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|My name is Aduraseyi. Multi-Faceted Personality/ Stanford Essay: ROOMMATE note
6 - This made me smile. The way you address the reader directly ("Yes, roommate, I am a nerd.") is just...
UndergraduateXevoz - Sep 19, 2013 / maelinya - Sep 22, 2013
|Mr Lombardo the mentor and Tom, my friend; UF - Most Meaningful Experience
3 - Well... without seeing your prompt, I may be telling something irrelevant. However, isn't it asking about one most meaningful...
Undergraduatealazo47 - Sep 2, 2013 / dumi - Sep 22, 2013
|Stand up and command the attention of all those around you! ; FSU/ "Leadership"
2 - The content of your essay is interesting and you provide good examples! I'm not that best at grammar but...
UndergraduateHokori87 - Sep 11, 2013 / katwoman - Sep 22, 2013
|The Little Boy Who Showed Me How to Live;Something I love,have to do,can't stop think
Undergraduatelillilkim - Sep 17, 2013 / Pahan - Sep 22, 2013
|Princeton/Yale : Inequality and your experience
2 - For the past two years, I have been a part of IT Skills Development Initiative organized by the...
Undergraduatesarthakjain - Sep 3, 2013 / Pahan - Sep 22, 2013
|UC prompt #2- Your world and how it defines your dreams and aspirations
Undergraduateblairann1996 - Sep 21, 2013 / Pahan - Sep 22, 2013
|Family of our family friends; Questbridge Bio;Factors& Challenges
Undergraduatemcblom14 - Sep 15, 2013 / dumi - Sep 22, 2013
|'I live being on stage' - Common App Essay- prompt #4
5 - There is something special about being on stage and connecting myself with the audience that I just feel...
Undergraduatedreamingoutloud - Sep 1, 2013 / dumi - Sep 22, 2013
|VIDEO GAMES ; Portland Art Institute Applicant essay
UndergraduatePatron - Sep 1, 2013 / dumi - Sep 22, 2013
|ART- UMass Lowell - What do you do in your spare time?
Undergraduatefwan17 - Sep 1, 2013 / dumi - Sep 22, 2013
|I want to help people; MED school Personal statement
Undergraduatesagar0092 - Sep 14, 2013 / surfermgad - Sep 22, 2013
|'...I felt immediately at home' Why Harvey Mudd? (Freshman Application)
UndergraduateRiceIsBliss - Sep 14, 2013 / RiceIsBliss - Sep 21, 2013
|Depression; Questbridge/ significant experience, achievement, risk,ethical dilemma
4 - ^agreed....
Undergraduatep93kelly - Sep 1, 2013 / paul2752 - Sep 21, 2013
|Significant Challenge (MIT Essay): The Autism Pursuit
3 - Its a great essay, but i don't feel like you answered the prompt. It asks about a challenge and...
Undergraduateyosh503037 - Sep 13, 2013 / lortero - Sep 21, 2013
|I played piano for the school choir and my church;extracurricular activity
4 - This is all very good...but I wish you added a few experiences or events there to make your response...
UndergraduateAlbyexcel7 - Aug 31, 2013 / dumi - Sep 21, 2013
|I spent more time lost and driving in circles than any person who had ever driven a car; Belief/Idea
8 - Hi, This is very well written and clearly shows your enthusiasm. Here are just a couple things you may...
Undergraduateyosh503037 - Sep 13, 2013 / Purple - Sep 21, 2013
|You have had or will have an interruption in your education - explain
Undergraduateadial1925 - Sep 20, 2013 / Kalyn17992 - Sep 20, 2013
|"Look, it takes videos!" Common App Essay, How YouTube Changed My Life
3 - I really appreciate your comment, thank you very much! I've definitely been working out some of the rougher bits,...
UndergraduateSavannah - Sep 18, 2013 / Savannah - Sep 20, 2013
|Syracuse Supplement: Who is the person you dream of becoming...?
Undergraduatelangeles - Sep 10, 2013 / dumi - Sep 20, 2013
|I decided to go back to school ;Admission essay for georgia tech
4 - Well...this part really does not answer what your prompt asks.... This prompt does not ask about these details....
