; beginning with skiing, listening to music, playing soccer, watching movies, fishing, travelling and ending with reading, drawing, swimming and hiking.
Can't use a semicolon here. Also the whole "beginning with... ending with..." doesn't really fit, since you include a lot of things
Together with my father we would
I would work with my father to...
This significantly shaped my school life as I became more and more interested in mathematic
This led me to become more interested in mathematics...
perform an imaginary move
not an imaginary move, rephrase
become FRIENDS
this is a little much. It's great you want to be friends with your roommate, but it's a little youtube.com/watch?v=vfthzU3V4zo in my opinion, haha
Btw I
NEVER use text lingo! By the way,