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|Stanford Supplemental Essay- What matters to you and why- Toilets
2 - I'm not going to lie; this made me laugh. Seriously, good job with thinking up an unconventional essay topic....
Undergraduatedkhan - Dec 30, 2013 / iamnicholas1 - Dec 30, 2013
|MY WORLD AT THE TOP OF THE HILL; WHY HAMILTON COLLEGE?
3 - I agree with routeman. In order to make this a stronger response, you need to establish what the "hill"...
UndergraduateNabgyamfi - Dec 30, 2013 / iamnicholas1 - Dec 30, 2013
|financial aid workshop - New York University supplement
5 - Oh okay Thank you! Do you think I should cut down on some sentences in the beginning that may...
Undergraduateazmain1217 - Dec 23, 2013 / azmain1217 - Dec 30, 2013
|"Without an Expression"- CENTRAL TO IDENTITY
Undergraduatejleck95 - Dec 30, 2013 / Zackjam1 - Dec 30, 2013
|the daunting challenger - MIT where I come from
NEW - The prompt is "Describe the world you come from; for example, your family, clubs, school, community, city, or town....
UndergraduateBiinary - Dec 30, 2013 / — -
|MADNESS; UNIVERSITY OF VIRGINIA- FAVORITE WORD.
UndergraduateiPreo - Dec 30, 2013 / iPreo - Dec 30, 2013
|Which version of my "MIT: describe your world" responses is better?
3 - In general, I can see how this situation affected you, but not how it shaped your dreams and aspiration...
Undergraduateplee24 - Dec 29, 2013 / dorbaruch - Dec 30, 2013
|Chemistry, calculus, English - Vanderbilt Supplement Essay
3 - I like the specific example "Cole" but I think you could have used more examples exemplifying this activities importance...
Undergraduatekgc123 - Dec 30, 2013 / jleck95 - Dec 30, 2013
|Bookstore and café - CommonApp Essay (favorite place prompt)
15 - Thank you everyone for looking over my essay! and sorry for the late reply thenewdude: I'll look over...
Undergraduatecicijolee - Dec 26, 2013 / cicijolee - Dec 30, 2013
|Additional Comments Essay: Math has never been my cup of tea
Undergraduatecocamb - Dec 30, 2013 / cocamb - Dec 30, 2013
|My passion for the human body - Johns Hopkins Supplement
Undergraduaterbuttar14 - Dec 30, 2013 / cag18 - Dec 30, 2013
|My personal discovery of historical misconceptions and hidden history
Undergraduatemlozano11 - Dec 27, 2013 / kgc123 - Dec 30, 2013
|dreadful diagnosis - James Madison Admissions Essay
NEW - I have written my essay and the prompt was basically write whatever you pleased. So I was hoping for...
UndergraduateRoxfan19 - Dec 30, 2013 / — -
|Rice University - Why Rice? - GATEWAY and WHO
3 - If Rice have any unique programs/opportunities then include those in your essay. You can also write more about the...
Undergraduatewinginger - Dec 28, 2013 / jleck95 - Dec 30, 2013
|"Where are you from?"; Yale and Harvard supp: write about anything.
3 - With the corrections, your essay should be good. A suggestion I give you is to work on your concluding...
Undergraduateiloveyogurt - Dec 30, 2013 / Oryx97 - Dec 30, 2013
|What has inspired you to pursue an engineering degree? University of Toronto App essay
UndergraduateAstron00t - Dec 30, 2013 / kgc123 - Dec 30, 2013
|Boulder Enterance Essay 1- Big moment/ achievement in life
UndergraduateBamboojack - Dec 30, 2013 / kgc123 - Dec 30, 2013
|CDs and Swiper - grammar/ MIT essay
2 - read this mitadmissions . org / blogs / entry / ive_got_99_problems_admissions (no spaces) number 9...
UndergraduateAr4yk - Dec 30, 2013 / Woodstock - Dec 30, 2013
|'As an English major with a focus in English...' Japan Studies Program Essay
2 - Overall, I like the amount of detail and concrete examples you gave to support your opinion, but it feels...
Undergraduatekaiya1969 - Dec 29, 2013 / plee24 - Dec 30, 2013
|The Mountains - Tufts essay, what makes you happy?
NEW - B. What makes you happy? "Just one more time", I pleaded. My parents rolled their eyes, already wanting to...
UndergraduateWoodstock - Dec 30, 2013 / — -
|"Behind the Camera, Behind a laptop" - Extracurricular Activity Essay
2 - It sounds as if you are on your way! The only my only suggestion work on keeping everything in...
