Hey everyone! This is my draft for my BU supplement. I've already revised it a couple of times, and hope that you guys can help :)
Supplement: In an essay of no more than 500 words, please select three words that describe you best and tell us how you will use these qualities/characteristics to contribute fully to the BU community.
Having lived in China for the past five years, I can strongly assert that I am very culturally diverse. Since my move, I have integrated the Chinese culture into my own and have adopted many of the customs and values of the community around me. Since Boston University is a very diverse school, containing students from over 100 countries in the world, I feel that attending such a school will allow me to embrace my culture to another level, as well as share my differing cultural values. Boston's cultural landscape also creates the exemplary university setting that I wish to be a part of. The countless museums in both Boston and Cambridge, the Freedom and Black Heritage Trails, and the lively artistic and musical communities makes the university placed in such a historical and culturally distinct community. I feel that having endured through a cultural displacement and shock, and experienced cultural differences that I have now come to appreciate and integrate into my own life, attending such a diversified university will be both natural and comforting for me.
My amiable characteristic allows me to interact with people of different backgrounds with ease. I feel that having good interpersonal skills is one of the fundamental aspects of developing good relationships with others. I believe that this quality is influenced by my open-mindedness and willingness to accept differences among people that stems from having lived in a foreign country these past years. Thus, I am able to listen and acknowledge others' opinions and ideas. This quality will help me greatly in the university as it will build strong relationships with professors and other students, something that is greatly needed as the school consists of a large student population of around 16,000. In addition, in a small, busy city that provides many exciting possibilities, my distinct interpersonal skills will be advantageous in ways such as being able to reach out and interact with the community, acquire various job and internship opportunities, and be involved in other gregarious activities.
Lastly, I believe that I have a helpful personality. For the past four years, I have been an active member of our school's Habitat for Humanity service organization. I have been on two HFH trips to southern China where I was able to interact and help the local community around me. Similarly, BU offers many community service projects and programs such as the Alternative Spring Break program where students can get involved in making a difference in people's lives. I feel like I have the desirable traits to do so and am ready to attend such a university where I can continue to contribute to the society.
Word count: 443
Thanks in advance!
You might want to flush out your three words because they get lost in your stories but overall this is great.
I think this is really good! My only concern is that you say how you want to be apart of the city of boston. There are so many colleges besides BU in that area that this explanation isn't relevant to solely BU, but to any of the other colleges. (BC, tufts, umass boston, harvard.. etc) you know what I mean? They want to know what you can contribute to BU specifically... not the boston area. But maybe this is a minor detail, idk, it's what jumped out at me when I read this.
Other then that, I think this is really thought out and written well!
Thanks guys!
micaredi
When you say "flush out", do you think I should state my three words in the very beginning and then continue on with the rest of my essay?
Both but I agree with sammiepuddle good essay.
Yes, I think that is what they mean, and I agree. If you introduce those words in a clear way at the start, it will make the reader's experience nicer. People enjoy organization tat they can easily follow; for this kind of composition, that is important.
