Please help me with my UC prompt; I appreciate any suggestions/advice; thank you!
Tell us about a personal quality, talent, accomplishment, contribution or experience that is important to you. What about this quality or accomplishment makes you proud, and how does it relate to the person you are?
To steady the excited fingers, the right hand primitively grasps the pencil and strikes, then continuously, harshly scribbling upon the once-spotless paper until the fingers are moderately tired. Soon, the stained paper is discarded, replaced by a perfectly straight, clean canvas. Following the pathway of the eyes, the pencil then ice-skates about, filling every sight with lines, curves, shades, and textures. Concentration is intense, for perfection must be achieved. Countless minutes afterwards, the final product is acknowledged and cautiously kept. This is how I draw.
Art is freedom; it is subjectively objective, designing the creation of a desired image bound only by the creator's imagination and criteria. Meaning is not an obligation; there are no restrictions, judgment, and morality in art. The motivation of drawing is completely internal, started by a vision and further touched with ideas. This quiet liberty naturally attracted my interest by enabling my emotions to manifest passively. I am an introvert; this characteristic have defined myself since the moment my consciousness sufficiently matured enough to understand conformity. My curiosity caused my pieces to become somewhat a separate entity by inadvertently producing each of their story and emotions. There was almost a hint of empathy towards each of my artwork because of the distinctive situations that I designated, based merely on physical attributes. Since art was everywhere and readily available, even without the meager access of typical media such as a paper and a pencil, my solitude was heavily engaged and my mind was satisfyingly indulged.
Art has no normality, but by my own criterion for realistic perfection, my perspective magnified insignificant details that harmoniously formed the big picture. However, because the very nature of the arts, drawing has also allowed me to sympathize and sparked my desire to understand the unique history, situation, and mindset of each individual. It gave me the revelation to appreciate the variance of the Universe; imperfections are terribly judged based on the simple surface of appearance by human perception. The arts demand no requirement, but allow limitless potential, and because of this natural freedom given, I have decided to take that advantage and input unique characteristics and flaws instilled by every different forms of life.
This is how I draw.
Superb!!! this was absolutely amazing. You obviously have a knack for writing as well, and it is evidenced by this essay. I could not find anything wrong with it really. The imagery int he first paragraph was spot on!
You sound like a great and passionate artist and any school would be lucky to have you. Good Luck!
Thank you! I'm just wondering though, is it off-topic?
Can anyone else please help me?
No, it is not off-topic, but you essay overall is really great! you attention grabber has drew me in and everything seems to flow well together.
Probably, that is just me, but excellent writing! :)
I am touched by your essay....there'e really nothing wrong with in my view. I really like how you specifically describe how art is no normality to you. I'm glad I read your essay; it has brighten my day.
Your first paragraph is superb! I suggest you to talk more about yourself more than art though. Overall, It's a great paper!
Any mire advice/suggestions are appreciated. :)
Anyone..? :x
Superb intro! Your language is really sophisticated and the tone matches your sincerity.
Your essay is very much on topic because you talk about an experience and talk about how that shows who you are. Grammar is perfect.
So honestly, I think you have a very good chance of getting accepted!
Sorry I couldn't give you any criticism. But I can't find any in yours.
Could you help mine though? It not good like yours :P
I agree with others in that its well written grammatically and structurally. However, from my perspective I don't get what is unique about you other than I would say your are a very good writer. I get less of your accomplishments artistically and more of a sense that you are very creative in your writing. Either way it says a lot about you and shows you're are talented! Great job.
Does anyone have any last minute suggestions perhaps? (Really nervous if this ps is good enough..)
