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|The problem and damage of immigrants in big centers.
2 - This situation leads to low wages while increasing unemployment rate due to higher supply in the labor market....
Undergraduategabriellemes - Dec 12, 2013 / dumi - Dec 13, 2013
|I immerse myself in a community with a rich mix of individuals; NYU (250-500 words)
2 - The first two sentences feel like a filler as they don't really have any connection with what you want...
Undergraduateyyc1 - Dec 12, 2013 / acewashere - Dec 13, 2013
|My running experience -Common App #2 "Learning from failure"
Undergraduateandresat - Dec 11, 2013 / dumi - Dec 13, 2013
|One should have an aim in life; U Toronto; Engineering
5 - Thanks :) I appreciate it and I will try to come up with a convincing opening statement next time....
Undergraduatekhanraf3 - Dec 10, 2013 / khanraf3 - Dec 13, 2013
|I am an artist (COMMON APP) - CENTRAL TO IDENTITY
Undergraduateacewashere - Dec 11, 2013 / acewashere - Dec 12, 2013
|'studying at Cate' - "Writing a novel is like driving a car at night"
4 - Why do you sound so uncertain? I don't think such negativity would help you impress anybody. You need...
Undergraduatekesangla - Dec 10, 2013 / dumi - Dec 12, 2013
|It was an eye-widening experience ; Place where I perfectly content
2 - First, you should have a more meaningful title for your thread. (I had to attend to this one) It...
Undergraduateyyc1 - Dec 12, 2013 / dumi - Dec 12, 2013
|(Inspiration through Defeat) - Common app: Prompt 2/Failure
2 - I personally think this is very well written. You bring up some really good points about how this failure...
UndergraduateOneiromancer - Dec 12, 2013 / yyc1 - Dec 12, 2013
|FIT entrance essay; Advantage of Florida Tech's Melbourne campus location
2 - This was good! I made some minor corrections. As for the word count, just try and elaborate some more....
UndergraduateBamboojack - Dec 8, 2013 / AlecSalisbury - Dec 12, 2013
|Why Georgia Tech? Provide me with the best education to start a career in computer science
5 - i would maybe make some changes in your last sentence. maybe something along the lines of: "Georgia...
UndergraduateValerio95 - Dec 12, 2013 / yyc1 - Dec 12, 2013
|I was supposed to write an essay about my identity and use a picture of myself..
4 - The overall component really flowed well, especially how you transitioned into speaking about how your background also influences your...
Undergraduatedaydreamer08 - Dec 4, 2013 / deeisawesome - Dec 12, 2013
|Shy girl who uses books; Something in my life I think goes unnoticed.
2 - Fernandam7 Hi, Fernandam7 Woa, you're a truly bookworm. you believe 100% on book's words, that's cool. i think you...
UndergraduateFernandam7 - Dec 9, 2013 / Ilmiyatin - Dec 12, 2013
|The volunteering programs offered at Emory University - programs/activities
Undergraduateyyc1 - Dec 11, 2013 / yyc1 - Dec 12, 2013
|(my world could be my home with my family) UC PROMPT HELP?
Undergraduatetanzeem - Nov 22, 2013 / dumi - Dec 12, 2013
|"Math just makes sense"- UC Transfer personal statement #1
3 - .... the latter part sounds redundant. ... but math has always been the subject that I liked and...
Undergraduatelexie94 - Nov 18, 2013 / dumi - Dec 12, 2013
|emory university- create your own course
Undergraduateyyc1 - Dec 11, 2013 / S9595 - Dec 12, 2013
|Texas Tech Essay-Electricity & Music/ Education and career goals
Undergraduatemichael_brand1 - Dec 11, 2013 / yyc1 - Dec 11, 2013
|Etymology Proves That I Am Not Mundane; Syracuse Sup CENTRAL TO IDENTITY
4 - In your supplement, I think you should focus a little more on yourself and a little less on your...
Undergraduatedeeisawesome - Dec 10, 2013 / starkeko - Dec 11, 2013
|Tough Times; Influence byFamily history/Culture/Enviroment
2 - My parents divorced when I was six years leaving the entire responsibility of bringing up me and my brother...
