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|'Being an engineer takes big responsibility' City College Essay
3 - I really do not know how to start an opening sentence. Any suggestion that can improve my opening sentence....
Undergraduatemyjaymusic95 - Jan 3, 2014 / myjaymusic95 - Jan 5, 2014
|'..my knowledge of Yale is wholly derived from media' Yale answers - International student
3 - My knowledge about Yale is limited to what I learned from media about the university. ...Better...
Undergraduatedorbaruch - Dec 30, 2013 / dumi - Jan 5, 2014
|William Bouguereau ; UVA - What work of art, music, science,mathematics, or literature
3 - Well.... they stress on "What work of art, music, science, mathematics, or literature has surprised, unsettled, or...
Undergraduatemicahmikester - Dec 30, 2013 / dumi - Jan 5, 2014
|1/2 OF MY QUEENS COMMERCE SUPPLEMENTARY ESSAY
Undergraduate500daysoftrisha - Jan 3, 2014 / rohan96 - Jan 5, 2014
|"What can be done about it?; Accomplishment or event
4 - Thanks! I'll incorporate the corrections into my essay. However I somehow feel that the essay needs more depth and...
Undergraduaterohan96 - Jan 4, 2014 / rohan96 - Jan 5, 2014
|Experiences shape who we are and mold the future we will have; extracurricular activity
3 - From the looks of your essay I believe it isn't paragraphed. I would suggest you to chop it into...
Undergraduatejmr213 - Jan 4, 2014 / rohan96 - Jan 5, 2014
|Interact Club - to share ideas with like-minded people who like me, are interested in helping others
UndergraduateFuntena6 - Jan 5, 2014 / Funtena6 - Jan 5, 2014
|How an education at The Art Institute of Philadelphia will help you obtain your goals.
2 - This may be a little harsh, but better from me than from an adcom. Sorry, I don't exactly see...
Undergraduatehirschmugl6 - Jan 4, 2014 / plee24 - Jan 4, 2014
|'As a child, Santa, and later my...' INTELLECTUAL EXPERIENCE/VITALITY ESSAY-STANFORD SUPP
NEW - PROMPT: Stanford students possess an intellectual vitality. Reflect on an idea or experience that has been important to your...
Undergraduatemmitchell32 - Jan 4, 2014 / — -
|The summer of 2012 a fire lit inside me- Why did you apply for UW Madison....
Undergraduatecollegegirlxxx - Jan 3, 2014 / fiftyskye - Jan 4, 2014
|"Kelsey, art extraordinaire" Common App essay about my background in art
Undergraduatekburke652 - Jan 4, 2014 / Asiak - Jan 4, 2014
|Curiosity/New Experience/ Engineering; VCU- Primary goal,Challenging situation
NEW - Let me know if there is anything I should change. My parents have been proofreading, but I want a...
Undergraduatemaddykd - Jan 4, 2014 / — -
|Influence (Family,culture, environment) & Unique qualities/charcteristics; UCF
4 - I am very fortunate to have been raised by two amazing parents who inculcated good morals and values...
Undergraduatetwinlamps - Dec 30, 2013 / dumi - Jan 4, 2014
|"The Clash Between My Worlds" Common app essay help?
3 - ... is that "Bengali" or "Bangladeshi"? You speak Bengali, but you hail from Bangladesh, isn't that so? ...
Undergraduatesaberiz - Dec 29, 2013 / dumi - Jan 4, 2014
|'Thomas Carlyle once said...' My goals in Queen's University and beyond
3 - you have been vague in telling what branch of engineering better use other words than sagacious for profs. excel...
Undergraduatemontezuma64 - Jan 1, 2014 / kishorbhandari - Jan 4, 2014
|An Experience Like No Other. BU Supplement.
2 - you might want to reconsider this sentence Of course, college should not be all work with no play .express...
Undergraduaterianhawaiian - Jan 4, 2014 / kishorbhandari - Jan 4, 2014
|'my desire to change the business world' BU Supplement need proofreading
2 - I have experienced many things throughout my eighteen years of life. No, you don't ! Adcoms usually don't like...
Undergraduatedozo14 - Jan 3, 2014 / joemaxlop - Jan 4, 2014
|'It was the summer holidays of grade 11' Teaching is in my bloodlines...(UIUC prompt 2)
2 - There is several occurrence of "realised" shouldn't it be "realized" instead? Else, I like the tone you are taking...
Undergraduaterohan96 - Jan 3, 2014 / joemaxlop - Jan 4, 2014
|[ University of Toronto ] - Engineering essay ( Why Engineering, Why UofT, What skills..)
