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|Obstacles are an everyday occurrence in life; obstacle or conflict in your life
7 - I think your essay is good and needs a little more detail in the intro making the reader want...
Undergraduatemadisongreen - Aug 27, 2013 / nessa219 - Sep 3, 2013
|Coming from a third-world country& raised by a widowed Mom;Re-admission personal statement
UndergraduateUchennaObikile - Sep 2, 2013 / fahadbd - Sep 3, 2013
|I can't sport a tank-top;[TRANSFER Essay] - for Harvard, Brown, Dartmouth, etc...
Undergraduatedeathstroke - Sep 3, 2013 / deathstroke - Sep 3, 2013
|Conquering a Vacuum ; Common App Failure Essay
4 - Interesting take on the essay, but Id say focus more on how it affected you and what more lessons...
UndergraduateLAMuniv - Aug 21, 2013 / Chantal - Sep 3, 2013
|Failing the Placement Test : Common Application Personal Essay
2 - I don't think this totally fits right into any of the prompts, but once you pick one you could...
Undergraduateflyinjoe - Sep 2, 2013 / dreamingoutloud - Sep 2, 2013
|Born an identical twin; Personal Statement for University of Washington
2 - Running around in IBM's T.J. Watson Research center Also in the above sentence, you do not introduce who...
Undergraduatecannie253 - Aug 30, 2013 / flyinjoe - Sep 2, 2013
|"Why is geography important?" - it is globalized
Undergraduatenoraa - Sep 2, 2013 / noraa - Sep 2, 2013
|Strains and stresses of living away from home while learning; "why Yale?"
4 - Yeah brilliant cheers. The extra "is" is a typo which i accidentally left there after editing. Ok then, perhaps...
UndergraduateRaleigh9 - Sep 1, 2013 / Raleigh9 - Sep 2, 2013
|The circumstances I grew up in never bothered me; Quest Bridge College Match Bio
Undergraduatep93kelly - Sep 1, 2013 / p93kelly - Sep 1, 2013
|As of now I am still in Clinton; background or story/College Essay
UndergraduateJp454584 - Aug 31, 2013 / Chantal - Sep 1, 2013
|I want to make a difference and leave the most positive impact on the world - activities
Undergraduatemadisongreen - Aug 28, 2013 / sr005307 - Sep 1, 2013
|good people in a good place; My strange reasons for transfer essay
2 - This essay is just beautiful and poignant. Honestly, this is one of the best pieces I've read lately. There...
Undergraduatemarkovnick - Sep 1, 2013 / shadman19922 - Sep 1, 2013
|'Bobby Kennedy' A PERSONAL STATEMENT, FACTORS THAT HAVE HAD LASTING IMPACT ON MY LIFE.
3 - Thanks for the heads up. Wanna be kind enough to suggest one of those creative ways you know of?...
Undergraduateckgunu - Aug 29, 2013 / ckgunu - Aug 31, 2013
|My introduction is about having a good career and a happy fulfilling personal life.
4 - thank your for your interest.I need to support someone.Also I have to write 5 paragraph essay....
Undergraduatenazlii - Aug 31, 2013 / nazlii - Aug 31, 2013
|I speak out about my religious belief; College Application Essay to TAMU
2 - Where is the setting, where is the collaboration my friend? All you have spilled is your diary thoughts so...
UndergraduateDillJone - Aug 28, 2013 / studentadvisor - Aug 31, 2013
|My interests are primarily in Atmosphere; letter of motivation
2 - Do not say I have this I have that. You should introduce yourself and your abilities more fluently....
Undergraduatennandi - Aug 30, 2013 / ah_zafari - Aug 30, 2013
|My stay at Ironwood; Meaningful experience
3 - "my grades were declining, my future was deteriorating, and my care for life was slipping ." Instead, switch the...
Undergraduatekatieecohen96 - Aug 25, 2013 / AutumnRayne - Aug 30, 2013
|"The Pill Book."; pharmacy school application
3 - They sell general admission all day... they don't sell out... but if you want a good position around the...
Undergraduateexcer50 - Aug 22, 2013 / nelsonwilliam84 - Aug 30, 2013
|Throughout my life, I've strived to be the best in order to reach my goals; UT Austin
Undergraduatekaylurrr - Aug 26, 2013 / kaylurrr - Aug 29, 2013
|I am the leader /qualities or unique characteristics;Florida Gulf Coast U
UndergraduateSean321 - Aug 28, 2013 / madisongreen - Aug 29, 2013
|It is a common expression that life is a journey; TAMU TRANSFER PAPER
3 - I think is awesome that even with autism you are striving for excellence. First and foremost I noticed a...
