First, I am great with animals and have a history of pets such as white mice, hamsters, budgerigar, ferret, monkey, iguana, chicken, tortoise and many more.
Plural and singular agreement issues.
I grew up recruiting stray dogs in Asia prior to breeding my own dogs.
You "recruited" dogs?
The question asks for what you would want admissions to know about you. Why would you want them to know that you have owned many pets? Unless you want to become a vet or something.
Your supposed to be selling yourself.
Finally, I wish to let the Committee know that I feel that my MCAT score does not reflect my understanding of the basic sciences, my command of English language or the full potential of my scholastic and personal accomplishments as demonstrated by my solid undergraduate grades.
Does this mean that your MCAT score is surprisingly low? Don't try to explain your scores away.
Perhaps the test's format and time constraint made it difficult to demonstrate my knowledge in the subjects.
Please don't question the test.
My strength lies in my tenacity; I repeated the MCAT and improved my score.
They know.