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Why APU? I researched well on the uni !


peacefulwarrior 2 / 8  
Feb 17, 2014   #1
As my graduation date is coming near and near, I have started to think about which university I should apply for to continue my higher education. Then a friend of mine said that his brother had graduated a university called Ritsumeikan Asia Pacific University in Beppu, Japan and I thought what kind of university situated in Beppu is it. Because I have never heard of such city before. So I wanted to meet my friend's brother by myself and get some recommendations about this university since any university seemed a new thing for me. When I met him, he told me all his experience in APU, how he made a friend with a Chinese girl and his participation in Japanese traditional holidays. As he continued to talk, my mind about APU changed completely and I gained a passion to study there.

However I have chosen APU not only for one person's comments but also for information I gained by searching in google. While googling, I found out that Beppu is being known as "the global village" which means APU has a multicultural environment. Knowing that university makes its students who come from different countries collaborate with each other encouraged me more to study there since I am really keen on broadening my cultural knowledge. After that I got an idea that a student who graduates APU will be more flexible to adopt to a new environment, a skill which is very beneficial when you start a new career. Additionally, I figure out that APU is paying more attention to the offers of scholarships to talented international students and I believe such scholarship can open a new way to cement my previous educations for improved future career opportunities.

What is more, I was astonished hearing that up to 95% of graduates of the university are gaining employment upon graduation
despite of the fact that unemployment rate is extremely high in most countries. Graduates of APU are employing in prestigious
companies and corporations like Mazda Motor Corporation, Panasonic Corporation and so on.
pacers7ind 11 / 25 2  
Feb 17, 2014   #2
Im going to give you constructive feedback

I think you need to refocus your essay a bit more and find factors that make you want to go to APU rather than things that happened and made you decide. Also, the google example should be changed and give examples that highlight the university relative to yourself.

"What is more, I was astonished hearing that up to 95% of graduates of the university are gaining employment upon graduation
despite of the fact that unemployment rate is extremely high in most countries. Graduates of APU are employing in prestigious
companies and corporations like Mazda Motor Corporation, Panasonic Corporation and so on." Well this applies to other acadmic institutions. Try to show how going there will affect you as a person. Perhaps you can say how going to APU will give you the security you hope for in the future
dumi 1 / 6,927 1592  
Feb 18, 2014   #3
As my graduation date is coming near and near, I have started to think about which university I should apply for to continue my higher education.

I feel you don't have to give too much detail unless they make some meaningful contribution to your answer. For me, the above statement sounds like unwanted details that do not add much value for your reasons to attend APU. Most of the students do what you have said above and it doesn't tell anything special about you. I feel you should make use of every word and sentence to tell things that are more focused towards your answer.


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