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|USC's Department of Spanish and Portuguese ; USC-Academic Interest
3 - Well, your prompt is focused on Academic Interests and while I was reading the above section, I wasn't...
Undergraduatecandymare - Nov 28, 2013 / dumi - Dec 3, 2013
|Showing commitment in reaching my lifetime goals
Undergraduateashleyrod - Dec 2, 2013 / — -
|Tropical Humid to Cold foggy area- UC Personal statement Prompt#2
2 - really nice essay. Good hook, and i enjoyed reading it, i believe admission stuff will like it also. it...
UndergraduateYessay - Nov 28, 2013 / serdarovez - Dec 2, 2013
|I love solving complicated math problems ;Academic interests,how I plan to pursue them@USC
2 - I love solving a complicated math problems. Why did you include this line in this response? It...
Undergraduatejackieg8 - Dec 1, 2013 / dumi - Dec 2, 2013
|Shrimp Paste philosophy; Background or Story
Undergraduateduongnonsense - Dec 1, 2013 / duongnonsense - Dec 2, 2013
|MY AUNT'S HOUSE: Place where you are perfectly content
3 - Practically inseparable, we both enjoyed each others company than with anybody else. .... since your next sentence too...
Undergraduatescatano81 - Nov 30, 2013 / dumi - Dec 2, 2013
|My world is not a singular noun; UC - World you come from
Undergraduateaehnue - Nov 30, 2013 / dumi - Dec 2, 2013
|The day my mother broke her leg; The Most Significant Challenge ; UBC App
Undergraduateskhan209 - Dec 1, 2013 / dumi - Dec 2, 2013
|Sakubva stadium ; the meaning of a soccer field to me
Undergraduatebothie - Nov 30, 2013 / dumi - Dec 1, 2013
|I have lived in the same neighborhood- Rutgers; I Crave Experience
Undergraduateaicnelavm - Dec 1, 2013 / aicnelavm - Dec 1, 2013
|University of Alabama/ About genetics and physical appearance; What fascinates me!
2 - Your first paragraph is very enticing and interesting, but I lose interest in the second paragraph. If you were...
Undergraduategansotonto - Dec 1, 2013 / thebriterican - Dec 1, 2013
|'Improve Turkmenistan' MOTIVATION LETTER for International Business Management degree.
2 - Great job! I think where you said "for as long as I can remember", tell the reader about that...
Undergraduateserdarovez - Dec 1, 2013 / selmasanchez - Dec 1, 2013
|"Boom!", I heard the official fire the gun to mark the start of the race- FAILURE
5 - Thank you Selmasanchez for the tip. I now have made some few adjustments to help readers connect with my...
UndergraduateRD418 - Nov 30, 2013 / RD418 - Dec 1, 2013
|UC Personal Statement Essay-The Willpower to Suceed
5 - i totally agree with Kondite you should include more from your High school experience. and i feel that it...
Undergraduateabjohnson117 - Nov 29, 2013 / serdarovez - Dec 1, 2013
|Short answer questions (Agribusiness) - A&M and UT Austin
UndergraduateJAE23JAE - Nov 30, 2013 / JAE23JAE - Dec 1, 2013
|Brandenburg concertos ;U Texas at Austin - current and future academic+ extra-curricular
2 - way too many big words it is very hard to follow. However, I do believe your response is sufficient...
Undergraduateselmasanchez - Dec 1, 2013 / JAE23JAE - Dec 1, 2013
|I was isolating myself from other people's views; Virginia Tech- Principles of Community
3 - Thank you for the reply. I was thinking of quoting some their principles but might not be able to...
Undergraduateroscon1995 - Dec 1, 2013 / roscon1995 - Dec 1, 2013
|Common App Prompt - Describe a place or environment (Sunsetting Desert)
2 - I love your opening part of your essay! Everything sounds fine to me. Can't wait to read more. :)...
Undergraduatechris4017 - Dec 1, 2013 / RD418 - Dec 1, 2013
|'Beyond skin color' - College Essay about Diversity
2 - In my opinion, a university should be a place where I can challenge myself educationally, where I can...
Undergraduatethebriterican - Nov 30, 2013 / dumi - Dec 1, 2013
|Pursuing a career in medicine;Why UCF? What qualities/unique characteristics do I possess?
2 - Why UCF's College of Medicine, in particular? You need to answer that question here and that is what...
UndergraduateHelenaG - Nov 30, 2013 / dumi - Dec 1, 2013
|Exercise Biology - Transfer UC ;What is your intended major?
