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|Fun and Pranking Essay -- Caltech
2 - There isn't much to criticize here. This is fabulously written. Two things though. Put some comas in: "From classics...
Undergraduatedjgvolt - Aug 4, 2014 / cpuissant - Aug 4, 2014
|'NOT YET'; any experience or accomplishment that defines me? (College Entrance Essay)
3 - Generally speaking I think you have to mention your own story, do you attend any workshops regarding writing your...
Undergraduatethaaatgirlll - Aug 2, 2014 / EyadBosy - Aug 4, 2014
|"smart" is not enough for people to be successful; SOP for Univ. of Washington - software developer
Undergraduatehuyenluv - Aug 3, 2014 / huyenluv - Aug 3, 2014
|'Helping other is my passion' - Hartwick Supplement - Describe some aspect about yourself
2 - Helping others... overall good read.. You could also start with lines on more broader aspect like I always want...
Undergraduatevc859 - Aug 2, 2014 / sky2586 - Aug 2, 2014
|"As soon as you trust yourself, you will learn how to live" - experiences that defined you
2 - Good Job! I'll just give some suggestions, for example, instead of saying " I give my gratitude to God",...
Undergraduateqwertyddam - Jul 31, 2014 / Gulnar604 - Jul 31, 2014
|'My father introduced me to the C programming language' - SOP UT Austin computer science
Undergraduatethounumber1 - Jul 30, 2014 / niesaysi - Jul 31, 2014
|"CHILD HAUS" - ESSAY FOR ATENEO APPLICATION FORM
UndergraduateyoureGANAmissme - Jul 28, 2014 / Hiruni - Jul 28, 2014
|Who I am ; U of M - My community and place within it
3 - I walk into the temple. I see men in turbans, women in their salwar kameez, a traditional modest ...
Undergraduateasaraan - Jul 15, 2014 / dumi - Jul 27, 2014
|'I'm a control freak' - Common App Essay - "environment where you are content..."
7 - I'm a rising senior this year, so my app isn't due until January of 2015. I'm also an American...
UndergraduateLBM - Jul 23, 2014 / LBM - Jul 25, 2014
|Looking back on your high school years - Essay for Ashoka University
2 - If you don't mind, could you please review this last one as well? Prompt - Mention the fondest...
Undergraduateheythere11 - Jul 20, 2014 / heythere11 - Jul 25, 2014
|Finding about me, if you're interested and have nothing better to do
Undergraduatelouisa216 - Jul 23, 2014 / emonabin - Jul 24, 2014
|'Stuck on a boat in the middle of the ocean' - Background / Story Central to Identity
2 - hmmm... you should probably eliminate the sentence fragments especially at the beginning n turn them into sentences. also reduce...
Undergraduatelancelot12 - Jul 22, 2014 / dchege711 - Jul 23, 2014
|"It's nothing but a cult!" - Essay for Ashoka University. Need to cut at least 150 words!
NEW - Prompt - Tell us about your academic journey, your inspirations, hardships and how you have overcome them. 2500 characters....
Undergraduateheythere11 - Jul 23, 2014 / — -
|"edit our profile" essay explaining why you don't wish to complete this assignment
8 - I think you can go with 'My Dad'. Unless the professor has specifically asked you to use third person....
Undergraduatecomet2000 - Aug 28, 2010 / heythere11 - Jul 23, 2014
|'The three major artists and designers' - Two short essays for Art center Pasadena
3 - thanks!...
UndergraduateAlexturt - Jul 22, 2014 / Alexturt - Jul 23, 2014
|What I Want - a lot of things from life; Penn Supp. Essay
Undergraduateshoobidoo27 - Jul 21, 2014 / niesaysi - Jul 22, 2014
|"What do I want to do when I grow up?" - Peace Corps Volunteer App
2 - This was the one question I could never fullygot difficulty to answer. The best answerresponse I have ever...
Undergraduatesarx8172 - Jul 18, 2014 / niesaysi - Jul 22, 2014
|What happens in Hardee's: CommonApp Essay
2 - From school, my twin brother and I stopped at a fast food restaurant. Suddenly, an elderly gentleman with...
Undergraduateswj97 - Jul 20, 2014 / niesaysi - Jul 22, 2014
|automobile enthusiast from childhood; SOP for masters in motorsports engineering
2 - My college life was a mix of different experiences . Automobile as my specialization was added to my...
