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|'Chemistry has always fascinated me' University of Toronto-Engineering Essay
NEW - Hey guys, I was wondering if you could read over my essay that I've prepared for the University of...
Undergraduatecorruptfate - Jan 1, 2014 / — -
|I always wanted to go into the business field. As time passed I was drawn to marketing.
2 - try to add maybe a little more details about specific programs you can join and about entrepreneurships....
Undergraduateworriedjuan123 - Jan 1, 2014 / cag18 - Jan 1, 2014
|Center for Career Development - NYU Supplement for Stern
5 - Your essay sounds very pretentious. You state that you want to understand the issues of wealth distribution but you...
Undergraduatesupbrahs - Jan 1, 2014 / Kondite - Jan 1, 2014
|The Rain Room / Fu Foundation School - Why Columbia; Why Engineering
2 - These are all excellent. They're well written, clearly show your passion for science and BME and are specific to...
Undergraduateplee24 - Jan 1, 2014 / garmin610 - Jan 1, 2014
|shows like Lizzie McGuire - BOSTON COLLEGE SUPPLEMENT
2 - Content is good, just made a few grammatical suggestions. Also, you use the words forever and teenager a lot,...
Undergraduateana523 - Dec 30, 2013 / cag18 - Jan 1, 2014
|Columbia Essay: Superman and I, One and The Same
2 - Your essays seems to be fairly well-written and you chose something that very few people probably did. However, you...
Undergraduateblazerd123 - Jan 1, 2014 / SilverKnight - Jan 1, 2014
|FILM MAKING; Academic interests- USC (Film/TV Production)
4 - Your essay fully answered the question. You showed passion and emotion in your interests and your plan seems to...
UndergraduateNinja4hire - Nov 30, 2013 / montezuma64 - Jan 1, 2014
|surgical robot on campus - my Hopkins supplement
NEW - The prompt: Why Hopkins? Please be very harsh. I would you say it than the adcoms. Thank you. ...
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|A women's college - Barnard Writing Supplement: How and Why?
UndergraduateLillie - Jan 1, 2014 / Lillie - Jan 1, 2014
|Otherside by Macklemore and Ryan Lewis -Columbia essay cultural event you found meaningful
Undergraduatemclark13 - Jan 1, 2014 / OccamsRazor - Jan 1, 2014
|Columbia. Science is my passion, but so is Spiderman.
2 - I think the connection to childhood fantasy is appealing. the blue words are what IMO too normal the red...
Undergraduateblazerd123 - Jan 1, 2014 / LiangWu - Jan 1, 2014
|interaction between teacher and student - Johns Hopkins Undergrad essay
3 - i would suggest you focus some more on your specific interest and relate them to what John Hopkins has...
Undergraduatealromeo - Dec 31, 2013 / OccamsRazor - Jan 1, 2014
|"It immediately excites me..." Business Institutions Program - Why Northwestern?
3 - thanks~musicpro, i found your suggestion to say academics in priority really help them grasp my identity. and i have...
UndergraduateLiangWu - Dec 30, 2013 / LiangWu - Jan 1, 2014
|'Rise attracts me with its copious research devotion...' The happiest students - Why Rice
6 - thanks for all of the comments, i've submitted it today(last day lol), did any of you need help? cause...
UndergraduateLiangWu - Dec 30, 2013 / LiangWu - Jan 1, 2014
|Boulder Enterance Essay 2- Enriching the University's Diverse Atmosphere
2 - I don't know. I had the sense that you were just listing your academic achievements. You need to respond...
UndergraduateBamboojack - Jan 1, 2014 / fiftyskye - Jan 1, 2014
|Columbia. The Lion and the Engineer, What could They Possibly Have in Common
2 - ....The lion embodies many of the traits I have, albeit at a lesser degree... ....And as my interviewer...
Undergraduateblazerd123 - Jan 1, 2014 / worriedjuan123 - Jan 1, 2014
|Everything it has to offer; What I find appealing about Columbia
2 - Really well written. In my opinion, I would change "To receive..." to something like "To be given.." or something...
Undergraduatemclark13 - Jan 1, 2014 / worriedjuan123 - Jan 1, 2014
|Sessions with my Arab friends - Stanford roommate essay
Undergraduatekh28698 - Dec 31, 2013 / fiftyskye - Jan 1, 2014
|The cars salesman - common app essay
Undergraduatecag18 - Dec 31, 2013 / Utau4928 - Jan 1, 2014
|"Misty wraiths, the vestiges..." Common app personal statement, Amelia's story
2 - I really like your essay. It's beautifully written. Would you mind telling me your essay prompt? I think you're...
