Describe the unique qualities that attract you to the specific undergraduate College or School (including preferred admission and dual degree programs) to which you are applying at the University of Michigan. How would that curriculum support your interests? (500 words maximum)
Abundant options, various courses, and the academically rigorous atmosphere attract me a lot to the Physics department. My purpose of studying Physics is clearly written on the website of the Physics department: Physics will give me a rich understanding of how the world works. Along with my study in this area, I encountered more and more perplexing but fascinating problems related with many of my other interests. As a student with extensive interests, I am always pleased to see all of them work together and support each other.
I found students in Physics department of University of Michigan similar to me after watching a video about an acoustic experiment. Madeline Huberth, the performer of this experiment, is a joint of Physics and music. She mastered musical skills and received inspiration from music for her Physics experiment. Her example vividly illustrates how one's interest can be utilized to support the research in another field. Her success in both areas should be attributed to the particular policy of the specific college. Since the policy in Physics department encourages students to have broad interests and companion majors, I can easily find and then grasp an opportunity which fits me well and exploit my broad interests the most to support my study.
In my conversation with a friend who is studying Math and science in University of Michigan, he told me several interesting facts and stories that he had encountered. What impressed me most was the story of a football game. When the football game was held there, the once silent campus was suddenly full of the air of excitement. My friends told me that he could never imagine his fellow friends and teachers, who were always calm, rigorous and meticulous, could be so zealous and enthusiastic until the football game came. Candidly, I understand and appreciate their enthusiasm for sports, but I am more interested in how conscientious and hard-working they were in their daily lives. The rigorous atmosphere between students serves best as the impetus to motivate me to join this outstanding student body and strive for superiority.
In general, University of Michigan can offer me abundant opportunities to utilize my interests, and render me the rigorous atmosphere to reach my potential. Those unique qualities I found will help me grow and realize my dream: understanding how the world works.
Please help me~~ Grammar, sentences, etc.
Hi :)
Your essay seems pretty good but I have edited a bit of the grammar. Also, I didn't get the last line - 'understanding how the world works'. Maybe you should replace that part with something else. You could also be a little more specific on the course/degree that you would like to pursue in the Physics Department.