Undergraduatevyasv21 - Jul 14, 2014 / niesaysi - Jul 19, 2014
|PS - There are two ways to be happy: improve your reality or lower your expectations
Undergraduateseppukkku - Jun 24, 2014 / dumi - Jul 18, 2014
|Convey your interest: visual, theatre, arts, sports, music, gourmet, cooking - UA&P Entrance Essay
2 - You need to search for personal statement formats to get a better idea of how the paper should be...
UndergraduateyoureGANAmissme - Jul 17, 2014 / daylou93 - Jul 17, 2014
|'BIGB Lessons' - Who or what inspires you the most and why? Ashoka University
2 - He played basketball, and a couple of years later, I joined my school's basketball team. He played at...
Undergraduateheythere11 - Jul 16, 2014 / malsackey - Jul 16, 2014
|'Dear Mankato Admissions Board' - Personal statement to Mankato University
Undergraduatemalsackey - Jul 15, 2014 / malsackey - Jul 16, 2014
|UIC Prompt: Giving education a new focus using history.
NEW - This is one of two prompts that an reach up to 32,000 characters. No. Don't worry. I did not...
Undergraduatefoxyh - Jul 15, 2014 / — -
|'I found someone with shared values and motivation' - Honors College App. Essay
4 - When searching for friends or even a soul mate, I believe onetowe should look for someone that holds true...
UndergraduateBellacorrr - Jul 9, 2014 / dumi - Jul 14, 2014
|This accomplishment of mine really made me get to know myself even more.
3 - Every experience that I have had made me a better person and it helped me know myself even morebetter....
Undergraduatecharlene1699 - Jul 12, 2014 / dumi - Jul 14, 2014
|'What do you want to be when you grow up?' - Yale supplementary essay
Undergraduateivyaspirer - Jul 10, 2014 / dumi - Jul 13, 2014
|Amherst Supplementary Essay: stereotyped beliefs; power to dictate who you are
2 - Hi ivyaspirer, In my personal opinion, you're being too direct here. Instead of instantly stating out-of-nowhere that you're...
Undergraduateivyaspirer - Jul 8, 2014 / Ulaai - Jul 13, 2014
|What Nursing is for me? It's more than just a superficial "why"
2 - I only read your first answer. I think you can safely remove the first few sentences and start directly...
UndergraduateNece - Jul 8, 2014 / Liebe - Jul 12, 2014
|Personal statement for Endeavour Awards - Electrical Engineering in Bhutan
2 - The whole 'benefit to my country' is completely overplayed. Remove it I think discussing your work experience, rather than...
UndergraduateSan_123 - Jun 23, 2014 / Liebe - Jul 12, 2014
|Why Yale? What influenced your decision to apply?
Undergraduateivyaspirer - Jul 8, 2014 / ivyaspirer - Jul 9, 2014
|Everybody has person who impacted his or her life for the best
Undergraduatewejdan - Jul 9, 2014 / wejdan - Jul 9, 2014
|Common App Essay: Scuba Diving, 80 feet underwater.
Undergraduatencurcio6 - Jul 7, 2014 / Popcornasaur - Jul 8, 2014
|NYU Abu Dhabi Essay, Global Network.
6 - I think you written purpose for learning university at USA, example: for education higher or open-mind, easy looking for...
UndergraduateBukhmmas - Jan 24, 2011 / tiennguyen - Jul 8, 2014
|Personal Vision and Mission as future educator
3 - Thank you so much ma'am for extending your help. Thank you allotting your time reading my articulations and making...
UndergraduateNece - Jul 5, 2014 / Nece - Jul 5, 2014
|Reason for attending West Point (nomination essay)
UndergraduateJarram11 - Jun 30, 2014 / Jarram11 - Jul 3, 2014
|Stanford Supplemental Essay #1: Towards a brilliant future
8 - Let me see... Attending ISEF is kind of the fruit of your "intellectual development." So integrating the development with...
UndergraduatePopcornasaur - Jun 30, 2014 / Didgeridoo - Jul 2, 2014
|First Year in University - retrospection
NEW - Experts, Kindly need your review on my essay :-) When I retrospect to my first year in Providence...
Undergraduatehaochen18 - Jul 1, 2014 / — -
|"Cheater" - Ethical Dilemma (Caltech Writing Supplement)
3 - "I felt the sympathy rushing inside ofthrough me as it was passingI passed through the ethical barrier of honesty....
Undergraduatexphysics - Jun 21, 2014 / baileynmerrill - Jun 30, 2014
|'selection of clubs' - Why interested in Georgia Tech?