Undergraduatezoinkhurst - Dec 31, 2013 / Lillie - Jan 1, 2014
|D&D (Dungeons and Dragons) / PSAT test - MIT essays
UndergraduateGervin101 - Dec 30, 2013 / Gervin101 - Jan 1, 2014
|Issue of Vogue / TV screen controller - Johns Hophkins Undergrad Essay
4 - Its a very different approach, i will applaud you for that. However, when I read the prompt and then...
UndergraduateHen - Dec 30, 2013 / OccamsRazor - Jan 1, 2014
|I have this dream of being a vegan; William & Mary Essay
NEW - I don't really know if this is supposed to be 500 words, but mine is longer....my bad...any advice? here...
UndergraduateAbbi1129 - Jan 1, 2014 / — -
|Mandarin, Burmese, Tagalog, Cambodian, Russian, Spanish - Extracurricular Activity
3 - mclark13 I needed to expand of one of my extracurricular activities for Stanford and Columbia- I wrote about my...
Undergraduatemclark13 - Dec 31, 2013 / blazerd123 - Jan 1, 2014
|University of Rochester- My perfect fit college
4 - I really like this essay! You answered the prompt very well, and you show your knowledge about the school....
UndergraduateOryx97 - Dec 30, 2013 / rbuttar14 - Jan 1, 2014
|recovering drug addict - Stanford supplement about intellectual vitality
2 - I was attending a three week long service-learning camp, the summer before my junior year. Why did I...
Undergraduatespark - Jan 1, 2014 / mclark13 - Jan 1, 2014
|Eco Protectors - Lafayette: What do you do? Why do you do it?
Undergraduatethenewdude - Dec 29, 2013 / Sewar - Jan 1, 2014
|deciding on colleges to attend this year - University Of Pennsylvania Supplement Essay
2 - Very good essay -- My only suggestion is that in the last paragraph, don't talk about your process in...
UndergraduateRobaE - Dec 31, 2013 / jonathachou711 - Jan 1, 2014
|microscopic objects - MIT Department Short Answer
2 - Some parts, like "The idea that my entire biological system was encoded in tiny molecules fascinated me," make you...
Undergraduatedudgean - Jan 1, 2014 / JoeyCamposinos - Jan 1, 2014
|Japan, American job, and Russian Cinema - Brown
2 - Your first essay is good, but maybe try to incorporate a little more about what you personally will do...
UndergraduateHDMX - Jan 1, 2014 / mclark13 - Jan 1, 2014
|30 Hr Famine- an event that marked my transition from childhood to adulthood- Common App
Undergraduatean_nie - Jan 1, 2014 / maddi - Jan 1, 2014
|bustling streets of NYC - College Supplements: work experience/why vassar?
Undergraduatexxnina22796xx - Dec 31, 2013 / SMINICK975 - Jan 1, 2014
|Common Application: How I Came to Leave the Church through Confirmation Classes
NEW - I can honestly say I found my Confirmation classes to be thought-provoking. However, I cannot say those thoughts were...
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|"Hosanna" UVA supplement - What work of music surprised you?
3 - Kondite " it was the revelation to me that the song and lyric itself can do the healing effect,"...
Undergraduatedyl95 - Jan 1, 2014 / dyl95 - Jan 1, 2014
|"Aria and music" UVA College Supplement
3 - yea, replace Pagliacci with the name of the composer/writer. so it would be like ""Vesti La Giubba" by Ruggero...
Undergraduatejleck95 - Jan 1, 2014 / blazerd123 - Jan 1, 2014
|Church Street Marketplace - Barnard and Tufts Supplement, Similar Questions?
3 - I like your essay too. "...no matter where I am." Touching. I suggest that you check again to...
Undergraduateessie88 - Dec 31, 2013 / BachChaconne2 - Jan 1, 2014
|personal ego - Yale Supplement Short Answer
Undergraduatekgc123 - Dec 30, 2013 / aaamonicaaa - Jan 1, 2014
|Stanford roommate (prayer for chocolate) / what matters to you (bandaids and hugs)
4 - thank you so much! and I completely agree with your criticism. And of course I will look at ur...
Undergraduatespark - Dec 31, 2013 / spark - Jan 1, 2014
|"Chess is central to my identity"; UIUC - Get to know you better
3 - Thanks for your help :D I made the changes necessary and made a few other little tweaks and submitted...
