fun - Commonapp most content essay
6 - You mention both joy and sore you've experienced on the Muddy water, finally all the same spirit applies to...
Undergraduatejricha - Dec 27, 2014 / Jadewan - Dec 31, 2014
|For a thousand pages or so, Cervantes held me captive: book prompt
2 - You're answer is nicely constructed, but i felt like you talked more about what the book is about than...
Undergraduategrcpark7 - Dec 31, 2014 / LunarEclipse - Dec 31, 2014
|I am an anarchist. No-a rebel. Chemical Engineering... at YALE?
7 - Haha hmm, I think someone's hinting at something.. :] but of course! I'd be glad to read your Cornell...
Undergraduateryao15 - Dec 30, 2014 / grcpark7 - Dec 31, 2014
|It is said that when he was born, he watched the world burn. Epic Short Story- Notre Dame
7 - Grace, this was a great story. Very entertaining to read. I'd agree with guessit about that minor detail but...
Undergraduategrcpark7 - Dec 31, 2014 / LunarEclipse - Dec 31, 2014
|As a girl who has never lived anywhere but.....song of Columbia University
3 - Thank you! I agree! I also added this next section: Columbia students thrive on involvement. There are tons...
Undergraduatestephiedreams - Dec 31, 2014 / stephiedreams - Dec 31, 2014
|Poop: It's only four letters, yet when combined together, provoke disgusted faces and nose-wrinkling
Undergraduategrcpark7 - Dec 30, 2014 / ryao15 - Dec 31, 2014
|"How", is engineering's key word, "Why" is the medicine's - find answers for both of these questions
2 - Your answer is a little off the track. You use the entire 100 words to describe "what" you want...
Undergraduatenada1998 - Dec 31, 2014 / pbjc7991 - Dec 31, 2014
|Rigorous Reasoning VS Insight/ Rats, Generators and Epiphanies/ Amherst
NEW - "Rigorous reasoning is crucial in mathematics, and insight plays an important secondary role these days. In the natural sciences,...
Undergraduateleiya0920 - Dec 31, 2014 / — -
|Unbalanced - I always take a closer consideration to things now. Common app prompt 1
Undergraduatejuicy - Nov 22, 2014 / juicy - Dec 31, 2014
|USC1: Cross Country was painful.
4 - This is really, really good. Few grammatical mistakes: "I remind myself of all my running; that fear cannot...
UndergraduateEmelyMorales - Dec 30, 2014 / grcpark7 - Dec 31, 2014
|Sport field, hall, swimming pool - most schools nowadays already have their own sport facilities
UndergraduateShahrul - Dec 31, 2014 / noemiq - Dec 31, 2014
|Difficulty need not foreshadow despair or defeat. Rather achievement can be all the more satisfying.
Undergraduateleiya0920 - Dec 3, 2014 / leiya0920 - Dec 31, 2014
|I've never actually stepped onto the Notre Dame campus and experienced the aura personally
13 - LOL you understand me exactly. Yep, it's going to be hard...but some words have just got to go. ...
Undergraduategrcpark7 - Dec 31, 2014 / grcpark7 - Dec 31, 2014
|being flat-footed, easily distracted, community... SUPER SHORT short responses to Yale supplement
Undergraduateryao15 - Dec 31, 2014 / ryao15 - Dec 31, 2014
|soccer = (me + ball+ friendship) - stress - comfort zone
Undergraduatenoemiq - Dec 30, 2014 / noemiq - Dec 31, 2014
|If you were to visit my Facebook page, you would find an odd number of photos, posted by others
2 - I LOVE the tone of your essay! It is funny and it attracts the reader. Your first sentence is...
Undergraduatesodugbesan - Dec 30, 2014 / noemiq - Dec 31, 2014
|Severus Snape! I was a ruthless disciplinarian who hid his soft side from everybody
2 - Interesting essay, haha. I think you have something going with this essay but I have a few suggestions. ...
Undergraduatepbjc7991 - Dec 31, 2014 / EmelyMorales - Dec 31, 2014
|Open the gate of my paternal grandmother's rather uncommon alpine-style cottage
3 - Thanks for the feedback! Is there any grammatical mistake? I have proofread the essay various times, but it's better...
UndergraduatePablodelaTorre - Dec 30, 2014 / PablodelaTorre - Dec 31, 2014
|The Beatles song "Money Can't Buy Me Love" inundated my ears upon my birth.
2 - I was brought into this world with the sound of music, since one of the nurses forgot to turn...
