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'to appreciate the unique beauty of things around me' - What intrigues you?


muse 1 / 1  
Feb 26, 2012   #1
It reminded me of the magical fairy-tale from my carefree childhood. Hundreds of the colorful glittering lights mystically transformed the enigmatic night into the immense galaxy of hopes and dreams. We gathered on the square when the clock struck ten with enthusiasm and expectancy of miracle in our souls. The light September wind was blowing though my hair and I could feel the warm inimitable atmosphere of excitement in the breath of everyone there. We were ready to make wonders. The lanterns in our hands started to revive and suddenly they turned into stars which blossomed on the sky canvas. Our surprise illuminated the whole city with new vivid colors. The sound of laughter and applause floated in the air making the event even more unforgettable. The eyes of passers on the street were shining with astonishment and unexpected happiness. I was still staring at the dark abyss and looking for my lantern the color of grass. Even now looking at the night sky reminds me of that crazy flash mob on the old theatre square and hundreds of lanterns flying above the reality. That evening showed me the significance of the brief moment of joy which we can create with simple things. Those sparkling lights made me realize how important feelings are nowadays and that we don't have to dream about magic because together we are capable of creating it together. This remarkable experience is incredibly inspiring because it taught me to appreciate the unique beauty of things around me

Jennyflower81 - / 690 96  
Feb 26, 2012   #2
Wow, nice job, this sounds really cool. So, I don't know if the essay is to be specific about the work of art, but I am assuming that it is the beautiful scene in the sky when all of the lanterns are lit up. The paper you have written is a work of art too! You paint a wonderful picture with your words. Here are a couple things you may want to change. Just some minor suggestions:

We gathered on the square when the clock struck ten,our souls filled with enthusiasm and the expectancy of a miracle. in our souls.

The lanterns in our hands started to reviverise up, and suddenly they turned into stars, which blossomed on the sky canvas.

I was still staring at the dark abyss and looking for my lantern, which was the color of grass.

That evening showed me the significance of thehow a brief moment of joy which we can be created with simple things.

Those sparkling lights made me realize how important feelings are nowadays and that we don't have to dream about magic because together we are capable of creating it together.


Re-word this sentence. It is a little long and sounds like rambling. Nice description.
OP muse 1 / 1  
Feb 27, 2012   #3
Thank you for your useful suggestions


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