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|Facing the unknown is difficult; How Never Fear Change applies to me!
6 - Ok, don't worry....It's not a major thing. I just felt it didn't keep up with the rest because the...
Undergraduatetravisl - Jan 13, 2014 / dumi - Jan 15, 2014
|I want my education back\ prompt about diversity
Undergraduateteedee11 - Jan 11, 2014 / niesaysi - Jan 14, 2014
|Leadership Demonstration - Western IVEY AEO Essay#1
2 - Please proofread this essay. It sounds like you're rushing. Also, I only see one club and the prompt asks...
Undergraduatealienfly - Jan 13, 2014 / Kanyinqt - Jan 14, 2014
|"I leave feeling renewed"- Common App Essay - Place where you feel content
Undergraduategoldendoor - Jan 9, 2014 / impatient101 - Jan 14, 2014
|Linguistics, activism, and performing arts; Fashion Institute of Technology Essay
Undergraduategiangrandet - Jan 12, 2014 / batais - Jan 14, 2014
|Life Changing Journey; Background/ Central to identity
3 - Thank you so much! And do you have any comments about grammar? Because making the transactions from phase to...
Undergraduatecsp21 - Jan 13, 2014 / csp21 - Jan 14, 2014
|Why CARLETON? My fantasy of Carleton!
Undergraduateheyheyhey - Jan 9, 2014 / LiangWu - Jan 14, 2014
|Highly Prestigious, Top Ranked; why Georgia tech?
Undergraduatekilayah - Jan 10, 2014 / LiangWu - Jan 14, 2014
|USC SUPP - Benefit society /Geek or Nerds?
3 - Thank you. I'll remember that. What did u think of the second prompt? Which is the best response?...
Undergraduatefiftyskye - Jan 13, 2014 / fiftyskye - Jan 14, 2014
|Joycamp 2011 - Discuss an accomplishment or event
2 - First, I have some admin requests for you :) You should open your threads in the most appropriate forum...
Undergraduatelwei - Jan 13, 2014 / dumi - Jan 14, 2014
|IETLS - Today's youth have more power and influence!
4 - .... very good point. Let me present the same idea a bit differently; First and foremost, people began...
Undergraduatenmtuan3497 - Jan 10, 2014 / Pahan - Jan 14, 2014
|The music within: Common App essay (need help)
2 - I feel your answer is more aligned with the question that asks to which community you belong to or...
Undergraduatekpopzz - Jan 13, 2014 / Pahan - Jan 14, 2014
|China inspiration - Emory: My uniqueness and contribution. cultural stuff!
7 - grey_form, thanks so much for your review! I indeed was trying to convey my unique perspective of the Chinese...
UndergraduateGraceyxp15 - Jan 2, 2014 / Graceyxp15 - Jan 14, 2014
|Art Institute of Seattle Audio Production - Music has always been a part of me!
4 - .... You need to improve the organization of your ideas here. Some ideas get repeated several times and...
Undergraduatejoshuadiaz1 - Jan 8, 2014 / dumi - Jan 13, 2014
|I didn't know which way I should proceed with my education; Transfer Essay
2 - When I saw my classmates crossing the graduation stage with pride and determination, I wondered whether it is...
UndergraduateShugz20 - Jan 13, 2014 / dumi - Jan 13, 2014
|Introducing myself to an new classroom using 3 paragraphs (5 or more sentences e
Undergraduateasmalls95 - Jan 13, 2014 / asmalls95 - Jan 13, 2014
|Comics; UIUC - interest or experience
6 - The limit was just 300 words, and mine actually went a little over 300, so I would've done so...
Undergraduatekfc - Dec 15, 2013 / kfc - Jan 13, 2014
|Georgia Tech and Purdue Supplement.
4 - Hi Rohan! I think you should spell out your abbreviations everytime during an essay. Also, provide more details in...
Undergraduaterohan96 - Jan 7, 2014 / Shugz20 - Jan 13, 2014
|Service can be as simple as returning a wallet or last your lifetime;Virginia Tech Service
1 - Service can be as simple as returning a wallet or last your lifetime. Either way, it is about giving...
Undergraduatehaydenhud - Jan 13, 2014 / — -
|World of Warcraft; University of Michigan- COMMUNITY
UndergraduateQuorra - Jan 4, 2014 / Quorra - Jan 13, 2014
|Taking risks and opening my mind. What life goals will Purdue help you to achieve and how?
Undergraduateroscon1995 - Dec 21, 2013 / STATIC - Jan 13, 2014
|Provide a statement that addresses your reasons & objectives for transferring to cornell.