Undergraduatevendorkils - Aug 25, 2013 / mopoohaddict - Aug 28, 2013
|These three adventures... High School Senior English Class
Undergraduatemaplesh0sh0 - Aug 28, 2013 / ssaallaamm - Aug 28, 2013
|This is me, your roommate; stanford essay - Write a note
2 - Your first piece which is addressed to your future roommate is great. I'm like you in many terms except...
Undergraduatesarthakjain - Aug 28, 2013 / thisweirdkid - Aug 28, 2013
|How Blogging Changed My Life- UC Admissions Personal Statement
5 - Can you list at least ten different phrases, clauses, or sentences pertaining to the question above? If not,...
Undergraduatealj647 - Aug 11, 2013 / jkjeremy - Aug 26, 2013
|My heart was pumping like it never had before; Yale engineering
NEW - Hello, I am posting a yale engineering essay : "2E). If you selected one of the engineering majors, please...
Undergraduatesarthakjain - Aug 26, 2013 / — -
|My Hair; Common App Essay (Share Your Story)
Undergraduatejjdt - Aug 22, 2013 / Essayist19 - Aug 26, 2013
|UNEQUAL EQUALITY; recent incident that took place in India.
2 - An eminent intellectual said that the underdeveloped communities were the most corrupt communities at the Literature Festival,which their remarks...
Undergraduateheartbeat - Aug 24, 2013 / reckless - Aug 25, 2013
|University of Washington - Winter 14 Transfer Personal Statement. 9/1 LOL
3 - you can't possibly mean winter 2014 deadline? This is what stated on the website: The application will remain...
Undergraduatepmbaker93 - Aug 25, 2013 / pmbaker93 - Aug 25, 2013
|CommonApp - extracirricular activities and extenuating circumstances grammar check
Undergraduatetrilam153 - Aug 23, 2013 / trilam153 - Aug 23, 2013
|That day was perfect; Virg. Tech college admission essay
2 - Your description of the perfect day is quite nice. But I don't understand why it is the best day...
Undergraduateerineh127 - Aug 22, 2013 / shadman19922 - Aug 22, 2013
|'I feel best being with my family'. COMMON APP
Undergraduatebkim2468 - Aug 18, 2013 / dumi - Aug 21, 2013
|I won the competition ; CORNELL SUPP; Engineering Idea
Undergraduatecornell2mit - Aug 19, 2013 / cornell2mit - Aug 21, 2013
|I have just finished the Lion King a moment ago ; meaningful movie - Columbia
5 - I have just finished the Lion King a moment ago and suddenly the connections are made. The elephant...
Undergraduatetrilam153 - Aug 20, 2013 / trilam153 - Aug 21, 2013
|My mom is my greatest influence; person who had an influence
Undergraduatevirgilioa - Aug 20, 2013 / Booyah - Aug 20, 2013
|feel honored to be a youth in this day and age; FSU
3 - I can't tell whether you've answered the question (and thus whether you've written an effective essay) until I know...
Undergraduateaacohen - Aug 20, 2013 / jkjeremy - Aug 20, 2013
|Arriving in Seattle was like a dream; University of Washington-Seattle
4 - You're welcome. The short answer to your question is YES. If I'm understanding this correctly, you need...
Undergraduateshalombardo - Aug 19, 2013 / jkjeremy - Aug 20, 2013
|"Come see, quickly!" Common App essay on experiencing failure
3 - I agree with bkim2468. It's a bit overdone! Your focus should be on describing your failure and how...
UndergraduateChantal - Aug 17, 2013 / dumi - Aug 20, 2013
|As I walk on to the basketball court, my friends yell "Nowitzki"- Michigan Supplement
4 - Anyone else?...
UndergraduateWizFan2 - Aug 18, 2013 / WizFan2 - Aug 19, 2013
|I finished opening my last present; UVa College of Arts and Sciences Essay
5 - Sorry for replying so late, I was busy writing other essays. I took your advice into account and edited...
UndergraduateWizFan2 - Jul 18, 2013 / WizFan2 - Aug 19, 2013
|Skinny bushy eyebrow girl ; Medical School acceptance essay
3 - please can u post the question ? regarding your essay it would make feed back response quick and focused...
Undergraduateygcantu0496 - Aug 18, 2013 / Dreqc - Aug 19, 2013
|I felt most at home; UNIQUE QUALITIES U MICHIGAN
6 - For the rest of my life until I retire is a little superfluous. Id say choose one or rephrase...
