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"To do or not to do? That is a question!" I became a hamlet!
12th, May, the catastrophic earthquake in Wen Chuan occurred. 13th, May, I convened the urgent meeting for the Board of "Long Hao Second-hand Book Company", a company I set up with 11 partners to deal with the used books on campus 2 months ago. The only topic of the urgent meeting was my proposal to donate all the profits (16,000 Rmb) to the victims. h
Howeverthey did not concur immediately and some of them even kept silence as rejection. I could not help to pound the table and exploded all my outrage and disappointment, forgetting all of them were my brothers to build a same dream. Finally, I used up my strength, sank down to my seat, and said feebly: "well, now it's your turn, just give me a reason."
"Our purpose of our company is not only to make our pocket money. We build it as a dream to tell people what high-school students can do is not only study in the campus but also something bigger. You said it and we agreed on the same dream in the same room. we should leave some money for the future development of our company." Wang Hao, my first partner. That was true! I also wanted to make advantage of the earned money to strengthen our company! But ...
Qian Zicheng, the CFO, shouted:" Don't you remember we carried together the books as heavy as 200 kilograms to the campus? Don't you remember we were busy running to used-book market just because a 90-cent purchase? Don't you remember... Your proposal may destroy the company. Who give you the right to do so? Even you are the starter and leader?"Yes! I could visualized the time when we worked together, sweated together and laughed together. But ...
I tried to opened my mouth but i could not.
14:28, 19th, May, 3 minutes in silence, for the dead, for the lost, for the future, for the hope!
After that, I wiped away my tears and made My final decision---the money meant more for The victims
14:00, 21st, May, the second meeting of the board after the earthquake. "I made the right decision", I murmured to myself continuously outside the room. "dear bothers! We have a dream, not a dream to make big money, but a dream to actualize ourselves in the society. Here is a perfect chance for our self-actualization: to help those who need our hands right now. And also, don't forget, we are not kids any more. We are big enough to take our responsibility to the society..." Silence! The result was unanimous but I knew some of my brothers agreed for fear of more disputes. And another unanimous vote was to close Long Hao.
My first start-up in business lost. Sad? Of course. For a long time, I even did not want to mention it. But a year later, when I finally strong enough to introspect, I found I gained more than what thought to belost. The basic process to start a business, the first-hand understanding of book industry, the strategy to negotiate with different people, the way to lead a team with the same dream, the sense of accomplishment after the tears and sweat, all of those are invaluable treasures of my life. But if I got the chance to do it all again, I would definitely make the same choice, because most of all, I understand that everybody has his responsibility to the society, no matter young or old, no matter rich or poor, no matter hero or loser. Perhaps I will never become a hamlet next time!
I have had such nights for a whole week.
Usually it is written like this, I think:
On May 12th, the catastrophic earthquake in Wen Chuan occurred. On May 13th, I convened the...
But maybe I am wrong. I know dates are written differently in different parts of the world. I like your way better.
"...but your proposal equals giving up the company. You started this company, and you have been our leader, but does that give you the right to do this?"
I had been practicing again and again the speech for the board but still felt extremely nervous, more nervous than...
...more nervous than when I delivered the speech to six hundred members of the first meeting as the president of my super-big Student Union Association, more nervous than when I knocked on the door of the office of the...
Don't say "knocked up," because that is a slang way to say "make pregnant."
For a long time, I did not even want to mention it. But a year later, when I finally felt strong enough to introspect, I found that I had gained more than I lost.
WOW, I think you are a genius. This is an excellent essay, and the story is inspirational. I can't wait to see what excellent contributions you will make in the world.
This is quite exceptional. In this, I agree with Kevin.
There are grammar errors, though, which need to be cleaned up a bit. A couple of issues with prepositions, and I also noticed that there is some tense confusion. Choose a tense and stick with it. Jumping around from past to present is confusing.
