Beyond rankings, location, and athletics, why are you interested in attending Georgia Tech?
I believe that a highly prestigious and remarkable institute such as Georgia Tech, with its emphasis on research and technology, its excellent faculty, and its diverse student body, will provide me with the best educational experience possible. It will also allow me to fulfill my scientific curiosity.
What really fascinates me is the Invention Studio, which opens new horizons for students to turn their ideas and creativity into reality, regardless of their year, major, or prior experience. Furthermore, I am interested in the BS/MS program that allows you to gain your master's degree ahead of time.
I could also participate in many extracurricular activities with an array of organization, cultural groups, and community service opportunities. I am very passionate to join the Georgia Tech Community.
Nice essay. I'm applying to Georgia Tech too, but as a transfer. I would advice you to focus on only one aspect of GaTech, since it asks what "fascinates you the most." You don't have the word count to discuss so many different programs. Just stick to one (preferably Invention Studio) and expand on that. Relate it to how that would help fulfill your scientific curiosity.
Hello, you have a nice writing style. I think you'll do very well when you have a final draft of the paper, because your sincerity is reflected in the writing. However, I think you can replace the whole first paragraph because it does not make any useful statement. Telling them their institution is prestigious is not helpful, and repeating ideas from the brochure about diversity or excellent faculty -- it may cause the reader to believe you don't really have a clear plan for what you want to do.
I think you should keep the concept of scientific curiosity, and build on that. Even seeing the word curiosity makes the reader feel a sense of curiosity Moreover, if you give some examples of books you are reading or scientific topics you are exploring, it will PROVE to the reader that you are inspired with this curiosity.
After you give your examples of what you are doing right now, in the past few weeks, currently... you can move on to talk about this part which I also like:
What really fascinates me is the Invention Studio,
which opens new horizons for students to turn their ideas and creativity into reality, regardless of their year, major, or prior experience. Do not tell them what it is, because they know already. It takes up words you could be using to prove something to them. Prove your inspiration/curiosity by telling the reader how you will use this resource as part of your ongoing effort to accomplish something that interests you right now. : )
Hi Jehad, I think that you should only discuss the real reasons that you are drawn to Georgia Tech. From the way I read your essay, the reason that you are fascinated with the university are its Invention Studio and the BS/MS program they offer. These are the truly unique aspects of a Georgia Tech education that truly fascinates you.
So, rather than just discussing general information in your statement to meet the word count, get down to specifics instead. Explain the deeper reasons why you are fascinated by the Invention Studio. Tell the reviewer how it aligns with your plans of study. Create the impression that you actually did your homework far beyond the basic information available on the website and student flyers.
Use the second half of the statement to explain why you feel that the BS/MS acceleration program is something that sets the university apart from the others and makes it extremely special in your eyes. Again, you need to connect your interests with this program. If you can show the reviewer that you have a specific academic path ahead of you that will further enhance the "uniqueness" and increase the public "fascination" with their university, then your statement will be able to make the needed impression upon the reviewer.