Undergraduateamir99 - Sep 19, 2013 / dumi - Sep 20, 2013
|What Matters to You (Stanford): Cooking
Undergraduateyosh503037 - Sep 13, 2013 / Xevoz - Sep 19, 2013
|A Fine art Designer; Statement of Intent
UndergraduateAngeline - Sep 10, 2013 / Angeline - Sep 19, 2013
|Our hardships havw made us a formidable family unit ; Questbridge Background Essay
3 - In many Asian cultures, family gets the first priority. Or, In many Asian culture, family gets priority over...
Undergraduatejoekim97 - Aug 29, 2013 / dumi - Sep 19, 2013
|Switching Houses; PERSONAL NARRATIVE ESSAY
Undergraduateronboy555 - Aug 28, 2013 / dumi - Sep 19, 2013
|I had only one dream : College admission
4 - It's good to include the prompt with your essay response so that others can understand what it expects. I...
Undergraduateceliaalee - Aug 29, 2013 / dumi - Sep 19, 2013
|I am proud to be a Nigerian; background or story
4 - There are some Nigerian traditions that are very different to American way of life. Although it is...
Undergraduatejidelomo3 - Sep 15, 2013 / dumi - Sep 18, 2013
|Secrets... Everyone holds them; Arcadia University
4 - Right now, I posses one of the hugestbiggest secret thathumanityanybody has ever heard, and for once, I'll revel...
UndergraduateMelocoton18 - Aug 31, 2013 / dumi - Sep 18, 2013
|Education approach exactly matches my ambitions; Transfer Reasons/ Colorado College
UndergraduateErikd - Sep 17, 2013 / Erikd - Sep 17, 2013
|When I was fifteen I started to work at my family's pet store; Conflict in life
4 - However I began to notice that his care offor the reptiles was completely reckless, His knowledge on reptiles was...
UndergraduateDillJone - Aug 28, 2013 / dumi - Sep 17, 2013
|Analyzing the fusion data; Short CalTech Essays - Ethics and Humor
Undergraduateyosh503037 - Sep 15, 2013 / yosh503037 - Sep 17, 2013
|My thirst for learning ; Letter for financial aid
2 - Would rather say: However, on reaching the third year of my major at Concordia university, I came under...
Undergraduatew_abdulk - Sep 12, 2013 / Chantal - Sep 17, 2013
|Rural entrepreneurship; MOTIVATION LETTER
Undergraduatesharif2bd - Sep 9, 2013 / sharif2bd - Sep 17, 2013
|Educational institutions play a major role in shaping the career of its student
2 - Educational institutions play a major role in shaping the career of its students. The more successful students are in...
Undergraduatemadhurima26nath - Sep 8, 2013 / Genoa - Sep 17, 2013
|LOCAL GOVERNANCE IN THE CITY OF SANTA ROSA - economic and social aspect of your city
3 - Thank you for that. I really appreciated it. Anyway, i would like to make a bit clarification about...
Undergraduateniesaysi - Sep 8, 2013 / niesaysi - Sep 17, 2013
|l I worked as a tech at a therapy clinic; PTCAS 2013/decision making process
Undergraduateljw0002 - Sep 16, 2013 / dumi - Sep 17, 2013
|"What will I do for the rest of my life?" ; future plan
UndergraduateAngkor wat - Aug 23, 2013 / Angkor wat - Sep 17, 2013
|I was never sure of myself; UT Austin/ circumstance, obstacle or conflict
3 - I never found any peopleanybody with the same interests as me. which was a difficult choice for me (no...
UndergraduateUtecitec - Aug 25, 2013 / dumi - Sep 17, 2013
|Witnessing my father's company bankrupt; Motivation letter for master in management
3 - My journey in search of knowledge began from early years in the university. I burned a desireddeveloped a...
Undergraduatescarlettuk09 - Aug 24, 2013 / dumi - Sep 17, 2013
|FAMU's FUTURE FIRST GENERATION STUDENT....HOPEFULLY......ESSAY PROMPT 2
UndergraduateDaTru3Life - Aug 9, 2013 / dumi - Sep 17, 2013
|'The hunger for knowledge and Victoria's secret' - transfer essay!
3 - Well... you begin your response with more structured definitions of philosophy. However, I feel you have not answered...
Undergraduatelala92 - Aug 23, 2013 / dumi - Sep 17, 2013
|I have been fascinated by finance; Common App transfer essay
2 - Hello, In this essay you have tried to explain why you want to transfer- namely because you want...
