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Short answer essay questions (yoga, tennis)


volleyball09 11 / 12  
Dec 14, 2008   #1
hi can u please edit these sentences for me

what helps you to feel physically or mentally renewed other than a good night's rest?

Taking a yoga class at my school helps me rejuvenate myself and concentrate on positive thoughts. This helps me to gain a fresh perspective on things.

what would you do with a free afternoon?

On a free afternoon, I would love to play tennis with my dad or cook a nice meal for my family.

what is something that you are especially proud of?

Whether it is celebrating Diwali, visiting Hindu temples, or learning classical Indian singing, I am especially proud of my Indian heritage.

thank you
nikita
zowzow 10 / 175  
Dec 14, 2008   #2
how short do these have to be?

for the first one i don't think you really answered the question. slightly but not exactly

second one? you could remove the words on a free afternoon since its just repeating the question

and the last one i think is fine

:)
EF_Kevin 8 / 13,321 129  
Dec 14, 2008   #3
what helps you to feel physically or mentally renewed other than a good night's rest?

Taking a yoga class at my schooll helps rejuvenate me and I concentrate on positive thoughts. This helps me to gain fresh perspective on things.

I could find nothing wrong with the other sentences, and especially liked the last one.

:)

Kevin
vkwang 7 / 16  
Jan 19, 2009   #4
On a free afternoon, I would love to play tennis with my dad or cook a nice meal for my family.

i would write, "On a free afternoon, I would love playing tennis with my dad or cooking a nice meal for my family."
EF_Sean 6 / 3,491  
Jan 20, 2009   #5
Most of the sentences are pretty good. You might want to make the following change, though:

"On a free afternoon, I would love to play tennis with my dad or cook a nice meal for my family."


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