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|I am no soccer prodigy; UC Essay
UndergraduateGoonerTH14 - Dec 30, 2013 / cicijolee - Dec 31, 2013
|Education - but most importantly the ability to attain one; What matters & why-Stanford
Undergraduatemlozano11 - Dec 30, 2013 / mlozano11 - Dec 30, 2013
|'routine cardiovascular exercise and a well-balanced diet' Obesity At Large; Health Essay
2 - I think you should take out "tasting bad" in the sentence about cafeteria food because it's unrepeatable to the...
Undergraduatekjstoddard16 - Dec 28, 2013 / boston1002 - Dec 30, 2013
|I saw myself as a snail riding a leaf which drifted in water; Background/ Identity
4 - Overall this is really well written and I think it's fantastic that you were able to communicate your story...
UndergraduateMrDoodleFace - Dec 30, 2013 / mclark13 - Dec 30, 2013
|Activity/Favorite Musical artists/Significant Challenge/ Summer/ Favorite event; STANFORD
1 - Stanford - Describe an activity: The same way you hold a dollar bill to the light to verify its...
Undergraduateadatiger96 - Dec 30, 2013 / — -
|Brown - Study areas/ Music community/ Why Brown?
Undergraduatecicijolee - Dec 30, 2013 / cicijolee - Dec 30, 2013
|Yale short answers - Philosophy - Physics - woman
UndergraduateShilay - Dec 30, 2013 / Shilay - Dec 30, 2013
|Stanford Supplement Essay- What matters to you, and why? MY BAG
2 - JoseCollege What matters to me? My bag matters to me. Why does my bag matter to me? Simply put,...
UndergraduateJoseCollege - Dec 30, 2013 / calpride - Dec 30, 2013
|'I want to do everything' NYU Supplement - Why I make a good match to NYU/ Gallatin
3 - I really enjoyed reading your essay as I feel like you incorporated a nice personal touch into it. I'm...
Undergraduateash0lex8 - Dec 28, 2013 / haayounglee - Dec 30, 2013
|I've been facing some difficult issues; Yale SUPP
6 - Thanks, it helps a lot! I already wrote my common app essay about my mother disorder and how it...
Undergraduatekekaaas - Dec 29, 2013 / kekaaas - Dec 30, 2013
|Research Group; UPENN / Activities I'd Participate
2 - I can see that your essay is well-written and is without grammatical errors. However, what seems to be missing...
UndergraduateKanyinqt - Dec 29, 2013 / SilverKnight - Dec 30, 2013
|'I'm still not sure..' What matters to you, and why? Wrote about photos and home.
4 - What do others think? Does it give off a vibe that the admissions officers would not want to see?...
Undergraduatecollindching - Dec 30, 2013 / collindching - Dec 30, 2013
|NYUAD's combination of liberal arts education and research; Regional Academic Travel
3 - :D thx!...
Undergraduatequanny - Dec 30, 2013 / quanny - Dec 30, 2013
|Once I turned seventeen, I was I felt pressured from school; NYU SUP
2 - I would re-read the first sentence, it sounds a bit awkward. "I only really enjoyed the colorful scenes...
Undergraduatenewyorker - Dec 30, 2013 / Hen - Dec 30, 2013
|I love to solve problems; Northwestern Supplement: Why Northwestern?
2 - The essay is short and sweet. You went straight to why you liked each aspect of the school and...
Undergraduatechasetrox - Dec 30, 2013 / Hen - Dec 30, 2013
|Yale speaks to me, I want Yale--- Yale short answer
3 - I like the beginning of the why yale answer. Especially the "I can't hear the words but" part. Though...
UndergraduateOryx97 - Dec 29, 2013 / cicijolee - Dec 30, 2013
|Food/ Baking/ Bioengineering; MIT; Central to Identity/Pleasure activity/ Major
8 - bump!...
Undergraduateplee24 - Dec 27, 2013 / plee24 - Dec 30, 2013
|Stanford Supplemental Essay- What matters to you and why- Toilets
2 - I'm not going to lie; this made me laugh. Seriously, good job with thinking up an unconventional essay topic....
Undergraduatedkhan - Dec 30, 2013 / iamnicholas1 - Dec 30, 2013
|MY WORLD AT THE TOP OF THE HILL; WHY HAMILTON COLLEGE?
3 - I agree with routeman. In order to make this a stronger response, you need to establish what the "hill"...
UndergraduateNabgyamfi - Dec 30, 2013 / iamnicholas1 - Dec 30, 2013
|financial aid workshop - New York University supplement
5 - Oh okay Thank you! Do you think I should cut down on some sentences in the beginning that may...
