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|I despise school - I have a story to tell UChicago
3 - It is a very touching story! However, I won't give you a candy. I despise school. Climbing out...
Undergraduatetruongb14 - Jan 3, 2014 / Xenon54 - Jan 3, 2014
|Female Empowerment! Georgetown : Global Issue
1 - While Georgetown doesnt have a word limit, I would like to cut it down to a page. I suggestions...
Undergraduateadatiger96 - Jan 3, 2014 / — -
|Touching the dogs / Coding months / Mirage life - Stanford
3 - BachChaconne2, thank you so much. I did edit and shorten these a bit more before submitting a few days...
UndergraduateGokuKetchum - Jan 1, 2014 / GokuKetchum - Jan 3, 2014
|I always believed that I wanted to be a model; NYU Bio
4 - I love this idea -- so creative! Although I would elaborate more on how NYU in particular can fulfill...
Undergraduateitsgraci3 - Dec 28, 2013 / 500daysoftrisha - Jan 3, 2014
|Why Boston University? my longing to grow as a person
5 - Woah! That sounds like an interesting major. However, you do not sound too thrilled. Just visit BU's website and...
Undergraduateygicantoo - Jan 2, 2014 / lilly1218 - Jan 3, 2014
|Every summer was the same to me; Discuss an accomplishment or event, formal or informal
2 - Maybe calling yourself an introvert overall will minimize being redundant, maybe take out details that are unnecessary to the...
UndergraduateSkordi - Jan 1, 2014 / ygicantoo - Jan 2, 2014
|GW offers an education &college experience with a truly unique impact &once-in-a-life time
2 - How* to make a living. Take out "in my view" it's not necessary since you are the one writing...
UndergraduateEighthHorcrux - Jan 2, 2014 / ygicantoo - Jan 2, 2014
|Hiring a contractor - unfathomable universe - supplement for Yale
Undergraduategarmin610 - Dec 31, 2013 / plee24 - Jan 2, 2014
|Delirious - The Common App Essay #2 Struggle! Me and my Mountains
UndergraduateShadycurtains - Dec 30, 2013 / BachChaconne2 - Jan 2, 2014
|Spanish classroom - COMMON APP ENVIRONMENT ESSAY
Undergraduateallenrickli - Dec 31, 2013 / allenrickli - Jan 2, 2014
|Bates College : Supplementary Essay - "How this Statement inspires you."
7 - Thanks on reviewing my essay. I know I am too late now but as a German applicant (similar educational...
UndergraduateOMGreeny - Dec 31, 2013 / savusavu - Jan 2, 2014
|Goals for engineers - Why am I a good fit for UPenn Engineering?
Undergraduateramzee05 - Jan 2, 2014 / ramzee05 - Jan 2, 2014
|Pomona Supplement Create a Course "The Art and Science behind the Smile"
1 - I was really stuck on this one. Is my tone too degrading? Please comment and make suggestions! Be harsh!...
Undergraduatelilly1218 - Jan 2, 2014 / — -
|PLAYING CARDS - Business is in my blood ; Central to Identity
Undergraduatemmcspiritt - Dec 31, 2013 / mmcspiritt - Jan 2, 2014
|The pre-medical program - COMMON APP ESSAY: BOSTON UNIVERSITY: QUESTION
2 - Didgeridoo I love Boston because it is rich in history and culture. I've been lucky to visit Boston...
UndergraduateKami8246 - Jan 2, 2014 / Kami8246 - Jan 2, 2014
|"Make your passion your work, and work will become a game" That test night..(UIUC essay 1)
2 - This is an interesting response, but focus your essay more on the prompt. You focus most of the response...
Undergraduaterohan96 - Jan 2, 2014 / Didgeridoo - Jan 2, 2014
|Why Northwestern/Penn? Communications major
Undergraduatelilly1218 - Jan 1, 2014 / BachChaconne2 - Jan 2, 2014
|My point of no return laptop - Describe a place where you are perfectly content.
3 - Thank you! I thought the exact same thing so I modified it to make it a little less "run-on."...
UndergraduateSMINICK975 - Jan 1, 2014 / SMINICK975 - Jan 2, 2014
|Why Macalester? The website was what sparked the initial interest
5 - I too think so. Also, I guess other colleges too talk about their current activities and other stuff...
Undergraduateiacero - Dec 29, 2013 / dumi - Jan 2, 2014
|' I'm a practical student' My way into Engineering - USC - academic interests
2 - In my country, the decision on major is a crucial one because high schools offer specific and pre-directed...