Undergraduateclassof18 - Dec 30, 2013 / enique94 - Dec 30, 2013
|stage phobia - Essay for MIT - The most significant challenge you have faced
NEW - The most significant challenge you have faced, and how you manage it 250 words As soon as the...
UndergraduateAr4yk - Dec 30, 2013 / — -
|Priority research programs - Northwestern University Common application -essay
UndergraduateSciencetransmit - Dec 30, 2013 / acewashere - Dec 30, 2013
|'Politics has always been...' "Tell us something about yourself/your perspective"
3 - It's a good essay but it is a lot of telling instead of showing. Perhaps you can delve deeper...
UndergraduateOneiromancer - Dec 29, 2013 / acewashere - Dec 30, 2013
|"We do not question 'god'"; background /central to identity
4 - You're right that religion may be controversial, so you should be careful where do you send it - I...
Undergraduatenavidah - Dec 30, 2013 / Shilay - Dec 30, 2013
|Sterling library / Bilbo / Religion Life / Leader / Public speaker / Cabo-Yale Supplements
3 - I'm not sure, but meybe you should be more specific with your "why Yale" answer. I read somewhere that...
Undergraduatemclark13 - Dec 30, 2013 / Shilay - Dec 30, 2013
|NYUAD's combination of liberal arts education and research; Regional Academic Travel
NEW - NYUAD's combination of liberal arts education and research, and boundless opportunities fit my aspiration to pursue a double major...
Undergraduatequanny - Dec 30, 2013 / — -
|Brain and Cognitive Sciences at MIT- why major?
Undergraduatequanny - Dec 28, 2013 / quanny - Dec 30, 2013
|Running on our school's track every night; Rice short answer
Undergraduatemmhly2011 - Dec 25, 2013 / Kanadec96 - Dec 30, 2013
|My admiration for my FATHER;University of Toronto - What inspired me to pursue Engineering
3 - Well.... you need to tell them what inspired you pursue an engineering degree and why would you like to...
Undergraduatehanlus - Dec 28, 2013 / dumi - Dec 30, 2013
|Who I am? Common Application Essay - Finding my identity
NEW - Could anyone check my essay? I am waiting for your opinions:) Is there anything I should change? Who...
UndergraduateGuest - Dec 30, 2013 / — -
|local private school - COMMON APP PERSONAL STATEMENT
NEW - Please edit my personal statement! Will critique back! "One day, I just looked in the mirror and realized...
Undergraduatemclark13 - Dec 30, 2013 / — -
|Hot tea and Lifetime movies - MIT essay
NEW - Attribute you most proud of. 200-250 words. guys I need your help to correct it. I don't have anyone...
UndergraduateKanadec96 - Dec 30, 2013 / — -
|...seashells, Pokemon cards, and US quarters - UChicago Supplement - Yo soy yo y mi...
3 - Thanks for the read! The "perfect" was supposed to be for the having-to-use-my-imagination part..I'll see if I can clarify...
Undergraduatehelloimyellow - Dec 29, 2013 / helloimyellow - Dec 30, 2013
|Cleanup Day, What are we going to do when we meet up? / Stanford Roommate Essays
Undergraduateprim0rdia1 - Dec 29, 2013 / iacero - Dec 30, 2013
|"Heidi, you good!"; Bowdoin Supplement - Common Good
5 - So you are trying to say that building individual relationships contributes to the Common Good, but people don't notice...
UndergraduateLN4 - Dec 29, 2013 / plee24 - Dec 29, 2013
|passion for social justice/ Kellner Performing Arts Centre ; BARNARD; Why?/ Community
NEW - Hello, could you please check grammar, sentence structure etc thank you. How did you first learn about Barnard...
Undergraduatejojoy3 - Dec 29, 2013 / — -
|'I have been knocked down by grief' Essay about moving on after a death in the family
5 - Ah I see. Well I did understand that you had a flashback moment to your grandma and you taking...
Undergraduatemaddigirl - Dec 29, 2013 / iacero - Dec 29, 2013
|Amherst Supplement-Overcoming Difficulty; Living in Egypt
Undergraduatehannah9501 - Dec 29, 2013 / badra100 - Dec 29, 2013
|unlimited flexibility - WHY PENN ENGINEERING-- supplement
Undergraduatehelloimyellow - Dec 28, 2013 / helloimyellow - Dec 29, 2013
|Botson and Careerlink - BU MY DREAM SCHOOL
4 - I agree with enique94. You should specify those other interests that BU offers and perhaps something specific that students...