Undergraduatewavy1020 - Sep 16, 2013 / admission2012 - Sep 16, 2013
|My character strongly reflects the core and foundations of physical therapy; PTCAS
4 - "I felt a little compromised."- great use of vocabulary to offset a negative emotion as a positive "It...
Undergraduateybi88 - Aug 21, 2013 / ljw0002 - Sep 16, 2013
|COOKING / Engineering ; MIT Short essays (100max) - Pleasure/ Major
2 - Hello, Essay 1 Critique: This is really a "free" essay in that you can talk about really anything....
Undergraduatedrpatel3 - Sep 16, 2013 / admission2012 - Sep 16, 2013
|Tasty,academic cuisine to feed my insatiable appetite for psychology; Smith Transfer
Undergraduatesmithhopeful - Sep 12, 2013 / admission2012 - Sep 16, 2013
|"If you don't get a miracle, become a miracle for someone else"
2 - This is a great essay and is completely appropriate for this school and program. The only thing I would...
Undergraduatesophielassonde - Sep 16, 2013 / admission2012 - Sep 16, 2013
|working with children; Florida State U/leadership, learning, service &global awareness
Undergraduatenpatel1997 - Sep 15, 2013 / npatel1997 - Sep 16, 2013
|Motivational letter for Aarhus University; applying to university in denmark
Undergraduategenowefiala - Sep 12, 2013 / huntsman - Sep 16, 2013
|The catalyst to my mental development; Stanford /Intellectual
UndergraduateEmmanuel222 - Sep 16, 2013 / Emmanuel222 - Sep 16, 2013
|Aptitude for educating others- SOP/ Physical Therapy Graduate Prog/ St. Augustine U
2 - please adjust in paragraph 3: in particularly how can improper posture cause injuries in particular how improper posture...
Undergraduatedmmartinez1492 - Sep 14, 2013 / Ade_Ibadan - Sep 16, 2013
|I would first like to apologize in advance; Letter to Future Roommate / Stanford
2 - That sounds like a person I would want to share my dorm with. It gives a quite good impression...
Undergraduateyosh503037 - Sep 13, 2013 / Vin - Sep 16, 2013
|In Zimbabwe's society's eyes, I became an adult sixteen months ago COMMONAPP essay
Undergraduatekrisi2506 - Sep 6, 2013 / krisi2506 - Sep 16, 2013
|'Most people love Christmas' - University of Florida essay ("my life change"), suggestions?
21 - Universities should create more job opportunities for students and help them have certain jobs quickly after their graduation....
Undergraduatekrisdp25 - Jul 11, 2009 / Kalyn17992 - Sep 15, 2013
|What are your career goals and how did you develop them? general physician
5 - ok,thank you...
Undergraduatejidelomo3 - Sep 15, 2013 / jidelomo3 - Sep 15, 2013
|Person Who Influenced (Princeton): My Father and the Butterfly
3 - I like your story but one thing you could do would be to include a topic sentence/paragraph and concluding...
Undergraduateyosh503037 - Sep 13, 2013 / Th25cc - Sep 15, 2013
|Visiting Duke; Common App - Trinity College of Arts & Sciences/ Duke a good match
2 - The prompt says you should respond if you're applying to the Trinity College of Arts and Sciences. I'm not...
UndergraduateAmason034 - Sep 15, 2013 / Th25cc - Sep 15, 2013
|Chain Breaker; SoP: Grandmothers and "feminist" goals
4 - I would say your idea fits the promp quite well. It shows how a certain event influenced your live...
Undergraduateyumandragore - Sep 3, 2013 / Vin - Sep 15, 2013
|'Bored of being a social nobody' UBC Application Essay--Activity Essay
4 - WOW. Thank you John! I really appreciate your long reply! Harshness is good! :) Yeah..I also feel something's missing...
Undergraduateky402 - Sep 12, 2013 / ky402 - Sep 15, 2013
|Child Abuse and what it did to me; Event that changed my life (Common App)
UndergraduateKobesso - Aug 21, 2013 / dumi - Sep 14, 2013
|Better prepare myself for my future; Student program/ GOALS
3 - .... I highlighted the sections that speak of more or less the same idea repeatedly. I think it's...
Undergraduatealexriv0 - Aug 20, 2013 / dumi - Sep 14, 2013
|I set my value on life for others, which can be compared to "Blue Ocean"; UW-Madison Essay
Undergraduatedeullepark - Sep 11, 2013 / CallMeDoctor - Sep 14, 2013
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