Undergraduatefiftyskye - Dec 29, 2013 / dumi - Jan 2, 2014
|'We live in a world where...' Major in chemical engineering; Study objectives
Undergraduatechemestudent - Dec 31, 2013 / chemestudent - Jan 2, 2014
|"Good bye, Do Hwan. We will miss you!" to a New Adventure; Commonapp Main essay
Undergraduateseobyok95 - Jan 1, 2014 / Ekeson - Jan 2, 2014
|I have my ups and downs; Celebrate your nerdy side
Undergraduatebercony - Dec 29, 2013 / dumi - Jan 2, 2014
|Complimenting my personality and professional ambitions - UPENN Supplement Essay
2 - Good stuff. Positive: Well written , good grammar good content , good integrating your experience. Nitpicking "Wharton has the...
Undergraduateworriedjuan123 - Jan 1, 2014 / ByTheWay23 - Jan 2, 2014
|Bluffs above the beach;Perfectly content
Undergraduateccanales15 - Jan 1, 2014 / ccanales15 - Jan 1, 2014
|''I was born in 1996' Good and bad relationships with my parents - Common app essay
UndergraduateLillie - Jan 1, 2014 / Lillie - Jan 1, 2014
|My adventure has started at last; BackgroundStory(exchange student)
6 - Agree with Hen. GAP experience also an important factor showing that you also make difference in building your...
UndergraduateOMGreeny - Dec 31, 2013 / mayaRa - Jan 1, 2014
|MIT short essays. Attribute of personality, my world, significant challenge.
4 - I generally take the below as the guidance to answer this prompt - "The World you come from "...
UndergraduateShilay - Jan 1, 2014 / dumi - Jan 1, 2014
|'Chemistry has always fascinated me' University of Toronto-Engineering Essay
1 - Hey guys, I was wondering if you could read over my essay that I've prepared for the University of...
Undergraduatecorruptfate - Jan 1, 2014 / — -
|I always wanted to go into the business field. As time passed I was drawn to marketing.
2 - try to add maybe a little more details about specific programs you can join and about entrepreneurships....
Undergraduateworriedjuan123 - Jan 1, 2014 / cag18 - Jan 1, 2014
|recovering drug addict - Stanford supplement about intellectual vitality
5 - blazerd123 thank you so much for all of that feedback and editing like actually that was so helpful!!...
Undergraduatespark - Jan 1, 2014 / spark - Jan 1, 2014
|Center for Career Development - NYU Supplement for Stern
5 - Your essay sounds very pretentious. You state that you want to understand the issues of wealth distribution but you...
Undergraduatesupbrahs - Jan 1, 2014 / Kondite - Jan 1, 2014
|The Rain Room / Fu Foundation School - Why Columbia; Why Engineering
2 - These are all excellent. They're well written, clearly show your passion for science and BME and are specific to...
Undergraduateplee24 - Jan 1, 2014 / garmin610 - Jan 1, 2014
|shows like Lizzie McGuire - BOSTON COLLEGE SUPPLEMENT
Undergraduateana523 - Dec 30, 2013 / cag18 - Jan 1, 2014
|Columbia Essay: Superman and I, One and The Same
2 - Your essays seems to be fairly well-written and you chose something that very few people probably did. However, you...
Undergraduateblazerd123 - Jan 1, 2014 / SilverKnight - Jan 1, 2014
|FILM MAKING; Academic interests- USC (Film/TV Production)
4 - Your essay fully answered the question. You showed passion and emotion in your interests and your plan seems to...
UndergraduateNinja4hire - Nov 30, 2013 / montezuma64 - Jan 1, 2014
|surgical robot on campus - my Hopkins supplement
1 - The prompt: Why Hopkins? Please be very harsh. I would you say it than the adcoms. Thank you. ...
Undergraduategarmin610 - Jan 1, 2014 / — -
|A women's college - Barnard Writing Supplement: How and Why?
UndergraduateLillie - Jan 1, 2014 / Lillie - Jan 1, 2014
|Otherside by Macklemore and Ryan Lewis -Columbia essay cultural event you found meaningful
Undergraduatemclark13 - Jan 1, 2014 / OccamsRazor - Jan 1, 2014
|Columbia. Science is my passion, but so is Spiderman.
2 - I think the connection to childhood fantasy is appealing. the blue words are what IMO too normal the red...
Undergraduateblazerd123 - Jan 1, 2014 / LiangWu - Jan 1, 2014
|interaction between teacher and student - Johns Hopkins Undergrad essay
3 - i would suggest you focus some more on your specific interest and relate them to what John Hopkins has...
Undergraduatealromeo - Dec 31, 2013 / OccamsRazor - Jan 1, 2014
|"It immediately excites me..." Business Institutions Program - Why Northwestern?