UndergraduatePrecious123 - Dec 29, 2013 / Kanyinqt - Dec 29, 2013
|Licking tigers - UCHICAGO- favorites supplement-- Dr. Seuss and painting
4 - Other than the clarifications that were suggested by llsir (I have never heard of Highlights magazine either), which are...
Undergraduatehelloimyellow - Dec 29, 2013 / plee24 - Dec 29, 2013
|"like mother, like son"; Yale Essay B (Mother vs Son)
3 - I agree with quanny; I like that you included an extra anecdote about yourself but the underlying quality of...
Undergraduateakshay1996 - Dec 28, 2013 / plee24 - Dec 29, 2013
|Lego Kits - "My interest in mechanical engineering"- UIUC prompt
4 - Hmmm, well I actually liked both, so I made a hybrid! Version 2 has a better hook, although it...
Undergraduatesupbrahs - Dec 29, 2013 / llsir - Dec 29, 2013
|Duke is a liberal arts college with strong science programs; Why Duke?
4 - llsir Talk about how you'll specifically use what you get at duke to further your learning. Good essay otherwise....
Undergraduatellsir - Dec 29, 2013 / johntasker - Dec 29, 2013
|"It's the possibility that keeps me going, not the guarantee"; UVA Favorite Word
Undergraduateaaamonicaaa - Dec 21, 2013 / aaamonicaaa - Dec 29, 2013
|I disappointed myself the most; childhood to adulthood
UndergraduateFrano297 - Dec 29, 2013 / thekid96 - Dec 29, 2013
|growing up with a sibling - stanford supplement letter to roomate
7 - Great overall message, but i read between the lines. you're trying to hint the AO so please just outwardly...
Undergraduatedarketernaly - Dec 28, 2013 / Hass95 - Dec 29, 2013
|Comments on Yale essays? (Why Yale, Reflection on something you would like to say more)
5 - Kimmykimkim and arda434, yeah grammar is not really my forte, but if you could be more specific on the...
UndergraduateRyxion - Dec 29, 2013 / Ryxion - Dec 29, 2013
|Stanford roomate essay...vampire
9 - Love this! The list-style approach can definitely be a hit or miss but the randomness of your list makes...
Undergraduatemaddigirl - Dec 29, 2013 / helloimyellow - Dec 29, 2013
|Stanford Supplements- The "Teacher"; "Debater"; "Collector"; and "Worker"
Undergraduatekatsen - Dec 28, 2013 / Kristoria - Dec 29, 2013
|WHY UCHICAGO-- where I love coffee, microscopes, and people.
Undergraduatehelloimyellow - Dec 29, 2013 / helloimyellow - Dec 29, 2013
|'Mexican students' Why Upenn? Undergraduate admissions essay
3 - This is too superficial...you need to tell the admissions officers more about yourself. When you mention Civic House Associates...
Undergraduate2014MSETI - Dec 27, 2013 / Oryx97 - Dec 29, 2013
|Stanford intellectual vitality...Turkey
4 - thanks for your help! Good point about bad-mouths. Do have another word in mind? I looked up synonyms...
Undergraduatemaddigirl - Dec 29, 2013 / maddigirl - Dec 29, 2013
|'Colombia' Discuss the subjects in which you excel or have excelled. Success factors.
3 - i think it's a good essay, but I think the factors that attributed to your success can be more...
Undergraduatemaria1995 - Dec 29, 2013 / jsh0011 - Dec 29, 2013
|Closed my laptop - Stanford Intellectual Vitality Essay
Undergraduatecollindching - Dec 29, 2013 / marzmarz - Dec 29, 2013
|University of Rochester Supplemental Essay 2013-2014 (What kind of Meliora Experiences?)
UndergraduateSMINICK975 - Dec 29, 2013 / thenewdude - Dec 29, 2013
|'My heart thumps and my breath gets heavier' EXTRACURRICULAR ACTIVITIES-Dartmouth
Undergraduatehelp_p - Dec 29, 2013 / collindching - Dec 29, 2013
|I'm a hoarder - Yale Supplemental essay
6 - I love seeing my collection grow and capturecapturing moments in time where I have experienced something new. As life...
UndergraduateCs417 - Dec 28, 2013 / helloimyellow - Dec 29, 2013
|"She's invincible" Duke and Stanford Supp.: Impact of an extracurricular experience on you
3 - I liked this essay. Through the example you allowed the reader to learn something about you that you got...
Undergraduatellsir - Dec 25, 2013 / Kristoria - Dec 29, 2013
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