Undergraduateazmain1217 - Dec 23, 2013 / azmain1217 - Dec 30, 2013
|"Without an Expression"- CENTRAL TO IDENTITY
Undergraduatejleck95 - Dec 30, 2013 / Zackjam1 - Dec 30, 2013
|the daunting challenger - MIT where I come from
1 - The prompt is "Describe the world you come from; for example, your family, clubs, school, community, city, or town....
UndergraduateBiinary - Dec 30, 2013 / — -
|MADNESS; UNIVERSITY OF VIRGINIA- FAVORITE WORD.
UndergraduateiPreo - Dec 30, 2013 / iPreo - Dec 30, 2013
|Which version of my "MIT: describe your world" responses is better?
3 - In general, I can see how this situation affected you, but not how it shaped your dreams and aspiration...
Undergraduateplee24 - Dec 29, 2013 / dorbaruch - Dec 30, 2013
|Chemistry, calculus, English - Vanderbilt Supplement Essay
3 - I like the specific example "Cole" but I think you could have used more examples exemplifying this activities importance...
Undergraduatekgc123 - Dec 30, 2013 / jleck95 - Dec 30, 2013
|Bookstore and café - CommonApp Essay (favorite place prompt)
15 - Thank you everyone for looking over my essay! and sorry for the late reply thenewdude: I'll look over...
Undergraduatecicijolee - Dec 26, 2013 / cicijolee - Dec 30, 2013
|Additional Comments Essay: Math has never been my cup of tea
Undergraduatecocamb - Dec 30, 2013 / cocamb - Dec 30, 2013
|My passion for the human body - Johns Hopkins Supplement
Undergraduaterbuttar14 - Dec 30, 2013 / cag18 - Dec 30, 2013
|Who I am? Common Application Essay - Finding my identity
2 - Knowledge and apprehension do not agree 8th sentence in the first paragraph (ś) apprehension means fear...so I don't...
Undergraduatediana0310 - Dec 30, 2013 / Kanyinqt - Dec 30, 2013
|My personal discovery of historical misconceptions and hidden history
Undergraduatemlozano11 - Dec 27, 2013 / kgc123 - Dec 30, 2013
|dreadful diagnosis - James Madison Admissions Essay
1 - I have written my essay and the prompt was basically write whatever you pleased. So I was hoping for...
UndergraduateRoxfan19 - Dec 30, 2013 / — -
|Rice University - Why Rice? - GATEWAY and WHO
3 - If Rice have any unique programs/opportunities then include those in your essay. You can also write more about the...
Undergraduatewinginger - Dec 28, 2013 / jleck95 - Dec 30, 2013
|What has inspired you to pursue an engineering degree? University of Toronto App essay
UndergraduateAstron00t - Dec 30, 2013 / kgc123 - Dec 30, 2013
|Boulder Enterance Essay 1- Big moment/ achievement in life
UndergraduateBamboojack - Dec 30, 2013 / kgc123 - Dec 30, 2013
|The Mountains - Tufts essay, what makes you happy?
UndergraduateWoodstock - Dec 30, 2013 / Woodstock - Dec 30, 2013
|CDs and Swiper - grammar/ MIT essay
2 - read this mitadmissions . org / blogs / entry / ive_got_99_problems_admissions (no spaces) number 9...
UndergraduateAr4yk - Dec 30, 2013 / Woodstock - Dec 30, 2013
|'As an English major with a focus in English...' Japan Studies Program Essay
2 - Overall, I like the amount of detail and concrete examples you gave to support your opinion, but it feels...
Undergraduatekaiya1969 - Dec 29, 2013 / plee24 - Dec 30, 2013
|"Behind the Camera, Behind a laptop" - Extracurricular Activity Essay
2 - It sounds as if you are on your way! The only my only suggestion work on keeping everything in...
Undergraduateclassof18 - Dec 30, 2013 / enique94 - Dec 30, 2013
|stage phobia - Essay for MIT - The most significant challenge you have faced
1 - The most significant challenge you have faced, and how you manage it 250 words As soon as the...
UndergraduateAr4yk - Dec 30, 2013 / — -
|Priority research programs - Northwestern University Common application -essay
UndergraduateSciencetransmit - Dec 30, 2013 / acewashere - Dec 30, 2013
|'Politics has always been...' "Tell us something about yourself/your perspective"
3 - It's a good essay but it is a lot of telling instead of showing. Perhaps you can delve deeper...