NEW - Hi everyone, Here is my work for the University of Toronto prompt: What has inspired you to pursue...
Undergraduatejoemaxlop - Jan 4, 2014 / — -
|"Briefly elaborate on one of your extracurricular activities" - USC prompt
UndergraduateJohnGospel - Jan 3, 2014 / 500daysoftrisha - Jan 4, 2014
|'Becoming a doctor' / 'Body language' -Tufts Supplemental Essays
5 - So you mean i should whether agree or disagree, but in the following paragraphs of mine i should say...
Undergraduateshadiali - Dec 29, 2008 / minaf - Jan 4, 2014
|When I am challenged more, then I can work harder; TRANSFER
2 - Having good study groups is very essential because we can work as teams to help better understand a certain...
UndergraduateShugz20 - Jan 3, 2014 / rohan96 - Jan 4, 2014
|I'm Hard Worker - George Washington supplements
Undergraduatebaksh1994 - Jan 3, 2014 / hello_sunshine - Jan 3, 2014
|Why would I want to transfer from a two year Community College to a four year University?
4 - Right now, your essay is a tad generic. It's kind of obvious that a larger university will have more...
UndergraduateShugz20 - Jan 3, 2014 / Didgeridoo - Jan 3, 2014
|Describe a topic central to your identity: My Mother and Poland.
2 - This was a good snapshot of your heritage, but you were right when you said that it isn't enough...
UndergraduateAsiak - Jan 3, 2014 / Didgeridoo - Jan 3, 2014
|I did not come from the land of opportunity or of liberty and freedom; CENTRAL TO IDENTITY
3 - thank you for your help butI'm confused of what you're trying to do. I know my grammar is dad,...
Undergraduatehello_sunshine - Dec 30, 2013 / hello_sunshine - Jan 3, 2014
|In no longer than 250 words tell us why Boston University is a good fit for you.
Undergraduateygicantoo - Jan 3, 2014 / hello_sunshine - Jan 3, 2014
|Tell us about a time you took a risk, failed, and were able to pick up the pieces.
2 - Congrats on being President! I personally liked your essay a lot and how you managed to setup the reader...
UndergraduateEighthHorcrux - Jan 3, 2014 / theshdw - Jan 3, 2014
|Biology and Economics major. The Ideal School for Me - Carnegie Mellon Supplement
3 - I think you did a good job tying economics and biology together. Your essay was clear and succinct....
Undergraduaterbuttar14 - Jan 1, 2014 / Chigozie - Jan 3, 2014
|'isolation and alienation by communities' success can be disastrous?
Undergraduatebraska1 - Jan 3, 2014 / — -
|THE DA VINCI - Johns Hopkins Supplement!
Undergraduatesanatm - Jan 2, 2014 / sanatm - Jan 3, 2014
|miracle worker - Notre Dame Supplement: is this on topic?
3 - According to me the above poster has rectified all the errors. You can add some more detail about the...
Undergraduatejoshuazh - Jan 2, 2014 / rohan96 - Jan 3, 2014
|I despise school - I have a story to tell UChicago
3 - It is a very touching story! However, I won't give you a candy. I despise school. Climbing out...
Undergraduatetruongb14 - Jan 3, 2014 / Xenon54 - Jan 3, 2014
|Female Empowerment! Georgetown : Global Issue
NEW - While Georgetown doesnt have a word limit, I would like to cut it down to a page. I suggestions...
Undergraduateadatiger96 - Jan 3, 2014 / — -
|Touching the dogs / Coding months / Mirage life - Stanford
3 - BachChaconne2, thank you so much. I did edit and shorten these a bit more before submitting a few days...
UndergraduateGokuKetchum - Jan 1, 2014 / GokuKetchum - Jan 3, 2014
|I always believed that I wanted to be a model; NYU Bio
4 - I love this idea -- so creative! Although I would elaborate more on how NYU in particular can fulfill...
Undergraduateitsgraci3 - Dec 28, 2013 / 500daysoftrisha - Jan 3, 2014
|Why Boston University? my longing to grow as a person
5 - Woah! That sounds like an interesting major. However, you do not sound too thrilled. Just visit BU's website and...
Undergraduateygicantoo - Jan 2, 2014 / lilly1218 - Jan 3, 2014
|Every summer was the same to me; Discuss an accomplishment or event, formal or informal
2 - Maybe calling yourself an introvert overall will minimize being redundant, maybe take out details that are unnecessary to the...
UndergraduateSkordi - Jan 1, 2014 / ygicantoo - Jan 2, 2014
|GW offers an education &college experience with a truly unique impact &once-in-a-life time
2 - How* to make a living. Take out "in my view" it's not necessary since you are the one writing...
