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|Amherst Supplementary Essay: stereotyped beliefs; power to dictate who you are
2 - Hi ivyaspirer, In my personal opinion, you're being too direct here. Instead of instantly stating out-of-nowhere that you're...
Undergraduateivyaspirer - Jul 8, 2014 / Ulaai - Jul 13, 2014
|What Nursing is for me? It's more than just a superficial "why"
2 - I only read your first answer. I think you can safely remove the first few sentences and start directly...
UndergraduateNece - Jul 8, 2014 / Liebe - Jul 12, 2014
|Personal statement for Endeavour Awards - Electrical Engineering in Bhutan
2 - The whole 'benefit to my country' is completely overplayed. Remove it I think discussing your work experience, rather than...
UndergraduateSan_123 - Jun 23, 2014 / Liebe - Jul 12, 2014
|Why Yale? What influenced your decision to apply?
Undergraduateivyaspirer - Jul 8, 2014 / ivyaspirer - Jul 9, 2014
|Everybody has person who impacted his or her life for the best
Undergraduatewejdan - Jul 9, 2014 / wejdan - Jul 9, 2014
|Common App Essay: Scuba Diving, 80 feet underwater.
Undergraduatencurcio6 - Jul 7, 2014 / Popcornasaur - Jul 8, 2014
|NYU Abu Dhabi Essay, Global Network.
6 - I think you written purpose for learning university at USA, example: for education higher or open-mind, easy looking for...
UndergraduateBukhmmas - Jan 24, 2011 / tiennguyen - Jul 8, 2014
|Personal Vision and Mission as future educator
3 - Thank you so much ma'am for extending your help. Thank you allotting your time reading my articulations and making...
UndergraduateNece - Jul 5, 2014 / Nece - Jul 5, 2014
|Reason for attending West Point (nomination essay)
UndergraduateJarram11 - Jun 30, 2014 / Jarram11 - Jul 3, 2014
|Stanford Supplemental Essay #1: Towards a brilliant future
8 - Let me see... Attending ISEF is kind of the fruit of your "intellectual development." So integrating the development with...
UndergraduatePopcornasaur - Jun 30, 2014 / Didgeridoo - Jul 2, 2014
|First Year in University - retrospection
NEW - Experts, Kindly need your review on my essay :-) When I retrospect to my first year in Providence...
Undergraduatehaochen18 - Jul 1, 2014 / — -
|"Cheater" - Ethical Dilemma (Caltech Writing Supplement)
3 - "I felt the sympathy rushing inside ofthrough me as it was passingI passed through the ethical barrier of honesty....
Undergraduatexphysics - Jun 21, 2014 / baileynmerrill - Jun 30, 2014
|'selection of clubs' - Why interested in Georgia Tech?
6 - I believe that it's alright considering that some universities require the applicants to analyze (don't organize) when writing the...
UndergraduateArchlefirth - Jun 19, 2014 / Kev101 - Jun 29, 2014
|What's your career plan?/ What do you wish to gain from this program?
3 - as you know there is some stiff competition then you must give your priority to this program. stating that...
UndergraduateFellowWriter - Jun 26, 2014 / shreyansh13 - Jun 28, 2014
|After my failure I went through a great deal of agony that led me to depression.
Undergraduatedestiny1216 - Jun 22, 2014 / destiny1216 - Jun 24, 2014
|Undergraduate Admission Essay - "Welcome to Camp Live, Laugh, Love"
2 - Firstly, I am sorry for your loss; however, this is a generally well written essay. It flowed well...
UndergraduateKTB - Jun 22, 2014 / cw4674 - Jun 23, 2014
|"Do you cut the red wire or the blue?" college admission essay
2 - Well for the 1st para, you have described your background pretty good which is a good base for 2nd...
Undergraduatecw4674 - Jun 22, 2014 / SalMon - Jun 23, 2014
|United States Service Academy Nomination Essay
NEW - Hi! It is my dream to attend the Naval Academy and I am writing this essay for a nominaiton...
UndergraduateEvaK16 - Jun 22, 2014 / — -
|Explanation letter for Canadian Visa
2 - I don't know about the Canadian visa process but I doubt that the Canadian government needs a well-written essay...
Undergraduatemnm123 - Jun 20, 2014 / Archlefirth - Jun 20, 2014
|'my journey through a candy store' - entrance to a selective diversity program
Undergraduatesoto1996 - Jun 14, 2014 / abhay4556 - Jun 20, 2014
|"Concept of Dharma" - Princeton Undergraduate Commmon Application Supplement
NEW - I was finishing up my Princeton application and I was wondering if anyone was willing to help. Much thanks...