Undergraduatebkim2468 - Aug 3, 2013 / Chantal - Aug 18, 2013
|Silence!! Uchicago/ COMMON APP
6 - You may write following lines: God bless his soul, Still loved, still missed and very dear, may he...
UndergraduateAssAche - Dec 31, 2012 / Bivek3 - Aug 17, 2013
|I want to be able to serve those who are hurt - Why Doctor ?
2 - What is your prompt? It's good you include that in your response or the essay so that we know...
Undergraduategoodguy - Aug 17, 2013 / dumi - Aug 17, 2013
|The Choice an Athlete Makes to Become Professional Without a Degree
3 - .... impressive start :) ... the word "athlete" is getting repeated; Why would one choose not...
Undergraduatekentlondonjr - Aug 9, 2013 / dumi - Aug 16, 2013
|How to get an apathetic middle school student interested in Math? ; HMC FAST
Undergraduatebriant9 - Aug 3, 2013 / dumi - Aug 16, 2013
|Dream of 15-year-old girl; Common App
3 - Thank you for your revision! I really appreciate it!! Do you think the overall quality is okay? I...
Undergraduate1365violin - Aug 15, 2013 / 1365violin - Aug 16, 2013
|I exceeded the negatives and stepped back to the top; First taste of contentment
2 - An arena for teenagers to overcome there(their) fears and drama. Avoid informal English words like "Didn't", except in...
UndergraduateEiram_love - Aug 14, 2013 / shadman19922 - Aug 16, 2013
|Honors, fame, and glory. Who doesn't want it? - applying to Honor's College
UndergraduateaLuckyStudent - Aug 14, 2013 / e_nicole08 - Aug 15, 2013
|I am looking to perfect my skills; Why did you choose to attend Georgia Tech?
5 - i dont understand you...my essay has to be 150 words. im so confused right now...i do not know what...
Undergraduateviolet2000 - Aug 15, 2013 / violet2000 - Aug 15, 2013
|Occupational Therapy Personal Statement on Importance of Adapting. Need Suggestions.
3 - Thank you for replying! The prompt was "In 250 words or less summarize your experiences with persons for whom...
Undergraduatee_nicole08 - Aug 15, 2013 / e_nicole08 - Aug 15, 2013
|Crashing a model plane/ Feynman Lectures/ That House; M.I.T. Short Answer Essays
2 - Nice writing bro. I enjoyed reading it. My only suggestion is looking for words that can be eliminated...
Undergraduateflyinjoe - Aug 15, 2013 / sksbl88 - Aug 15, 2013
|Personal Statement for biomedicine: Stepped into a lab with my broken toe
6 - Research the program you're really interested in and general information about the field. Write about it more. It's also...
Undergraduateckrrtje - Aug 5, 2013 / sksbl88 - Aug 15, 2013
|my favorite subject is Mathematics; Personal statement (Acounting course)
4 - Choose the major you are most interested in and think sounds like a stable career and fun to you....
Undergraduateo0o_nnq_o0o - Aug 6, 2013 / sksbl88 - Aug 15, 2013
|Obeying to the demands of Mrs. Sanderson; Significant Experience/ UC
3 - I think you're on a mission to find faults in everyone here so they think you're brilliant and pay...
Undergraduateartstudent - Aug 7, 2013 / sksbl88 - Aug 15, 2013
|"Tuftsadmissions retweeted your tweet..."; **WHY TUFTS?**
9 - Creativity works well for performing arts students as well as enthusiasm. Maybe not end the answer with a question...
UndergraduateAnumeha - Jul 15, 2013 / sksbl88 - Aug 15, 2013
| I'am from a very small and poor town in Peru; Registered Nursing Program
Undergraduategiulliana90 - Aug 2, 2013 / dumi - Aug 15, 2013
|'Skipping high grades' - improving my college application essay
4 - Try making it less of a narrative, start with focusing in more detail on specific events, less about your...
UndergraduateJackPackage - Aug 11, 2013 / NK21 - Aug 14, 2013
|I went through some small personal difficulties; Personal essay - UT
7 - Everyone has different way of learning. Some students are strong academically and others perform better with hands. Every person...
Undergraduatenshah69 - Aug 11, 2013 / nshah69 - Aug 14, 2013
|I was born and raised in a small town called Sardinia; Cultural Autobiography
2 - This is really great writing. But, the only thing i can tell, that it is too long. All expressions...
Undergraduateleo p - Aug 10, 2013 / faheddarmoch - Aug 14, 2013
|My past is what made me who I am; UW personal Statement
7 - You could have conveyed every single idea here in fewer than 800 words. That's what I mean (at least...
UndergraduateNK21 - Aug 14, 2013 / jkjeremy - Aug 14, 2013
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