2 - I find some redundancy in this line :( For most of my life, the morning routine usually began...
Undergraduatecweis - Nov 30, 2013 / dumi - Dec 1, 2013
|THE BELIEFS ARE ALWAYS DIFFERENT- U TEXAS
2 - Well in this situation you did not collaborate with him, but you did interact. So ultimately I would say...
Undergraduatebulletproooff - Nov 30, 2013 / JAE23JAE - Nov 30, 2013
|'Boring Utah' - USC Extra-curricular Activity- South Jordan Youth Council
2 - You need some kind of introduction for this quote. You cannot simply just place a quote at the beginning...
Undergraduateyennhihoang - Nov 28, 2013 / tiffanyhng - Nov 30, 2013
|UC Prompt #1 - I love taking things apart
2 - Comments: You did a good job explaining why your talent is valuable to yourself and did a good descriptive...
Undergraduateriosons - Nov 30, 2013 / tiffanyhng - Nov 30, 2013
|'See the world for change' - University of California Santa Barbra
5 - thank you so much! facet is actually i was trying to find the shined and shaped polished side of...
Undergraduatelsciulli - Nov 30, 2013 / lsciulli - Nov 30, 2013
|Medicine has long been a dream of mine; Brown PLME -Experiences/ Why a good fit?
4 - Yeah you might as well just stop now, especially if everyone who has read it says it's great....
UndergraduateNerdFighter - Nov 30, 2013 / Th25cc - Nov 30, 2013
|My trip to Sandy Island - group experience and role in it
4 - Great story, but it seems a little lifeless...maybe some more descriptions would connect your sentences a little...
Undergraduateivylaw - Nov 29, 2013 / NerdFighter - Nov 30, 2013
|'Corduroy pants' - Common App Enough reflection?
4 - Wow you are a great writer! I would agree with riosons to focus a little more on the self-respect...
Undergraduatefooley0401 - Nov 30, 2013 / NerdFighter - Nov 30, 2013
|'My cousin took her life' - Macaulay Honors Essay #1 - Personal Experince
Undergraduatedabbh1997 - Nov 26, 2013 / dabbh1997 - Nov 30, 2013
|I started my education in a Japanese school, in Indonesia; Common App
Undergraduatealicia373 - Nov 28, 2013 / dumi - Nov 30, 2013
|Military contracting Firm; Common App USC- use your engineering degree to benefit society?
Undergraduatelapd_ray - Nov 28, 2013 / dumi - Nov 30, 2013
|Anti-bullying rally ; Dealing with different ideas
2 - Well... I feel you should give more focus to your niece's story first and then talk about your...
Undergraduateamarao96 - Nov 28, 2013 / dumi - Nov 30, 2013
|'Life in a different world' - Benefiting and Contributing:Rutgers
2 - Hello Melonsv! I'll just try to tell my own thoughts. The prompt is asking you to write an essay...
UndergraduateMelonsv - Nov 29, 2013 / n_d - Nov 30, 2013
|'Yearbooks and peers' - USC - Annenberg Statement of Intent
Undergraduatejackieelynnn - Nov 28, 2013 / jackieelynnn - Nov 30, 2013
|perfect contentment - place/environment where you are perfectly content-Common Application
4 - Focus on one class in particular. you can mention you are in other classes but this one class of...
Undergraduateflamemaster3457 - Nov 28, 2013 / amarao96 - Nov 30, 2013
|I clutched onto the handrail to steady myself
Undergraduateas0408 - Nov 29, 2013 / amarao96 - Nov 30, 2013
|'a successful computer programmer' - UC Berkeley - 1st Prompt
2 - An essay so poignant, to what do I feasibly describe my expression whilst reading through? There's no perfect work,...
Undergraduateyurisng - Nov 29, 2013 / Feenahluv - Nov 30, 2013
|Earning the Right; Recount an incident
2 - Your tenses lack concord. Verbs hardly agree with each other. The punctuations are not appropriate in most cases. By...
Undergraduateabjohnson117 - Nov 29, 2013 / Feenahluv - Nov 30, 2013
|"And they lived happily ever after!"; Never Give Up -- UC Prompt
Undergraduatelynsiecheri - Nov 29, 2013 / yurisng - Nov 30, 2013
|Losing my Mom / Metro soccre / Spirit Week / Social Justice - UBC Business Application
2 - Personally, I thought that your essays were really good and interesting to read. I liked the fact that you...
UndergraduateTasha10 - Nov 28, 2013 / ivylaw - Nov 29, 2013
|'Best motivation and depression' - my enemy had turned into my motivator.