UndergraduateIyana727 - Dec 10, 2013 / dumi - Dec 11, 2013
|'Winning the competition' - COMMON APP
Undergraduatekriftsnitch - Nov 15, 2013 / dumi - Dec 11, 2013
|How Ping-Pong Shapes Me| Activity Essay
UndergraduateRaeAi - Nov 6, 2013 / dumi - Dec 11, 2013
|I never expected a project to change and develop me; Transition Into Adulthood
UndergraduateF022est - Nov 30, 2013 / dumi - Dec 11, 2013
|From Uganda to Boston - Rutgers
3 - Growing up in Easton, a suburb of Boston, my community offered limited opportunities to experience diversity. ...
UndergraduateJD3496 - Nov 30, 2013 / dumi - Dec 11, 2013
|What is Electromyography?; College English Analysis Essay
3 - Many diseases are very hard to diagnose. For example, no test can provide a guaranteed confirmation on Parkinson's...
Undergraduatenzhu - Nov 17, 2013 / dumi - Dec 11, 2013
|I'm conflicted when it comes to my hopes of you; Stanford " future roommate"
Undergraduatejdg - Dec 6, 2013 / admission2012 - Dec 10, 2013
|I am me and I am unshakable; Colgate supplement
UndergraduateLizzKnu - Dec 10, 2013 / Pahan - Dec 10, 2013
|The snarling of the trumpet soloist snaps me back into reality; perfectly content.
UndergraduateDan13 - Dec 10, 2013 / jdg - Dec 10, 2013
|I begin to reminisce back to my freshman year; place perfectly content.
3 - I would definitely start with the image of that moment when you knew that marching band was where you...
UndergraduateDan13 - Nov 12, 2013 / jdg - Dec 10, 2013
|success is not only for those who get the best chances- value i strongly believe
4 - Thank you very much :) I need to submit it soon, is there other grammatical errors to be fixed?...
Undergraduatelidiaep - Dec 5, 2013 / lidiaep - Dec 10, 2013
|I just found out that my passion is not in art; My Personal Statement to HKU
UndergraduateJfryKenanga - Dec 10, 2013 / JfryKenanga - Dec 10, 2013
|Common App: A story that is central to your identity? - Trains
7 - Well.... I feel your response for this prompt, central to your identity is not really in line with what...
UndergraduateNerdFighter - Nov 29, 2013 / dumi - Dec 10, 2013
|"Welcome to the Jincai Law Club" UIUC prompt 2: describe an experience
Undergraduatexujunjiejack - Nov 30, 2013 / xujunjiejack - Dec 10, 2013
|I braced myself for a bombardment of questions ; UBC- volunteer experience
3 - Oh... You think so? :( I am torn whether to completely change my approach then... I am afraid my...
Undergraduatehj135500 - Dec 9, 2013 / hj135500 - Dec 10, 2013
|Short softball; Sports have always been an important aspect of my life
3 - .... I'd like to suggest a slight shift in word arrangement; Sports, especially softball, have always been an...
Undergraduatetintinbelle - Nov 30, 2013 / dumi - Dec 10, 2013
|Lafayette College Supplement; What do you do? Why do you do it?
2 - Hello, You have answered the prompt correctly in both of these short answers. You should have no problem...
Undergraduateskriptkid - Dec 8, 2013 / admission2012 - Dec 9, 2013
|Take the challenge! Face your fears!; UBC- Significant Challenge
UndergraduateParagraphGraph - Dec 7, 2013 / dumi - Dec 9, 2013
|'No Birthday or Christmas present' - Essay for biggest obstacle
3 - Those two children, who were even not my father's blood relations knew my father better than I knew...
Undergraduatedolphin23 - Nov 28, 2013 / dumi - Dec 9, 2013
|"Nothing in this world is free" The Greatest Gift in Life
3 - "Nothing in this world is free", was my Grandfather's inspiring slogan that I and my family believed in...
UndergraduateKhang - Nov 16, 2013 / dumi - Dec 9, 2013
|"Why are you so quiet?" - Recount an incident or time when you experienced failure.
Undergraduatejkpk996 - Dec 8, 2013 / fatihy007 - Dec 9, 2013
|I became fascinated with genetics; Why Nursing & Why Mount Union?
