Growing older, a passion
^Did the passion grow older?
So, I knew I had a yearning for creation, but how could I best feed this interest after high school as a professional?
ate aesthetic and tangible products that allow me to stimulate my visual mind but also keep me engaged in mathematical concepts. On top of this, I wanted to be able to contribute to society in the most effective and beneficial way possible.
it became my goal to manage and propose systems and structures that are progressive for our time, enhancements to our surroundings, and incorporations within our natural world, built and designed in ways so that they remain safe, rather than harmful, to the environment
^How is this related to stimulating the visual mind, being engaged in math and contributing to society all at once?
i really liked the piano angle, but i not quite understand it's relevance to the middle, or the overall content, of your essay.
You do not suggest how you shall apply your creativity, or your longing to apply it eigher.
Also, perhaps some more detail on 'Why Cornell' would it clearer that you want to study there.
For the most part, a lot of your essay seems irrelevant. You do not the first sixty percent or so with the type of student you are nor do you link it with your educational aspirations and your desire to study at Cornell.
Btw, hasnt Cornell's deadline passed?