Undergraduateabhay4556 - Jun 20, 2014 / — -
|Essay "Tell us about your life" for Tel-Aviv University (Engeneering program)
2 - In addition to languages, my hobbies represent a mixture of different occupations. In my childhood, I...
Undergraduateaklochkova1 - Jun 18, 2014 / Misnariah Idrus - Jun 18, 2014
|How cancer contributted to my Identity and work ethics
Undergraduatesmoore34 - Jun 16, 2014 / forouzan - Jun 17, 2014
|Describing my future project; 'to end and satisfy the hunger for money and food'
2 - your vocabulary is strong but i believe "why do I got to live like this?" is incorrect grammer and...
UndergraduateStevenWong206 - Jun 15, 2014 / rmk1 - Jun 15, 2014
|college essay - 'how much of my life has gone by without me even realizing'
Undergraduatermk1 - Jun 13, 2014 / rmk1 - Jun 15, 2014
|The feeling of wanting to know computers; Personal statement for admission to CS
Undergraduatenitex - Jun 11, 2014 / eva_lim - Jun 15, 2014
|'I am the forgotten child in my family' - the world I came from
UndergraduateAlexus11 - Jun 12, 2014 / reza10977 - Jun 12, 2014
|Drexel University Essay: why you are interested in your choice of major
4 - good writing. you can also add in what you want to do with learning computer or how learning computer...
UndergraduateGilchrist2014 - Jun 12, 2014 / nitex - Jun 12, 2014
|"car accident" Essay for applying at UCF as a transfer
Undergraduatemcervone - Feb 12, 2011 / ibk - Jun 10, 2014
|Undergraduate Essay Drafting - Transitions; 'dealing with changes'
Undergraduatecassidy23 - Jun 8, 2014 / Didgeridoo - Jun 10, 2014
|Essay for a liberal arts program - 'without art world would be a poorer place'
NEW - My prompt is: What in your opinion is one art form without which the world would be a poorer...
Undergraduateak2909 - Jun 9, 2014 / — -
|Is it true, that one can always find opportunity, even in trouble?
6 - Troubles are part of our lifelives . Everyone has troublesfaces difficulties and challenges in their lifelives but it doesn'tdoes...
UndergraduateHumza33 - Jun 6, 2014 / lewyne - Jun 9, 2014
|To Stay Sane, Stay Busy (COMMON APP ESSAY- CONTENT)
2 - For myselfme , the shouting and constant challenges that arise are what make working at the[BUSINESS] the most blissful...
Undergraduatemarktager - Jun 7, 2014 / niesaysi - Jun 8, 2014
|What type of individual is most likely to cause the world to progress?
UndergraduateSodiumFactor - May 30, 2014 / SodiumFactor - Jun 6, 2014
|Liberal arts program essay: New University in India
3 - Thanks,I don't know why but my character counter behaves a little different. I had 3985 in the edited version...
Undergraduateak2909 - Jun 3, 2014 / ak2909 - Jun 5, 2014
|ESSAY REVIEW: where you are perfectly content?; 'help for the benefit of others'
Undergraduatejennifermiranda - Jun 4, 2014 / okdeerpass - Jun 5, 2014
|My Cousin is My Other Mother
Undergraduatesothea1999 - May 30, 2014 / Didgeridoo - Jun 4, 2014
|I was born in Ukraine and during the collapse of the Soviet Union
NEW - I would like to receive some help with essay in regards to making it stronger in its message. I...
Undergraduateeduardkogan - Jun 3, 2014 / — -
|Boarding School Essay; I'm significantly interested in philosophy and psychology
3 - So i made another draft. Here it is.List and describe your level of interest and participation in school activities...
Undergraduatetahdas - Apr 6, 2014 / tahdas - Jun 1, 2014
|Personal statement - Loyola Transfer Application Essay; insults welcomed (School Paradoxes)
4 - Yeah, unfortunately, you are right in leaving out the addiction and recovery story. Even though it could be a...
Undergraduatemattcline - May 30, 2014 / Didgeridoo - Jun 1, 2014
|'confidence and awareness in the sport of soccer' - background or story
NEW - The prompt I chose was "Some students have a background or story that is so central to their identity...