6 - I believe that it's alright considering that some universities require the applicants to analyze (don't organize) when writing the...
UndergraduateArchlefirth - Jun 19, 2014 / Kev101 - Jun 29, 2014
|What's your career plan?/ What do you wish to gain from this program?
3 - as you know there is some stiff competition then you must give your priority to this program. stating that...
UndergraduateFellowWriter - Jun 26, 2014 / shreyansh13 - Jun 28, 2014
|After my failure I went through a great deal of agony that led me to depression.
Undergraduatedestiny1216 - Jun 22, 2014 / destiny1216 - Jun 24, 2014
|Undergraduate Admission Essay - "Welcome to Camp Live, Laugh, Love"
2 - Firstly, I am sorry for your loss; however, this is a generally well written essay. It flowed well...
UndergraduateKTB - Jun 22, 2014 / cw4674 - Jun 23, 2014
|"Do you cut the red wire or the blue?" college admission essay
2 - Well for the 1st para, you have described your background pretty good which is a good base for 2nd...
Undergraduatecw4674 - Jun 22, 2014 / SalMon - Jun 23, 2014
|United States Service Academy Nomination Essay
NEW - Hi! It is my dream to attend the Naval Academy and I am writing this essay for a nominaiton...
UndergraduateEvaK16 - Jun 22, 2014 / — -
|Explanation letter for Canadian Visa
2 - I don't know about the Canadian visa process but I doubt that the Canadian government needs a well-written essay...
Undergraduatemnm123 - Jun 20, 2014 / Archlefirth - Jun 20, 2014
|'my journey through a candy store' - entrance to a selective diversity program
Undergraduatesoto1996 - Jun 14, 2014 / abhay4556 - Jun 20, 2014
|"Concept of Dharma" - Princeton Undergraduate Commmon Application Supplement
NEW - I was finishing up my Princeton application and I was wondering if anyone was willing to help. Much thanks...
Undergraduateabhay4556 - Jun 20, 2014 / — -
|Essay "Tell us about your life" for Tel-Aviv University (Engeneering program)
2 - In addition to languages, my hobbies represent a mixture of different occupations. In my childhood, I...
Undergraduateaklochkova1 - Jun 18, 2014 / Misnariah Idrus - Jun 18, 2014
|How cancer contributted to my Identity and work ethics
Undergraduatesmoore34 - Jun 16, 2014 / forouzan - Jun 17, 2014
|Describing my future project; 'to end and satisfy the hunger for money and food'
2 - your vocabulary is strong but i believe "why do I got to live like this?" is incorrect grammer and...
UndergraduateStevenWong206 - Jun 15, 2014 / rmk1 - Jun 15, 2014
|college essay - 'how much of my life has gone by without me even realizing'
Undergraduatermk1 - Jun 13, 2014 / rmk1 - Jun 15, 2014
|The feeling of wanting to know computers; Personal statement for admission to CS
Undergraduatenitex - Jun 11, 2014 / eva_lim - Jun 15, 2014
|'I am the forgotten child in my family' - the world I came from
UndergraduateAlexus11 - Jun 12, 2014 / reza10977 - Jun 12, 2014
|Drexel University Essay: why you are interested in your choice of major
4 - good writing. you can also add in what you want to do with learning computer or how learning computer...
UndergraduateGilchrist2014 - Jun 12, 2014 / nitex - Jun 12, 2014
|"car accident" Essay for applying at UCF as a transfer
Undergraduatemcervone - Feb 12, 2011 / ibk - Jun 10, 2014
|Undergraduate Essay Drafting - Transitions; 'dealing with changes'
Undergraduatecassidy23 - Jun 8, 2014 / Didgeridoo - Jun 10, 2014
|Essay for a liberal arts program - 'without art world would be a poorer place'
NEW - My prompt is: What in your opinion is one art form without which the world would be a poorer...
Undergraduateak2909 - Jun 9, 2014 / — -
|Is it true, that one can always find opportunity, even in trouble?
6 - Troubles are part of our lifelives . Everyone has troublesfaces difficulties and challenges in their lifelives but it doesn'tdoes...
UndergraduateHumza33 - Jun 6, 2014 / lewyne - Jun 9, 2014
|To Stay Sane, Stay Busy (COMMON APP ESSAY- CONTENT)
2 - For myselfme , the shouting and constant challenges that arise are what make working at the[BUSINESS] the most blissful...
Undergraduatemarktager - Jun 7, 2014 / niesaysi - Jun 8, 2014
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