Art acts as a medium of escape for me/ Common App - Extracurricular

Topic is - Please briefly elaborate on one of your extracurricular activities or work experiences in the space below (1000 character maximum).

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In my mundane life with various extracurricular involved, art acts as a medium of escape for me form the worldly activities. I spend all my summer holidays painting in the backyard of my home. While painting I visit a different world that is far away from this stressful world. The sketching of pencil on the surface of canvas starts my journey to this new world. While sketching I feel as a completely different person with a new perspective and new life; I become the person that I want to be. The mingling of colors gives me intense pleasure; a pleasure that is ubiquitous in my each part of body and all the stress and tension are annihilated. The spreading of paint by scrubbing of brush on the surface of canvas completes my musingly journey and bring me back with enormous internal delight that engraves all over my body. I have been drawing for past 13 years and it has always cleared my path to happiness.

-I want correction for bold line .
-Do I need to Expand?
-Also provide me with useful vocabulary as my essay lacks it .
-And anyone with any other correction is most welcome .

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I think you should start with a more appealing sentence.
and instead of saying cleared my path to happiness expand more, why does painting make you in person so revived and passionate?
but other than that I liked it :)

Thanks yara your I appreciate your help.

I would appreciate more correction if anyone feels so.