UndergraduateAnge1031 - Dec 8, 2013 / dumi - Dec 9, 2013
|I grew up with a single mom; University of Colorado- enrich diverse &inclusive community
Undergraduateash101 - Nov 13, 2013 / dumi - Dec 9, 2013
|Laboratory research. College of Agriculture and Life Sciences: Cornell CommonApp Essay
Undergraduatebonjour - Dec 7, 2013 / bonjour - Dec 8, 2013
|I'm stuck here wondering about my future; Transfer to old west bury
3 - It's good if you included the prompt so that we can understand what this writing is exactly about. ...
Undergraduatej_maravilla - Nov 13, 2013 / dumi - Dec 8, 2013
|"Mental Transformation" - UC; World I come from
UndergraduateMellowjedi203 - Nov 26, 2013 / dumi - Dec 8, 2013
|My grandmother abruptly passed away; UC- Personal experience
3 - Well.... I too feel this response does not really answer the prompt. This question is more focused on how...
UndergraduateAdame96 - Nov 25, 2013 / dumi - Dec 8, 2013
|"HEALTH" UW-Madison UNNOTICED ESSAY
Undergraduateddeegiizaya - Dec 7, 2013 / ddeegiizaya - Dec 8, 2013
|"It's true, I am afraid of dying; Brown Transfer - field of study
Undergraduatemgray14 - Nov 13, 2013 / dumi - Dec 8, 2013
|BASE BALL - Common App- Northwestern and John's Hopkins
Undergraduateeliencarnacion - Nov 7, 2013 / dumi - Dec 8, 2013
|They called for a free and open political atmosphere ; Background or story
3 - Yes.... This response fails to portray you as a person which the admission people would really looking forward...
Undergraduatejavacoffee - Dec 3, 2013 / dumi - Dec 8, 2013
|Personal background; Tell us the most important things about you and your life
2 - I feel you should be more creative with the presentation of this response. You don't have to say...
Undergraduatethundergirl2014 - Dec 7, 2013 / Pahan - Dec 7, 2013
|Technology can only changes our traditions not to destroy our traditional values
5 - When a country develops its technology, the traditional skills and ways of life die out. it is testimony to...
Undergraduatepratik012 - Nov 22, 2013 / lashari - Dec 7, 2013
|Poverty was not an issue to deal with; UBC - Experience that caused me to rethink
Undergraduatedavinangai - Dec 7, 2013 / davinangai - Dec 7, 2013
|'Teaching foundation' - UC UNDERGRAD APP ESSAY 1
4 - Nothing irritated me more that answering the ever repeated question that what I want to be in future...
UndergraduateDanyal73 - Nov 22, 2013 / dumi - Dec 7, 2013
|Rutgers Essay on Diversity - A Young Entrepreneur in New York City
3 - Hi, Very interesting. I think in order to make this essay stronger, maybe you could attack it by...
Undergraduatealexriv70 - Dec 1, 2013 / admission2012 - Dec 6, 2013
|Transfer Essay-Why transfer? (WFU, Skidmore, Vassar, UNC-CH, Davidson)
2 - Hello, Spare the readers the story about how insatiable your appetite for learning is. It is really cheesy...
Undergraduatemmitchell32 - Dec 3, 2013 / admission2012 - Dec 6, 2013
|Cultural or social environment essay for Peace Corps application:
2 - What is the connection between the first and the second line? In what ways Colombia was different to...
UndergraduateMadison724 - Dec 6, 2013 / dumi - Dec 6, 2013
|'money' society's most significant challenge: stanford supplementary essay
UndergraduateRo4 - Dec 6, 2013 / dumi - Dec 6, 2013
|independence- i wish i were there. stanford: a historical event i wish i'd witnessed
UndergraduateRo4 - Dec 6, 2013 / dumi - Dec 6, 2013
|I was standing in a 324 mts tall structure; CENTRAL TO IDENTITY
Undergraduateduquevan - Dec 5, 2013 / duquevan - Dec 6, 2013
|I felt it was time I shed the old skin; People with different beliefs/experiences
Undergraduatedjh213 - Dec 1, 2013 / Riddi - Dec 6, 2013
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