Can I have some feedback on my prompt before I send it in? Revisions and editing would be great.
Seeing the suffering of a family member and the impact it has on your family is one of the most unimaginable horrors that a person has to face. It is not a terminal or unexpected death that I was forced to confront, but the reality of my uncle's depression and what it was doing to my grandparents. My unfortunate realization of how a mental disorder can be so piercing to the stability of family gave me inspiration to understand the way the mind and body work.
When I was a child, I overheard my grandparents telling my parents that my uncle was suffering from depression and Obsessive Compulsive Disorder. I was too young at the time to register what those words meant, but after years of observation I began to comprehend how badly it was affecting my family. My uncle was unable to support himself because of his reclusiveness and withdrawal from human interaction. My grandparents, being the extraordinary parents that they are, gave him full support and have been ceaselessly financially aiding him since. The turmoil it has caused has been devastating, but has exponentially amplified my interest in the physiological cognition of the brain.
The abstruseness of the brain has given me an endless interest of the topic that is most studied by the top neurologists in the world. The localization of mental disorders and illnesses are unknown, and there are no known cures to rid a person of all cranial afflictions. However, with an influx of people with a great curiosity for the brain, then we can solve the greatest enigma of all time. If I were to learn the studies that have baffled scientists for ages, then maybe I could make a difference in society and help alleviate the stress that my grandparents have been forced to endure for years. It is not fair that they have to suffer because of genetic mutations and anomalies that have created OCD and depression. They deserve better, and I want to help them achieve a stress-free environment, devoid of worry and financial troubles.
The pain and anguish that I see etched on my grandparent's faces is enough to make me want to help my uncle in order to help them. If I were to find a viable treatment or cure for the mental illnesses, then I would be able to help not only my family, but every person that has to go through the same suffering that my family has gone through. By having a personal connection to a loved one that suffers from OCD and depression, I can understand what others are going through. This personal connection has instilled in me a passion so great to treat or cure these ailments that I will not rest until something is done. I have found my niche in this world, and I intend to do good because I owe it to my family and everything they have gone through.
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to learn the studies that have baffled scientists for ages, then maybe I could make a difference in society and help alleviate the stress that my grandparents have been forced to endure for years.
"to learn the studies that"---These words should be omitted, because they are not quite right...
It seems like you are saying you want to get involved with medical research. I challenge you to use Internet research to find out as much as you can about the field of medicine in one hour.
What interests you? Cognitive therapy? Medicines? Research or practice or both?
you should use the Internet to find out all about your options so that you can get very specific in this essay and state your intentions.
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