Undergraduatenada1998 - Dec 31, 2014 / pbjc7991 - Dec 31, 2014
|How can my problem solving nature contribute to Rice? Rice University Personal Perspective Prompt
UndergraduateTheKid9999 - Dec 31, 2014 / TheKid9999 - Dec 31, 2014
|It was a rainy day and I was coming back home after an exhausting day - writing supplement
UndergraduateTheBestK - Dec 26, 2014 / TheBestK - Dec 31, 2014
|We've all been there. We've all been trapped in the endless chain of Wikipedia articles
3 - "Wikipedia is neither a place nor an environment and is therefore not the correct response to this prompt. The...
Undergraduateaquaelmo - Dec 29, 2014 / jonathachou711 - Dec 31, 2014
|Duke strives for big- Why Duke
3 - Even then, you have listed some of the more generic things Duke has to offer. Think of the 30,000...
Undergraduatesurfbort - Dec 30, 2014 / jonathachou711 - Dec 31, 2014
|Spongebob band-aids - the one memorable constant of my childhood. Psychology and Biology / Why CMU?
UndergraduateKrithikaK - Dec 31, 2014 / KrithikaK - Dec 31, 2014
|I am proudest of the service I contributed through my school's Computer Club
2 - I really like your essays! I think the first sentence of your first essay "I am proudest of the...
UndergraduateSineFine - Dec 31, 2014 / KrithikaK - Dec 31, 2014
|How will opportunities at Purdue support your interests, both in and out of the classroom?
2 - Your response is somewhat generic. You could literally take out every time you mention Purdue and type in the...
Undergraduatedigvijay - Dec 30, 2014 / SineFine - Dec 31, 2014
|I stand in firm affirmation of CMU - Prompt Why CMU
Undergraduategrcpark7 - Dec 29, 2014 / grcpark7 - Dec 30, 2014
|FUTURE CEO (U-M supplement)
2 - I think your essay is pretty good. Some grammar issues, like "However, the title's power and ability to make...
Undergraduatepatelv97 - Dec 30, 2014 / Boa503 - Dec 30, 2014
|Anticipated major: Applied Economics and Management (entrepreneurship concentration) - LEGOS essay
7 - You should take out the parts about the school of business in your last paragraph (if you want to...
UndergraduateDslash - Dec 29, 2014 / grcpark7 - Dec 30, 2014
|Lost and Found. For the longest time, I've attempted to discover who I am.
Undergraduatetakinwe124 - Dec 30, 2014 / takinwe124 - Dec 30, 2014
|Don't call me what I am not (Common App)
2 - very well written and interesting. Maybe in the conclusion talk about how the categorization just made you work harder....
Undergraduatenoemiq - Dec 30, 2014 / jricha - Dec 30, 2014
|Untranslatable Word - In French, there is no difference between "conscience" and "consciousness"
Undergraduatemariyaz31 - Dec 30, 2014 / jricha - Dec 30, 2014
|Brown Supp: I am a big fan of SimCity, a game in which you can build a city with limited budget.
UndergraduateDinoRules - Dec 30, 2014 / noemiq - Dec 30, 2014
|I am a curious, determined Brazilian Jew and I still feel the urge to "be more".
UndergraduateCharphil - Dec 30, 2014 / Charphil - Dec 30, 2014
|I am an American Palestinian but - I can not identify myself with either or the other.
2 - I am an American Palestinian; most people disagree when I say this stating that my nationality is American then...
Undergraduatenada1998 - Dec 30, 2014 / leiya0920 - Dec 30, 2014
|Enriching, quality learning environment will help me to best achieve my future career goals
2 - For the first paragraph, I can literally switch your school name with any other school. And it would work....
Undergraduateadumbbird13 - Dec 30, 2014 / leiya0920 - Dec 30, 2014
|Crtl. Del? My finger came to a halt at the delete button. What if colleges read this and dislike me?
2 - I really think your essay is great!! I won't comment on grammar because I am a prospective international student...
Undergraduatekrcheng - Dec 30, 2014 / Charphil - Dec 30, 2014
|Why research seemingly obscure things? For science! -- Engineering at Yale
3 - "Why am I investigating this reaction?"" --> it's a bit awkward. Change to something more colloquial. I...
Undergraduateryao15 - Dec 30, 2014 / grcpark7 - Dec 30, 2014
|My work experience - is it too cheesy to write about my lame job at McDonalds?
4 - There are no lame topics, but lame writings. :) And I'm really drawn into your first paragraph, and I...