1 - Growing up as a child in a dense environment gave me a clear experience of low standard education.Nigeria is...
Undergraduateeunice123 - Jan 13, 2014 / — -
|My mother always spoke to me about her childhood ; Long/Short term goals/Hispanic heritage
4 - .... this sentence is too long and therefore your idea does not flow well. Better have couple of...
Undergraduatejoannap_92 - Jan 11, 2014 / dumi - Jan 13, 2014
|My place or environment - Tumbler come to life - Common App
5 - .... I feel you should improve this sentence. It is a way of escaping from stressed daily routine....
Undergraduatecag18 - Dec 30, 2013 / dumi - Jan 13, 2014
|I have always been keen on history; PS (GREAT BRITAIN )
1 - Below is a personal statement that I have to send by wednesday to universities in Great Britain. Could anyone...
Undergraduatetadek2103 - Jan 13, 2014 / — -
|'Leadership is the most appealing characteristic' Need help with revising FSU essay.
Undergraduatepoweraids - Jan 12, 2014 / Est2k - Jan 13, 2014
|Scripps College - Why Scripps? - Graffiti Wall
4 - .... I like the way you begin your answer, this is different from what others begin their answers...
Undergraduatewinginger - Dec 29, 2013 / dumi - Jan 13, 2014
|Michelangelo's Last Judgment; UVA - Work that unsettled me
3 - Michelangelo's masterpiece work, the Last Judgment, is the one that I experience the most unsettling and thought provoking...
Undergraduatestemerson - Dec 19, 2013 / dumi - Jan 13, 2014
|A SHORT STORY STARTING WITH" I felt so excited when I looked at the envelope"IN 120-180 W
Undergraduatemika1998 - Dec 15, 2013 / mika1998 - Jan 13, 2014
|"I am a debater." (Communities Essay) - University of Michigan Essay #1
UndergraduateMyNameIsSlimS - Jan 9, 2014 / dumi - Jan 13, 2014
|Transformed - a decision that serves as a turning point to define the rest of one's life
4 - Hmm... I truly appreciate both of your advice, though the only point I'd beg to differ would be that...
UndergraduateLogophile - Jan 8, 2014 / Logophile - Jan 12, 2014
|Lafayette college - My work experience in my school TV station
3 - Thank you for your advice! Any more suggestion? This essay is really important but I was stuck now....
Undergraduatedorothyoy - Jan 12, 2014 / dorothyoy - Jan 12, 2014
|'beautiful hill town of Darjeeling' - Boarding School essay
2 - I think your first paragraph is good. It sets the scene and time of your essay. However, your second...
UndergraduateKesangla12898 - Jan 9, 2014 / travisl - Jan 12, 2014
|'I'm 13 years old, Grade 8 Student' The Path to My Future -TOPIC OF YOUR CHOICE
2 - dont use abbreviation like isn't in your essay, you should put the complete words like is not....
Undergraduateisoe - Jan 10, 2014 / Qammer - Jan 12, 2014
|Our greatest glory is not in never falling,but in rising every time we fall;Virginia Tech
1 - Hi this is my first post to the forum because Im currently filling out college applications and would like...
UndergraduateEnzo11 - Jan 12, 2014 / — -
|Undergraduate Essay: Topic- change from childhood to adulthood - Moving states
2 - Not to be brash, but how is this a transformation into adulthood? This is a super common story. Hundreds...
Undergraduatemadisonjz12 - Jan 10, 2014 / admission2012 - Jan 12, 2014
|Franklin & Marshall -Who is a Diplomat to you? 'I and my colleagues'
Undergraduatezadocky - Dec 29, 2013 / kathmandu123 - Jan 12, 2014
|I will never feel lonely; Why Carleton ?
3 - Your essay does not really answer the question. You need to talk about what is it about Carleton that...
UndergraduateLiangWu - Jan 11, 2014 / Jinglejingle - Jan 12, 2014
|Common App: ~My dog-eared volume of yellowing papers holds my adventure in life
3 - Thank you! Other than choppy transitions, did my essay's meaning make sense? Also, do I ever sound pretentious? Thanks...
Undergraduateelizabethan998 - Jan 5, 2014 / elizabethan998 - Jan 12, 2014
|'Mom was born in a small village in China' Common Application Personal Statement
UndergraduateHanaEJ - Jan 11, 2014 / — -
|No child can survive on their own without their parents;childhood into adulthood
Undergraduatedsullivan7 - Jan 8, 2014 / dumi - Jan 11, 2014
|Research, CMB/BME, Diversity (Why UofM?) - University of Michigan Essay #2
4 - I agree with twinkinstar. Also when you begin with "while we know so much about it" it better...
