B) Psychologist Howard Gardner has identified nine types of intelligences: linguistic, logical-mathematical, interpersonal, intrapersonal, musical, spatial, bodily-kinesthethic, naturalist, and existential. Choose one that you identify with and discuss a few personal experiences that show your strength and/or weakness in this area of intelligence. Please limit your response to 500 words.
I am looking at the sky, wondering why the clouds drift. In clusters, they float in harmony with the movements of the Earth. Other people pass by without a single glance at the sky in its perfect shade of blue or at the dazzling sunlight that shines through the gaps between the clouds. Away from the noises and chaos of society, I observe the sky and follow every movement of the clouds, the sun, and the reappearing shadows: all combine to reveal how nature perceives humans, and to tell me that I am a part of the whole, the world, the universe.
According to Gardner's categories of intelligences, I am logical-mathematical, with a penchant for naturalist. As a child, I desired to know the cause and process of all movements. I wanted to know, in detail, how objects were formed. Understanding and learning presented me with pleasure. I peeped into the children's science section in the library and, sometimes, into the adult nonfiction section, which looked more than a little intimidating to an eleven-year-old girl. Especially, I read anything related to math and science, because I found their reliability and indisputability reassuring.
I became a perfectionist with detail and a sense of creativity. I was not afraid to undertake new tasks, and, as I found innovative things that engrossed me, I learned to embrace them as part of my life.
During the first year of high school, I had the opportunity to compete in the district science fair. From numerous possible topics, I chose the "hot spots" of the microwave - the locations where molecules vibrate faster when exposed to the electromagnetic light. Unfortunately, measuring the movement of the particles that make up the food in the microwave turned out to be impossible, as illustrated by the Pauli Exclusion Principle. Therefore, I measured the temperature of specific spots and derived the approximate value in terms of frequency. From there, I explained the hot spots and the effect of wavelength on various locations. Even though I had to take a roundabout path, I used everything that was available, and, to my amazement, won second place in the district. This astonishing and encouraging experience allowed me to realize that the logic and the mathematics can precisely explain everything that I had been wondering.
I have sought to learn where I come from, and what factors have shaped me for the past eighteen years by accumulating knowledge. However, I still desire to connect ideas logically, finally drawing a conclusive and broad world view. As I pursue further education, I hope to find the hidden messages embedded in the big picture, much like a four-year-old girl looking for the hidden images in a picture puzzle.
I feel the soft breeze touching my chin. I see the blue sky enveloping the whole world around me. Filled with overwhelming sensation, I return to where I am and go on with my life, unable to disengage myself from unremitting curiosity.
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Mechanically, only one suggestion:
-"I am logical-mathematical, with a penchant for naturalist." Try "I am logical-mathematical, with a penchant toward naturalist."
In regards to content, you've done a great job. You relate yourself and your explanations to each point in your introduction, justifying each point you declare at the beginning. Your conclusion is a great tie-up to your introduction, and it flows nicely with the rest of the piece. Your paragraphs are well structured and are linked by nice transitions, giving the entire piece a smooth, fluid movement. Great work.
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