Undergraduategiraffeeec - Nov 29, 2013 / giraffeeec - Nov 29, 2013
|My journey through high school was a tough one; Personal quality, experience .....
3 - Reading your essay, the topic seemed too general and mundane. You are applying to UC Berkeley so in my...
Undergraduatewizdee - Nov 29, 2013 / Kondite - Nov 29, 2013
|"Creative and rigorous scholarship" - Bates supplement
Undergraduateduongnonsense - Nov 29, 2013 / duongnonsense - Nov 29, 2013
|"My love for art & computers" UC Prompt #2
9 - Haha the problem is that English is not my first language. It's a bit difficult for me to read...
Undergraduateintropella - Nov 29, 2013 / intropella - Nov 29, 2013
|'Fun and excitement in high-school doesn't last forever' - UC Personal Statements
Undergraduatemynameisunknown - Nov 28, 2013 / mynameisunknown - Nov 29, 2013
|'observing and listening to people' - USC Short Answers - Academic Interest
Undergraduatealicia373 - Nov 28, 2013 / alicia373 - Nov 29, 2013
|"You know who Mark Zuckerberg is? ; Central to identity
3 - Thanks a lot, lapd_ray! :) Yes, I should've taken into account that many admission officers may not know what...
Undergraduateskriptkid - Nov 28, 2013 / skriptkid - Nov 29, 2013
|'Singing and playing guitar' - UC Prompt #2
4 - "I've spent countless hours practicing and learning new songs because every time I pick up the guitar, I lose...
Undergraduateceidynafit - Nov 29, 2013 / lapd_ray - Nov 29, 2013
|"Facilitating" - UC Application Essay #2 - Essay about a personal quality
UndergraduateVirgo - Nov 28, 2013 / Alice123 - Nov 29, 2013
|Chess and Me - CENTRAL TO IDENTITY
2 - The chess board is a place where I can find solemn and peace. Challenging people, learning and logical thinking...
Undergraduatenotorious90 - Nov 29, 2013 / ceidynafit - Nov 29, 2013
|Syracuse - writing supplements - Short Answers 'my mother, Millicent, is my idol'
2 - In your first paragraph of the first prompt, you should specify who had encouraged you to apply to the...
Undergraduatemg_920 - Nov 27, 2013 / Kondite - Nov 29, 2013
|UC Personal Statement: Struggles as a first generation learner
Undergraduatejojocortez - Nov 23, 2013 / jojocortez - Nov 29, 2013
|I am the hot-headed Aries of the group.; Common App Essay Prompt Failure
Undergraduateabcdepandas - Nov 28, 2013 / yennhihoang - Nov 28, 2013
|Broken down apartment; UC Prompt # 1 World I come from - MaoTai road
8 - it has the potential greatly to ease the lives of other people since moonlight wasn't welcomed by those...
Undergraduatedzup36 - Nov 27, 2013 / alicia373 - Nov 28, 2013
|'Stayed in Viatnem for a summer' - USC Short Answers.
2 - This is a nice essay. You provide good/specific examples. Just one part seemed it a bit awkward: "I will...
Undergraduateyennhihoang - Nov 28, 2013 / candymare - Nov 28, 2013
|'my biggest dream to live a life abroad' My family and my journey- UC; World you come from
Undergraduateriosons - Nov 28, 2013 / yennhihoang - Nov 28, 2013
|I used to swim every day in my hometown; USC - extracurricular activities
2 - I don't think you have to say "used to swim" everyday because you say "prior to moving to the...
Undergraduatealicia373 - Nov 28, 2013 / yennhihoang - Nov 28, 2013
|GAMING & ECONOMICS / USC - Describe your academic interests
3 - I don't like when you say "therefore" blah blah blah. It seems too formal. Maybe talk about what makes...
UndergraduateVeradun - Nov 16, 2013 / yennhihoang - Nov 28, 2013
|LEADERSHIP; Claremont Mckenna Athenaeum Essay - Dale Carnegie
3 - I've personally read How to Win Friends and Influence People and I think it's great, but I think this...
UndergraduateVegveg - Nov 24, 2013 / jackieelynnn - Nov 28, 2013
|UC 1&2 The Protagonist/The Medium; Describe the world you come from
3 - Thanks for the feedback! I go to Westlake High School in California. Our school's name is too generic. I'm...
Undergraduatesuburbancliche - Nov 27, 2013 / suburbancliche - Nov 28, 2013
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