Undergraduatebeccaboo0297 - Jun 1, 2014 / — -
|'doing the things that make me feel complete' - SOP for SAIC application
NEW - I've been struggling with this quite a bit, and the deadline to get this application in looms. ==================================...
UndergraduatePandaro - May 31, 2014 / — -
|'A citizen of Earth' - Stanford short essay--What matters to you and why?
7 - Hey Dear, The essay is asking to describe the impact you can make as an individual in the world...Make...
Undergraduateysysysys - Nov 6, 2012 / christy6789 - May 30, 2014
|"No English" University of Florida Application Essay
UndergraduateVTP77 - May 25, 2014 / reza10977 - May 29, 2014
|Describe an important decision that you made - ENGLISH TEACHER
4 - ... I suggest this way; My decision of choosing University of Pedagogy is one of the most important...
Undergraduatehoanghcmup - May 25, 2014 / dumi - May 29, 2014
|"Collision" - write about the moment that changed your life.
2 - I realized how important we should follow the traffic law, and keeps minds clam and clear when we are...
Undergraduatekristennguyen23 - May 29, 2014 / Vihuynh - May 29, 2014
|'community feel of the campus' - BARNARD COLLEGE ESSAY: WHY BARNARD?
4 - Ok....however, it is better if you included your essay prompt also in the post so that we know exactly...
Undergraduatehollymollybabs - May 24, 2014 / dumi - May 28, 2014
|UC Personal Statement Prompt - 2 essays: my father / my chin
3 - It is good if you included the prompts in this post. Without seeing them it is a bit difficult...
UndergraduateAmanda97 - May 21, 2014 / dumi - May 28, 2014
|Readmission Essay into College of Education; past and future - statements
NEW - Assignment: You must complete a 1-2 page typed statement of readiness that reflects on any impediments that kept you...
Undergraduatee_karina0309 - May 27, 2014 / — -
|"I'll be blunt" - Family history, culture, environment influence UCF essay
2 - I hate to break it to you, but college essays are very different from high school essays. Often there...
Undergraduatekgaydos7 - May 26, 2014 / Didgeridoo - May 26, 2014
|How my family shaped who I am today
Undergraduatenyrobimanuel - May 19, 2014 / hoanghcmup - May 25, 2014
|COMMON APP - previous commendable experiences, activities
3 - I think you are spending too much time on the commendable experiences part, when the focus should be what...
UndergraduateAnosha29 - May 20, 2014 / Didgeridoo - May 23, 2014
|Essay on leadership-its importance in diversity and importance of learning it
2 - You repeat "But as art" twice in your intro within short frequencies. Avoid repetition of phrases as they make...
Undergraduategarcia22 - May 22, 2014 / dumi - May 23, 2014
|Appeal for admission to NUS Faculty of science chemistry course
NEW - Hi I am currently writing a appeal letter to NUS to appeal for my rejected chemistry course. Would greatly...
UndergraduateSnowy123 - May 21, 2014 / — -
|Reasons why you wish to attend APU - STUDYING ABROAD
5 - Being able to live in Asia and still be connected with all types of different cultured people from around...
UndergraduateAnosha29 - May 20, 2014 / Pahan - May 20, 2014
|This is my personal statement prompt 1; My grandfather Lee
5 - Elderly man told us that nine years ago, he hasn'twasn't feeling longelylonely because there arewere more than 500 pieces...
Undergraduatekaitong - May 20, 2014 / Pahan - May 20, 2014
|ready for a new start ~ readmit essay
2 - Having just graduated from high school, I thought I could handle a full 18 hour course load as well...
Undergraduatemustanglove - May 20, 2014 / Pahan - May 20, 2014
|CommonApp: The softening harmony of laughter gives me a state of comfort
3 - This is great feedback :) Hope you pay attention to the points that Didgeridoo has stressed upon. My point...
Undergraduatebrijirowetz - May 18, 2014 / dumi - May 20, 2014
|Common App Transfer - Arriving at Equilibrium (Communications Major)
5 - Thank you so much! It is so uplifting to receive positive feedback. However, I am having difficulty trimming down...
UndergraduateMSKnicks91 - May 12, 2014 / MSKnicks91 - May 19, 2014
|Study Abroad Essay- Study Statement; As a person of French descent...
4 - By experiencing another culture and being placed outside one's comfort zone, studying abroad can allow one to grow as...
Undergraduatecollegebound28 - Mar 29, 2014 / Pahan - May 18, 2014
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