3 - thanks~musicpro, i found your suggestion to say academics in priority really help them grasp my identity. and i have...
UndergraduateLiangWu - Dec 30, 2013 / LiangWu - Jan 1, 2014
|'Rise attracts me with its copious research devotion...' The happiest students - Why Rice
6 - thanks for all of the comments, i've submitted it today(last day lol), did any of you need help? cause...
UndergraduateLiangWu - Dec 30, 2013 / LiangWu - Jan 1, 2014
|Boulder Enterance Essay 2- Enriching the University's Diverse Atmosphere
2 - I don't know. I had the sense that you were just listing your academic achievements. You need to respond...
UndergraduateBamboojack - Jan 1, 2014 / fiftyskye - Jan 1, 2014
|Columbia. The Lion and the Engineer, What could They Possibly Have in Common
2 - ....The lion embodies many of the traits I have, albeit at a lesser degree... ....And as my interviewer...
Undergraduateblazerd123 - Jan 1, 2014 / worriedjuan123 - Jan 1, 2014
|Everything it has to offer; What I find appealing about Columbia
2 - Really well written. In my opinion, I would change "To receive..." to something like "To be given.." or something...
Undergraduatemclark13 - Jan 1, 2014 / worriedjuan123 - Jan 1, 2014
|Vanderbilt Question; Sunday School isn't what you imagine it to be.
3 - hey would this essay work well fro the "Briefly describe which single activity listed in the Activity section of...
Undergraduateblazerd123 - Jan 1, 2014 / blazerd123 - Jan 1, 2014
|Sessions with my Arab friends - Stanford roommate essay
Undergraduatekh28698 - Dec 31, 2013 / fiftyskye - Jan 1, 2014
|The cars salesman - common app essay
Undergraduatecag18 - Dec 31, 2013 / Utau4928 - Jan 1, 2014
|"What are you doing? Go away!" Personal statement- Relationship with brother
14 - I love this essay! It's so engaging and heartfelt. If I was an admissions officer, I'd admit you (:...
Undergraduatelilly1218 - Jul 18, 2013 / cicijolee - Jan 1, 2014
|I love economics and Careers In - UofChicago
2 - I love economics. Terms like scarcity, elasticity, productivity, and utility turn me on . Some of the things which...
UndergraduateChetan96312 - Dec 31, 2013 / Bamboojack - Jan 1, 2014
|"Misty wraiths, the vestiges..." Common app personal statement, Amelia's story
2 - I really like your essay. It's beautifully written. Would you mind telling me your essay prompt? I think you're...
Undergraduatezoinkhurst - Dec 31, 2013 / Lillie - Jan 1, 2014
|D&D (Dungeons and Dragons) / PSAT test - MIT essays
UndergraduateGervin101 - Dec 30, 2013 / Gervin101 - Jan 1, 2014
|Issue of Vogue / TV screen controller - Johns Hophkins Undergrad Essay
4 - Its a very different approach, i will applaud you for that. However, when I read the prompt and then...
UndergraduateHen - Dec 30, 2013 / OccamsRazor - Jan 1, 2014
|I have this dream of being a vegan; William & Mary Essay
1 - I don't really know if this is supposed to be 500 words, but mine is longer....my bad...any advice? here...
UndergraduateAbbi1129 - Jan 1, 2014 / — -
|Mandarin, Burmese, Tagalog, Cambodian, Russian, Spanish - Extracurricular Activity
3 - mclark13 I needed to expand of one of my extracurricular activities for Stanford and Columbia- I wrote about my...
Undergraduatemclark13 - Dec 31, 2013 / blazerd123 - Jan 1, 2014
|University of Rochester- My perfect fit college
4 - I really like this essay! You answered the prompt very well, and you show your knowledge about the school....
UndergraduateOryx97 - Dec 30, 2013 / rbuttar14 - Jan 1, 2014
|Eco Protectors - Lafayette: What do you do? Why do you do it?
Undergraduatethenewdude - Dec 29, 2013 / Sewar - Jan 1, 2014
|I want to build, design and innovate the world of tomorrow; U Toronto(Engineering)
3 - Thanks, this helped allot. A little surprised that my grammar is perfect though, im not sure if i used...
UndergraduateSewar - Dec 24, 2013 / Sewar - Jan 1, 2014
|deciding on colleges to attend this year - University Of Pennsylvania Supplement Essay
2 - Very good essay -- My only suggestion is that in the last paragraph, don't talk about your process in...
UndergraduateRobaE - Dec 31, 2013 / jonathachou711 - Jan 1, 2014
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