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I'm around my family way more than I probably should be, but I don't really see that as a bad thing because they have made me who I am
This is unnecessary. In addition the rest of this sentence is a run on statement.
I love my family and being around them because there's the feeling of security and familiarness that you don't get from everywhere else.
I don't believe this is necessary either.
Plus the support my family gives me that makes me feel as though I can do anything I dream of.
What are these dreams you speak of.
From being around my family I've learned that everything happens for a reason, and no matter how hard something is you have to try your hardest cause other- wise there's no point in doing it at all.
You had to learn that everything has a reason from your family? This is quite broad. What made you come to this realization?
They have also given me the courage to try and be a teacher which has been a dream of ever since I can remember.
I would say that it is Your dream not just a dream. Omit "ever since I can remember"
At first i thought they were gonna oppose my decision becuase most of them are barbers and i was thinking they all wanted me to go to cosmotology school but they all were incredibly supportive, which has given me even more courage to try and obtain my goals.
Not a good ending.