UndergraduateOneiromancer - Dec 29, 2013 / acewashere - Dec 30, 2013
|"We do not question 'god'"; background /central to identity
4 - You're right that religion may be controversial, so you should be careful where do you send it - I...
Undergraduatenavidah - Dec 30, 2013 / Shilay - Dec 30, 2013
|Sterling library / Bilbo / Religion Life / Leader / Public speaker / Cabo-Yale Supplements
3 - I'm not sure, but meybe you should be more specific with your "why Yale" answer. I read somewhere that...
Undergraduatemclark13 - Dec 30, 2013 / Shilay - Dec 30, 2013
|Brain and Cognitive Sciences at MIT- why major?
Undergraduatequanny - Dec 28, 2013 / quanny - Dec 30, 2013
|Running on our school's track every night; Rice short answer
Undergraduatemmhly2011 - Dec 25, 2013 / Kanadec96 - Dec 30, 2013
|My admiration for my FATHER;University of Toronto - What inspired me to pursue Engineering
3 - Well.... you need to tell them what inspired you pursue an engineering degree and why would you like...
Undergraduatehanlus - Dec 28, 2013 / dumi - Dec 30, 2013
|local private school - COMMON APP PERSONAL STATEMENT
1 - Please edit my personal statement! Will critique back! "One day, I just looked in the mirror and realized...
Undergraduatemclark13 - Dec 30, 2013 / — -
|Hot tea and Lifetime movies - MIT essay
UndergraduateKanadec96 - Dec 30, 2013 / mclark13 - Dec 30, 2013
|...seashells, Pokemon cards, and US quarters - UChicago Supplement - Yo soy yo y mi...
3 - Thanks for the read! The "perfect" was supposed to be for the having-to-use-my-imagination part..I'll see if I can clarify...
Undergraduatehelloimyellow - Dec 29, 2013 / helloimyellow - Dec 30, 2013
|Cleanup Day, What are we going to do when we meet up? / Stanford Roommate Essays
Undergraduateprim0rdia1 - Dec 29, 2013 / iacero - Dec 30, 2013
|"Heidi, you good!"; Bowdoin Supplement - Common Good
5 - So you are trying to say that building individual relationships contributes to the Common Good, but people don't notice...
UndergraduateLN4 - Dec 29, 2013 / plee24 - Dec 29, 2013
|passion for social justice/ Kellner Performing Arts Centre ; BARNARD; Why?/ Community
1 - Hello, could you please check grammar, sentence structure etc thank you. How did you first learn about Barnard...
Undergraduatejojoy3 - Dec 29, 2013 / — -
|'I have been knocked down by grief' Essay about moving on after a death in the family
5 - Ah I see. Well I did understand that you had a flashback moment to your grandma and you taking...
Undergraduatemaddigirl - Dec 29, 2013 / iacero - Dec 29, 2013
|unlimited flexibility - WHY PENN ENGINEERING-- supplement
Undergraduatehelloimyellow - Dec 28, 2013 / helloimyellow - Dec 29, 2013
|Botson and Careerlink - BU MY DREAM SCHOOL
4 - I agree with enique94. You should specify those other interests that BU offers and perhaps something specific that students...
UndergraduatePrecious123 - Dec 29, 2013 / Kanyinqt - Dec 29, 2013
|Licking tigers - UCHICAGO- favorites supplement-- Dr. Seuss and painting
4 - Other than the clarifications that were suggested by llsir (I have never heard of Highlights magazine either), which are...
Undergraduatehelloimyellow - Dec 29, 2013 / plee24 - Dec 29, 2013
|"like mother, like son"; Yale Essay B (Mother vs Son)
3 - I agree with quanny; I like that you included an extra anecdote about yourself but the underlying quality of...
Undergraduateakshay1996 - Dec 28, 2013 / plee24 - Dec 29, 2013
|Lego Kits - "My interest in mechanical engineering"- UIUC prompt
4 - Hmmm, well I actually liked both, so I made a hybrid! Version 2 has a better hook, although it...
Undergraduatesupbrahs - Dec 29, 2013 / llsir - Dec 29, 2013
|Duke is a liberal arts college with strong science programs; Why Duke?
4 - llsir Talk about how you'll specifically use what you get at duke to further your learning. Good essay otherwise....
Undergraduatellsir - Dec 29, 2013 / johntasker - Dec 29, 2013
|"It's the possibility that keeps me going, not the guarantee"; UVA Favorite Word
Undergraduateaaamonicaaa - Dec 21, 2013 / aaamonicaaa - Dec 29, 2013
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