Neuroscience is an area in which I have a deep interest and won second place in the New Jersey Brain Bee.
Woah, slow down! One thought at a time. Let's cover neuroscience before we move on to the brain bee.
Okay, for everything that comes before this part...
For one of my Tech Prep projects, I investigated theI think everything that comes before that could be expresses in one long sentence in which you list these awards you have won, and express the idea that you have been trying hard to excel in these areas for a long time already. Simplify it, and make it straightforward. Then, after that impressive intro sentence, describe the tech prep project:
For one of my Tech Prep projects, I investigated the...
Okay, yes, I see what you mean about it being a whole lot of ideas without much organization. So... when you put these together, think about CONCENTRIC CIRCLES. In the very center, there is the main idea for the whole essay. That idea should be stated in a single sentence at the end of paragraph one. It does not have to always be that way, but this is a nice way to do it.
When you know what the main theme for the whole essay is, put it in the form of a sentence, and put that sentence at the end of paragraph 1.
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