volleyball09 11 / 12 Dec 14, 2008 #1hi can u please edit these sentences for mewhat helps you to feel physically or mentally renewed other than a good night's rest?Taking a yoga class at my school helps me rejuvenate myself and concentrate on positive thoughts. This helps me to gain a fresh perspective on things.what would you do with a free afternoon?On a free afternoon, I would love to play tennis with my dad or cook a nice meal for my family.what is something that you are especially proud of?Whether it is celebrating Diwali, visiting Hindu temples, or learning classical Indian singing, I am especially proud of my Indian heritage.thank younikita
zowzow 10 / 175 Dec 14, 2008 #2how short do these have to be?for the first one i don't think you really answered the question. slightly but not exactlysecond one? you could remove the words on a free afternoon since its just repeating the questionand the last one i think is fine:)
EF_Kevin 8 / 13,321 129 Dec 14, 2008 #3what helps you to feel physically or mentally renewed other than a good night's rest?Taking a yoga class at my schooll helps rejuvenate me and I concentrate on positive thoughts. This helps me to gain fresh perspective on things.I could find nothing wrong with the other sentences, and especially liked the last one.:)Kevin
vkwang 7 / 16 Jan 19, 2009 #4On a free afternoon, I would love to play tennis with my dad or cook a nice meal for my family.i would write, "On a free afternoon, I would love playing tennis with my dad or cooking a nice meal for my family."
EF_Sean 6 / 3,491 Jan 20, 2009 #5Most of the sentences are pretty good. You might want to make the following change, though:"On a free afternoon, I would love to play tennis with my dad or cook a nice meal for my family."