APPLY TEXAS ESSAY: HOW SOME OBSTACLES IN MY LIFE HAVE CHANGED ME?

this is a very rough draft...this is my last essay and i just need help getting on track. ANY FEEDBACK IS WELCOME THANK YOU

Describe a circumstance, obstacle or conflict in your life, and the skills and resources you used to resolve it. Did it change you? If so, how?

For the past few months I have been engaged in the most challenging battle against the one and only, time. As a high school student I feel like it was necessary for me to be involved in anything that comes my way. Take advantage of every opportunity that some my way. Live with no regrets. However I soon realized my obstacle: I was losing sight of what actually mattered to me.

Very recently I lost one of my best friends in the entire world. Her death was the first one to really hit home in my heart. She had been ill with a heart condition since she was two years old. Slowly, her body was weakening and the string of life was getting closer to be cut. Everyone had been anticipating her death for many many years as the doctors vowed that she will not live long. However even with this knowledge, my family was hit hard with her passing. Initially I questioned myself about many things. What would have I said to her if I knew that would be the last conversation? What would have happened if I had went to visit her once in those loast our years? Was there any trace of disappointment, sadness directed toward me when she passed? However the question that bred most of my energy was where time had gone? She lived across the globe in Bangladesh and I hadn't seen her in almost 4 years. Up until these past four years, I had made it a priority to visit my family at least once every two years. Every break something would come up, a competition or exams or SAT prep, etc, and I would delay that trip. I subconsciously put the thing that really mattered to me in the backwheel. Before I knew it my time was up. My visiting period had closed. The door had been shut in my face. This was the first time in many monthes and years that I actually sat down and reevaluated my life. I had realized that my life was becoming just a checklist. I was initially becoming involved in all the art clubs and competions and voluterring because I loved things like that. They all started out as passion however led to something that was just part of a checklist which was my life. Life is supposed to be made by squeezing the essence of what matters the most yet I felt as if I was squeezing it so hard that all the juice had already been quenched. I realized that time was slipping by me. My cousin's death not only reminded me of morality but also of how I was neglecting the things that mattered most to me. That was the biggest obstacle for me. It scared me to think that I was spending my life doing things that had no meaning. Time was running however I felt stuck in place. I came to the realization that humans only progress when they engage in things they love, when they know what their priorities and can perform every action with passion.

And so I turned my life around. I prioritized. Every time I signed up for a volunteering shift I made sure to put my heart into it. Because sooner or later my string of life will be cut. I need to die knowing that I did everything because I loved it. I want to die loving life. I want to die knowing that time did not defeat me. I defeated time.

I actually really like what you have to say in your essay. I think that you need to write more about what you intend to do now and in the future. Remember to highlight characteristics that will help you as a student and as a person in the future.

APPLY TEXAS ESSAY: HOW SOME OBSTACLES IN MY LIFE HAVE CHANGED ME

this is a very rough draft...this is my last essay and i just need help getting on track. ANY FEEDBACK IS WELCOME THANK YOU