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"An American Persian Jew raised in America" - University of Florida Undergrad Essay


yurika888 3 / 5  
Oct 16, 2011   #1
Here's the topic:
In the space provided, please write a concise narrative in which you describe a meaningful event, experience or accomplishment in your life and how it will affect your college experience or your contribution to the UF campus community. You may want to reflect on your ideas about student responsibility, academic integrity, campus citizenship or a call to service.

*I need some help adding a bit more umph to the ending about how these life lessons can help contribute to the UF campus. Thanks!*

"Oh so you're Persian?" "Yea like the cat, you know meow" Answering the many frightened and inquisitive people in a way to lighten the mood. As soon as I inform people of my heritage they automatically think of the negatives of having the blood of a Persian. "So where is Persia?" "Persia no longer exists; when the empire fell it became Iran", "IRAN, like Ahmadinejad? Like Sharia law?" and the questions just don't stop, and the chance isn't even given for me to explain that I'm a Persian Jew. I am the epitome of all human paradoxes. I was born in America, and born with a Persian background and raised into the Jewish faith. Growing up as a minority in America, I have the opportunity to view the world with a different perspective. I have been exposed to my culture as well as other cultures. My first language is Farsi; my parents were very strict upon teaching me Farsi before English. When I was younger, my father wouldn't speak to me unless it was in Farsi. I would get so frustrated because I was learning English in school and Farsi at home and I would, sometimes, just not talk to him. And to think, I once thought my parents were torturing me, I now know they have loved me so much that they would take the extra effort to teach me a tough language. Therefore I now have the ability and the patience to learn languages easily. I learned to read and write and speak Hebrew on my own while I made a visit to Israel. As I curiously wait to learn my fate, I know my parents are behind me and ready to watch me put all the life lessons to use.

Not only have I learned to push myself harder during rigorous tasks, but I have learned to be more open minded to meeting new people, and more accepting towards the human race. I will know not to judge a book by its cover, because I honestly may not know what's written inside. Throughout my high school career I have learned to tolerate all types of backgrounds and I am ready to carry that onto the college campus. The University of Florida is the optimal university for meeting new people because of its vast majority of diverse peoples.

beccalevesque - / 45  
Oct 16, 2011   #2
this is really great :) I think you're right, the end needs something to tie it all together and reflect how it will affect your college experience or your contribution to the UF campus community.

The University of Florida is the optimal university for meeting new people because of its vast majority of diverse peoples.
Maybe something more about how your unique perspective will add something wonderful to the University community.
Good luck :)
Keerthika2014 2 / 5  
Oct 16, 2011   #3
Maybe you should tie up the ending with:
Language and the UF
(like being able to volunteer to translate Hebrew and Farsi...)


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