Undergraduateakhilles97 - Dec 29, 2013 / akhilles97 - Jan 1, 2014
|the photograph on my piano - Common Application Essay- Story or Background
Undergraduatemaddi - Dec 31, 2013 / an_nie - Jan 1, 2014
|Vanderbilt Question; Sunday School isn't what you imagine it to be.
NEW - Vanderbilt supplement question: Please briefly elaborate on one of your extracurricular activities or work experiences. I have been...
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|Growing up with strict immigrant parent; NYU supplement
2 - Try to take out sentences or phrases that aren't completely necessary to your prompt. Ask yourself if you're questioning...
Undergraduatewhathesteph - Jan 1, 2014 / an_nie - Jan 1, 2014
|The creative minds - BARNARD COLLEGE SUPPLEMENT
3 - wow this reeeeaaally needs some work. Your sentences are all over the place, hardly making sense. I used...
Undergraduateana523 - Dec 31, 2013 / hazelhoff - Jan 1, 2014
|Stanford supplements - leave a mark, crying in movies
4 - I love that you used friend actually. I feel like everyone will use adjectives to describe themselves and a...
Undergraduatedorbaruch - Dec 31, 2013 / rianhawaiian - Jan 1, 2014
|God loves me unconditionally - Stanford - What matters to you and why?
Undergraduatekh28698 - Dec 30, 2013 / kh28698 - Jan 1, 2014
|student inspired by Mahatma Gandhi -Electrical Engineer - Johns hopkins Writing supplement
NEW - i m an international student applying for Johns hopkins (only few hours left please help me ) can you...
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|Nepal Journey - DAVIDSON - EXTRACURRICULAR ACTIVITY OR WORK EXPERIENCE
Undergraduateimpatient101 - Dec 31, 2013 / Sciencetransmit - Jan 1, 2014
|A reputable business school and college search - My UPenn/Wharton Essay
UndergraduateSilverKnight - Dec 30, 2013 / Sciencetransmit - Jan 1, 2014
|My UChicago Essay: You are you and your beliefs
3 - I think you have written a good essay. I liked the second part where you gave an example about...
UndergraduateSilverKnight - Dec 31, 2013 / enashley13 - Jan 1, 2014
|Post graduate essay for masters in Public policy: Competencies to be gained at the school
3 - Thank niesaysi for the feedback! I will work on your suggestions. also, is the essay replying the prompt well?...
UndergraduateRiddi - Dec 11, 2013 / Riddi - Jan 1, 2014
|never go sky diving - Why Brown supplement too creative?
Undergraduaterianhawaiian - Dec 31, 2013 / rianhawaiian - Dec 31, 2013
|Amherst Supplement-Overcoming Difficulty; Living in Egypt
4 - Thank you for your response! It is so helpful. I revised the essay. If you can comment on it,...
Undergraduatehannah9501 - Dec 29, 2013 / hannah9501 - Dec 31, 2013
|The CyberPatriot team - FAILURE
2 - Overall its a good essay but just a couple of tweaks would make it even better (Refined Draft Only)...
UndergraduateThe_Geek - Dec 31, 2013 / OccamsRazor - Dec 31, 2013
|Penn Supp - specific academic, service, and/or research opportunities
3 - A lot of your sentences begin with "I." While it is a first person essay, I'm pretty sure that...
Undergraduatecicijolee - Dec 30, 2013 / SilverKnight - Dec 31, 2013
|Orphaned kids in Ethiopia - My Common app Final essay
3 - What about this Out of all of the things that I absolutely detest, waking up early for something...
UndergraduateMikysoulss1 - Dec 31, 2013 / Mikysoulss1 - Dec 31, 2013
|"I thought I was the only one!"- Harvard
UndergraduateN_Campbell - Dec 31, 2013 / quanny - Dec 31, 2013
|'It's hot. My skin is melting.' WILLIAMS COLLEGE AND COLUMBIA U. - what meaningful to you
3 - Thanks!! I had more description with the second one and the car but I thought it was a little...
UndergraduateBilboLinda - Dec 31, 2013 / BilboLinda - Dec 31, 2013
|'cruelty of human nature' Beloved by Toni Morrison - UVA SUPPLEMENT
Undergraduateaaamonicaaa - Dec 31, 2013 / boston1002 - Dec 31, 2013
|The word "yes" has the power to create and change - UVA Word Essay
2 - You can work on making it more intricate so that it flows better in between ideas. Perhaps towards the...
Undergraduateaaamonicaaa - Dec 31, 2013 / Chetan96312 - Dec 31, 2013
|I love economics and Careers In - UofChicago
NEW - Hello guys! I'm new to this, Please take a look at my UofChicago essay for the first writing supplement....
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