Aftermath of my Accident/ My grades ; Common App

hey everyone. this is my extra essay through which i am telling of the accident i had during my finals. please check it and help me. Any feedback is appreciated and i will help you with yours. :)

The Aftermath of an Accident
I could see the floor nearing up to me. With every millisecond that passed, I knew I was doomed. Everything seemed to have slowed in pace until I reached the ground and banged my head. For a second I was amazed that I was still conscious, so I stood up and told everyone I was fine. I took my hand off of my head, and that is when I realized I had not been so lucky. Blood trickled down my hands and my head and at this sight, I started losing consciousness.

During my IB final exams, I was met with an accident. I fell of a certain height and landed on my head. However the injury was not very bad and a few stitches with some dose of medicine were all that were required. My nightmare began when the tetanus injection I received started causing reactions. I started having fever and food poisoning. My arm where I received the injection swelled to a point that it almost looked disfigured. Continuous vomiting did not allow me to study for the exams I had. I lost my appetite. And since there was a strike, which is occurs frequently in my country, we were living in school and I had to deal with all of this by myself.

All the preparations I had made for my finals came of no use as at the last moment, I could not concentrate on revising. The anti-biotic would force me to sleep without my desire. Even if I managed to stay up all night and study for the exams the next day, my vomiting, which did not stop even when I was in the examination hall would deviate my concentration. The pain in my head and my arms were not too merciful either.

For this reason, I believe my grades do not represent my full potential. I worked hard for my finals but due to the accident I could not do as well as I knew I could. I retook my Biology exam later this year but could not retake others because the price was too high. Therefore, I would appreciate it if you did not entirely focus on my final grades or agree to look at my predicted grades because these grades do not demonstrate what I am capable of.

So who are this we?


Though this sentence does make a meaning in one sense, I think it has problem


You should say AND


I feel sorry for you that you had to take that tetanus shots. I am scared of the fact that I just have to get vaccines before leaving the country! By the way did you get in somewhere already? Are there strikes in Nepal too!

Thank you for your feedback. i will be looking at your essay shortly. and yes, Nepal is like the queen of strikes.

Then Remember Bangladesh is the KING of strikes (pseudo name of PURE Rampage!)

Yes please do help me when you can!