Well, your essay is getting stronger. Your first paragraph is a bit contradictory, though, as you say that
My family has not always been there for me.
but then go on to say that
Even the aunts, uncles, cousins, and even grandparents would be at any of my school or personal events.
and that
I am fortunate enough to have a wonderful mother that has taught me morals that I will use for the rest of my life
So at the moment, it sounds like you had a lot of family support, just not from your father.
This program has developed intellectual morals that I have and will base my study habits on.
You still need to discuss what intellectual morals you have in mind more specifically here. In fact, it still isn't that clear what Vires means to you or how you see yourself as personifying it. You sort of see your mother and your school as sources of strength, which dances around the edges of the topic, but what sort of strength have they given you, exactly? How do you use that strength to do good, and how will you use it to make a contribution to your university?