I'm applying for A&M and UT Austin, however I am now short on time as application deadlines are coming up in the next couple of days. For the most part, I'm trying to perfect my short answer questions, to stand out and really show off my educational drive. I am top 9 percent, so A&M is already automatic and for UT- Austin, I believe I have a good shot at being accepted. I'm just trying to set myself up to increase my chances at being admitted. Responses will be MUCH appreciated and I am very thankful for the feedback I receive.
Special circumstances that affect your family's ability to fund your college expenses. (A maximum of six 80-character lines will be sent.)
My parents will have three children attending college in the next four years, so they will have to split aid to cover college expenses between the three of us. The extended family I do have does not have the ability to help fund any of my college expenses. Additionally, focus on studies throughout the school year, will prevent me from working a significant number of hours.
Why have you chosen to apply to Texas A&M University? (A maximum of two 80-character lines will be sent.)
Texas A&M is nationally recognized for its academic programs. With its friendly atmosphere, I believe I would fit right in and excel in my studies.
Why have you chosen your academic major(s) of Agribusiness - College of Business and Mechanical Engineering ? (A maximum of two 80-character lines will be sent.)
I would love to be part of a dedicated team that makes advancements for the benefit of others. This is critical in jobs that branch out from these two majors.
Briefly describe any educational plans you have beyond earning your Bachelor's degree. (A maximum of two 80-character lines will be sent.)
I want to continue expanding my knowledge in these fields, so I would apply myself to the up-most degree and hope to obtain a masters degree.
What are some of your life goals and objectives? (A maximum of three 80-character lines will be sent.)
I would love to one day run a strong business, with other aspiring leaders, which treats its workers well and provides a valuable service to customers at a fair price. I would also hope to give others the same opportunities provided to me, and help other determined students secure a bright future.
In general everything seems good.
First one answers the prompt.
But 2nd one and last one seems a bit too standard and boring , the goal is to stand out from all of the other peoples applications. You should work on it little bit more add more personality into it.
I did not spot any grammar errors.
Good luck with your application :)