UndergraduateEighthHorcrux - Jan 2, 2014 / ygicantoo - Jan 2, 2014
|Hiring a contractor - unfathomable universe - supplement for Yale
Undergraduategarmin610 - Dec 31, 2013 / plee24 - Jan 2, 2014
|Delirious - The Common App Essay #2 Struggle! Me and my Mountains
UndergraduateShadycurtains - Dec 30, 2013 / BachChaconne2 - Jan 2, 2014
|Spanish classroom - COMMON APP ENVIRONMENT ESSAY
Undergraduateallenrickli - Dec 31, 2013 / allenrickli - Jan 2, 2014
|Bates College : Supplementary Essay - "How this Statement inspires you."
7 - Thanks on reviewing my essay. I know I am too late now but as a German applicant (similar educational...
UndergraduateOMGreeny - Dec 31, 2013 / savusavu - Jan 2, 2014
|Goals for engineers - Why am I a good fit for UPenn Engineering?
Undergraduateramzee05 - Jan 2, 2014 / ramzee05 - Jan 2, 2014
|Pomona Supplement Create a Course "The Art and Science behind the Smile"
NEW - I was really stuck on this one. Is my tone too degrading? Please comment and make suggestions! Be harsh!...
Undergraduatelilly1218 - Jan 2, 2014 / — -
|PLAYING CARDS - Business is in my blood ; Central to Identity
Undergraduatemmcspiritt - Dec 31, 2013 / mmcspiritt - Jan 2, 2014
|The pre-medical program - COMMON APP ESSAY: BOSTON UNIVERSITY: QUESTION
2 - Didgeridoo I love Boston because it is rich in history and culture. I've been lucky to visit Boston...
UndergraduateKami8246 - Jan 2, 2014 / Kami8246 - Jan 2, 2014
|"Make your passion your work, and work will become a game" That test night..(UIUC essay 1)
2 - This is an interesting response, but focus your essay more on the prompt. You focus most of the response...
Undergraduaterohan96 - Jan 2, 2014 / Didgeridoo - Jan 2, 2014
|Why Northwestern/Penn? Communications major
Undergraduatelilly1218 - Jan 1, 2014 / BachChaconne2 - Jan 2, 2014
|My point of no return laptop - Describe a place where you are perfectly content.
3 - Thank you! I thought the exact same thing so I modified it to make it a little less "run-on."...
UndergraduateSMINICK975 - Jan 1, 2014 / SMINICK975 - Jan 2, 2014
|Why Macalester? The website was what sparked the initial interest
5 - I too think so. Also, I guess other colleges too talk about their current activities and other stuff...
Undergraduateiacero - Dec 29, 2013 / dumi - Jan 2, 2014
|' I'm a practical student' My way into Engineering - USC - academic interests
2 - In my country, the decision on major is a crucial one because high schools offer specific and pre-directed...
Undergraduatefiftyskye - Dec 29, 2013 / dumi - Jan 2, 2014
|'We live in a world where...' Major in chemical engineering; Study objectives
Undergraduatechemestudent - Dec 31, 2013 / chemestudent - Jan 2, 2014
|"Good bye, Do Hwan. We will miss you!" to a New Adventure; Commonapp Main essay
Undergraduateseobyok95 - Jan 1, 2014 / Ekeson - Jan 2, 2014
|I have my ups and downs; Celebrate your nerdy side
Undergraduatebercony - Dec 29, 2013 / dumi - Jan 2, 2014
|Complimenting my personality and professional ambitions - UPENN Supplement Essay
2 - Good stuff. Positive: Well written , good grammar good content , good integrating your experience. Nitpicking "Wharton has the...
Undergraduateworriedjuan123 - Jan 1, 2014 / ByTheWay23 - Jan 2, 2014
|Bluffs above the beach;Perfectly content
Undergraduateccanales15 - Jan 1, 2014 / ccanales15 - Jan 1, 2014
|''I was born in 1996' Good and bad relationships with my parents - Common app essay
UndergraduateLillie - Jan 1, 2014 / Lillie - Jan 1, 2014
|My adventure has started at last; BackgroundStory(exchange student)
6 - Agree with Hen. GAP experience also an important factor showing that you also make difference in building your...
UndergraduateOMGreeny - Dec 31, 2013 / mayaRa - Jan 1, 2014
|MIT short essays. Attribute of personality, my world, significant challenge.
4 - I generally take the below as the guidance to answer this prompt - "The World you come from "...
UndergraduateShilay - Jan 1, 2014 / dumi - Jan 1, 2014
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