Undergraduatedaniellecurtis5 - Dec 30, 2014 / DinoRules - Dec 30, 2014
|I was taught to work. I strove to be the best in whatever I did and I'd kill myself to end up on top
Undergraduatekylerobertson - Dec 30, 2014 / krcheng - Dec 30, 2014
|'strong engineering department, research facilities, and small size' - an ideal university
6 - Here is a final version that I will be submitting tomorrow. THanks for all of your help! I feel...
Undergraduateryao15 - Dec 30, 2014 / ryao15 - Dec 30, 2014
|It was during my family's visit to India to aid my grandmother through her cancer treatments
Undergraduatecsc789 - Dec 29, 2014 / nada1998 - Dec 30, 2014
|Since I could hold a pencil, I have belong to the artist's community. Brown Short Essay Supplement
3 - For the "where have you lived" part, my personal suggestion is that you can try to relate the physical...
Undergraduatecwashu - Dec 27, 2014 / DinoRules - Dec 30, 2014
|New York University is a mural painted by generations of students
5 - Also agree. However, you do discuss what you can offer NYU, so you're good on that part. I think...
Undergraduatenada1998 - Dec 30, 2014 / adventoor - Dec 30, 2014
|Boston College: Finding Magis, the traits that are important
2 - I think your essay does answer the prompt because the question asks how do you find magis in your...
Undergraduatectam15555 - Dec 30, 2014 / Baloanie - Dec 30, 2014
|How One of My Greatest Prides Was Made Possible - Haverford Honor Code Essay
UndergraduateAmethyst10022 - Dec 30, 2014 / rtan05 - Dec 30, 2014
|The pocket of Little Armenia seems like a place of endless possibilities, but it is still a pocket.
4 - your hook is a little bit confusing with all that about pockets "I was never part of the horrors...
UndergraduateEmelyMorales - Dec 27, 2014 / ctam15555 - Dec 30, 2014
|I aspire to bring a sense of design and structure to as many projects worldwide as possible.
2 - And through NYU, and its many global campuses, it is my wish to utilize its study abroad programs....
Undergraduatethemojo - Dec 29, 2014 / daniellecurtis5 - Dec 30, 2014
|A place of doom, an institution of desolation, a jail of misery - going to hospital
2 - Nice work! I think that everything flows along smoothly, except the first sentence. I find this to be...
Undergraduatesassystressed - Dec 29, 2014 / ryao15 - Dec 30, 2014
|I began my college search during the summer vacation in grade 11.
Undergraduatebalareddymv - Dec 29, 2014 / balareddymv - Dec 30, 2014
|"Where do you like it better?" I can never be able to answer this question - Moving from US to India
Undergraduatesukhjit015 - Dec 29, 2014 / sukhjit015 - Dec 29, 2014
|"I'm Jaques Pepin, and this is fast food, my way!" - Boston college supplement
3 - I actually like the topic. It is different and very sweet. I think you should talk more about how...
Undergraduatectam15555 - Dec 29, 2014 / EmelyMorales - Dec 29, 2014
|I hope to utilize what NYU's schools have to offer to find a future in advertising
4 - In comparison to the rest of your essay, I think your first paragraph is a little boring in comparison...
Undergraduateguyunemployed - Dec 27, 2014 / EmelyMorales - Dec 29, 2014
|"Sunday's donuts" - My dad's fight propelled my ambitions
5 - Really good story. Really nice and there are some great things you have done. Conceptually, it is perfect. The...
Undergraduatecsc789 - Dec 29, 2014 / EmelyMorales - Dec 29, 2014
|Adulthood - a place where I could blossom into the person I wanted to be
4 - For two people who share half of the same genetic makeup, my twin Madi and I couldn't be more...
Undergraduatedaniellecurtis5 - Dec 29, 2014 / daniellecurtis5 - Dec 29, 2014
|I discovered a greater sense of purpose and ardor. I felt at home breathing in the Haitian air.
7 - Okay, that works. Thanks for going through all these drafts with me and helping me create a response that...
Undergraduatefayyzeus - Dec 29, 2014 / fayyzeus - Dec 29, 2014
|NYU Essay! Business environment, JSA, and love of Wall Street.
6 - You are not writing a personal statement or a statement of purpose. That is how this essay sounds at...
UndergraduateChetaki - Dec 28, 2014 / vangiespen - Dec 29, 2014
|"Have fun", "Relax a bit" - Why NYU? It is because diversity has always been important to me.
12 - Thank you!!!...
Undergraduateadventoor - Dec 27, 2014 / adventoor - Dec 29, 2014
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