Prompt: Tell us about a personal quality, talent, accomplishment, contribution or experience that is important to you. What about this quality or accomplishment makes you proud and how does it relate to the person you are?
October 17, 2006 is the unforgettable day in the history of my life. As I am typing this essay, I still cannot forget the day that changed my direction in life. I always thought I would be in the safe arms of my parents, go to school with my friends, and live a "normal" life in my little haven. October 17, 2006. This is the day all my beliefs were shattered, only to be mended with new characteristics and beliefs. I was alone.
The week before this date, I came to America from Korea. My parents informed me that I would be studying in America for my better future. With their notification, I packed my bag and came to America. During this week, my mother stayed to help me get settled in America. We went to the Disneyland, Universal Studio, and other amusement parks and enjoyed our "vacation". On October 17, 2012, my mother dropped me off at school before leaving to the airport. As she waved her last goodbye, I saw a drop of tear come down her cheeks that were trying so hard to keep a smile. Then it hit me. I will be alone from this point on. I won't be able to run to my parents' arms due to the 15,000 miles that is between us. As I walked to class, I felt different. A new sense of responsibility streamed in me with my mother's tears. I did not cry that day. I felt as though I stood in the midst of a desert without an uncertain future, but with me, I had a weapon- something that will help in along the entire way.
Six years later, I still walk to the school in remembrance of that day. My parents sacrificed for the betterment of my future. A future is carved from ones perspective and mindset. Although I was alone, apart from my family for the last six years, this event made me stronger and allowed me to think there was nothing that I couldn't overcome. Learning a new language was difficult; adjusting to a new culture was frustrating; living apart from my family was lonely, but yet, all these difficulties brought me a new way to think of life. There is a time to study, a time to play, a time to cry, and a time to laugh. For me, now is the time to build a future, for my family and for me.
I am still in the basic level of writing my essay, but would like to have some pointers before I continue. Thank you very much for your help! :)
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Your essay especially the ending was SO good. You do an amazing job of explaining the experience. I would just say explain the " weapon"- your quality , that you had , and just add how life was different in America - what did you see, how was it different from Korea ,and how did you adjust to the life in America. You are off to a Very Good start. Hope my advice helps. :)