UndergraduateMyNameIsSlimS - Jan 8, 2014 / dumi - Jan 10, 2014
|Cornell's CAS Supplement - your current intellectual interests
8 - Thanks! I'll try and incorporate your suggestions. I will review your essay in a little bit; just pulled an...
Undergraduatethenewdude - Jan 9, 2014 / thenewdude - Jan 10, 2014
|"What is it like being a triplet?" REVIEW MY COMMON APP ESSAY! What should I change?
2 - Personally I feel you have a strong essay. I'm not a triplet but I have friends who are twins...
Undergraduatebellbros - Jan 10, 2014 / ravenleighann - Jan 10, 2014
|My hardwork & dedication doesn't receive enough credit;UW Madison-Something goes unnoticed
2 - Sorry I just skimmed this but I really feel you should vary your sentence structure. I see a lot...
Undergraduatechelseascheu - Jan 8, 2014 / Logophile - Jan 10, 2014
|1/2 OF MY QUEENS COMMERCE SUPPLEMENTARY ESSAY
Undergraduate500daysoftrisha - Jan 3, 2014 / 500daysoftrisha - Jan 10, 2014
|'Grade 8, obstacle race, lineup!' ; Common App essay on failure
Undergraduatecitylights - Jan 9, 2014 / citylights - Jan 10, 2014
|Student from East Asia, Statement of Purpose
2 - With his efforts, numerous product lines were created; those product lines produced things... The unique experience makes me believe...
UndergraduateMichealty94 - Jan 7, 2014 / niesaysi - Jan 10, 2014
|'I want to develop Apparatus' CCNY app - Grove School
Undergraduateyuankevin123 - Jan 7, 2014 / Utau4928 - Jan 9, 2014
|Writing, music, film... - influence on person I became. Virginia Tech Applicant Statement
2 - I think that slash (/) should not be used in formal writing. Focus on your goal and objective...
UndergraduateOptimist - Jan 7, 2014 / Utau4928 - Jan 9, 2014
|Cornell Suppliment - Physics, Philosophy, Experimental Theatre
UndergraduateShilay - Jan 9, 2014 / Utau4928 - Jan 9, 2014
|'As a student of Corning East High School' Georgia Tech Essay - Contribution to community
3 - Thank you so much!! And yeah I wanted to talk about their research programs and dance teams too, but...
Undergraduatesunny0122 - Jan 9, 2014 / sunny0122 - Jan 9, 2014
|McCormick School of Engineering's NORTHWESTERN SUPPLEMENT: UNIQUE QUALITIES
7 - I agree with MyNameIsSlimS that that fragment is too generic, especially when the rest of you essay is very...
UndergraduateKristoria - Jan 7, 2014 / Shilay - Jan 9, 2014
|Have been taking an ESL course - GAP ESSAY
Undergraduatefiftyskye - Jan 7, 2014 / fiftyskye - Jan 9, 2014
|"Reporting like Ron"; Pepperdine Suppl
4 - I think you answered the prompt very well! I really love the originality and creativity of your answer! I'm...
UndergraduateHen - Jan 5, 2014 / MyNameIsSlimS - Jan 9, 2014
|'innate curiosity of mine' NC State statement about major choice
6 - I took out household tools and electronics in order to save space as this is exactly 500 characters. Is...
Undergraduatesokomov - Jan 8, 2014 / sokomov - Jan 9, 2014
|FRANKLIN AND MARSHALL SUPPLEMENT..LEARNING BY DOING !! NEED HELP
2 - I will be able to change this for creating [to create ] a more sustainable environment. I will...
Undergraduateimpatient101 - Jan 9, 2014 / grey_form - Jan 9, 2014
|"The Bull Within Me" - UC Prompt #2
4 - plee24, thank you so much for your advice, it's invaluable. I will make the changes you provided, and also...
UndergraduateGokuKetchum - Nov 28, 2013 / GokuKetchum - Jan 9, 2014
|HARD DECISION; U of M Common App Transfer and Community Essay.
2 - As the year continued, I realized that staying home may not have been the best choice after all. ---...
Undergraduaterainswor - Jan 6, 2014 / matsumelrose - Jan 9, 2014
|'not 2+2=4 but 4=2+2' Cornell Supplement- Why Biology for College of Arts and Sciences
3 - You have really good ideas in the essay and it does flow nicely. I saw you were missing words....
Undergraduatebg32 - Jan 8, 2014 / kesangla - Jan 9, 2014
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